Volcanic eruption

Super Sentences - The Process• Start with a boring sentence This sentence

should be connected to the book/topic you are studying – e.g. newspapers

• Look at different ways of changing sentence (match to the different techniques used)

• Work collaboratively (with a partner) to improve a new sentence

• Share some of your improved sentences• As a class see you can shared write (using a

combination of your ideas) to come up with a super sentence

Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption.

Drop in an embedded clause

Adjectival – where, which, who, that

Adverbial – because, when, in order to

Add some words

(adjectives, adverbs)

Add a fact Add a direct

quote into the sentence

Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption.

Drop in an embedded clause

Adjectival – where, which, whoAdverbial –

because, when, in order to

Add some words

(adjectives, adverbs)

Add a factAdd a direct

quote into the sentence

• Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption “It was a beautiful day but suddenly thick smoke and ash came pouring down the mountainside,” said one eye witness.

• Hikers on Mount Ontake, began to trembling with fear as they were caught out by a terrifying and deadly eruption.

• Hikers on Mount Ontake, which had been dormant for the last few years, were caught out by an eruption.

• Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption, which killed at least 36 people.

Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by a deadly eruption that killed at least 36 people, despite it being dormant for the past few years, “It was a beautiful day but suddenly thick smoke and ash came pouring down the mountainside.” said one terrified eye witness.

Fresh eruptions stopped the rescuers hunt.

Drop in an embedded clause

Adjectival – where, which, who, that

Adverbial – because, when, in order to

Add some words

(adjectives, adverbs)

Add a fact Add a direct

quote into the sentence

Fresh eruptions stopped the rescuers hunt.

Drop in an embedded clause

Adjectival – where, which, who

Adverbial – because, when, in order to

Add some words

(adjectives, adverbs)

Add a factAdd a direct

quote into the sentence

Survivors told reporters that they thought they would die.

Drop in an embedded clause

Adjectival – where, which,

whoAdverbial –

because, when, in order to

Add some words

(adjectives, adverbs)

Add a fact Add a direct

quote into the sentence

Survivors told reporters that they thought they would die.

Drop in an embedded clause

Adjectival – where, which, who, that

Adverbial – because, when, in

order to

Add some words

(adjectives, adverbs)

Add a factAdd a direct

quote into the sentence

What is the purpose and who is the audience for our journalistic

writing ?• What are the main features we would

expect to find in this type of report?

Highlight/underline/circle features

• Facts - highlight

• Direct quotes - underline

• Emotive Language - circle

Task – Shared write

• Work together to write the middle of the report as a shared write.

• What needs to be included ?

• Make sure you use direct and reported speech, facts, emotive language.....

Plenary• How could

we end our report?

• Think, pair, share.