Lit Based Self and Peer Edit

The act of putting pen to paper encourages pause for thought, this in turn makes us think more deeply about life, which helps us regain our equilibrium. 

~ Norbet Platt

Missing something? Put it on your post it!H – no highlightingS – Short a paragraph (you should have 6)

NS – No Scholarly SourceSS – Short a source (you need 6)PD – Short PD (you need 12)D – Not Double SpacedV – Vocabulary (identify how many – you need 15)WC – Works Cited Page1 – For just 1 copy and not 2 copies*Just put your name on a post it if you don’t have your rough draft!

First, give a quick check of the normal MLA requirements:

Headers ½ an inch down. Be sure the page number for your header is the real

page number, not a lower case Roman Numeral! (You only use those for outlines!)

Be sure you have your name,my name, course and section, and due date for your heading information! (Change the due date now for April 27th, 2015

An AMAZING title! No extra spaces anywhere! Be sure PD only has periods following the parentheses. NO blocked quotes for this paper – it isn’t long enough! NO stacking! Third person only!

• In the first body paragraph topic sentence highlight Characters of Virtues and Vices and your archetype and Joseph Hall . Be sure the archetype is capitalized.

• In your remaining body paragraph topic sentences highlight the character name and the source (television show/movie/novel). If one of those is missing note it in the margin.

• As you look at each body paragraph ensure that the following are taken care of:

Movie Title Novel Title Television Show Play “Article Title” Journal Title Cartoon Title Comic Book Title• Specifically check:

“Memorable Quotes from Finding Forrester” (maintain proper italics/ “ ”

• Check your in-text citations for Hamlet (Shakespeare 1.3).

(No Roman numerals)• Be sure that you also use

slashes to show line breaks: Here is a line/ here is another.

• Look at all of your quotes and be sure they have proper lead-ins! No dropped quotes.

• Don’t forget that if you have a lead-in with your author (or whatever comes first in your works cited page) you don’t have to have PD (unless you are using a print source and need the pages!)

• Check your concluding paragraph do you truly address the prompt:

Finally, analyze how the archetype has adapted

or how society’s perception of it has

altered and what this alteration implies about

our cultural values.

Father's Ghost. My hour is almost come, When I to sulph'rous and tormenting flames Must render up myself.

The ghost disclosed to Hamlet, “My hour is almost come/ When I to sulph’rous and tormenting flames/ Must render up myself” (Shakespeare 1.5.736-741).

A few more items to consider:

• Capitalize your archetype: The Busy Body, The True Friend• In your topic sentences you will name your show (movie, novel,

whatever) and your character.• Maintain your organization – hit the three characteristics of your

archetype in the same order in each body paragraph.• Do not summarize the movie, or television show (or whatever

your source is) – your focus is on analyzing!• Don’t address the archetypes as humans – they are characters,

we are analyzing fiction!• Do NOT summarize any of your content – you are analyzing

your support.

A few more items to consider:• Your novel has to be quoting/paraphrasing from your book! This should

be a print source with page numbers unless you used a kindle or nook! (Smith 21).

How do I cite an e-book?In general, a work formatted for reading on an electronic device like Kindle, Nook, and iPad is covered by 5.7.18. Begin the entry in the works-cited list like the entry for a comparable printed work and end it with a designation of the medium of publication. The medium is the type of electronic file, such as Kindle file, Nook file, EPUB file, or PDF file. If you cannot identify the file type, use Digital file.

For example:Rowley, Hazel. Franklin and Eleanor: An Extraordinary Marriage. New York: Farrar, 2010. Kindle file.

If the work presents electronic and print publication information, the electronic information should usually be cited.

Most electronic readers include a numbering system that tells users their location in the work. Do not cite this numbering, because it may not appear consistently to other users. If the work is divided into stable numbered sections like chapters, the numbers of those sections may be cited, with a label identifying the nature of the number (6.4.2):

According to Hazel Rowley, Franklin and Eleanor Roosevelt began their honeymoon with a week’s stay at Hyde Park (ch. 2).

orFranklin and Eleanor Roosevelt began their honeymoon with a week’s stay at Hyde Park (Rowley, ch. 2).

(The abbreviation ch. is shown in 7.4. There is a comma in a parenthetical citation after the author’s name if the following reference begins with a word.)

If the work is a PDF file with fixed pages, cite the page numbers. If the work lacks any kind of stable section numbering, the work has to be cited as a whole (6.4.1).

Review the Works Cited page:

• Be sure your entries are in alpha order and that you have a header on this page too!

• Be sure you indent the second line and any other lines that follow.

Hall, Joseph. Characters of Virtues and Vices. Renascence Editions, 1998. Web. 8 April 2015.

(put in your appropriate access date!)

Your Hamlet The Tragedy of Hamlet,

Prince of Denmark (1600). Open Source Shakespeare. George Mason University, 2003-2014. Web. 20 April 2015.

OR

Shakespeare, William. Hamlet. Toronto: Dover Publications, 1992. Print.

Internet Movie Database SampleEditor, author, or compiler name (if available). Name of

Site. Version number. Name of institution/organization affiliated with the site (sponsor or publisher), date of resource creation (if available). Medium of publication. Date of access.

“Memorable Quotes for Finding Forrester.” Finding Forrester (2000). The Internet Movie Database, n.d. Web. 15 April 2015.

Remember to use n.p. if no publisher name is available and n.d. if no publishing date is given.

Be sure you check your other internet sources!

Editor, author, or compiler name (if available). Name of Site. Version number. Name of institution/organization affiliated with the site (sponsor or publisher), date of resource creation (if available). Medium of publication. Date of access.

The Purdue OWL Family of Sites. The Writing Lab and OWL at Purdue and Purdue U, 2008. Web. 10 Apr. 2015.

Remember to use n.p. if no publisher name is available and n.d. if no publishing date is given.

Odds and Ends

• Be careful where you actually place your PD

• Also, consider where you put your vocab – just because the definition interchanges with the word doesn’t mean it will actually work in the sentence!

• Attention getters can be tricky – think about how to draw in your reader for this paper! Consider maybe the importance and longevity of the characteristics you are addressing!

• How to provide strong commentary between quotes/paraphrases can be tricky – let your ideas drive the essay!

• Smoothly transition into your thesis!

• Be cohesive!• Hamlet vs Hamlet• Topic sentences and end of

paragraphs – no quotes or paraphrases

Grab a highlighter . . .

• Go through and make brackets around your lead-in for each of your quotes.

FYI – This is a BAD

example of the first body paragraph!!!!

You cannot repeat the structure for your lead-ins! We also need to examine how you weave in the purpose of your quote! In the margin of your quotes you need to put a + if it can stay, or an * if it needs your attention!

Why are we quoting? Is your quote/paraphrase truly effective?

1. When language is especially vivid or expressive.

2. When exact wording is needed for technical accuracy.

3. When the words of an important authority lend weight to an argument.

4. Highlighting necessary bias or opposite opinions.

Label in the margin for each

quote/paraphrase the number for WHY you are

including this quote!

Take your second paper out . . . We are going to work with that one now …

First the backwards review …

You need one highlighter. Make a squiggle key:

To be considered . . .

Focus on:PD & Stacking of PD & Ellipses problemsPunctuationPlacement of quotes/paraphrasesPoint of View (3rd only)Use of vocab (if it feels weird with the section you can read – highlight it!)Use of exclamation points – they don’t belong in a formal paper.Using quotation marks for emphasis – we don’t use air quotes in our paper

Peer EditOn the back of one page l abel the top:

I won der…On the back of another page:

I n oticed …On the back of another page:

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Peer Edit

Your filled out rubric is due

Tuesday, April 28th in class!

The paper is due to turnitin on

Monday, April 27th

by 11:59pm!

You will need a hard copy of your full paper in class

Wednesday, April 29th!

Be sure you have access to your documents for Monday as we will be

discussing and analyzing your readings in groups!

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