unit 6 creating people and places. unit objectives this unit will help you to; describe places and...
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Unit 6
Creating People and
Places
Unit Objectives
This unit will help you to;Describe places and characters in different
waysFind different ways of grabbing your
readers attentionChoose and use interesting vocabularyStructure paragraphs effectivelyPlan draft and present your work
Zooming In
Learning Outcome:
• Use the technique of ‘zooming in’ to make details more interesting for the reader
• Use prepositions in my writing
Key words
Prepositions
Prepositions • Prepositions tell you where something is situated
or how it is positioned
Examples:HereBy
AgainstBelowUnderOverIn
Dangerous games1) I was playing football …………the street. Suddenly the ball
bounced …………….. the pavement.
2) It rolled ……….. the road. Without thinking I chased ……………. the ball.
3) Rajiv shouted me to stop. It was too late. A car was coming ……………. me. All kinds of thoughts went ……………….. my mind.
4) Then the car hit me and knocked me …….. the road. I could hear it as it went ……………. me. Then I passed out.
5) I don’t remember anything else. Rajiv says they put me ……… a stretcher and then drove me ……….town by ambulance.
6) I suppose they must have done because I woke up ….. the hospital. …………………….. coming round though, I had a strange experience.
Dangerous games1) I was playing football IN the street. Suddenly the ball bounced
OFF the pavement.
2) It rolled INTO the road. Without thinking I chased AFTER the ball.
3) Rajiv shouted me to stop. It was too late. A car was coming TOWARDS me. All kinds of thoughts went THROUGH my mind.
4) Then the car hit me and knocked me INTO the road. I could hear it as it went PAST me. Then I passed out.
5) I don’t remember anything else. Rajiv says they put me ON a stretcher and then drove me ACROSS town by ambulance.
6) I suppose they must have done because I woke up …IN.. the hospital. BEFORE coming round though, I had a strange experience.across behind down to around
above beside
Descriptive writing in prose
PROSE is _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.
Zooming In
Once upon a time there was a ____, _____ planet.
On the _____, ______ planet was a _____, _____ city.
In the _____, _____ city was a _____, _____ building.
Behind the _____, _____ building was a…
Zooming inWhen you describe something in writing, you have to decide
where to begin and end your description. One way to do this
is to imagine you are filming a scene and zooming in.
Read Dark, Dark Tale
Descriptive writing in prose
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Lesson 3
Lesson Objective
To learn how to focus your reader through the use of detail
Lesson Outcome
By the end of the lesson I will use the technique of ‘zooming in’ to add detail and description to my writing
Once upon a time there was a…Planet
Continent
Country
City
Street
Shop
Room
Corner
Cupboard
Drawer
Box
?
Island
Seashore
Jungle
River
Waterfall
Cave
Tunnel
?
Motorway
Road
Fields
Farm
Farmhouse
Barn
Ladder
?
Remember to:
• Include prepositions
• Include adjectives
• Aim for at least 10 lines
Descriptive Writing
Learning Outcome
• Focus your reader by using detailed description
• Vary your sentence length
Key words
Detail, description
Detail in prose
ACTIVITY 2Answer questions 1-4 in your yellow book (10 mins)1) Pond dust cobwebs mouse2) 4: in corner / Tuck / Forgotten / Shotgun.
The sentence is short for effect.The short sentence is at the end as a powerful cliffhanger.
3) The writer used a new sentence beginning with ‘and’ to create the effect of a list. 4) Repetition : every, and, comma use (b) for effect (c ) to
create the effect of a list.
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Using the unexpectedActivity 3Write the final sentence from ‘Tuck Everlasting’,
and replace the shotgun with something else that is unusual in order to surprise your reader. Remember, the item needs to be realistic.
For example,And in a corner stood Tuck’s forgotten pram.And in a corner stood Tuck’s forgotten alcohol.And in a corner stood Tuck’s forgotten bible.
ActivityYour task is to write a description of the
inside of a house. Imagine yourself walking through the front door and into one of the rooms. Use noun phrases and prepositions to describe the objects in the room. Zoom in on a final surprise. Use ‘Tuck Everlasting’ as a model and aim for only 5 sentences.
Example:
I walked into the scruffy little house beside the grave yard; my eyes fell upon the battered front door, the rusty door knocker and the spider dangling from the door handle. I made my way into the…
Example:I walked into the scruffy little house beside the grave yard; my eyes fell upon the battered front door, the rusty door knocker and the spider dangling from the door handle. I made my way into the…
Describing a Place
Learning Outcome• To use noun phrases in my writing• To describe a place and focus on more than one
of the five senses
Key words• Noun phrase• Adjective• Senses
Noun phrases
The job of an adjective is to describe a nounActivityPlace two adjectives in front of these nouns to
make a noun phrase1. _________, __________ water2. _________, __________ ice3. _________, __________ night4. _________, __________ problem5. _________, __________ face6. _________, __________ door
Skellig
TASK:
Read Skellig, and discuss Activity 5, parts 1,2 and 3.
Then complete the chart in part 4
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Effective choice of words
Writer’s choice Alternative word Explanation
Scuttled Moved
Tiptoed Walked
Snapped Broke
Scattering Running
Peered Looked
Effective choice of wordsWriter’s
choice
Alternative word Explanation
Scuttled Moved Unusual word
Tiptoed Walked Makes the movement very visual for the reader
Snapped Broke Onomatopoeia for effect
Scattering Running Sound of the word mirrors the action
Peered Looked For emphasis of the action
Describing a placeActivity 6Look at the pictures on page 69. Think about the setting,
possible characters, possible dates for the pictures, what you may be able to see, hear, taste, touch and smell if you were at that building.
Imagine you are at the building (just as you imagined being at your house and described it as you moved around the house). Write a description of the building using
Interesting vocabulary – noun phrases Prepositions Thoughtful sentence structure Zooming in on a character that you find there (This will be your marking criteria)
Using vocabulary to create atmosphere
You really can choose vocabulary to create atmosphere with anything. Take the humble apple, for example.
How might we describe this apple in different settings?
In a hot summers kitchen:• Round• Rosy• Juicy• Shiny• Tempting• Crunchy• Fresh• Salad
In an infested squatter’s kitchen:
• Rotten• Maggot• Bruised• Brown• Battered• Dry• Nauseating
Using verbs to describe a character
Learning Outcome
Select verbs and adjectives that contribute to character description
Key words
Description
Verbs
adjectives
The bent, old man limped slowly down the street.
Change the verb, adverb and adjectives so that you are describing a younger person.
Describing a CharacterActivity: Describe the character that you found
in the building, in the work you did last lesson
1. Describe the character’s face, using adjectives and verbs. Describe: face, eyes, hair, mouth, nose, expression.
2. Describe the position of your character using prepositions.
3. Describe their clothes.
4. Describe how they react to you – e.g relief, fear, suspicion…
5. Include a short conversation between you and your character.
End of Unit AssessmentSECURE•Keep your writing in the past tense!•Describe what can be seen, felt, heard, smelt and tasted•In your writing use adjectives that create atmosphere and mood•Write in paragraphs – beginning, middle and end•Use basic punctuation accurately e.g. capital letters, commas and full stopsEXCEEDING•In your writing use noun phrases, similes and prepositions to create imagery in the mind of the reader•Write with detail and description in developed paragraphs•Use common punctuation accurately e.g. ! ?HIGHEST•Use the range of punctuation accurately, including speech punctuation•Use a variety of sentence lengths and styles•Use a variety of sentence openings – (‘ing words ‘ly’ words and connectives)