kindergarten early in march the following samples were written by kindergarten children in early...
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playing in the snow
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make a snowman
playing in the snow
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make a snowman
throw snowballs
playing in the snow
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make a snowman
throw snowballs
playing in the snow
build a fort
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make a snowman
throw snowballs
need warm clothes
playing in the snow
build a fort
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make a snowman
throw snowballs
need warm clothes
playing in the snow
build a fort
Kindergarten early in March
The following samples were written by Kindergarten children in early March
Kindergarten early in March
Kindergarten, toward end of March
The following examples were written in November by students in second grade.
These examples were students first attempt at using the think-sheets.
The teacher and class co-constructed the think-sheets (We Do It), and students then independently wrote their essays.
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Purpose Audience TOPIC HookTell a story Write about something
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x Granny Birthday party Ever been really surprised?
Pizza trick
Pizza, ice cream, cake
This was the best birthday ever.
Lots of presents
Birthday cake
ice cream
basketball
Daddy-clown
orange hair
Pizza Palace
Video tape
video games
Clown video
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Best friends came
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Last week, Mom stopped at the Pizza Palace and sent me in to pick up an order. It was a trick to surprise me with a birthday party.
My best friends were there. When I walked in, they yelled “SURPRISE!” I was really shocked. I could even speak.
I got lots of cool presents, but the best one was the basketball you sent me. I’ve wanted one for a long time. I also got some cool video games.
First we ate pizza. Then I opened presents. Dad came out with my birthday cake. We had chocolate ice cream with it.
Mom video taped the whole thing. It is really funny. I hope you get to watch it. Dad had orange hair and a weird clown suit on.
Dear Granny,
Have your ever been really surprised? Last week, Mom stopped at the Pizza Palace and sent me in to pick up an order. It was a trick to surprise me with a birthday party. My best friends were there. When I walked in, they yelled “SURPRISE!” I was really shocked. I couldn’t even speak. I got lots of cool presents, but the best one was the basketball you sent me. I’ve wanted one for a long time. I also got some cool video games. First we ate pizza. Then I opened presents. Dad came out with my birthday cake. We had chocolate ice cream with it. Mom video taped the whole thing. It is really funny. I hope you get to watch it. Dad had orange hair and a weird clown suit on. This was the best birthday ever.
Love, Jamil
2DaPurpose Audience Topic Hook
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This is about
___ Some one who …___ Something that…___Someplace where ……
2DaPurpose Audience Topic Hook
Describe Explain
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HEAR
SMELL
TOUCH
TASTE
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TRANSITION WORDS: first, second, third, etc., next, throughout, beside, between, among, when, where, as well as, after, before, after, finally, later, suddenly, immediately, as soon as, until,
This is about
___ Some one who …___ Something that…___Someplace where ……
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Teacher Backyard BBQ World’s best food is in backyard
… is one of my favorite things to do on a holiday
Slab of ribs Smoke coming out of BBQ
Potato chipsCooler
White bread
Paper plates
charcoal
Black grill
Hickory chips
Sizzling of ribs as grease drips on fireribs smoking on the grill
Sticky BBQ sauce
Delicious BBQ ribs
The jet-black grill has smoking pouring out of all the cracks around the lid and from the little smokestack.
I love the sound of the ribs sizzling as drops of grease drop onto the hot fiery coals.
You’ll probably smell the ribs smoking on the grill long before you see the grill.
After you’ve eaten all you can, your hands and face will be covered with sticky sauce.Just the thought of chowing down on those delicious ribs makes my mouth water.
I'm ready for some BBQ right now!
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Someplace where…
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Backyard BBQWorld’s best food is in backyard
Teacher
… is one of my favorite things to do on a holiday
Smoke coming out of BBQ
Sizzling of ribs as grease drips on fire
ribs smoking on the grill
Sticky BBQ sauce
Delicious BBQ ribs
I love the sound of the ribs sizzling as drops of grease drop onto the hot fiery coals.
You’ll probably smell the ribs smoking on the grill long before you see the grill.
After you’ve eaten all you can, your hands and face will be covered with sticky sauce. Just the thought of chowing down on those delicious ribs makes my mouth water.
I’m ready for some BBQ right now!
Slab of ribs
charcoal
Black grill
Hickory chips
Potato chips
Cooler
Paper plates
White bread
The jet-black grill has smoking pouring out of all the cracks around the lid and from the little smokestack.
The world’s best food is not in an expensive restaurant. It’s the BBQ ribs sitting next to the potato chips, pickles, paper plates and stack of white bread on the picnic table in my backyard. You’ll probably smell the ribs smoking on the grill long before you see smoke pouring out of the cracks around the lid and from the little smokestack of the jet-black grill. I love the sound of the ribs sizzling as drops of grease drop onto the hot fiery coals. Just the thought of gobbling up those delicious ribs makes my mouth water. After you’ve eaten just one, your hands and face will be covered with sticky sauce that feels like glue. Just thinking about this makes me ready for some ribs right now!
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TRANSITION WORDS: first, second, third, etc., next, throughout, beside, between, among, when, where, as well as, after, before, after, finally, later, suddenly, immediately, as soon as, until,
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WHAT
WHEN
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State conclusion
TRANSITION WORDS: first, second, third, etc., next, throughout, beside, between, among, when, where, as well as, after, before, after, finally, later, suddenly, immediately, as soon as, until,
Camping Trip Do you like camping?
My friends
Uncle Scott lives in Colorado. We planned to visit him.
Dad, Mom, David & I
Went hiking & fly fishing
Summer vacation
Colorado mountains
Stayed in a camping trailer
Last summer, Dad, Mom, my brother David, and I went on a camping trip.
Dad took us hiking and fly fishing. Mom took us for a ride on an old train.
We left home the day after summer vacation started. It took three days of driving to get there.
We stayed in several campgrounds in the Colorado Mountains.
Dad borrowed a camping trailer that we towed behind the car. We cooked breakfast and dinner on a campfire.
Camping in Colorado was the best trip ever.
camping
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mountains
hiking
fishing
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Do you like camping? Last summer, I went on a great camping trip. We went to Colorado to visit my Uncle Scott. Dad, Mom, my brother, David, and I went camping with him. We left home the day after summer vacation started. It took three days of driving to get there. When we got there, Dad borrowed a camping trailer that we towed behind the car. Next we drove up into the mountains a found a camping spot. That night we cooked on a campfire. During the next several days, we stayed in several campgrounds in the Colorado Mountains. Dad took us hiking the first few days. Later he took us fly fishing. On our last day in Colorado, Mom took us for a ride on an old train. Camping in Colorado was the best trip ever!
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Camping TripDo you like camping?My friends
Uncle Scott lives in Colorado. We planned to visit him.
Dad, Mom, David & I
Went hiking & fly fishing
Summer vacation
Colorado mountains
Stayed in a camping trailer
Last summer, Dad, Mom, my brother David, and I went on a camping trip.
Dad took us hiking and fly fishing. Mom took us for a ride on an old train.
We left home the day after summer vacation started. It took three days of driving to get there.
We stayed in several campgrounds in the Colorado Mountains.
Dad borrowed a camping trailer that we towed behind the car. We cooked breakfast and dinner on a campfire.
Camping in Colorado was the best trip ever.
camping
Colorado
mountains
hiking
fishing
camping trailer
train
vacation
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The Colorado Camping Trip
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people who like scary stuff
Perdido Cemetery Like haunted houses?Purpose Audience Topic Hook
Describe Explain
Tell a story Persuade
This is about:
Someone who …
Something that …
Somewhere that …
Is a spooky cemetery we like to visit at night for a thrill
tombstones seem to move
indentions in the ground are old caved-in graves
smells musty – rotting stuff
night sounds - owls, leaves rustling
2What it’s like at night
old crumbly tombstones, falling over, stained
huge oak trees with Spanish moss
rusty metal fence with a broken gate
grass and bushes have gone wild
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State conclusion If you think you are brave enough, I’ll take you there one night. We’ll see how brave you really are
old tombstones
rusty fence
wild bushes
huge oak trees
caved-in graves
smells like death
creepy noises
scariest at night
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The Perdido Cemetery If you like visiting haunted houses at Halloween, you’ll love visiting what’s in the woods behind my house. It’s an old, abandoned cemetery! As I describe this place, you’ll agree that it’s better than any fake haunted house you’ve been to. Its name is the Perdido Cemetery. “Perdido” is a Spanish word that means, “lost.” It is a perfect name for this place. You have to walk through the woods to get there. The first thing you’ll notice is the old, rusty gate and fence. Naturally, the gate is broken and hanging at a crooked angle. Inside the fence are huge oak trees that have Spanish moss sleepily hanging from every limb. The graveyard has been abandoned, so the grass and bushes have gone wild and grown tall and scraggly. They hide most of the tombstones. The old crumbly tombstones are stained. Some lean over like they are trying to look down, and others have fallen over completely. The scariest time to go is at night. The tombstones seem to move as you scan the cemetery with your flashlight. Nearly everywhere you can see are indentions in the ground that show where graves are, but whose tombstones are long gone. The indentions come from the caskets rotting away and causing a cave-in in the earth as the dirt slowly fills the cavity around the skeleton. The place smells really musty. Although what you smell is probably rotting leaves, it’s hard not to think that it’s from rotting bodies! Chances are that your visit will be complete when you hear a screech owl. Most can’t stand it any longer and want to get out of there as fast as possible when the hear that horrible sound. If you think you are brave enough, come spend the night with me. We will wait until it is late and dark before we visit the cemetery. We’ll see just how brave you really are when we take a little walk in the woods behind my house.
Is about a place that
Old tombstones
Rusty fence
Wild bushes
Caved-in graves
Smells like death
Creepy noises
Scariest at night
A spooky cemetery we like to visit at night for a thrill
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People who like scary stuff
Perdido cemetry Like haunted houses?
Purpose Audience Topic Hook
So this happened …What it’s like at night
If you think you are brave enough, I’ll take you there one night. We’ll see how brave you really are.”
tombstones seem to move
indentions in the ground are old caved-in graves
smells musty – rotting stuff
night sounds - owls, leaves rustling
old crumbly tombstones, falling over, stained
huge oak trees with Spanish moss
rusty metal fence with a broken gate
grass and bushes have gone wild
This happened …How it looks
Huge oak trees
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This isabout explaining:
How to do something
What something is about
Why something is important
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Caution or insight
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3Ea
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This isabout explaining:
How to do something
What something is about
Why something is important
What to do if someone is choking
State conclusionRemember, in an emergency, it may be your first-aid skills that save a life!
don’t wait too long to act
If seated, may have to stand person up
don’t be afraid or embarrassed
hold on tightly
may need to repeat several times
Caution or insight
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older kids and adults
steps to Heimlich maneuver
what if someone started choking?
people often choke on food
Heimlich
act fast
5 easy steps
remain calm
it can be gross
may seem embarrassingknowing 1st aid can save a life
stand behind the person
put your arm around person’s waist
place fist against the middle waist, just below rib cage
with other hand grab your fist
pull your fist in using a quick upward motion
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older kids and adults steps to Heimlich maneuver
Do you know how to save a friend who is choking?
Purpose Audience Topic Hook
What to do if someone is choking
people often choke on food
act fast
5 easy steps
Heimlich maneuver
remain calm
it can be gross
may seem embarrassing
knowing first aid can save a lifeState
conclusion Remember, in an emergency, it may be your first-aid skills that save a life!
stand behind the person don’t wait too long to act
put your arm around person’s waist If seated, may have to stand person up
place fist against the middle waist, just below rib cage
don’t be afraid or embarrassed
with other hand grab your fist hold on tightly
pull your fist in using a quick upward motion
may need to repeat several times
Heimlich Maneuver Do you know what to do if you are eating in the school cafeteria, or a restaurant, and your best friend chokes on a piece of hamburger? I can help you if you do not know what to do. Knowing first-aid is really important and the steps to theHeimlich maneuver are really simple. They are easy to learn and they may save your friend’s life. The first step of the Heimlich maneuver is to stand behind the person who is choking. Now if youare in a restaurant and notice your buddy turning blue, pointing to his throat, and making a gasping sound then it is time for you to make like your favorite super hero and spring into action. Don’t wait too long to act or your friend may die! Get up from your chair and go to the choking person. Next, put your arms around the person’s waist. The right spot is just below the ribs. This is not a time to be embarrassed about how this looks to everyone else in the place. Go ahead and do this step carefully. Now, with your other hand grab your fist. Remember to hold on tightly. Finally, pull your fist in using a quick upward motion. You may have to repeat this several times for it to work. Be prepared to see a piece of really gross food go sailing through the air and to hear strange sounds coming from the person right before they start saying thank you, thank you, thank you. A few of these steps may seem embarrassing and gross but in an emergency who cares? After all, it may be your first-aid skills that saves your best friend’s or someone else’s life.
Why, become a medical ‘time bomb.’ You are not too young to take charge of your health. Your willingness to do what it takes can add years to your life.
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Explanation Explanation
Adults and teens Getting a jump on health
Are you is a medical ‘time bomb!’
Purpose Audience Topic Hook
Describe Explain
Narrative Persuade
This isabout convincing someone…
To change his/her mind about a belief
To develop a new belief about something
To take some kind of action
Call to action
What it is you are trying to convince your audience to do?
Potentially life-threatening medical problems often grow silently1
Symptoms are not always present2
Well today, seriously ill tomorrow4
Diagnose the problem in time to do something4
Most diseases start quietly1
Reason
Medical test are not 100 % accurate1
It takes millions of cancerous cells before a scanner can detect it2
Heart=blood flow must be 70% blocked before problem is detected3
Family health history4
Regular check-ups and health maintenance
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Take personal health seriouslyx
Take Personal Health Seriously
Tick, Tick, tick… Are you a medical ‘time bomb?’ Would you know it if you were? It is a scary thought, but most of us don’t know the condition of our body. We don’t have to live in ignorance. You can get a jump on your health by simply taking it seriously, practicing a little discipline, and visiting the doctor on a regular basis. Most diseases start quietly. Think of all the stories you have heard about adults and teens feeling perfectly healthy one day and seriously ill the next. It happens all the time. Many potentially life-threatening health problems grow silently in our bodies until it reaches crisis level. Victims of heart attacks and other diseases will often say that they had no warnings or symptoms. The lucky ones are diagnosed while their conditions are still treatable, but millions of Americans aren’t so fortunate. Regular check-ups and health maintenance is a must. You are probably saying to yourself, “That’s a no brainier,” but surprisingly a large number of people don’t take charge of their health. It helps to get screened for health problems, but medical tests are not 100% accurate. Millions of cancerous cells must be present in order for a scanner to detect a disease. With heart disease, many tests won’t detect a problem until blood flow is mare than 70% blocked. Is it a no win situation? Not totally. It helps to know your family medical history. Knowledge of your medical history is a heads up of sorts. It tells you if you are at risk for certain health problems, based on your daddy or grandfather’s health history. Ongoing research suggests some promising new directions for screening to detect medical problems. When detection practices improve we will look at personal health differently. Until that day arrives, I strongly encourage you to take charge of your personal health. Investigate your family medical history, and act on your findings. Willingness to do what it takes will add to the quality of your life. Tick, tick, tick… You do not have to be a medical ‘time bomb.’