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04/20/23 1Gilmore & Gilmore Writing for Audience, Purpose, and Context

Barry GilmoreHutchison SchoolMemphis, TN

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Writing With Audience,

Purpose, and Context in Mind Dr. Sue Gilmore

MLK Magnet SchoolNashville, TN


What matters in student writing?

The Role of Classroom Discussion

Discussion and

Questions

Content Area and Writing

Strategies for Writing Revision


Topic

Thesis

Argument

Choice

MotivationDiscussion

Audience

Context

Style and Tone

Content

Awareness

Flexibility

Command

Collaboration

Rewriting

ReshapingRevision

Publication

Format

Technology

Input:

The Idea

Process:

Considering Purpose

Output:

The Product

What Matters in Student Writing

Make a list:Lovers in literature


Starting with Discussion:Surveys


• Students take the survey

• Class lines up from 10-50

• Discuss:

• What do the extremes represent?

• Which individual items were easiest/hardest to answer? Where did you put a 1 or 5?

• What does this survey tell us about the class? About ourselves individually?

• How do these statements relate to scenes or characters in the book?

• How do they relate to other texts?


Sample ninth grade thesis statements

1.While Romeo is captivated by Juliet’s beauty, Juliet is aware that “looking” and “liking” are two different things and that Romeo’s love may not be true.

1.Shakespeare suggests that the older one gets, the more likely one is to see love as a practical arrangement and not an emotional impulse.


Brainstorming Categories

Happy endings/Unhappy endings

Get what they deserve/Don’t get what they deserve

Couples/Love triangles

Loyalty/Betrayals

Books by women/books by men


Books My Students Are Discussing Now




Discussion and

Questions






Discussion and

Questions



Names are a very important part of one’s personality. The name Sarah, for instance, come from the Bible. This shows that names have a long tradition for many people. Tradition helps to determien the adult one becomes.


In regards to the object I would bring to college with me, I have

chosen the cork bulletin board that hangs on the wall above my bed.

This object may seem to be just a bunch of simple words and pieces of

paper to the casual observer, but due to a large number of years

during which the bulletin board has been collecting scraps and

mementos of my life, it has become a meaningful repository of

memories that I treasure. There are a pictures, concert tickets, and

even immature love letters, all of which are like a puzzle that together

forms the pieces of my life. Knowing its with me, college will be

easier to take and I won’t feel homesick, but instead I will look

forward to the new tacks, nametags and bumper-stickers I can fill it

with depending on my future.


Re-examining vision:topic, approach, voice, point of view,

direction

Revisiting organization:structure, order, argument

Editing for style:reconsidering syntax,

imagery, clarity

Proofreading:grammarThe Revision

Cone


It was the playbill that won the first tack in the cork board;

“The Phantom of the Opera” inspired me not only to seek out the

ones refused compassion from the world, but also to learn the ways

of the theatre, to desire to create the next Don Juan who would bring

the ghosts of people’s hearts up from the basements to the center

stage. Then, rolling across the board, a time-stream of pictures:

friends, family, boys, better times. The one my eyes always find

amidst the multitude is of a young girl and a handsome boy, his arms

wrapped around her with a smile and glowing face, the same tack

pinning down a ticket to a concert, a first date, a first kiss.


The simple words, the simple pieces of paper, the simple incidents that make a person; how can someone put into words the colorfulness of the mind and soul without showing the cork board, filled with not only thousands of tacks, but empty holes, from papers taken out and never replaced? Try reading between the lines of immature love letters, asking what happened at the birthday parties, concerts and movies after reading the invitations and tickets, studying the expressions of faces in the dozens of pictures, attending the various conventions commemorated by nametags, laughing at all the cheap bumper-stickers with mind-provoking sayings, or crying on the drawings from appreciative camp children. Here before me, staring me in the face at every break and eve, is all the inspiration I need to fit together the puzzle of my life: just a smaller piece of the puzzle I will find myself connected to when my new cork-board is being filled on the first day of college.


Ideas for Modeling

• Mark and share in pairs• Mark and share—raising hands• Mark and share—choral reading• Dividing up sentences• Color marking


More General Strategies

• Metacognition• Include revision in assessment• Limited focus revision• Shorten the word count• Typing• Discuss the audience (and provide one)


Names are a very important part of one’s personality. The name Sarah, for instance, come from the Bible. This shows that names have a long tradition for many people. Tradition helps to determien the adult one becomes.


My name is Sarah. It’s a name from the Bible, but that’s not why I like it. I love my name because it rolls on your tongue, because my mother gave it to me as a gift, and because it ends with the sound you make when you see a beautiful mountain or sunrise. I like to think of my mother holding me after I was born, looking down at me wrapped up like a present and saying my name: Sarah.

I don’t know what the grown-up Sarah looks like yet, just like I don’t know what grown-up Sarah does for a job, where she lives, or whether she has a family of her own. When she looks back, I don’t know what she’ll remember about me. But we’ll have one thing in common: a name.


Dear Joel,Did you know that my name comes from the Bible? Actually, I’m not sure who Sarah was, but my mom told me she learned about my name in Sunday School when she was a kid.

Sarah


Dear Sarah,That’s cool. Joel is a religious name, too. It means God. So I’m like God, only I don’t really think that so don’t think I’m full of myself please. You should find out more about your name. Let me know if you do.

Your friend (but not God),Joel


Hey Joel,

I don’t think your God either.

Sarah

P.S. Hey I’m just kidding and I think Joel is a cool name.


Sarah.

HA HA HA.

I just asked Ms. R about you’re name and she says Sarah was Abraham’s wife and she had a baby when she was 90!!! I don’t know who Abraham was, though, but he’s in the bible too. You should write about that.

Joel


That’s a good idea but I don’t want to have a baby when I’m 90 because I couldn’t pick it up or something. Babys are gross anyway. Do you want babies someday?

Sarah


Dear Sarah,

No way.

Joel


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