lesson 18 characteristics of good sentences

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ji

Lesson

7I

Cnar"cterisfics

of Good

Senfences

ScnMccs

vary vidcly in

style

i.d subjcct

mitrer

Yel all

g@d

scntences havc

ccrlin

l. Cood

shrdnces

do trot wa$

*ords. Tncy

usc

only cnourh

words

io

cany tfic

ftolehr.

Nor da rh.y sdndr Thcy mrk. then

poin.

ondslop

(pagcs

123-126).

woby:

Thc

didiculies

wc

ca e in

thk

all-toFbricrlilc

ofou6

are

ond

$cc

that

*

e

bnng

rpon

ouscly6.

ftn

d

ndcntionall :

coxc$L:

Mosr ollhe

shadows oflnis lilc arc

caosedby

our

$Mding

in ou own

sDrhine.

(Ral9h

Wddo Encson)

2.

Cood

s.lt.nccs arc

cLce

Tncy crrress

.

rhought

pEckcly

dd dtrcctly

MUDDLEDj

AndrN

sot

W

rd bu' ud

scnr it

iib thc

rishFficld

(ands

GEe: Andrew

eol

up

ro bar and seni the

bdll inro

the

ri8h

6.ld*ards.

L Cood

rntrnc6

hr {

uniry

Thry

i\ I

@

one

geneml

@pic

in a

sknce

L.\.tuc d

Cood

lennn play.6

don

l hale towo'k e,r- hard,

lNrfr

butsolreBsomctihcssccnbenjoyihceo. orc.

llr\@D:

A

gmd

Ennis

playcr

I

ods

bnd bur nd.r

looks d

d'ouen hc

n..

4

Coodsentences

ato

rohelent, usins

occumle

conne.tilcs

(prye

l27l

r^.Krx. Bccausc Sue Nas onr bcst

pitchcr,

sh.

didn\

g.r

a

.oreE^r.r

chane

{o

pikh

in

rh.

playolG.

coGRN: Allhousl' Suc

w6 ou

besr

pnc,F.

she didnl

Bcr

r

chancc

ro

lnch

in lhc

Dlayofs.


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Good

sqtences trc

uricd

in sroctuF. Thc_v do hot rlwa'\

follow a set

pa(em

MoNoroNous

\dbc[d

is p.cuy

and ricn. sho is atso

a

fabulons

singd.

I e. a

he.

v RrEDr

lsabella is nor only preity

atrd lich bur atso a

tabulous

singr.

Hov

I

envy

hcrl

6.

Cood senhces

ll upon st ong. specinc

notr6

dd

vivid

lelbs

ro convy

fic

thougbt. They

usc adjcctivcs {id adlcrbs spr.ingly

bu

ctrcctivety

9

Good stutflces

re

complete, niths

fmgmen6

(page.

t

55

164)nortun-ons

Cood ssntmdd

re reclnically

corect, rollowjns

accelled

sradards ot

usage

( .gcs

149-230)

dd spcllil

(passs

221 230).

Comparing

Seniances

It

is

helplul

ntr

read

aood

se.tehces

Minen

b,

oth6.

Here is an

cffipte

ot

a

loweF

At the mts

oJkonviDlence

sta

ds

le

r

htiple af

kre.

(ManinLnthet

HN

nuch

less

efe.irc

it

N@ld

havc bocn iasiarcd

in rnis way:

Pqple

who belid. in

nowiat nce and

pnctice

it are rcdlL

ntotti,,E

jha

The

duck

l

ded on rhe ice unslccesstullr

dtulrlr.ny

catne to a stop aftd a

long

slide alane lhe ice

on

rhe

The

mallard lodcd ucorranny m

$e ice.

shdded

dd

flopped olons

1br

Ndty leet.

and then

scnnbled

to

ih

pleaine

to

read,

usualy

b djorable

part

ol

a legei vhote

Why is &e fi^l

se.imce

so much

betted

fie first sentmce is

dire

cled. condise.

CIIARACTERISTICS OF GO


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EX-ERCISE

l.

Which sntence

in eac|

pan

do

yo

consider

beuet

Tetl

why.

L

z. We wcnt d the roller

coastcr dd

thetr

ye

Nmr

on &e

hsured

house ride

and

ths

we

wmr

on Lhe nronomil.

,. We ivcnt

on

the roller

co6tc4 ilr haunled

hous ide,

od rhe

nonorail.

2.

a.

At ihe librar),1pickcd

up

a Hary

Poner book and

a book abNr

plo1ogn y.

,.

I w.nl ro thc

libhr]

and I

picked

up

a

book abo* Hari,

rorer

and a book

dfi

tclls all

abour

lhotography.

1.,

The

fanily lad

all ac.eed

on

a

camping spdt

for ou marion. and

Blad suddcbly

b. Tlrs fanily

hod sll agrced on a

cahpjng

spoi

lbr ou

kcalio ,

bul Biad

suddenl]

4.

d.

I ordercd asddwich

nado vith

cheese,

a baC lillcd \rirh

porato

chirs

and an

,. For

lDch,

I odercd

r

cheesc

saDdwich, a bas

orpoEio

ci1i,s,

od

aD appLc.

s

a. Liv bad

dccepted.locl\

invitdion

to rhe dance. and

shc

c[ugcd

her nind

Nnh

no

b. Liv had

acceplod Joel,s invitalion

to rhe

dance.

bul

she

cha.ged

lEr nind

ynh

no

SENTENCE

CO Posrrrox


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Complting

comparisons

In

rhd

Fcvious

seclion. wc cofrrared

sentences

to

scc wbich 0.6 wqc

betrd. We

can

also

ue

conpalison

as

wiring

tool to nake sentencs

nore 6ncise,

lively, and enjoy-

considr

lhe iollorvtus

scntoo,

nr shich

baseball playeN

arc coDlaEd

to becs:

The

batebatl

plare,s sarh.rcd

atuMd

the

unpjrc

like ang./

b..s.

By

Eing the

iDage

ofthe angry bees, we do not

hale

10 sey that the

plryds

wqe

g-

srcssivc

d

quick

in rleii

morm@rs

or

1har

theh

complaints

soedcd likc

I

loud

bu

arcud lhe mpir. nro inage

oflhe bees does rl* tor ns. Using d

conpa.json

itr this way

saves

wordr

and

crates

interest.

Ifyou

raid

closc

allcnnon b

your

spcccn.

you would

nd

rlat

you

se

hany

conpaF

isons. some are dr&r, wirh litu or

,s:

ias

$rong 6

.n

ox, 's

lisid as

nNse,'

.,like

a

lion."

olhm

arc

tu,lirc.i

".,od

16

a

riser on tne ticld.

(.,oan

played

as savaaely ds a

tigft.) Borh

l6hs

de

a khd of

poetry.

Dirccl

c.rrarisons

ar

qllcd

J,t

cs

ldi.d.r

obes ee,,,rarr,/s

In

the

follosing

exercise,

q

yow

skiu in vriling senknces

{irh

EXERCISE 2.

Complete eich

al

Lhc

folosneMLh

en orisiba onrpdnson

Anao .is

like

d

n

Jnenrt

teaitinE

to neet

or.

5. Playing

basketball is like

6.

fte

school cdfeteria is

lite

l0 SwimminAin rheoccan

i likc

CHARACTERISYICS

OF

GO


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Whfr

you

beEin lo wite

sentenccj

you

slrould knoN

whse

tou

ee

eoilrg

will]

n

Condde lh.

n\oughr y@

set oul to dpies, As

you

pur

rour

$onght

in wnihs.

rendba

lhe nin. chueterhtics

ofgdod sentmces,

Ndinedatth.bgi'rningofthh

less@. Lcsson

l9 *iU

sb@ some specinc wq,s o

Mire efestils

senldces.

EXERCISE

3. Conplctc cach

oftle foUovins to

nd]c

d

eood

s dcc.

M

final

gadcs

ihqtueed

so nurh oet

161

)Eatb

r

t nr srl?la^hip

Antu6

$e

L My m:jorznbjrion

in life

iro

2.

AtuL

dider,

i

amrlrnn'ng

3

My

favorite

vay

to spend Satuftlay is

Lo

7 Wlenrhc fuorbdll gane6 v$

9

A'

the end

oflie

hov'e

EXERCISE 4. write

a sinslc

gdod

scnrone

that

rclls

abour

eeh ofthc

tollNins

a

lavorire

pc(

I ont

had a

paru*eet

Mnel H1lnpnrty, hha

enjoj,edlyins

uattut

th

nm

l,

muMl

coinoidence

$at

occMed

rccqlly


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2

o

hapny

nommt

'n

yotrrlifc

3

sohcllins

you

m

proud

of

5. lhe

pereon

{ho influcnces

you

hosL

Rdising

is

an

nnport

nr

paft

ol

tbe wndng proce$, Il is

hebftl to reread what you

hale wilten.

Chanccs arc,

yotr

will discovd

an

oror,

uncoler somcding

rhar

may

no1

bc

cldr

to

readere,

or

sihply

find

a

nrc

inrere$ine

or neoorable

wat

ro

sry vhar

you

qrote.

Are

your

senlcnes lechnically

corec

peisc,

concise,

ud

elilctivel

Makc

i

a

labil

b tuswcr

$is

qucslioD

by reEadinB and

disins

every

senoncc bcforc

y6u

rcnd

it

EXERCISE 5.

Select ten ofthc finccdscntoocs

youworeforExftGes

3

d4and

dise thm. Aim

fo concisoncss Md cldiry

by elininding meoersry

or

aue

rnts.

Otigiml

k

are:

My nn

g^dcs

inproved

so much ovr la$

ycd\

lhat

ny

sctot-

mhip

chances

rose

dlmrtically

ney,s.dj?/z,.ei My

scholsship

chances

sb,&ckeied

becasc hy fiDat

s6dd

sreally

impove.l

this

yea.

I,

CHARACTERISTICS

OF

GO


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