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Success,inallofitsmanyforms,isusedinsocietyfrequentlyanddescribesmanydifferentoutcomesandscenarios.

AfterwatchingtheMarshmallowExperimentandreadingthearticleDont!ThesecretofselfcontrolwrittenbyJohn

Lehrer,itwasapparentthattherewerecertaintraitslinkedtoasuccessfullife.Thesetraitswererepresentedinthe

highdelayers,orthesubjectswhosucceededwhenparticipatinginthemarshmallowexperimentperformedbyDr.

WalterMischel.Butbeingahighdelayerdoesnotnecessarilymeanthatyouwillsucceedandviceversa.Successcanbe

interpretedinmanyways,sotheremustbemanywaystoachieveit.Personaldefinitionsofsuccessareevident

throughouttheworld,butitishardtobesurewhichoneiscorrect.Thisleadstothefactthatdifferentformsof

attainingsuccess

must

be

used

when

facing

different

situations

resulting

in

apersonal

success.

Involving

both

logic

and

spontaneityisthewaythatIseefitwhenworkingtoachievesuccess.Whenfacingthewindingroadtosuccess,choices

mustbemadeconcerningthemethodschosentoattainit,butcontrarytoJohnLehrersarticle,beingahighdelayerwill

notalwaysensureyourdefinitesuccess. Beingahighdelayerisnottheonlyoptiongiventomakesurethatyou

willsucceedinlife.AlthoughinthearticleDont!Thesecret ofselfcontrolJohnLehrerexplainshowinDr.Walter

Mischelsmarshmallowexperimentchildrenwhowaitedforasecondmarshmallowweremorelikelytosucceedlater

inlife(Lehrernpag),theabilitytowaitisnottheonlywaytomakesuccesspossible.Spontaneityisalsoanimportant

partofreachingsuccess.Therearetimeswhenwaitingforsomethingbettertocomealongwillnotbebeneficialand

acceptingwhatishandedtoyouwill,inturn,behelpful.Eventhoughthetermsettlingtendstorefertogivingupand

justacceptingundesirablethings,itcanbeusedcomplimentarilytoasituation.Attimes,settlingforwhatisbeforeyou

inthepresentisthebetterchoicewhencomparedtowaitingforsomethingmoredesirabletoappear.Therewillalways

beopportunitiestoachieveahigherlevelofsuccessso,inasense,acceptingpresentopportunitiesandlaterworkingfor

betteronesisequivalent,ifnotmorebeneficial,thanbeingahighdelayer. Asidefromthisoneexample,thereare

othereventswherebeingahighdelayerisnotalwayscoveted.Inasuppressiontaskgiventoanequalamountofboth

high andlowdelayersinDont!Thesecretofselfcontrol,subjectsweregivenfourrandomwords,twoprintedinred

andtwoinblue.Thesubjectsweretoldtoremembertheredwordsandwerethengivenprobewordsandasked


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whethertheywerethewordstheywereaskedtoremember(Lehrernpag).Althoughhighdelayerstendedtoperform

betteronthistask,thelowdelayersshowedatraitthatwillhelpthemtoachievesuccessincertainsituations.Thelow

delayerstendedtobelievethatwordstheyweretoldtoforgetwerewordsthattheyshouldremember,andthis

suspicioncanbeveryuseful.Trustingeverythingthatistoldtoyouisnotalwaysbeneficial.Therewillbetimeswhen

beingsuspiciousishelpful,especiallywhenonthepathtoachievesuccess.Peoplemayattempttodistractyoufrom

yourcourseandlisteningtothemwillnotshowyouinthedirectionoftheobtainmentofsuccess.Thisexampleproves

thatlowdelayerscanhavetraitsmorebeneficialthanthosepossessedbyhighdelayers. Allthingsconsidered,

beingalowdelayerdoesnotcondemnonetoalifewithanabsenceofsuccess.JohnLehrerevenmentionsinDont!

ThesecretofselfcontrolthatMischelisexcitedbythepeoplewhofailedthemarshmallowexperimentasfouryear

oldsbuteventuallymadetheirlivesmoresuccessfulastheybecameadults(Lehrernpag).Lowdelayerscanbreakthe

unfortunatechainofmishapsamongtheirpeersandbecomeequallyassuccessfulasahighdelayerwouldbe.Although

JohnLehrerhasshowninhisarticlethatoutofallofthesubjectswhoparticipatedinthemarshmallowexperimentthe

highdelayerstendedtobemoresuccessfullaterinlife,giventhetraitsthatmanylowdelayerspossessed,beingahigh

delayerisnottheonlywaytosucceedinlife. Thewordsuccesshasthepotentialtobeinterpretedinvariousways.It

isaterm

generally

associated

with

apositive

outcome,

so

people

usually

have

different

ideas

about

what

is

considered

a

success.Somemaysaythatitconcernstheamountofmoneyormaterialitemsyoupossesswhileothersviewitasan

honorablerankamongsociety.WebstersNinthNewCollegiateDictionaryprovidesfourpossibledefinitionsforthe

wordsuccessandalthoughtheyarealllogicaldefinitions,thetruedefinitionofsuccessdoesnotlieinasimplephrase

thatiseasilyunderstoodbymany. Successrepresentsalightattheendofatunnel,theendtomanyobstaclesor

troublesthathavebeenfaced.Aportionofsuccesscanonlybeachievedthroughhardwork,selfcontrol,andpatience,

yetthere

are

times

when

it

also

entails

spontaneity.

It

calls

for

both

logic

and

what,

at

the

time,

may

seem

unreasonable

actions.Successcanbeassimpleasreceivingarewardafterataskiscompletedorascomplicatedasreceivingasought

afteroccupationaftercompletingmanychallengingyearsofschool.Successissimilartoanawardyoumaybepresented

withforcompetinginsportsoracademics.Youmaystruggleorcomplainwhenstrivingtoachievetheaward,butonceit


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isfinallyinyourhands,nothingbutblisscanbefelt. Thissevenletterwordmayappearfairlysimple,butinrealityit

holdsameaningthatconsequentlymakespeopleworkextremelyhardandattempttocontroltheurgetomake

thoughtlessdecisions.Successisthemomentwhenyoureceivethereward,materialisticornot,thatyouhavebeen

strivingforduringallofthelaborandmindlessworkyouhaveendured.Thisminisculeword,thatcannotevencovera

pageofpaperinsize72font,ispackedwithemotionssuchashappinessandcontent.Thepossibilityofsuccesssupplies

areasontoworkhardforwhatyoudesireandusemanydifferentmethodstotrytoachieveit.Whenaskedthe

question,Whatsyourdefinitionofsuccess?itishardtodescribeonesanswerusingabriefsentence.So,in

conclusion,Imustsaythatmydefinitionofsuccessisnottheactofgettingwhatyoudesire,butthejoyousfeelingthat

accompaniesthedesirableresultattainedthroughhardworkandlabor. InthearticleDont!Thesecretofself

control,thestrategiesusedtoachievesuccessdiscussedbyJohnLehrerarebothsimilaranddifferentfrompersonal

strategiesthatIcurrentlyusetotrytobecomesuccessful.Thestrategiesdescribedinthearticlefocusonbeingahigh

delayer,whichprovedtobehelpfulwhentryingtoachievesuccesslaterinlife(Lehrernpag).Iagreewiththismethod

ofattainingsuccess,butIalsouseothermethodsdependingonthesituationthatIamfacing.Itisquiteimportantto

maintainastronglevelofselfcontrolandpatiencewhenworkingyourwaytowardsaspecificgoal.Someoutcomescan

onlyresult

from

periods

of

waiting,

so

having

the

traits

of

ahigh

delayer

can

being

greatly

beneficial

when

facing

these

situations. Onthecontrary,therearetimeswhenquickdecisionsmustbemadeandeverythingthatyoumayhave

followedwhenpreviouslytryingtoacquiresuccessmustbeforgotten.ItisintimessuchasthesethatIuseamethodof

achievingsuccessthatdiffersfromthosementionedinDont!Thesecretofselfcontrol.Thismethodreferstothe

abilityofsurprisingothersaswellasyourselfwithyouractions.Whenchoiceshavetobemadeinashortperiodoftime,

takingachanceandtrustingyourinstinctsmaybethesmartestroutetochoose.Althoughtheoutcomeisnotalways

preferred,it

still

provides

away

to

obtain

success,

whether

it

takes

days

or

years.

These

two

methods

of

achievingsuccessmaycontrastgreatly,buttheybothcanbeextremelyeffective.Thestrategiesthatareincludedinthe

articleDont!Thesecretofselfcontrol,areverylogicalandcanworktoonesadvantage,butmyownpersonal

methodalsohasbenefits.UsingacombinationoftheseformsofobtainingsuccessIhavemanagedtohavevarious


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successeswithintheshortperiodoftimethatIhavelived. Inconclusion,theformsusedtoachievethe

complicatedthingthatissuccessmayvary,butthereisnolimittothetypesofpeoplethatareabletosucceed.Dont!

Thesecretofselfcontrolmaysaythathighdelayersusuallyperformedbetterthanlowdelayersinvariouscategories

oflife(Lehrernpag),butitalsopresentsthefactthattherewerelowdelayerswhoeventuallysucceeded.Thisproves

thatthefeelingofpurejoyrepresentingsuccesscanbeobtainedbydifferenttypeofpeopleinmanyways,whetheritis

bylogicorluck.

Comments:Youadvancetheclaimthatbeingahighdelayerisoneofmanypossiblewaysofachievingsuccessinlife.ThisisaccomplishedeffectivelybyyouruseoftextualevidencefromJohanLehrersessay. Ratherthanmerelystatingthatsomethingisacertainway,youlinkyourclaimsorideastospecificquotesandthengoontoanalyzehowthequoteaddstoyourownpositionintheessay. Youmakesomeoriginalandinterestingclaimsbypointingouthowbeingsuspiciousmayalsobeanassetinthedevelopmentofsuccessinlife.Whatwouldhavebeeninterestingtoseeinyouressaywasachallengeorcritiqueofthewaysinwhichsuccessisbeingapproachedbythemarshmallowtests.Youbegintodothisinyourpaper,butyoudonotdevelopthisbeyondthepointofquicklyraisingitintheessay.Youressayiswellthoughtoutandenjoyabletoread.

Grade:B+

Grade Thesis WorkwithAssignedText Organization Presentation

A Complexinterpretive

thesisclearfromthe

start

Independentideas

developedand

presentedthroughout

Studentcenteredconnective

thinking

Thesiscutsacrossreadingsin

unanticipatedwaysorfindsa

largercontextforthe

conversation

Clear,fluid,logical

Stronguseoftopic

sentencesandother

guidepostsforthereader

Minimalornoerrors

Likelytoexhibit

eloquenceoran

elegantwritingstyle

B+

Independentthinking

consistentlydeveloped

Engagesmorecomplex

ideasinthereadings

Beginstograsp

complexityofown

positionordevelops

secondaryemerging

Usestextual

evidence

with

confidenceandauthority

Studentsideasincontrol

throughoutpaper

Textevidenceusedwellto

bothsupportandcomplicate

thethesis

Generallywell

organized

Maydevelopasecondary

emergingthesiswhich

complicatestheoriginal

argument


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thesis

B Thesisarticulatedfrom

theoutset

Advancesindependent

ideas

Thesis

more

coherent

thanClevel

Thesismaybesomewhat

limitedordevelopedina

repetitiveway

Takessomeinterpretiverisks

withtext

Workswithavarietyoftextual

evidence

Texts

used

in

service

of

project

andtoprovidesupportforit

Sustainedmeaningful

structure

Reasonablecoherencein

presentation

Controlled

development

ofthesis

Smoothertransitionand

topicsentencesthanC

range

Minimalerrors

Minimalorno

mechanical,citation

orformattingerrors

C+ Hasathesisbutnot

clearlyarticulatedfrom

outset

Movestoward

independentthesis,

showinganemerging

coherenceofideas

Momentsofsolidworkwith

textsanduseofadequate

textualevidence

Engagesinmorecomplicated

ideasinreadings

Connectivethinkingmaybe

implicit

Hasrelationshipsbetween

paragraphs

Transitionsandtopic

sentencesbeginto

emerge

Hassomecoherencebut

lacksmeaningfulstructure

foundin

B

range

papers

Sentencelevel

errorsundercontrol

Mayhavesome

mechanical,citation,

orformattingerrors

C Thesisemergesatendof

paperfromdiscussionof

thetext

Takesclearpositionat

leastonce

Thesismaybevagueor

general

Workswithmorethanone

source

Vaguesensethatstudents

voiceiscontributingtothe

conversation

Adequatereading

comprehensionanduseof

texturalevidence

Somecoherent

relationshipsbetween

paragraphs

Paragraphsmayexhibit

emergingtopic

sentences

Sentencelevel

errorsdonot

significantlyimpede

meaning

Somemechanical,

citation,and/or

formattingerrors

NP Nothesisinevidence

Thesisburiedin

summary

Littleornorelationship

betweentextsandthesis

Poorreadingcomprehension/

misinterpretation

Lacksmeaningful

connection

betweentextsorwith

studentsownposition

Privilegesstudentsideas

Weakuseoftextualevidence

Overgeneralizesaboutthe

text

Littlecoherencefrom

paragraphtoparagraph

Lacksorganizational

structure

Weakuseofparagraphs,

withfewornocleartopic

sentences

Sentencelevel

errorsimpede

meaning

Patternsoferror

Failuretoproofread

Seriouserrorsin

citationconventions

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HighDelayers:Theonlypathtosuccess?

Isbeing

a"high

delayer"

the

only

way

to

achieve

"success"

in

life?

In

Jonah

Lehrers

article

Dont!

The

secret

to

selfcontrol,weseehowDr.WalterMischelsfamousmarshmallowexperimentcantellapartdisciplinedchildrenfrom

theirmischievouspeers.Theoneswhodemonstrateselfcontrolusuallydobetterinschoolandaremorelikelyto

succeedintheiradultlife.However,isselfdisciplinetheonlywaytobecomesuccessful?Actually,mybeliefsarequite

thecontrary,andformanyreasons.Successcanbeachievedinrecognitionofanytalentoruniquenessoftheperson,

suchasarockstar.Suchpeoplearenotusuallydependentonselfcontrolinordertoprosperandmakeafortune,ifthat

iswhatbeingsuccessfulreallyis.Prevalencehasitsowndefinitiontoanindividual.Someonemayreflectupontheir

selfimage,relationships,andeconomicaldispositionandconcludethattheyaresuccessful.Anotherinthesamespot,

havingdifferentideology,mightbedisappointedwiththeircurrentstateandshallstrivetobecomeprosperous.Inthis

way,onecanbesuccessful.Majoritiesofpeoplemaketheword"success"synonymouswith"rich"and"famous".

However,successisonlydefinablebywhatanindividualperceivesittobe. Asstated,successisonespersonal

standardofselfcontent/fulfillment.Idefinesuccessasbeinghappywithwhoyouareandwhatyoudo.Feelinggood

aboutyourselfandyourplaceintheworldisthekeytosuccess.Ifyouarealwaysmiserableandantisocial,howcanyou

consideryourselfcontent?Youcouldbetherichest,mostacknowledgedpersonintheworld,andstillconsideryourself

unsuccessfulifyoufeelsomethingismissingfromyourlife.Moneycantbuyhappiness.Aslongastheindividualhasa

positiveattitudeandstaysopenmindedhe/shecanbesuccessfuldoingoddjobsforalifetime.Forexample,thefilm

TheBucketListtellsthestoryoftwooldmenwhohavemonthstolive,duetoafatalillness.Oneisrich,andtheother

isacommon

mechanic.

They

go

on

having

fun,

but

when

their

time

is

drawing

near,

they

separate

and

return

home.

The

richmanisconstantlydepressedbecauseheissingleandhasnoone,whilethecommonmanresidesinpeacealongside

hisvastlovingfamily.Successtrulyisselfsatisfaction. Asforme,thestrategiesusedtoachievesuccessdiffergreatly

fromthosethatDr.Mischelhaddiscovered.Dr.Mischelsmethodreliessolelyupondistraction.Insteadofgetting


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obsessedwiththemarshmallowthehotstimulusthepatientchildrendistractedthemselvesbycoveringtheireyes,

pretendingtoplayhideandseekunderneaththedesk,orsingingsongsfromSesameStreet.Theirdesirewasnt

defeateditwasmerelyforgotten,writesMs.Lehrer.However,mymethodsconsistofstimulatingoneselfbyusing

scaretactics.Idwellupontheproblem,letitreallygetinsidemeanddrivemeinsanewithguiltandagony,forwhat

worsepainthanbeingdrivenintothegroundandbrutallydismayedbyyourownstress!Then,willallthesefeelingsof

anxietyuponme,ItellmyselfthatitwillalljustdisappearifIdowhatImust,anddoitproperly.Then,withsuchfeelings

stilluponme,Isetoutandpourallofmyeffortandfocusmythoughtontocompletingthetaskathand.Whetheryou

simplydistractyourselforknowinglydriveyourselfintoblindingrageandagony,ifthereisawill,thereisaway.

Comments:Inyouressayyoudescribesuccessassomethingthatisdifferentforeachperson. Thisisabitofaproblematicposition,sinceitessentiallyputsthetopicofsuccessoutsideoftherealmofdiscussionsincethedefinitionandimportanceofsuccessvariesgreatlyfromonepersontoanother. Youressaydoesnotengagedirectlywiththeessayquestion. Youdostatethatyoudonotbeliefthatbeingahighdelayeristheonlywayofachievingsuccess,butyoudonotgomuchfurtherbeyondthisclaim. AnotherissueinyouressayisthatyoudonotengagewithJohanLehrersessay. Youprovidethereaderwithageneralizedsummaryofwhatthemarshmallowtestswere,butthendriftawayfromLehrersessaytotalkaboutsuccessinageneralizedway. Rememberthatwritingatthecollegelevelmeansengagingdirectlywiththetextsthatyouareusing. Locatingandusingkeyquotesastextualevidenceisanimportantandsophisticatedwayofdevelopingyourownpositionindialoguewiththepositionsandclaimsofthetextsthatyouareutilizing.

Grade:NP



thesisclearfromthe

start

Independentideas

developedand

presentedthroughout


thinking



largercontextforthe

conversation

Clear,fluid,logical

Stronguseoftopic

sentencesandother


Minimalornoerrors

Likelytoexhibit

eloquenceoran

elegantwritingstyle


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B+ Independentthinking


Engagesmorecomplex

ideasinthereadings

Beginstograsp

complexity

of

own

positionordevelops

secondaryemerging

thesis

Usestextualevidencewith



throughoutpaper


both

support

and

complicate

thethesis

Generallywellorganized


emergingthesiswhich


argument


theoutset

Advancesindependent

ideas

Thesismorecoherent

thanClevel

Thesismaybesomewhat


repetitiveway


withtext


evidence

Textsusedinserviceofproject


Sustainedmeaningful

structure


presentation

Controlleddevelopment

ofthesis


topicsentencesthanC

range

Minimalerrors

Minimalorno

mechanical,citation

orformattingerrors

C+ Hasathesisbutnot


outset

Movestoward

independentthesis,

showinganemerging

coherenceofideas



textualevidence


ideasinreadings


implicit


paragraphs

Transitionsandtopic

sentencesbeginto

emerge

Hassomecoherencebut


foundinBrangepapers

Sentencelevel

errorsundercontrol

Mayhavesome


orformattingerrors



thetext


leastonce

Thesismaybevagueor

general


source

Vaguesense

that

students


conversation

Adequatereading


texturalevidence

Somecoherent


paragraphs


emergingtopic

sentences

Sentencelevel

errorsdonot

significantlyimpede

meaning

Somemechanical,

citation,and/or

formattingerrors


Thesisburiedin

summary




misinterpretation

Lacksmeaningfulconnection

betweentextsorwith

studentsownposition

Privileges

students

ideas



text

Littlecoherencefrom


Lacksorganizational

structure


with

few

or

no

clear

topic

sentences

Sentencelevel

errorsimpede

meaning

Patternsoferror

Failuretoproofread

Serious

errors

in

citationconventions



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TheSecretofSuccess

Judgingfrom

the

marshmallow

experiment,

we

can

conclude

that

high

delayers

are

usually

more

successful

in

life.

Howeverthatisnotalwaysthecase.Highdelayersdontnecessarilyachievemoresuccess,andtheirsuccessmay

seemlikefailureinotherpeopleseyes..Theresultofanexperimentdoneatchildhooddoesthatdeterminethe

outcomeofthatchildsfuture.Successisnotalwaysdefinedbymonetarywealthorhowsociallyadeptyouare.Soin

thatsuccesspeoplearetryingtoachievecanmeanmanydifferentthings.Successcanmeantohaveastablelife

whilenothavingthatmuchmoney,whileothermayinterpretitinthatyouhaveabyameasureofmonetarywealth.In

awayallsuccesseshavemeansinwhichtoacquirethemnomatterwhattheybe.Andasthemethodsdifferentiate

betweencertainpeoplesinterpretationsofsuccess,theycanrangegreatly.Soisbeingahighdelayertheonlywayto

achievesuccess? Theexperimentsupposedlytestsachildslevelofselfcontrolandfromtheseresults

theydeterminethesuccesslevelofthatchild.Supposedly,childrenwhocanrestrainthemselvesfromeatingthe

marshmallowaremoresuccessful.Thechildrenwhochoseimmediategratificationbyeatingthemarshmallowbefore

themancomesbackwithanotheraresupposedlylesssuccessful.Themarshmallowtestrepresentsthechoicesinlife.

Onechoice,toeatthemarshmallowfirstisthechoicethatoffersimmediatesatisfaction,whiletheotheroffersagreate

reward,atthepriceofwaitinglonger.Oneexampleofthisisthesystemofstocks.Whenthechancecomestosellyour

stocksatahighprice,andyoutakeit,thenyoutookthepathtoimmediategratification.Ifyouwaitandbideyourtime

forthelongtermgain,youultimatelygainmoreinthelongrun. Evenstill,highdelayerswiththeir

higherchancesofsuccessmaynotappearsuccessfulinotherpeopleseyes.Mydefinitionofsuccessishavingastable

job,no

matter

how

much

the

pay

as

long

as

Ihave

ahigh

chance

of

keeping

it

throughout

my

life.

Also,

in

addition

of

a

stableprofession,otheraspectsofmydefinitionsofsuccessarehavingafamily,andthemostimportantpartof

successisbeinghappywithit.Onepersonsdefinitionmightbeamoredowntoearthgoalofsuccessmightbehavinga

stablejobandafamilywhileanotherpersonmighthaveamorefarfetchedgoalofearningabilliondollars.Thelatter


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mightlookuponthefirstssuccessandthinkthatthatpersonisstillnotsuccessful.Sointhatsense,duetothevarying

standardsofsuccess,highdelayersmaynotappearsuccessfultoothers. Aswiththedifferent

successestherearevaryingwaysofachievingthem.ThearticleDont!TheSecretofSelfControl.statesthatthebest

waytoachievesuccessisbeingahighdelayerandbyhavingadegreeifselfcontrol,youwillbemoresuccessful.That

alldependsthatthatpersonsdefinitionofsuccess.Incertainscenarios,beingahighdelayercanbeyourdownfall.For

example,ayoungmancouldbelookingforajob.Then,aheisofferedajobinaveryprestigiouscompany.Asmany

peopleareapplyingforthejob,hehasaverylimitedtimetodecide.However,themandoesnotthinkheisupforthe

jobandspendstoomuchtimeponderingoverhisdecision.Inthattime,thejobisalreadytakenandthemanlosesa

majorchanceatsuccess.Asituationlikethiswouldrequireadecisive,quickthinkingperson.Thefactorofbeingahigh

delayercanbeharmful,asthepathtosuccessisfullofchoices.Thesecretofsuccessinlifeisforamantobereadyfor

hisopportunitywhenitcomes."byBenjaminDisraeli,magnifiesontheimportanceofbeingquickanddecisivein

decisions.Whilethatpersonisdecidingwhatroadtotake,itmayalreadybetakenbyapersonwhoismoredecisivein

hisactions.Mymethodofachievingsuccesswouldbetobequickanddecisiveinmychoices,asyouhavetotakeas

manychancesthatlifethrowsatyou,evenifyoucannotgetallofthem. Themarshmallowexperiment

maygive

an

idea

of

how

achild

may

perform

later

in

life.

However,

it

does

not

determine

the

level

of

success

that

child

willhaveinlife.Theexperimentdoesnotdetermineyoursuccesslevel,itjusttestsyourdegreeofselfcontrol.Evenso,

ifhighdelayersfeelsuccessfulthemselves,otherpeoplemayseethemasnotyetsuccessful.Also,beingahigh

delayerdoesnotguaranteesuccess.Itjustgivesthatpersonanedge,asyouneedtopickagoodmethodinwhichto

achievesuccess.Soisbeingahighdelayertheonlywaytoachievesuccess?Theanswerisno.Italldependsonthat

personandthesituationforthemtoachievethegoaloftheirlives.

Comments:Inyouressayyouclaimthatbeingahighdelayerisnotaguaranteethatonewillbecomeasuccessinlife,butratherthatsuccessisgainedbythosewhoknowhowtorespondtoanysituationthatarisesinlife. Couldntthisbeidentifiedasahighdelayer?Withinthecontextofthemarshmallowteststhehighdelayersareabletorestrainthemselvesfromeatingthemarshmallowinordertoreceivetwomarshmallows. Youareidentifyingthisas


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hesitation,orsimplyasbeingtooconcernedwiththinkingthingsover. However,isitnotpossibletoidentifyahighdelayerassomeonewhoiscapableofmakingsoliddecisionsbasedupontheexpectedoutcome? Ifthisistrue,thenyourclaimthatahighdelayerwouldbemorelikelytohesitateandmissanopportunitytotakeanincrediblejobisnotveryconvincing. Also,youdonotengagewithJohanLehrersessayatall. Yousummarizecertaininformationfromtheessay,butyoufailtoincorporatequotesthatcanbeanalyzedandusedasaspringboardforthedevelopmentofyourownposition.Writingatthecollegelevelrequiresyoutoactivelyengagewiththetextsthatyouareusing,andtobeabletodevelopyourownpositioninaconceptualdialoguethatdevelopsbetweenthepositionandclaimsofthetextsthatyouareusingandthoseclaimsorpositionswhichyouaredevelopingwithinyouressay.

Grade:NP



thesisclearfromthe

start

Independentideas

developedand

presentedthroughout


thinking



largercontextforthe

conversation

Clear,fluid,logical

Stronguseoftopic

sentencesandother


Minimalornoerrors

Likelytoexhibit

eloquenceoran

elegantwritingstyle

B+

Independentthinking


Engagesmorecomplex

ideasinthereadings

Beginstograsp

complexityofown

positionordevelops

secondaryemerging

thesis

Usestextual

evidence

with



throughoutpaper



thethesis

Generallywell

organized


emergingthesiswhich


argument


theoutset

Advancesindependent

ideas

Thesismorecoherent

thanClevel

Thesismaybesomewhat


repetitiveway


withtext

Workswith

avariety

of

textual

evidence



Sustainedmeaningful

structure

Reasonablecoherence

in

presentation


ofthesis


topicsentencesthanC

range

Minimalerrors

Minimalorno

mechanical,citation

orformattingerrors

C+ Hasathesisbutnot Momentsofsolidworkwith Hasrelationshipsbetween Sentencelevel


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outset

Movestoward

independentthesis,

showinganemerging

coherence

of

ideas


textualevidence


ideasinreadings


implicit

paragraphs

Transitionsandtopic

sentencesbeginto

emerge

Hassomecoherencebut

lacks

meaningful

structure

foundinBrangepapers

errorsundercontrol

Mayhavesome


orformattingerrors



thetext


leastonce

Thesismaybevagueor

general


source



conversation

Adequatereading


texturalevidence

Somecoherent


paragraphs


emergingtopic

sentences

Sentencelevel

errorsdonot

significantlyimpede

meaning

Somemechanical,

citation,and/or

formattingerrors


Thesisburiedin

summary




misinterpretation

Lacksmeaningful

connection

betweentextsorwith

studentsownposition




text

Littlecoherencefrom


Lacksorganizational

structure



sentences

Sentencelevel

errorsimpede

meaning

Patternsoferror

Failuretoproofread

Seriouserrorsin

citationconventions



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Dr.WalterMischelsfamous"marshmallowexperimentwhichwasdesignedtotesttheselfcontroloftoddlers,caused

scientiststostumbleuponafewinterestingdiscoveries;childrenthatcouldntwaittoeatthemarshmallowoftenhad

behavioralproblemsinschoolandreceivedlowerS.A.T.scoresthanthosewhohadwaited.Inthecountlessrecreations

ofthisexperiment,scientistshavefoundthatthechildrenwhowaitedthefifteenminutesandgotasecond

marshmallowweremoresuccessfulinlife.Whatexactlydotheycallsuccessthough,andwhoaretheytojudgeit?Ido

believethatbeingahighdelayeristheonlywaytoachievesuccessinlife,whateveryoumaydefinesuccessas. I

believethatbeingahighdelayer,meaningyouhaveahighamountofselfcontrol,istheonlywaytobesuccessfulinlife

Forinstance

if

your

boss

assigns

you

areport

on

one

of

the

companys

products

and

you

have

no

self

control,

this

may

bewhathappens:Youleaveworktogohome,butyoudecidethatyourehungry(thoughyoureallyknowthatyoujust

dontwanttogohomeandworkquiteyet)soyoustopatthenearestMcDonalds(whichisthefarthestfastfood

restaurantfromyourhouse)andyoubuyacheeseburger.(eventhoughyoudespisethem)Onthewayhomeyouget

stuckinrushhourtraffic(itsextraslowtoday)andwhenyoufinallygethomeatsevenoclockyoumakedinnerand

helpyourkidswithhomework.Whenthekidsareinbedyouaresotuckeredoutyouwouldnteventhinkaboutworking

onitnow,soyougotobed.Nowyouhavenoreporttopresenttoyourbossandhellrememberthatwhenachance

comesalongtopromotesomeone.However,ifyouhadselfcontrolandimmediatelywenthometoworkonthereport

youcouldhavehadindoneinlessthananhour!Thenyourbosswouldhavebeenhappyandyouwouldhavebeen

happy.Thisisawinwinsituation.Mostcaseswilloccurlikethis,whereifyouhavegoodselfcontrolthanyoullmost

likelybesuccessful.Whereasifyoudonothavegoodselfcontrolthanyouwillmostlikelyendupinsometypeof

situationthatwillnotleadyoutosuccess. Beingahighdelayer,whichmeansyouhaveahighamountofself

control,meansyoullbesuccessful,butwhatissuccessful?Mydefinitionofthewordsuccessful,isthatyourehappy

withyourlifeandwhatyoudoasacareer,butsuccesscanbemeasuredinotherwaysaswell.Suchashowmuch

moneyyoumake,whatstylehouseyoulivein,orevenwhatkindofclothesyourchildrenwear.Theonlytruedefinition

ofsuccessful,Ibelieve,ishowyoufeelaboutyourself. ThestrategiesIusetoachievesuccessaredifferentthan those


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inthearticle.Forexample,Idonotwatchvideosonhowtoimprovemyselfcontrol,andthatisoneofthemethods

describedinthearticle.Anothermethodthatwasdescribedinthearticle,ismentaltrickssuchasimaginingthecandy

onlyasapicture.Again,Idontusethismethod.Allthesemethodsaretoimproveyourselfcontrol,andIdodevelopmy

selfcontrolinotherways,suchassavingmyallowanceinsteadofspendingit. Inconclusion,everyonesdefinitionof

successmaybedifferentbutyoumusthaveselfcontroltobesuccessful.Ifyoudonthavegoodselfcontrol, youmight

wanttostartworkingononenow,youllbebettersuitedforlaterinlife.Ifwebegandevelopingagoodsenseofself

controlinourchildrennow,wewillhaveagenerationofnothingbutprogress!Perhaps,somedaythismarshmallowtest

willnolongerbeneededtodecideifakidhasselfcontrol,theyallwill!

Comments:Youadvancetheclaimthatbeingahighdelayerplaysanimportantroleinachievingsuccessinlife,whichisattributedtomaintainahighlevelonselfcontrol. Youprovideafictionalexamplewhichisintendedtodemonstratehowthisistrue,althoughitisnotaseffectiveasbringinginquotesfromJohanLehrersessaywouldhavebeen.Beingabletoactivelyengagewithothertexts,aswellasdevelopingyourownpositionthroughaconceptualdialoguethatdevelopsoverthecourseofanessaybetweenyourownpositionsorclaimsandthoseofthetextsthatyouareusingisasophisticatedtechniquethatisoftenemployedincollegelevelwriting. AnotherissuethatarisesfromyouressayisthecompleteabsenceofquotesfromLehrersessay. Bringingincomplexquotesandusingthosequotesasaspringboardtodevelopyourownpositionmoreclearlyorstronglyisanecessaryelementofasuccessfulcollegeessay. Rememberthatcriticalanalysisanddevelopmentisalwayspreferabletobasicsummarizationandopiniondrivenwriting.

Grade:NP



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SuccessisaVirtue Ivehementlyopposebeingahighdelayeristheonlywayofachievingsuccessinlife. Thereare

manyotherwaysthatworkamazingly. Beingahighdelayerisjustoneofthemillionways. Itdependsonwhatthe

situationis. Ifyoudelaydoingyourhomeworkuntilthelastpossibleseconditisahorribleidea. Ifyoudelayeatingthe

marshmallowtoreceiveabetterprize,asinthearticleDont!byWalterMischel,itisafantasticidea. Beingahigh

delayercanhelpyouorhurtyou,whentryingtoachievesuccessinlife. Successhasendlessmeanings. Oneofthemost

importantmeaningsisbeingyourself. IdowhatIthinkisright. IfIdomybestIknowIamachievingsuccessinlife.

Beingmyselfwillletsuccesscomeinnaturally. Mystrategieshaveanimmenseamountofthingsincommonwith

thosestated

in

the

article.

In

school

Ialways

wait

my

turn.

If

we

are

taking

foul

shots

in

gym,

my

well

behaved

friends

andIwaitourturnspatiently,muchlikeCarolynwaitedforhersecondmarshmallowinthearticle. Somepeopleinmy

classactlikeanimals. Theyjustcantwaittogettheirhandsonthebasketball. Withevidencefromthemarshmallow

experiment,theyprobablywillnotsucceedinlife. CarolynandIontheotherhand,willprobablysucceedatmostthings

inlife. I'vetalkedaboutdifferentqualitiesbeingahighdelayerhas. Thebestqualityisbeingabletothinkbeforeyou

act. Bydelaying,yougiveyourselfachancetoanalyzethesituationathand. Withoutdelaying,youstarttojumpto

conclusionswithoutlookingatthewholepicture. DelayingandthinkingiswhatmadeEinsteinsobrilliant.

Comments:Youopenupyouressaybystatingthatbeingahighdelayerisonlyonemanywaystoachievesuccessinlife,

however,yougoontostatethatbeingahighdelayerisoneofthebestchancesofachievingsuccessbecauseitcauses

peopletobepatientandtothinkclearlyaboutwhattheconsequencesofasituationmaybe. Thisseemstobe

contradictoryandconfusing. Anotherissuethatemergesfromyouressayisthatyouarefocusingonyourownbeliefsas

opposedto

developing

compelling

evidence

that

will

support

the

claims

that

you

are

making.

An

excellent

source

of

evidenceforyouressaywouldhavebeentoincorporateandcriticallyanalyzequotesfromJohanLehrersessay. By

doingthisyouwouldbedevelopingyourownpositionindialoguewiththeclaimsandpositionsofthetextsthatyouare

utilizing. Thisisastylisticallysophisticatedwritingtechniquethatisoftenemployedincollegelevelwriting.


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start

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developedand

presentedthroughout


thinking

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across

readings

in


largercontextforthe

conversation

Clear,fluid,logical

Stronguseoftopic

sentencesand

other


Minimalornoerrors

Likelytoexhibit

eloquenceor

an

elegantwritingstyle



Engagesmorecomplex

ideasinthereadings

Beginstograsp

complexityofown

positionordevelops

secondaryemerging

thesis




throughoutpaper



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argument


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Thesismorecoherent

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structure


presentation


ofthesis


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range

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C0423S0133ETS78

Noworlater?:Thefalseperception Wordsandgesturesareactionsthatweuseeveryday,andarethe

sourcesofthecommonreciprocationswereceiveregularly.Aswewouldbumpintosomethingaccidentally,wewould

causeareactionfromwhateverorwhomeveritisthatwebumpedinto.Anynumberofsituationscouldbebornefrom

justthatordinaryhappening.Thatsituationforexample,couldbeaffectedbytheapproachandattitudeoftherecipient

towardsyoubecauseofyourownactions,whichwasthebump.Thatpersoncouldshowanger,butthereisalsothe

possibilityofregardingitwithhumor.Howeverythingreactsandretaliates,likeadominoeffectthathappensatevery

overlappingmoment,fusingtogethertocreateanincomprehensibleharmony,alongsidewiththequestionofwhatthe

originof

the

actions

on

our

part

that

sets

these

off

are,

is

the

result

of

along

search

of

answers

for

questions.

Queries

suchaswhydoessheactthatway?,whatwillhedo?,andwhydoeseverybodypresentthemselvesinthisway?

Onecannotbeblamedforwantingtoknow,byknowingthesethings,wewouldbeabletoaccomplishandpreventmore

thingsthaneverbefore.Spouseswouldbeabletocommunicatewithunderstanding,friendswouldbemadewithmore

easeandspeed,andjobscouldbefittedwithevenmoreappropriateemployeessinceitwouldbesimplerforthe

employertoanalyzewhetherthepersonisfitforitornot.Mostofallwewouldfindabetterunderstandingof

ourselves,andasenseofhowtofindcontrolbyfindingourownstrengths.Mostofall,byusingthesestrengths,suchas

selfcontrol,wecanmanipulateitsothatitbecomesakey,aneasierroad,infindingsuccess. Inordertofindour

placeinthisconstantexchangeofcauseandeffectpsychologistshavebeen,forthelongestoftime,searchingforthe

perfectevaluationthatclearlyandaccuratelydefinesthecharacterofanindividual.OneoftheseindividualsisWalter

Mischel.Theslight,elegantmanwiththeshavedheadinJohnLehrersessayDONT!Thesecrettoselfcontroland

thefounderofthemarshmallowexperiment. Justasinterestingasitsname,thisexperimentisquiteunique,buthas

fundamentalrulesnomorecomplexthanaparentleavingtheirchildforamoment,whileatreatisalsoleftbehind. This

investigationwasfirstheldinthelatenineteensixtiesattheBingNurserySchool.Lehrerdescribesthattheroomwasa

littlemorethanalargecloset,containingadeskandachair.Now,tothissettingaddachildaroundfouryearsold.A

researcherwillfirst,beforeleavingthechildtheresearcherwillleaveatreatofthechildschoice,andexplainthatthey


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couldeatthemarshmallowrightaway,butiftheywereabletowaitwhiletheystepoutforafewminutesandnoteat

themarshmallow,theycouldhaveasecond.Ifitwerethechildschoicetoeatthemarshmallowwithoutdelay,they

weretoringthebellonthetable.Theresearcherwouldcomehurryingback,butthesecondmarshmallowwouldbe

forfeited. Themajorityofthechildrenstruggledtoresistthetreatandheldoutforanaverageofthreeminutes

asLehrersays.Someatethemarshmallowwithoutdelayanddidntevenringthebell.InLehrersconclusionitwasthat

aboutthirtypercentofthechildren...successfullydelayedgratificationuntiltheresearcherreturnedsomefifteen

minuteslater.Thesekidswrestledwithtemptationbutfoundawaytoresist.WalterMischelwastheprofessorof

psychologyatthattimeinStanfordwhowasinchargeoftheexperiment.Theinitialgoaloftheexperiment,Lehrer

describesinhispaper,wastoidentifythementalprocessesthatallowedsomepeopletodelaygratificationwhile

otherssimplysurrendered. Overtime,though,Mischelwasabletomakeaconnectiontothehighdelayers,the

childrenwhowereabletowaitforthesecondmarshmallow,thelowdelayers,thechildrenwhodidntwait,andhow

theirpositioninschoolasteenagerswasaffectedbythat.Aftergatheringinformationabouttheteenagerswhohad

participatedintheBingexperimentbackinnurseryschool,heobservedthatinthedata Thatlowdelayers...seemed

morelikelytohavebehavioralproblems,bothinschoolandathome.TheygotlowerS.A.Tscores.Theystruggledin

stressfulsituations,

often

had

trouble

paying

attention,

and

found

it

difficult

to

maintain

friendships.

On

the

other

hand,LehreralsowritesthatthechildwhocouldwaitfifteenminuteshadanS.A.T.scorethatwas,onaverage,two

hundredandtenpointshigherthanthatofthekidwhocouldonlywaitthirtyseconds. Itisonlyevidentthatdatashows

thehighdelayersasmoresuccessful,andthatbeingalowdelayerbringsmoredisadvantages.Dr.DavidWalsh,featured

inavideopostedonYouTube.comcalledDrWalshMarshmallowWCCOSegment,afterholdingamarshmallow

experimentmodeledafterMischels,explainsthatakeysuccessfactorfor[a]kid[is]theabilitytosaynoto

themselves.The

belief

of

Dr.

Walsh

and

Mischel

both

concur

with

each

other.

And

thats

basically

all

that

those

kids

in

theBingNurserySchoolneededtodoinordertopreventthemselvesfromeatingthemarshmallow,tosaynototheir

selves. Soinordertorefrainfromeatingthetemptingmarshmallowachildmustknowhowtodenythemselves

thatinstantgratificationofsimplygobblingitup,butknowinghowtodosoisjustaspertinentashavingdoneit.


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Psychologistshadbeenbasingtheirpredictionsforapersonssuccessrelyingonthatpersonsrawintelligence,but

Mischellbelievesthatintelligenceisnotwhatshouldbefocused.LehreremphasizesthepointMischelismakingashe

arguesthatintelligenceislargelyatthemercyofselfcontrol:eventhesmartestkidsstillneedtodotheirhomework.

Whichistrue,youcanbesmart,buttheonlywayyouhadattainedthatmuchknowledgewasthroughstudying,and

surelythereareotherthingswewishtodoinsteadofstudying,especiallywithchildren. LehrerrevealsMischels

answertoselfcontrolbasedonhundredsofhoursofobservation,wasthatthecrucialskillwasthestrategicallocation

ofattention.Now,youwontbeabletoapproachafouryearoldandhavethemsaythattheyusedstrategic

allocationofattentioninordertostopthemselvesfromeatingthemarshmallow.Instead,Mischelobservedthatthe

childrenwhodidwaitallhadsomethingincommon.Theydidanythingelseotherthanacknowledgingthescrumptious,

savory,sugarylittlepillowofgoodnessthatwassittingrightinfrontoftheireyes.Lehrercontinuesthat Insteadof

gettingobsessedwiththemarshmallowthehotstimulusthepatientchildrendistractedthemselvesbycoveringtheir

eyes,pretendingtoplayhideandseekunderneaththedesk,orsingingsongsfromSesameStreet. Thechildrenhad

neverlostinterestinthemarshmallowinthefirstplace.Theyhadsimplydivertedtheirattentionsothattheirappetency

foreatingthemarshmallowrightawaywasdismissed. Ifwewereallabletohavefosteredthisknowledgein

thebeginning,

we

would

have

had

abetter

sense

of

self

control

by

now

than

we

ever

had.

Not

only

would

we

be

able

to

refrainfromeating,likemarshmallows,withthatwecouldhavedonemoreandmadeusewiththetimewehadtobe

moreconstructive.Forastudent,insteadofploppingontothebedassoonasyougethomeandsnoozinguntilseveno

clock,endingupdoinghomeworkuntilmidnight.Thiscouldeasilyavoidedbychangingthesettingorpointofviewof

thestudentsothatheorshewouldnotfeelsleepy.Maybethestudentcouldgotoacaforlibrarytohomeworkso

theywontfallasleep,orinviteafriendoverforhelp.Itsthesamethingasthoselittlekidswhostartedsingingsongs

fromSesame

Street

so

as

to

distract

their

attention

from

the

marshmallow.

According

to

Mischel,

this

view

of

will

poweralsohelpsexplainwhythemarshmallowtaskissuchapowerfullypredictivetest.Ifyoucandealwithhot

emotions,thenyoucanstudyfortheS.A.T.insteadofwatchingtelevision...Itsnotjustaboutthemarshmallows.

Havingthisviewandsenseofselfcontrolcanbeappliedtodailylifeandisakeyforsuccess. Ifonlywecould


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physicallygrabontothiskeytosuccess,eventhoughinrealitythereisnothingtolayyourhandson,suchathing

wouldmakeeverythingthatmucheasier.Sincedenyingoneselfisntassimpleassayingit.Youneedtoturnwordsinto

actions.JustlikeMischelsaysthatifyoudontpracticethenyoullneverfigureouthowtodistractyourself.Butnow

thechildrenofthemoderndayareatadisadvantage,makingpracticethatmuchharder.Dr.Walshsaysinthevideo

thatpriorgenerationshadaculturethatsupportedthemessageofno.Whatsdifficulttodayisthatwehaveaculture

thatunderminesthatmessage.Nowtheculturethatthecurrentgenerationsarefacingisonethatdoesntteachhow

nottoeatthemarshmallow,asDr.Walshputsit,wehaveaculturethatsaysmorefasteasyfun.Thiswayoflife

completelynegatesandruinsthelessonbeingtaughtwiththemarshmallowexperiment,andhavingmoresinister

affectsonallelse.Everythingdependsonthepeoplefortheeconomy,politics,andthingslikethemedia.Whetherthe

peoplefarewellorpoorly,itaffectsallofit. Theproblemhereisthatpeoplefailtoseethedistancesbetweentwo

essentialthings,andunfortunatelythismatterisnotsolvablebyaprescriptionfromanoptometrist.Youngadultsfor

example,arechallengedthemostwiththis.Incasesthathappeneveryday,suchasshouldaIdohomeworknowand

dowhatIwantlater?orwouldit morecommendableformyselfifIgetthefunofwhateverpleasebeforedoing

homework?Ofcoursetheidealchoiceistodotheboring,harderworklater,eventhoughitdoesntbenefitthemwhen

lookingat

the

bigger

picture

of

their

life.

No

one

would

think

that

saying

I

never

did

homework

first

in

all

my

life

is

somethingtobeproudof,butactuallyknowingthatyoudidfirstyourwholelifeiswhatpeopleadmireandfindmore

appealing.Thisiswhereselfcontrolinterveneswhenyouaskyourselfthequestionnoworlater?howthesetwo

balanceout,whicheverisgreater,onthescaledependsontheselfcontrolthatyoualreadypossess.Ifachildpossessed

theproperselfcontrol,thatchildwouldhavenoproblemin Itisdishonorabletoreasonoutthattakingactionnowand

takingactionarecorresponding,thatisabsentselfcontrolmaskedwithreasoning,orexcuses.Thisiswhenaperson

failsto

see

the

true

consequences,

and

the

distance

between

supplying

our

own

rewards

now

or

earning

them

in

the

future.Itsthesameasthingthatthosekidswhoparticipatedinthemarshmallowexperimenthadbeenasking

themselves.ShouldIeatthemarshmallow? Sothechildrenwhowerefollowedforyearsafterthemarshmallow

experimentintheBingNurserySchoolbyWalterMischell,showedrelationsbetweenthehighdelayers,lowdelayers


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andtheirownsuccess,butthemarshmallowtestwasntcreatedtopredictthechildsfuture.Thiswasdisclosedby

Lehrerwhenhewrote Whatwerereallymeasuringwiththemarshmallowsisntwillpowerofselfcontrol,Mischel

says.itsmuchmoreimportantthanthat.Thistaskforceskidstofindawaytomakethesituationworkforthem.They

wantthesecondmarshmallow,buthowcantheygetit?Wecantcontroltheworld,butwecancontrolhowwethink

aboutit. Mischeldidnotmakeapersonalitytestthatdefinedwhoweare.Hecreatedatestthathelpsusalongthe

pathwaythatdefineswhoweare,andthathelpsusmakeourwaytosuccess. Whenpeoplehearthewordsuccess

theyenvisionrichesandamazingluxuries,butthatsnotwhatsuccessreallyis.Thatsonlythepartthatyoucouldwant.

Thetruthtosuccessissettingthegoals.Justastheoutcomeofgoalsissuccess,theoriginofasuccessisthegoalssetto

achievethem,becausewithouteachotherbothwordshaveameaninglessexistence.Havinggoldandgems,expensive

carsandclothing,fameandfortuneallinyourpalm,thesearenotthethingsthatfirstmakeushappybecausethereis

somethingthatcomesbeforethat. Iremembersittingdownonenighttowatchamoviewithmytwosiblings.It

wasDisneysnewestmovie,ThePrincessandtheFrog.Ihadbeenexpectinganother typicallovestorythathad

somethingtowithmagicandwishingstars,butbytheendIwascryingandproclaimingittobemymostfavoriteandthe

bestDisneymovieIhadeverseen.Itwasthestoryaboutadarkskinnedwoman,namedTiana,wholivedinNew

Orleans.She

was

hardworking

and

never

took

the

time

to

dance

or

have

fun.

Even

though

her

mother

too

had

told

her

togofindherprincecharmingandeaseoffofallthehardworkanddoublejobs,shewastoofocusedonhergoal,the

dreambothherfatherandshehadcarriedtogetheruntilhehadpassedaway.Shewantedtorunarestaurant,Tianas

Place,wherepeoplewouldcomefromfarawayjusttohaveatasteofherfood.Nearingtheendofthemovie,inthe

handsofTianawasthevoodoomanstalismanwhichheldthepowertoturntheworldovertotheevilspirits.Asthe

voodoomanpurredinTianasears,tellingherthathewouldgiveherthathewouldgiveherthatrestaurantshehad

alwayswanted

if

she

handed

over

the

talisman

to

him.

He

waved

his

hand

and

there

appeared

faces

of

all

the

people

whohaddoubtedher,andneverunderstoodwhysheworkedsohard,andthenherfather,themanwhotoldherthat

wishingonastaronlytakesherhalfoftheway,thatinordertogetherhappilyeverafter,shehadtomakeittrueby

takingherselfthere.Andyet,afterallherfathershardwork,hehaddiedwithoutgettingwhathewanted.Tianalooked

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