创作完美文书中英对照ppt | forward looking admissions strategy

—

Forward-thinking mindsets for producing a sophisticated statement of what you will use your learning to achieve in the

future.

ADMISSIONS:RANDOM RITUAL OR CALIBRATED CONTEXT?

互联网留学文书第一品牌 www.mydocumate.com

—

运用前瞻性的思维模式，创作精致的文书，阐明你将如何利用所学知识来开拓你的未来。

留学文书 :随机仪式还是刻板内容 ?


—Someone who should know better.


— 某个比你更了解的人

这将会是你写过的最困难的东西


Here’s what I think:

If someone thinks it is “the hardest thing you’ll ever write”:

1. Why is that such a bad thing?

2. They probably didn’t get into Grad School.

3. Don’t listen to those people.


这里是我想说的话：

如果有人认为“文书将会是你写过最困难的东西”

1. 为什么文书写作这么困难呢 ?

2. 他们可能没上过学吧 .

3. 不要相信这些人说的话 . 互联网留学文书第一品牌 www.mydocumate.com

Too many people treat the admissions

process as a massive pain or it is “too

uncertain.”

• It is in a way… • That’s kind of the point.

But why? 互联网留学文书第一品牌 www.mydocumate.com

很多人觉得申请过程是一个巨大的痛苦或者认为它太过于“不确定”

• 从某种程度上来说是这样的… • 说到点子上了 .

但是为什么呢？


The admissions officer is not trying to cause you trouble for no reason.

His or her job is to:1.Attract good candidates, not put them off.2.Distinguish between and compare candidates on a fair and objective basis.

Their ability to do this would be much greater without an essay requirement that instructed everyone to demonstrate their unique case for admission.

So why…

招生官并不是没有理由的找你麻烦

他或者她的工作职责是 :1.吸引优秀的学生，而不是难倒他们 .2.在公平的客观原则下比较和区分不同的申请者

如果没有一篇文书来引导每个申请者展现自己独一无二的一面，他们的工作职责将会更加的巨大。

这才是为什么… …

11

Why don’t they just look at GPA/ test scores?

• Lots of applicants have the same test scores. Once test scores have been used to filter “very good” and “very unsuitable” candidates, there are serious doubts about their usefulness.

• Tests struggle to demonstrate your preparedness for a new, more challenging educational environment.


12

他们为什么不只考察 GPA / 考试成绩呢 ?

• 非常多的申请者都有着相同的考试成绩。一旦考试成绩被用来过滤“很好”和“很适合”的申请者，那么考试的实用性就需要被怀疑了。

• 考试只是为了显示你已经做好准备进入一个新的、更具有挑战性的教育环境。


“Preparedness”:


“ 准备工作”


17

E.g.• 在供求关系图表中标出轴心点• 细化超市收银员的工作职责• 背诵卡尔马克思的著作

E.g.• 选择一个标准来评

估申请是否适合他所申请的学生岗位

• 展示如何解出二元一次方程组

• 图表化城市犯罪数据分析结果

低级学习模式


Not enough.•The real world doesn’t work like school.

•Solving real problems isn’t like solving…

2+2=4 or

这是远远不够的•真实世界并不像课本里面所教授的那样简单 .

•解决实际问题并不像解方程式那样…2+2=4 or

20

Testing whether you are ready to progress beyond the

expectations of your previous learning environment.

• It is not an examination on what you did in the past.

• It is designed to test your ability to use your past learning to achieve bigger things in the future.


21

测试你是否准备好超越从前学习环境里对自己的期待

• 这并不是一个对你过去所作所为的测试

• 这是为了测试你是否有能力利用过去所学知识在未来取得更大的成就


22

What is higher education for?

Building towards expert-level competence.•Gain an understanding that goes beyond reliance on rules and guidelines. •Being ready to use knowledge to solve complex problems and address open-ended questions •Adapt knowledge to challenging, unexpected situations.


23

人们接受高等教育是为了什么 ?

为了培养专家级别的能力

•获得一种能够超越依赖规则和指导的理解力

•能够利用医学知识去解决复杂和开放性问题

•能够把知识运用到挑战未知环境里互联网留学文书第一品牌 www.mydocumate.com

24

Sound familiar?

• You are expected to go beyond the familiar rules of your current system and adapt your understand to the context of the more advanced learning environment you are applying to.

• You are presented with a complex, open-ended question, which you must use knowledge of yourself to solve,

• By adapting it to the requirements of a context, expectations of an audience, and parameters of a question that you have not experienced in the past.

25

听起来很熟悉 ?

• 你要能够超越现有体系的熟悉规则并且在所申请的更高级的学习环境中也能够用有相应的理解力。

• 你所遇到的是一个复杂的，开放性的问题，并且你必须运用自身的知识去解决。

• 要调整你自己去达到自己到目标环境的要求，来自他人的期望和解决你从未经历过的问题。

26

The Statement is the most direct evidence the

school has of your readiness for advanced

study.


27

文书是学校能看到你已经准备好去学习的最直接的证据


28

Stress, Panic & Backward-looking approaches


29

压力 , 恐慌 & 保守的方法


30

The problem: When people get “crazy”…

They lose perspective:•They stop thinking about the problem that’s right in front of them.•They stop reflecting on what they’ve achieved.•They fall back on reliable, familiar approaches that make sense because they’ve worked in the past.

FOR ADMISSIONS SUCCESS, PERSPECTIVE IS EVERYTHING.


31

问题：什么时候人们会被逼疯

当他们失去判断力的时候• 他们停止思考摆在眼前的问题• 他们对已经实现的事情不再进行反思• 他们退回到从前那种熟悉而信赖的方法

对成功的申请者来说判断力就是一切


32

留学中介

Agencies.


33

考试成绩

Test scores.


34

Most common problem…

The candidate stops asking themselves:

Why are they asking me this?Why am I telling them this?


35

最常见的问题…

当申请者停止询问自己 :

•为什么他们会问我这个 ?•为什么我要告诉他们这些 ?


36

‘Rubric mentality’

•A test paper that someone will feed into a computer •Or score with a big red pen.

They fall back on what feels safe: The techniques and modes of thinking they’ve been taught in the past.


37

“红旗心理”

•在电脑上完成的试卷•用红笔批改倾向于觉得保险的东西：即过去所学的技巧和思维方式


38

Symptoms of rubric mentality…

(Admissions staff often call these Red Flags).


39

“红旗心理”的症状

(招生官把它叫做“红旗心理” ).


41

…these words add nothing to your case for admission.

On their own,

without…


42

…这些话对你的申请并无帮助

缺乏…


43

“I am extremely interested in the interdisciplinary features

of your program.”

Insufficient.


44

“ 我对你们项目的跨学科性非常感兴趣”

不充分


45

List,• Scores,• Classes,• Awards.

The reader will have your resume and transcript and everything you’ve sent in a pack in front of them. There is absolutely no reason to list things twice.


46

罗列的信息• 分数• 学校信息• 获奖情况

己经给招生官寄去你的个人简介和成绩单等信息，所以没必要再次罗列。


Admissions officers get very frustrated by this ‘rubric

mentality’

•Nobody, not even me, can accurately gauge your chance of being admitted…•This is why I hate "chance" threads so much.•And yes, chance threads are laughable… 互联网留学文书第一品牌

www.mydocumate.com

招生官很不喜欢“红旗心理”

• 没有人（包括我）可以准确地说出你能被录取的概率…•这就是我不喜欢“概率”思路的原因• “概率”思路也很可笑…


49

Why is this frustrating to Mr. Peterson?Because the applicants are treating their test scores as if they will determine the outcome of the admissions process.

‘Chance thread’ candidates are not asking:Why are they asking me this?Why am I telling them this? 互联网留学文书第一品牌

www.mydocumate.com

50

招生官为什么讨厌？申请者认为他们的考试成绩似乎可以决定他们的申请结果。

有“概率”思路的申请者不会问：他们为什么问我这个？我为什么要告诉他们？


51

One thing in common:

The backward-looking candidate is not thinking hard (or at all) about the purpose/ context of the

document.

• Repeating information between documents

• Listing stuff out• Failing to offer specific details• Repeating information on the website • Making abstract assertions

52

共同点 :申请者（根本）没有认真思考写这份

文书的目的

• 在不同的文件中不断地重复信息• 罗列信息• 不能给出具体的细节• 重复网络上的信息 • 做抽象断言

53

The purpose of every example or piece of evidence in your document:

Provides compelling evidence that a candidate will be (1) successful at their school and (2) use what they learn in successful ways afterwards.

I.e. To demonstrate the extent to which you are suitable for further advanced learning.


54

你文书中每个例子以及每个字的作用：

能够提供令人信服的信息证明你（ 1 ）自己能在贵校出类拔萃（ 2 ）能够灵活运用之前所学并有所成就

即说出适合你进一步深造的方向 /领域


55

As we covered earlier…

56

正如我们之前所谈…

57

To show you are a candidate capable of success in this

type of environment1. Do not:• List or reiterate achievements• Include examples without considering

how they relate to your case for admission

• Etc.These approaches reflect lower level

learning and suggest you are not prepared for advanced education).

2. Instead…

Be a forward-looking candidate showing what

you can do with what you’ve learned so far.

58

告诉他们你能够适应环境并在此环境中取得成功

1. 若你• 列出、反复列出成就• 包括那些看起来似乎和你申请学校没什么关系

的奖项• 等等这就会表明你学习能力低下，并不适合高等教育

2. 你应该…

做一个具有前瞻性思维的申请者，展示你能运用所学知识的能力


Analyze• Distinguish between ethical

and unethical methods of promoting financial products.

• Appraise the quality of data collected from elderly members of a residential community.

• Criticize the UN”s propensity for deadlock in any situation where its intervention might prove useful or positive.

Create• Devise a plan to handle

violence in a school playground.

• Modify a municipal traffic light system to take account of major roadworks.

• Design an online course to teach students who live in remote areas.

Evaluate• Actively support the

promotion of diverse perspectives in a team.

• Recommend structural changes to address the needs of a struggling organization.

• Weigh the benefits of establishing a company office in another jurisdiction.

Examples

分析• 区分在推销金融产品的方法中，哪些符合职业道德，哪些违法职业道德

• 评判批评联合国的沉默行为，因为他们的介入很有可能会发挥积极的作用

创造• 制定一个解决学校暴力事件的计划

• 改善城市交通信号灯系统来配合道路施工

• 设计一个网络课程以方便离学校远的学生学习

评估• 在团队中积极支持多元化思维方

式• 提出结构性改变建议以帮助有困

难的组织渡过难关• 权衡在另一个管辖区内建立公司

的利弊

举例

62

(A) Analyze:•the complex, unfamiliar context of admissions, •the needs and expectations of their audience at the particular school they are applying to, and•the challenges presented by the open-ended question they have been asked to respond to.

A forward-looking candidate will use their background with a specific, targeted purpose in mind. They will:


63

(A) 分析 :•复杂而又陌生的申请内容•他们所申请学校招生官的需求和期待•他们需要回答的开放性问题所带来的挑战

具有前瞻性思维的申请者会以一种明确并具有目的性的方式来使用他们的背景。他们会：


E.g.

(1) “Find your individual voice and express it honestly”

Look deeper: Don’t take it at face value: I’m 31 years old and I’m not sure I could ever definitively fulfill their requirement in full. I’m sure it’ll be the same at 41 and 51.

(2) “Show me why you are uniquely qualified for this program.”

They don’t mean: •Paint me the next Mona Lisa.or•Write me your autobiography.or•Say: “I am passionate about finance.”

例如：(1) “找到你自己的声音并诚实地把它表达出来” 进一步想想 : 不要仅仅看它表面意思。我现在31岁，我也不确定我是否能完全满足他们的需求，就算我到了 41或者 51岁情况还是一样。(2) “让我知道为什么是你符合此项目的要求”他们的意思不是让你 : •画出第二个“蒙娜丽莎”•写一本你的自传•说：“我对金融非常有激情”

66

(B) Evaluate their own background, using their analysis to select examples—evidence—that will be most pertinent and powerful to their audience.E.g.•Why is it good to have worked or studied in another country or culture? •Why is it good to be in a situation that requires collaboration with other personalities? •Why is it good to have lots of extracurricular activities?


67

(B) 评估自己的背景，并根据分析结果来选择文书中需要的例子和证据，这些例子和证据就是招生官想要看到的东西。例如：•为什么要有出国工作或出国学习经历？ •为什么要在一个需要合作精神的机构中？•为什么需要课外活动？


68

(C) Create connections between the understanding and examples you’ve generated to synthesize a compelling case for admission to your target school that goes beyond your learning so far.


69

(C) 创造在你文书中举的例子和理解意义之间建立联系，使之成为综合体，并吸引目标学校的注意。


70

What this requires from you:

• Reflection: Spend time thinking about your experiences and how they can be connected to what the school is looking for.

• Don’t panic: It is very unlikely that you will be able to respond to the question immediately.

• Context: Show you have thought deeply about the purpose of each example. Think carefully about why everything you say in the statement connects to your case for advanced learning.

71

这就需要你 :

• 反思 : 花时间来思考你的经历，并找出方法把它们和你目标学校所需要的品质联系起来。

• 不要惊慌 : 不太可能在短时间内立即对问题作出答复。

• 内容方面 : 展示你已经仔细思考过文书中每个例子的作用，仔细思考文书中你说的每个字与你申请高等教育之间的联系。


Why do this? (1)

Showing you are ready to use knowledge to solve complex problems, address open-ended questions, adapt to challenging, unexpected situations will have a fundamental impact on the quality of your application.


为什么？ (1)

如果你能向他们展示你已经可以运用知识解决复杂问题，回答开放性问题以及解决突发事件，这将会大大提高你申请文书的质量。


74

Why do this? (2)The value of educational achievements drops very sharply after we leave school.1, 2, 3 years after you finish school, their value is increasingly determined by how you’ve used your learning:•What you’ve achieved with it.•The motives those achievements reveal.•The wider wellbeing that arises from your activities.


75

为什么？ (2)

你在学校的成就在你离开学校后很快就会迅速贬值。在你离开学校后的前三年中，它们的价值越来越多的体现在你是如何运用你的学习能力上：•你用它得到了什么。•这些成就背后的动机是什么。•以及这些成就给你带来了什么。


76

Why do this? (3)The nature of contemporary life and work: •Information and concepts are updated constantly as economic integration and technology foster an unprecedented pace of change.

•Things change, we change. We’re all only just beginning to learn what technology means for the world. We are only just beginning to learn what the miracle of Chinese growth means for the world.

•Our “success” will not be determined by our interaction with a static state of affairs, but by the extent to which we handle the fundamentally uncertain nature of life:

•Uncertainty is not a bad thing… It’s not a good thing either… It is simply the way things are.

•By emphasizing your ability to apply, select and adapt your knowledge your essay will demonstrate your preparedness for life on your target program and beyond.


77

为什么？ (3)

现代生活工作的本质 : •由于经济一体化以及由于科技发展带来的变化，信息和概念不断地更新。

•世界在改变，我们也在改变。科技能给世界带来什么，以及中国奇迹般的成长对世界到底意味着什么，这都是我们需要思考的东西。

•我们的成功并不是由我们是怎样处理静态生活决定的，而是由我们是如何应对“不确定”这一生活本质决定的。

•“ 不确定”既不是一件坏事也不是一件好事，它仅仅是生活的本质。

•申请文书中强调你运用、选择和调整知识的能力，则能表明你已经准备好迎接在你所申请项目的生活。


78

Why do this (4)

The value of educational achievements is limited by what you can persuade others you can do with them.

You will always need to be able to make a case for what you can do with your learning.

The case you make here will be something you return to again and again in life and will serve as a strong basis for starting at your new school. But, it will also serve as a template for future endeavors. 互联网留学文书第一品牌

www.mydocumate.com

79

为什么？ (4)

你学习上的成就很容易受到你能说服别人做什么的限制。

你需要创造一种情景，展现你能用你所学做什么。

你所创造的情景是你在新学校之后需要不断反复思考的，并且也是你生活的基础。同样，它也可以为你的未来目标指引方向。


80

Summary: Be a forward-looking candidate.

Analyze:•The context and•Reflect on what you’ve achieved.

Evaluate:•Your audience and what is important to them (both in terms of presentation and content.)•The significance of your achievements.

Create:•A compelling explanation of what use your prior learning to achieve.•A rationale for everything your include in your statement.

81

结论：做一个具有前瞻性思维的申请者分析 :•内容•思考你学会了什么

评估 :•对于面试官来说什么是重要的，不管是形式还是内容方面。•你所取得的成就的重要性

创造 :•令人信服地说明你能用你超强的学习能力能获得的东西•使你文书中的每句话都合情合理


82

Most importantly:

• Always ask: Why are they asking me this? / Why am I telling them this? Make sure you have an answer

• Always remember: Perspective The process is a complex series of obstacles and problems to solve; the learning skills required reflect what is needed for more advanced learning. It’s not a chore. It’s a big opportunity to sum up everything you’ve achieved and why it should matter to important people. (Don’t go crazy.)


83

最重要的是 :

• 不停地问自己 : 他们为什么问我这个？ / 我为什么要回答这个答案？确保你心中有数。

• 心中牢记 : 这一路上将有很多复杂的困难和挫折等着你去解决；学习技巧也要为高等教育所需。这并不是一件繁琐的家庭琐事，而是你总结和评判你所得所学重要性的好机会。（不要抓狂）


“未受过教育”的定义是“不知道如何去学习” —David Kearns ,

Former CEO, Xerox Corporation


创作完美文书中英对照ppt | forward looking admissions strategy

Education