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IMPROVING STUDENTS' DISCUSSION TEXT WRITING SKILLS THROUGH TEACHER INDIRECT FEEDBACK TECHNIQUE (A Classroom Action Research at the Twelfth Grade Students of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan) A SkripsiPresented to the Faculty of Tarbiyah and TeachersTraining in a Partial Fulfillment of the Requirements for the Degree of S.Pd. in the Department of English Education By Agus Sufyan NIM. 1110014000060 DEPARTMENT OF ENGLISH EDUCATION FACULTY OF TARBIYAH AND TEACHERS’ TRAINING SYARIF HIDAYATULLAH STATE ISLAMIC UNIVERSITY JAKARTA 2015

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IMPROVING STUDENTS' DISCUSSION TEXT WRITING

SKILLS THROUGH TEACHER INDIRECT FEEDBACK

TECHNIQUE

(A Classroom Action Research at the Twelfth Grade Students

of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan)

A “Skripsi”

Presented to the Faculty of Tarbiyah and Teachers’ Training

in a Partial Fulfillment of the Requirements

for the Degree of S.Pd. in the Department of English Education

By

Agus Sufyan

NIM. 1110014000060

DEPARTMENT OF ENGLISH EDUCATION

FACULTY OF TARBIYAH AND TEACHERS’ TRAINING

SYARIF HIDAYATULLAH STATE ISLAMIC UNIVERSITY

JAKARTA

2015

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IMPROVING STUDENTS' DISCUSSION TEXT WRITING

SKILLS THROUGH TEACHER INDIRECT FEEDBACK

TECHNIQUE

(A Classroom Action Research at the Twelfth Grade Students

of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan)

A “Skripsi”

Presented to the Faculty of Tarbiyah and Teachers’ Training

in a Partial Fulfillment of the Requirements

for the Degree of S.Pd. in the Department of English Education

By

Agus Sufyan

NIM. 1110014000060

Approved by:

DEPARTMENT OF ENGLISH EDUCATION

FACULTY OF TARBIYAH AND TEACHERS’ TRAINING

SYARIF HIDAYATULLAH STATE ISLAMIC UNIVERSITY

JAKARTA

2015

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ENDORSEMENT SHEET

The examination committee of the Faculty of Tarbiyah and Teachers’ Training

certifies that the “Skripsi” scientific paper entitled, Improving Students'

Discussion Text Writing Skills through Teacher Indirect Feedback Technique

(A Classroom Action Research at the Twelfth Grade Students of SMAN 8 Kota

Tangerang Selatan) written by Agus Sufyan, student’s registration number:

1110014000060, was examined by committee on March 24, 2015 and was declared

to have passed and have fulfilled one of the requirements for the degree of S.Pd. in

English language Education at the Department of English Education.

Jakarta, March 24, 2015

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SURAT PERNYATAAN KARYA ILMIAH

Yang bertanda tangan di bawah ini,

nama : Agus Sufyan

nomor induk mahasiswa : 11100140000460

jurusan/prodi : Pendidikan Bahasa Inggris

alamat : Jl. Ketimun No. 40 RT. 005/009, Kel. Pd. Cabe Ilir,

Kec. Pamulang, Kota Tangerang Selatan, Banten,

15418.

MENYATAKAN DENGAN SESUNGGUHNYA

bahwa skripsi yang berjudul Improving Students' Discussion Text Writing Skills

through Teacher Indirect Feedback Technique (A Classroom Action Research

at the Twelfth Grade Students of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan) adalah benar

hasil karya sendiri di bawah bimbingan dosen:

nama pembimbing I : 1. Dr. Alek, M.Pd.

NIP. : 19690912 200901 1 008

jurusan/ prodi : Pendidikan Bahasa Inggris

nama pembimbing II : Ummi Kultsum, M.Pd.

NIP. : 19790811 200912 2 001

jurusan/ prodi : Pendidikan Bahasa Inggris

Demikian surat peryataan ini saya buat dengan sesungguhnya dan saya siap

menerima segala konsekuensi apabila terbukti skripsi ini bukan hasil karya saya

sendiri.

Jakarta, April 2015

Yang Menyatakan

Agus Sufyan

1110014000060

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ABSTRACT

AGUS SUFYAN (1110014000060). Improving Students' Discussion Text

Writing Skills through Teacher Indirect Feedback Technique: A Classroom

Action Research at the Twelfth Grade Students of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang

Selatan. A Skripsi of Department of English Education at Faculty of Tarbiyah and

Teachers’ Training of Syarif Hidayatullah State Islamic University Jakarta, 2015.

Advisors: Dr. Alek, M.Pd. and Ummi Kultsum, M.Pd.

Keywords: Teacher Indirect Feedback, Writing, Discussion Text.

The aim of this research was to find out whether teacher indirect feedback improve

students of XII IPA 4’s writing skills of discussion texts. The subjects of this

research were 31 students. The method used in this research was Classroom Action

Research (CAR). This research was conducted by following procedures of the

action research: planning, acting, observing, and reflecting. This research was

conducted in two cycles consisted of three meetings per each. The data were gained

through qualitative and quantitative methods. Research instruments used in this

research were pre-interview guide, observation sheets, observation journals,

questionnaire sheets, and tests. The results of the research showed that there was

improvement on the students’ discussion text writing skills. Gradually, students’

achievement and attitude towards the implementation of the research increased. In

pre-action, students’ mean score was only 72.1 and only 11 students who could pass

the minimum mastery criterion (75). However, there was significant improvement

that in the first cycle, the mean score was 84.74, and that of the second cycle was

87.19. Moreover, the number of students who could pass the minimum mastery

criterion also increased that all students could pass it. Besides of that, based on the

result of observation, the class condition in first cycle was still categorized as Good.

However, it meant that there had to be some aspects that had not yet been solved.

Then, in the next cycle, the aspects that needed solving could be solved and the

class condition could be categorized as Very Good. In conclusion, the classroom

action research and teacher indirect feedback technique could improve both

students’ achievement and participation in the classroom.

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ABSTRAK

AGUS SUFYAN (1110014000060). Improving Students' Discussion Text

Writing Skills through Teacher Indirect Feedback Technique: A Classroom

Action Research at the Twelfth Grade Students of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan.

Skripsi Jurusan Pendidikan Bahasa Inggris, Fakultas Ilmu Tarbiyah dan Keguruan,

Universitas Islam Negeri Syarif Hidayatullah Jakarta, 2015.

Pembimbing: Dr. Alek, M.Pd. and Ummi Kultsum, M.Pd.

Kata Kunci: Teacher Indirect Feedback, Menulis, Teks Diskusi.

Tujuan dari penelitian ini adalah untuk mengetahui apakah teacher indirect

feedback meningkatkan kemampuan menulis teks diskusi siswa kelas XII IPA 4.

Subjek penelitian ini adalah 31 siswa. Metode yang digunakan dalam penelitian ini

adalah Penelitian Tindakan Kelas (PTK). Penelitian ini dilakukan dengan

mengikuti prosedur dalam penelitian tindakan, seperti: perencanaan, pelaksanaan

tindakan, pengamatan, dan perefleksian. Penelitian ini dilakukan dalam dua siklus

yang terdiri dari tiga pertemuan untuk tiap siklusnya. Data-data dikumpulkan

melalui metode kualitatif dan kuantitatif. Instrument penelitian yang digunakan

dalam penelitian ini adalah pedoman wawancara, lembar observasi, jurnal

observasi, lembar kuesioner, dan tes. Hasil dari penelitian menunjukan bahwa

terdapat peningkatan pada kemampuan menulis teks diskusi siswa. Secara bertahap,

raihan dan perilaku siswa terhadap pelaksanaan penelitian meningkat. Pada tahap

pre-action, rata-rata nilai siswa adalah 72,1 dan hanya 11 siswa saja yang mampu

melewati kriteria ketuntasan minimal (75). Akan tetapi, pada siklus pertama dan

kedua terdapat peningkatan yang signifikan, rata-rata nilai siswa pada siklus

pertama adalah 84,74, dan pada siklus kedua adalah 87,19. Selain itu, jumlah siswa

yang dapat melewati kriteria ketuntasan minimal juga meningkat, semua siswa

berhasil melewati kriteria tersebut. Selain itu, berdasarkan hasil observasi, kondisi

kelas pada siklus pertama dapat dikategorikan sebagai Baik. Akan tetapi, ada

beberapa aspek yang belum dapat diatasi. Kemudian, pada siklus kedua, aspek-

aspek tersebut dapat diatasi dan keadaan kelas pun dapat dikategorikan sebagai

Sangat Baik. Sebagai kesimpulan, penelitian tindakan kelas dan teknik teacher

indirect feedback dapat meningkatkan pencapaian dan juga partisipasi siswa di

dalam kelas.

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ACKNOWLEDGEMENT

In the name of Allah, the Beneficent, the Merciful.

All Praise be to Allah, who has blessed the writer in completing this paper.

Sholawat and Salam are given upon our prophet Muhammad SAW who has guided

us to the truth way and brought us to the real light of life.

The writer is extremely grateful to the Almighty ALLAH. He has blessed

her with his power and strength at all times until he can accomplish this Skripsi.

Without his blessing, the writer realises that he is not able to accomplish this

Skripsi.

His special gratitude goes to his beloved parents, Satori and Suniah, for their

all everlasting support and help all the time. Besides of that, he would like to express

his gratitude and give his best appreciation to:

1. All lecturers of the Department of English Education at Syarif Hidayatullah

State Islamic University Jakarta.

2. Nasrun Mahmud, M.Pd., and Nida Husna, M.Pd., M.A., TESOL. as the

advisors, for the guidance and advice.

3. Dr. Alek, M.Pd. and Ummi Kultsum, M.Pd. for their time, guidance,

correction, and suggestion.

4. Drs. Syauki, M.Pd. as the chairman of the Department of English Education.

5. Zaharil Anasy, M.Hum. as the secretary of the Department of English

Education, and also as the academic advisor.

6. Nurlena Rifa’i, MA., Ph.D., as the previous Dean of the Faculty of Tarbiyah

and Teachers’ Training.

7. Prof. Dr. A. Thib Raya, MA, as the newest Dean of the Faculty of Tarbiyah

and Teachers’ Training.

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8. Imam Supingi, S.Pd., MM., as the headmaster of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang

Selatan.

9. Irmawati, S.Ag., as the English teacher at SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan

for her help help during the research.

10. Other parties that have given helps, supports, and suggestions in finishing

this paper.

May this paper be useful to the readers, particularly to the writer. Also, the

writer realizes that this paper is far from being perfect. It is a pleasure for him to

receive constructive criticism and suggestion from anyone who reads his Skripsi.

Jakarta, April 2015

Agus Sufyan

1110014000060

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TABLE OF CONTENT

APPROVAL SHEET ........................................................................................ i

ENDORSEMENT SHEET ............................................................................... ii

STATEMENT OF AUTHENTICITY ............................................................. iii

ABSTRACT ....................................................................................................... iv

ACKNOWLEDGEMENT ................................................................................ vi

TABLE OF CONTENT .................................................................................... viii

LIST OF TABLES ............................................................................................ xi

LIST OF FIGURES .......................................................................................... xii

LIST OF APPENDICES .................................................................................. xiii

CHAPTER I INTRODUCTION

A. Background of the Research ................................................... 1

B. Identification of the Problem .................................................. 4

C. Limitation of the Research ...................................................... 4

D. Formulation of the Research ................................................... 5

E. Objective of the Research ....................................................... 5

F. Significance of the Research ................................................... 5

CHAPTER II THEORETICAL FRAMEWORK

A. Discussion Text Writing ....................................................... 6

1. Definition of Discussion Text ........................................... 6

2. Purpose of Discussion Text ............................................... 7

3. Generic Structure of Discussion Text................................ 7

4. Language Features of Discussion Text .............................. 8

5. Points to note in writing discussion text ............................ 8

B. Teacher Indirect Feedback .................................................. 10

1. Definition of Teacher Feedback ...................................... 10

2. Indirect Feedback ............................................................ 11

3. Benefits of Teacher Indirect Feedback ............................ 11

4. How to Give Indirect Feedback ....................................... 12

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C. Procedure in Applying Teacher Indirect Feedback Technique

in Teaching Discussion Text Writing to XII IPA 4 Students of

SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan ...................................... 14

CHAPTER III RESEARCH METHODOLOGY

A. Place and Time of the Research ........................................ 16

B. Method of the Research ..................................................... 16

1. Planning Phase ............................................................... 17

2. Acting Phase .................................................................. 17

3. Observing Phase ............................................................. 18

4. Reflecting Phase ............................................................. 18

C. Subject of the Research...................................................... 18

D. Researcher’s Role in the Research .................................... 19

E. Instrument of the Research ................................................ 19

1. Pre-Interview Guide ....................................................... 19

2. Observation Sheets ......................................................... 19

3. Observation Journals ...................................................... 20

4. Questionnaire Sheets ...................................................... 20

5. Tests ............................................................................... 21

F. Data Collecting Technique ................................................. 21

1. Interview ........................................................................ 21

2. Observation .................................................................... 21

3. Questionnaire ................................................................. 22

4. Test ................................................................................. 22

G. Data Analysing Technique ................................................ 22

H. Trustworthiness ................................................................. 26

I. Criteria of Success............................................................... 27

CHAPTER IV RESEARCH FINDINGS AND INTERPRETATION

A. Research Findings .............................................................. 28

1. Findings before the Implementation of CAR ................. 28

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a. Result of Interview .................................................... 28

b. Result of Pre-Observation ......................................... 29

c. Pre-Action Test .......................................................... 31

2. Findings during the Implementation of CAR ................ 33

a. Cycle 1 ....................................................................... 33

1) Planning ................................................................ 33

2) Acting ................................................................... 33

3) Observing .............................................................. 34

4) Reflecting .............................................................. 40

b. Cycle 2 ....................................................................... 41

1) Planning ................................................................ 41

2) Acting ................................................................... 41

3) Observing .............................................................. 42

4) Reflecting .............................................................. 48

3. Findings after the Implementation of CAR.................... 48

a. Result of Questionnaire Sheets .................................. 49

b. Result of Writing Tests Score.................................... 50

B. Interpretation of the Results ............................................... 52

CHAPTER V CONCLUSION AND SUGGESTION

A. Conclusion ............................................................................ 54

B. Suggestion ............................................................................. 54

REFERENCES .................................................................................................. 55

APPENDICES ................................................................................................... 58

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LIST OF TABLES

Table 3.1: Blueprint of Observation Journal ..................................................... 20

Table 3.2: Specification of Questionnaire......................................................... 20

Table 3.3: Likert Rating Score, Adapted from Sugiono ................................... 23

Table 3.4: Rubric of Observation Sheets .......................................................... 23

Table 3.5: Score Interpretation Criteria, Adapted from Riduwan and

Sunarto ............................................................................................. 24

Table 3.6: Analytical Scoring Rubric ............................................................... 25

Table 4.1: Results of Pre-Observation Sheets ................................................... 29

Table 4.2: Students’ Pre-Action Writing Test Scores ....................................... 31

Table 4.3: Results of Observation Sheets of Cycle I ........................................ 36

Table 4.4: Description of the Codes in Table 4.3 ............................................. 38

Table 4.5: Students’ Post-Action I Writing Test Scores ................................... 39

Table 4.6: Results of Observation Sheets of Cycle II ....................................... 44

Table 4.7: Description of the Codes in Table 4.6 ............................................. 46

Table 4.8: Students’ Post-Action II Writing Test Scores ................................. 47

Table 4.9: Results of Questionnaire Sheets about Students’ Responses

toward the Implementation of Teacher Indirect Feedback .............. 49

Table 4.10: The Comparison of Students’ Writing Scores of Pre-Action Test,

Post-Action Test I, and Post-Action Test II .................................... 50

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LIST OF FIGURES

Figure 2.1: Underlining Errors .......................................................................... 12

Figure 2.2: Describing Errors ........................................................................... 13

Figure 2.3: Underlining and Describing Errors ................................................ 13

Figure 2.4: Correction Symbols ........................................................................ 14

Figure 3.1: A Modified Kurt Lewin’s Classroom Action Research Design ..... 17

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LIST OF APPENDICES

Appendix 1: Students’ Name ............................................................................ 58

Appendix 2: Interview Guide and Results ........................................................ 59

Appendix 3: Observation Sheets of Pre-Action ................................................ 64

Appendix 4: Observation Journal of Pre-Action .............................................. 67

Appendix 5: Pre-Action Test Scores ................................................................. 68

Appendix 6: Lesson Plan of Cycle 1 ................................................................. 70

Appendix 7: Observation Sheets of Post-Action 1 ........................................... 91

Appendix 8: Observation Journal of Post-Action 1 .......................................... 100

Appendix 9: Post-Action 1 Test Scores ............................................................ 103

Appendix 10: Lesson Plan of Cycle 2 ................................................................. 105

Appendix 11: Observation Sheets of Post-Action 2 ........................................... 121

Appendix 12: Observation Journal of Post-Action 2 .......................................... 130

Appendix 13: Post-Action 2 Test Scores ............................................................ 134

Appendix 14: Grid of Questionnaire Items ......................................................... 136

Appendix 15: Results of Questionnaire .............................................................. 139

Appendix 16: Documentation (Photos) .............................................................. 140

Appendix 17: Surat Bimbingan Skripsi .............................................................. 142

Appendix 18: Surat Keterangan Penelitian dari Sekolah ................................... 144

Appendix 19: Correction Symbols ...................................................................... 145

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CHAPTER I

INTRODUCTION

This chapter presents and discusses background of the research,

identification of the problem, limitation of the research, formulation of the research,

objective of the research, and significance of the research.

A. Background of the Research

As one of language skills taught, learnt, and specifically categorized as one of

productive skills, writing is described as a skill including many exercises to develop

and not as a completely gifted skill.1 It means that the ability to write well can

actually be achieved through many repetitions, trials and errors, and also

reinforcement.

However, writing does not seem to be as easy as it is said. When we speak,

using our body movements or managing our voices may easily help us explain what

we are intended to say. However, though we would like to say the same words we

produce orally, we need some practices in writing as we can only use some

mechanisms, such as punctuation, word order, etc., to help us deliver what we

mean.2 Thus, our ability to use those mechanisms can be very important as we do

not want our readers to misinterpret what we write.

In Indonesia, there are several types of writing that should be learnt by senior

high students, such as, procedure, descriptive, narrative, recount, report, review,

news item, analytical exposition, hortatory exposition, spoof, explanation, and

discussion.3 It means that there are so many kinds of text that should be taught in

senior high level. Specifically, from four types of text (narrative, explanation,

review, and discussion) taught in the third grade, discussion text is one of the types

that should be learnt. Discussion text is a kind of texts that provides two contrastive

1 Alan Meyers, Gateways to Academic Writing, (New York: Addison Wesley Longman, 2003),

p. 2. 2 James C. Raymond, Writing is an Unnatural Act, (New York: Harper & Row Publishers, Inc.,

1980), p. 3. 3 Standar Isi Untuk Satuan Pendidikan Dasar dan Menengah: Standar Kompetensi dan

Kompetensi Dasar SMA/MA, (Jakarta: BSNP, 2006), p. 126.

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arguments about the topic and allows reader to have two contrastive viewpoints.4

Thus, readers will not be persuaded to be at one side before informed about another

side.

However, discussion text is a difficult material to learn. The results of interview

with the teacher showed that in writing discussion text5, the first problem mentioned

by the teacher was that the students sometimes had not yet been interested to find

out the data to support the arguments soon; they preferred talking and joking with

their friends until the class ended. They argued that they were depressed while

working under pressure, and needed a lot of time to get the inspiration and the data

needed. Those are why they found it hard to collect their work in the end of the

meeting. Thus, the teacher sometimes were sometimes hard to directly correct their

work. Secondly, after the writing tasks became a homework, the teacher found that

the students had not yet put their best performance in their writing. They put little

attention about what they wrote which led to some problems such as, grammatical

errors. It is true that they had not yet interested in writing because of its complexity.

Thus, there were so many students that were hard to achieve Minimum Mastery

Criterion (KKM) made by the teacher. Lastly, the teacher said that it had been so

hard when her students asked her to give them reasons for their score since she just

gave them the score without any comments or feedback. Moreover, she argued that

it took a lot of time to give them comments to each work since she taught more than

three class a week. As a result, students became unmotivated since some of them

felt like they were hard to have clear direction about how to write well, and some

others felt like their teacher had not yet found appropriate techniques to improve

their skills.

Moreover, while doing pre-observation, findings showed that some students

sitting in the first two front rows seriously did the test. However, those sitting in the

next rows should always be supervised. Besides of that, four students in the right

corner preferred to play games on their smartphone than to do the test. Moreover,

4 Th. M. Sudarwati and Eudia Grace, Look Ahead: An English Course for Senior High

School Students Year XII, (Jakarta: Penerbit Erlangga, 2007), p. 122. 5 See Appendix 2.

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five female students sitting in the third and fourth row near the door liked to chat

during the test. Lastly, some students tended to do the test with their friends in group

rather than work individually. In conclusion, generally, they are diligent enough in

doing the test though some of them really needed supervising.6

In addition, after conducting pre-action test, twenty students failed to meet the

KKM.7 It means that students’ achievement in writing needed increasing. For all

those findings, the writer considered that students’ writing skills should be

increased through appropriate techniques.

As teacher said that she did not provide students revising activities, then

students did not have chance to enhance their writing. Thus, providing feedback is

hoped that it may help students improve their skills. A study by Ferris also proved

that, in helping students enhance their writing skills, almost all students believe that

teacher feedback is really helpful as it provides information related to their writing.8

However, giving feedback by putting comments to writing assignment is

seemed to be so hard for the teacher since it is going to consume time as she teaches

more than two classes which consist of, at least, 30 students per each. Thus, teacher

indirect feedback can be one of the solutions to solve the problems of, firstly, the

teacher as it takes less time, and of, secondly, students’ writing skills.

To make it clear, some previous studies have proven the benefits of teacher

indirect feedback. For example, Lalande’s study shows that the number of students

from experimental group, who believes that the technique enhances their writing

skill, is more than those of control group provided direct correction. Besides more

than fifty percent of the students in experimental group agree that revising their

writing increase their writing skills.9 Moreover, Chandler’s study, using the terms

of “Correcting” as direct correction and “Underlining” as indirect correction, shows

that indirect correction is useful to improve more to students’ accuracy, benefits

teacher for the time to provide feedback, and makes students be more engaged in

6 See Appendix 4 7 See Appendix 5 8 Dana R. Ferris, Student Reactions to Teacher Response in Multiple-Draft Composition

Classrooms, TESOL QUARTERLY, 29(1), 1995, p. 46. 9 J. F. Lalande, Reducing composition errors: An experiment, Modern Language Journal,

66(2), 1982, p. 145.

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learning.10 Lastly, the study, conducted by Ferris as cited in Purnawarman shows

that students’ success in revising their essays is greatly influenced by the feedback

indirectly given by the teacher.11

Based on the preceding studies above, the writer believed that teacher indirect

feedback could help students solve the problems in writing discussion text. Thus,

from all the explanation above, the writer conducted research on the title: Improving

Students' Discussion Text Writing Skills through Teacher Indirect Feedback

Technique.

B. Identification of the Problem

Based on the background above, the identified problems were:

1. Students were hard to finish the writing tasks given by the teacher in a short

time.

2. Students preferred talking and joking with their peers than showing their

effort to do the task given by the teacher.

3. Students had not yet interested in writing.

4. The teacher had not yet found appropriate techniques to improve students'

writing skills.

5. The teacher found it difficult to give students feedback whenever she

assessed their work.

6. The teacher only focused on scoring, but set aside feedback.

C. Limitation of the Research

This study was focused on the improvement on students’ writing of discussion

text by applying teacher indirect feedback technique in the class of XII IPA 4 at

SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan, Banten.

10 J. Chandler, The efficacy of various kinds of error feedback for improvement in the

accuracy and fluency of L2 student writing, Journal of Second Language Writing, 12, 2003, p. 293. 11 Pupung Purnawarman, “Impacts of Different Types of Teacher Corrective Feedback in

Reducing Grammatical Errors on ESL/EFL Students’ Writing”, Dissertation in Virginia Polytechnic

Institute and State University, Virginia, 2011, p. 28, published.

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D. Formulation of the Research

Based on the research focus above, the questions of the research formulated was

“Does teacher indirect feedback improve students of XII IPA 4’s writing skills of

discussion text?”

E. Objective of the Research

The objective of this research was to find out whether teacher indirect feedback

improve students of XII IPA 4’s writing skills of discussion texts.

F. Significance of the Research

Some significances of this research, not only theoretically but also

practically, go to:

1. Teacher, it helps the English teacher to solve the problems in teaching

writing of discussion text, to choose appropriate technique in teaching

writing discussion text, and also to improve students' skills in writing,

especially in writing of discussion text.

2. Students, it helps them to improve their writing skills, to achieve standard

minimum score at least, and to give them clear reasons about their

improvement.

3. SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan, it can be beneficial regarding to improve

the education quality.

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CHAPTER II

THEORETICAL FRAMEWORK

This chapter discusses definition of discussion text, purpose of discussion text,

generic structure of discussion text, language features of discussion text, points to

note in writing discussion text, definition of teacher feedback, indirect feedback,

benefits of teacher indirect feedback, how to give indirect feedback, procedure in

applying teacher indirect feedback technique in teaching discussion text writing to

XII IPA 4 students of SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan.

A. Discussion Text Writing

1. Definition of Discussion Text

Generally, discussion text can be defined as a text that provides two contrastive

arguments on issue to inform readers about what is being discussed. It supported by

Mulya who defines discussion text as “a text which presents a problematic

discourse discussed from different viewpoints.”1

Unlike a persuasive text designed to convey reasons of a subject and get

audiences' acceptance about those reasons,2 in writing discussion text, writers are

required to be fair in presenting arguments or, in other words, the writer should

cover the arguments of the problems on both sides. The arguments in this kind of

text usually show each strength and weakness of a subject to give readers broader

insights before they make any decisions. However, not only strengths and

weaknesses, Anderson and Anderson also show other contrastive views in this kind

of text, for example: the positive and the negative, etc.3

Thus, the writer should be balance when providing their contrastive arguments

though, in the end, she or he would decide at one side. Moreover, if so, then, as

Crusius and Channell states that, for all those arguments, it allows both side to get

1 Eka Mulya Astuti, English Zone for Senior High School Students Year XII, (Jakarta:

Penerbit Erlangga, 2010), p. 81 2 Betty Mattix Dietsch, Reasoning & Writing Well: A Rhetoric, Research Guide, Reader,

and Handbook, (Ohio: Marion Technical College, 2006), Fourth Edition, p. 7. 3 Mark Anderson and Kathy Anderson, Text Types in English, (Melbourne: MacMillan

Education Australia PTY LTD., 1998), Third Edition, p. 19.

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acceptance about other side’s view and to make a general agreement about the issue

which is shared to all the parties.4

2. Purpose of Discussion Text

The main purpose of discussion text is, indeed, to discuss about the two different

arguments on an issue. As stated by Anderson and Anderson that showing readers

an issue with two contrastive points of view is the main purpose of discussion text.5

Besides, another purpose of this text stated by Sudarwati and Grace is that, in

making reasonable decision, readers are firstly provided many information related

to some points of view about the issue debated.6

Thus, for all those purposes, it can be concluded that the main purpose of

discussion text is to providing different viewpoints to enable readers to be informed

about the issue discussed.

3. Generic Structure of Discussion Text

According to Warner, discussion text has three main parts, they are:

a. Statement: in this part, outlining the subject should be done by the writers in

order to give readers boundaries about what is going to discuss.

b. Arguments: while providing or listing the arguments, writers should put the

arguments of both sides. Thus, to make it balance, writers are not allowed to

take his position on the arguments.

c. Conclusion: in this part, the writers are required to sum up all the arguments

and are allowed to choose his/her preference. 7

Though Anderson and Anderson’s generic structure is the same as Warner’s,

they differ only in conclusion that it allows writer to decide his/her position in the

4 Timothy W. Crusius and Carolyn E. Channel, The Aims of Argument: A Text and Reader,

(New York: McGraw-Hill, 2006), p. 17. 5 Anderson and Anderson, loc. cit. 6 Th. M. Sudarwati and Eudia Grace, Look Ahead: An English Course for Senior High

School Students Year XII, (Jakarta: Penerbit Erlangga, 2007), p. 122 7 Margaret Warner, More Easy Text Types: Text Types for Students who Have Little or No

Experience of English, (Perth: Ready-Ed Publications, 2009), p. 6

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subject.8 Moreover, Mulya’s is also different as she states that the last paragraph

can be used to give readers suggestion from the writers’ view.9

4. Language Features of Discussion Text

Accrording to Sudarwati and Grace, below are the features in a discussion

text:10

a. We may use general nouns to discuss, such as, smoking, abortion, etc.;

b. Thinking verbs may also help us show our emotion, such as, think, believe,

hope, etc. (For example: ‘I believe that….’);

c. To make a good transition, me may use some connectives, such as in addition,

furthermore, although, however, on contrary, because, because of, etc. (For

example: ‘However, there are also disadvantages such as the cost.’);

d. Using modalities, such as, must, should, etc., can also strengthen our points (For

example: ‘For all those reasons, we must do some action.’)

5. Points to Note in Writing Discussion Text

In writing discussion text, we have to consider these following considerations:11

a. When deciding what the title is, we can use a question to be the title of the essay;

b. Before going further to the discussion, we should lead readers to the discussion,

for example, by providing the background of the issue;

c. When providing arguments, we should support them with reasons and evidence;

d. We are not supposed to see the arguments only on one side;

e. By using modal verbs, we can make our reason stronger;

f. If we would like to favour one side in this discussion, reasons should also be provided;

g. Or if we would like to be fair, ensure that we are fair enough to both sides.

8 Anderson and Anderson, op. cit., p. 20. 9 Mulya, loc. cit. 10 Sudarwati and Grace, loc. cit. 11 Progression in Discussion Texts, https://www.babcock-

education.co.uk/ldp/do_download.asp?did=303763, retrieved on March 2015.

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Below is the example of discussion text about the pros and cons:12

Mobile Phones: Good or Bad?

Everywhere you go nowadays, you see people

using mobile phones. From school children to retired

people, you see them talking in the supermarket, on

trains, in the street, everywhere! So what are the

advantages of mobile phones?

First of all, they are very convenient because

you can phone from nearly anywhere. Another

advantage is that they are really useful in emergency

situations. For example, if you are alone in your car

and it breaks down, you can get help quickly. In

addition, you can also use your mobile to text your

friends or connect to the Net.

However, there are also disadvantages such as

the cost. Mobile phone calls cost more than normal

calls. Furthermore, it can be annoying if you are on a

train or a bus and you have to listen to someone else’s

boring conversation. Finally, people can contact you

anywhere, at any time, unless you switch your phone

off!

In conclusion, there are both advantages and

disadvantages. Personally, I feel mobile phones are a

good thing because they give us more freedom and

make communication easier.

12 Achmad Doddy, Ahmad Sugeng, and Effendi, Developing English Competencies for

Senior High School (SMA/MA), (Jakarta: Pusat Perbukuan, Departemen Pendidikan Nasional,

2008), p. 74.

Write the

subject

of the essay/ discussion

First, write a

general

introduction

to the subject

of the

discussion.

In the second

and third

paragraphs,

introduce and

present the

advantage and

disadvantage.

Try to give

examples.

Use linking

words like

First of all to

present the

advantage/

disadvantage

Use words

like

However to

introduce a

contrast and

In

conclusion

to introduce

the

summary.

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B. Teacher Indirect Feedback

1. Definition of Teacher Feedback

In the teaching and learning of language, feedback, indeed, takes an important

role related to the improvement of students' language learning process. Thus,

teachers can use feedback to give their students clear directions of what they have

to improve, of why they have to improve, and of how to improve their skills. The

statement is supported by Lewis who defines feedback in two perspectives. Firstly,

teacher may define feedback as a tool to provide them information about students’

progress and also evaluation of their own teaching. Secondly, Lewis states that

students see feedback as the comments giving them information what their strength

and weakness are, why they are wrong, and what to improve.13 It can be concluded

that both teacher and students need feedback as the bridge for informing the

ongoing process to achieve the learning goals.

In addition, Lewis’ statement about defining feedback based on students’ view

is also supported by Ur as cited in Srichanyachon who defines feedback as the way

teacher provides learner the information related to their learning activities in order

to develop their skills.14 Moreover, Brookhart adds that feedback is a component in

formative assessment informing students’ activities they are doing and helping

students decide fresh targets and plans to achieve their goals.15 It means that by

getting feedback, students can be more evaluative about their effort in achieving

their goals of learning.

It can be concluded that, generally, feedback is a mean or tool used by the

teacher to inform students’ learning performances, process, and progress in

achieving the goal of the learning.

13 Marilyn Lewis, Giving Feedback in Language Classes, (Singapore: SEAMEO Regional

Language Centre, 2002), p. 3. 14 Napaporn Srichanyachon, Teacher Written Feedback for L2 Learners’ Writing

Development, Silpakorn University Journal of Social Sciences, Humanities, and Arts, 12 (1), 2012,

p. 8. 15 Susan M. Brookhart, How to Give Effective Feedback to Your Students, (Virginia:

Association for Supervision and Curriculum Development (ASCD), 2008), pp. 1—2.

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2. Indirect Feedback

Based on the form of feedback, Lee divides feedback into two kinds; direct and

indirect. Direct error feedback or overt correction is provided when the teacher

writes the correct form on the student’s paper, while indirect error feedback is

provided when the teacher indicates the location of the error on the paper without

providing the correct form.16 In other words, Ferris adds that indirect feedback is

only “letting the writer know that there is a problem but leaving it for students to

solve it.”17 Napaporn also states that when giving indirect feedback, errors are

underlined and codes or symbols are used to indicate the type of errors.18 It means

that indirect feedback can be done by using codes representing a specific kind of

error.

For all those explanations, it can be concluded that teacher indirect feedback is

one of corrective feedbacks providing indications of errors students make by using

codes but leaving no correct answer in order to let students correct by themselves.

3. Benefits of Teacher Indirect Feedback

As one of written corrective feedback, indirect feedback is assumed that it can

bring more benefits to students’ writing development. Results from Chandler study

show that indirect correction is useful to improve more to students’ accuracy,

benefits teacher for the time to provide feedback, and makes students be more

engaged in learning.19 It means that indirect feedback can involve students from the

writing process until finishing process, besides it saves teachers’ time, too.

Moreover, indirect feedback may also bring an effect to students’ long-term

memory and decrease the number of errors as supported by Purnawarman in his

study who states that indirect feedback strengthens students’ memory for longer

16 Icy Lee, Error Correction in L2 Secondary Writing Classrooms: The case of Hong Kong,

Journal of Second Language Writing, 13, 2004, p. 286. 17 Dana Ferris and Barrie Roberts, (2001), “Error Feedback in L2 Writing Classes: How

Explicit Does It Need to Be?”, in Paul Kei Matsuda, et al., Second-Language Writing in the

Composition Classroom, (Boston: Bredford/St. Martin’s, 2006), p. 382.. 18 Srichanyachon, op. cit., p. 10. 19 J. Chandler, The efficacy of various kinds of error feedback for improvement in the

accuracy and fluency of L2 student writing, Journal of Second Language Writing, 12, 2003, p. 293.

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period of time and brings greater opportunity to the desired result, such as

decreasing students’ errors.20 Moreover, by using the terms “guided learning” and

“problem solving”, Corder as cited in Lalande states that indirect feedback could

be more instructional for both learner and teacher as discovering the correct answer

is done by the learner.21

4. How to Give Indirect Feedback

In giving indirect feedback to the errors students make, as in Chandler’s study,

there are three kinds of teacher indirect feedback that can be used. They are

underlining, describing, or underlining and describing, such as the figures below:22

Figure 2.1

Underlining Errors

20 Pupung Purnawarman, “Impacts of Different Types of Teacher Corrective Feedback in

Reducing Grammatical Errors on ESL/EFL Students’ Writing”, Dissertation in Virginia Polytechnic

Institute and State University, Virginia, 2011, p. ii—iii, published. 21 J. F. Lalande, Reducing composition errors: An experiment, Modern Language Journal,

66(2), 1982, p. 140. 22 J. Chandler, op.cit., p. 282—283.

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Figure 2.2

Describing Errors

Figure 2.3

Underlining and Describing Errors

Moreover, Oshima and Hogue add by providing correction symbols which

consist of underlines and codes, such as the figure below:23

23 Alice Oshima and Ann Hogue, Introduction to Academic Writing, (New York: Addison

Wesley Longman, 1997), Second Edition, p. 217—218.

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Figure 2.4

Correction Symbols

C. Procedure in Applying Teacher Indirect Feedback Technique in

Teaching Discussion Text Writing to XII IPA 4 Students of

SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan

In this study, teacher indirect feedback technique to improve students’

discussion text writing achievement by following the procedures below. The

researcher, as the teacher:

1. Delivers the materials about discussion text and how to make the

framework. The teacher teaches the materials related to the definition,

purposes, structure of discussion text. Moreover, students are also taught to

make the framework of discussion essay.

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2. Introduces teacher indirect feedback technique. Teacher explains what

teacher indirect feedback technique is, how to do the technique, and also what

the codes mean.

3. Provides students topics to write: teacher provides students some topics that

whether they may choose themselves or are chosen by the teacher.

4. Asks students to make a framework of their own writing. Students are asked

to make a framework in order to help them elaborate their writing. Students

does not have to submit the framework but should have it when they want to

elaborate their writing.

5. Provides students the writing sheets. The writing sheets are provided by the

teacher in order to make it simple to correct and to score students’ writing.

6. Asks students to elaborate their writing. After they have got their paper, then

they should elaborate their framework into a four-paragraph discussion essay.

7. Asks them to confirm or recheck their writing. Before students submit their

writing, teacher allows students to ensure that their writing is good enough

8. Asks them to submit their writing. After they have rechecked their writing,

students should submit their writing. It is supposed to be on the same day.

9. Provides them feedback by underlining and giving codes. After they have

submitted their writing, then teacher provides them the indirect feedback by

putting underlines and codes to wrong or inappropriate words.

10. Explains the codes to the students. In the next meeting, teacher gives students’

paper back and then explain what codes mean and what to do.

11. Asks them to revise their paper. After explaining the codes, teacher asks

students to revise their writing. In this part, students are still allowed to elaborate

their writing besides revise their writing.

12. Provides them suggestion and explanation. While revising, teacher also

provides them some suggestion about what they have to do.

13. Asks them to submit their revision. Students are asked to submit their revised

writing.

14. Scores and evaluates their writing. Teacher scores students’ writing by using

analytical scoring rubric.

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CHAPTER III

RESEARCH METHODOLOGY

This chapter presents the description of the research method used in this study,

including place and time of the research, method and design of the research, subject

of the research, researcher’s role in the research, , instrument of the research, data

collecting technique, data analysing technique, trustworthiness, and criteria of

success.

A. Place and Time of the Research

The research took place in SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan, located at Jl.

Cirendeu Raya No. 5, Kota Tangerang Selatan, Banten, 15419. Moreover, the

research was conducted only on Tuesday and Wednesday for approximately a

month, which was started from January 6th until February 10th, 2015.

B. Method of the Research

The method used in this research was Classroom Action Research (CAR). The

rationale behind the application of this method is because, firstly, there were

problems in the classroom, and it should be solved. Secondly, students’

improvement was also needed to succeed the learning process. Lastly, the teacher’s

ability in teaching this subject needed improving.

The Classroom Action Research (CAR) procedures used in this research was

Kurt Lewin's design. Among several designs that could be used in classroom action

research, Lewin’s design was more comprehensible and understandable for the

researcher. Moreover, generally, Kurt Lewin's design consists of cycles having four

phases per each. The phases are planning, acting, observing, and reflecting. The

figure below represents the cycles of Kurt Lewin's design:

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Figure 3.1

A Modified Kurt Lewin’s Classroom Action Research Design1

To make them clear about what happens in each phase, below is the explanation

about each phase:

1. Planning Phase

In the beginning, after identifying and diagnosing students’ writing problems

occurred in the class proven by interviewing the teacher, observing the class, and

conducting the test, some plans related to how to solve the problems in the

classroom were made. The plans in this planning phase included designing lesson

plan, determining technique, preparing materials and media, and determining

criteria of success.

The organized planning was formed into lesson plan which was, then,

implemented to the students. Post-action tests were also prepared in order to know

whether there were some improvements on the students’ score achievement from

each test.

2. Acting Phase

This phase was the implementation of planning phase contents. In this phase,

the lesson plan made was implemented. In the first meeting, pre-action test was

conducted to know students’ writing skills before teacher indirect feedback was

implemented. Besides of that, it was also used to analyse the average number of

1 M. Djunaidi Ghony, Penelitian Tindakan Kelas, (Malang: UIN-Malang Press, 2008), p.

64.

Observing

Planning

Reflecting

Cycle

Acting

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words students could produce. Moreover, after the average number of words had

been counted, then the range number of words students should be produced in the

next tests were standardised.

In each cycle, three meetings were needed. The first cycle was conducted to

deliver some materials needing achieving. Then, the second meeting was used to

conduct the tests. After the data had been collected, then feedback was given on

students’ paper. Lastly, the third meeting was used to revise their writing that

teacher had put feedback on.

3. Observing Phase

In this phase, observation toward implementation of the action was carried out

by using observation sheets and observation journals. In this phase, the data derived

from evaluation or post-action tests were also collected in order to know the

changes made by the implementation of the action toward the subject of the

research.

4. Reflecting Phase

This phase was aimed to reflect the completely-done action in one cycle based

on collected data. It is necessary to hold evaluation to discuss further about what

had and had not yet been achieved. Thus, the scope of reflection in this research

involve analysing, synthesising, and assessing collected data. This phase, then,

determined the next plan, including what to do in the next cycle. Furthermore, when

one cycle had not yet met the requirements of what to achieve, the next cycle should

be able to cover them.

C. Subject of the Research

The subject of the research was the students at XII IPA 4 class of SMA Negeri

8 Kota Tangerang Selatan, academic year 2014/2015. There were 14 male students

and 17 female students in the classroom.

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D. Researcher’s Role in the Research

In this research, the role of researcher was not only as the researcher, but also

as a lesson planner, a teacher, and a test maker collecting, analysing, and reporting

the results of the study.

E. Instruments of the Research

The instruments of this research were divided into two kinds. The first was non-

test instrument including pre-interview guide, observation sheets, observation

journals, and questionnaire sheets. Then, the rest was test.

1. Pre-Interview Guide

The unstructured interview was done before implementing the CAR in order to

deeply analyse the problems faced by the teachers and related to the class situation,

students’ achievement, and also students’ and teachers’ attitude toward the teaching

and learning process of writing.

2. Observation Sheets

To describe students' activities in the classroom while learning discussion text,

four main aspects were observed. Those aspects were related to teacher's problems

when she taught discussion text. They were students' preparation (preparing the data

needed), diligence, involvement in the learning process, and submission

punctuality.

The first aspect, students' preparation, considered about whether students

prepared the data needed for their writing. In the end of each meeting, students were

asked to find the data related to the next topic in the next meeting. Generally, the

teacher and the writer checked their readiness in the beginning of the class. The

second aspect, students' diligence, was related to students' effort to do their writing.

The effort could be seen when they focused and spent more time doing the tasks,

rather than talking to and disturbing others. Moreover, the third aspect, students'

involvement in the learning process, was related to whether they are active in the

learning process. Asking question, giving ideas, or sharing experience were some

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of the indicators in this aspect. The last aspect, submission punctuality, actually

took important role in order to give the teacher and the writer opportunity to give

feedback. Thus, students should submit their work in the end of the class. However,

in order to give them more chance, the submission could also be done outside the

class, but it was on the same day.

3. Observation Journals

Observation journals were used in order to generally capture the situation in the

teaching and learning process and also to add any information which were not

included in the observation sheets. Besides of that, the journal was also used in the

reflection process by the end of the cycle. Below is the blueprint of observation

journals.

Table 3.1

Blueprint of Observation Journal

Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

I I

II

III

4. Questionnaire Sheets

After the implementation of CAR, questionnaire sheets were distributed to add

information related students’ opinion and thoughts about the learning of writing

discussion text by applying teacher indirect feedback. Students’ response was

divided into three answers; Agree, Not Sure, and Disagree. Indicators used in this

questionnaire were as follow:

Table 3.2

Specification of Questionnaire

No. Indicators Total

Items Number Positive Negative

1 Guidance 3 2 1, 4, 5, 6, 7

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No. Indicators Total

Items Number Positive Negative

2 Help 5 8, 9, 10, 14, 15

3 Information 2 2, 3

4 Knowledge 3 11, 12, 13

Total 13 2

5. Tests

In this research, tests were conducted to measure students' writing skills

improvement. The tests were essay tests for each and were divided into three steps;

pre-action, post-action I, and post-action II. In pre-action test, students were asked

to have freewriting, then the number of words produced would be used to

standardise the range of number of words students had to produce.

F. Data Collecting Technique

In this research, the data were collected from both qualitative and quantitative

data to illustrate the improvement in teaching and learning process. Qualitative data

were collected through interview, observation, and questionnaire to capture

description about the implementation of teacher indirect feedback technique. Then,

quantitative data were collected through test which was divided into two kinds; pre-

test and post-test.

1. Interview

The unstructured interview was done before implementing the CAR in order to

deeply analyse the problems faced by the teachers and related to the class situation,

students’ achievement, and also students’ and teachers’ attitude toward the teaching

and learning process of writing.

2. Observation

During teaching and learning process in the classroom, the observation was

done by using structural and open observation. Structural observation was carried

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out by using observation sheets in order to notice the four aspects that needs

observing. Besides of that, observation journals were also used as open observation

in order to have further information about the other aspects that were not provided

in the observation sheets.

3. Questionnaire

Post-action questionnaire was conducted know students’ responses about the

implementation of teacher indirect feedback. The result of questionnaire, then, was

used to help strengthen the data used in this research.

4. Test

To measure students' writing skills, essay tests were conducted. They were

divided into two kinds; pre-action test and post-action tests. Pre-action test was

conducted before the implementation of teacher indirect feedback. Then, post-

action tests were conducted in order to measure students' improvement after the

technique had been applied. In each test, students were asked to write an essay about

the chosen topic. The topic had been informed before the post-action test to let them

find things they needed.

G. Data Analysing Technique

Analysing data was done to simplify data to be readable and interpretable data

which, later, would be used to draw conclusion. In analysing data gained from

questionnaire sheets, the researcher tabulated the frequency of students’ responses,

to transform the data into percentage and then the data were analysed. The highest

percentage could be interpreted as respondents’ tendency about the subjects, while

the lowest percentage could be interpreted as a tendency that did not describe

respondents’ opinions.2 Likert scale was used in tabulating the score as it gave a

gradation about the responses, for example, Always, Often, Sometimes, Never.3 In

2 Nana Sudjana, Penilaian Hasil Proses Belajar Mengajar, (Bandung: PT. Remaja

Rosdakarya, 2009), p. 128. 3 Sugiono, Metode Penelitian Pendidikan, (Bandung: Alfabeta, 2010), p. 135.

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this research, the researcher modified the scale by using Agree, Not Sure, and

Disagree to know students’ responses toward the implementation of teacher indirect

feedback.

Table 3.3

Likert Rating Score, Adapted from Sugiono4

Positive responses Negative Responses

Agree 3 1

Not Sure 2 2

Disagree 1 3

Besides of that, in analysing the data from observation sheets, the researcher

firstly tabulated the score for each aspect by using the rubric below:

Table 3.4

Rubric of Observation Sheets

No Aspects Sub-Aspects Score Assessment Criteria

1 Diligence

3 Seriously doing the task

2 Seriously doing the task if

supervised

1 Not seriously doing the task

2

Involvement

in learning

process

Response to

teacher’s

explanation

3 Actively paying attention to

teacher’s explanation

2 Not really actively paying attention

teacher’s explanation, sometimes

1 Not paying attention to teacher’s

explanation

Involvement

in group

3 Actively involved in group

discussion

2 Not really actively involved in

group discussion, sometimes

4 Ibid.

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No Aspects Sub-Aspects Score Assessment Criteria

2

Involvement

in learning

process

Involvement

in group 1

Not actively involved in group

discussion

Interaction

with the

teacher

3 Often or Actively interact

2 Sometimes

1 Never

3 Preparation

3

Bring the framework and has met

the criteria

2 Bring the framework but has not

met the criteria

1 Do not bring the framework

4 Submission

Punctuality

3 On time/On the day

2 On the next day

1 On the next two days or more

Separately, data gained from observation and questionnaire were tabulated,

formed into percentage, and then analysed. Below is the formula to form the data

into percentage:5

𝑃𝑟𝑒𝑐𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑔𝑒 =𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙 𝑠𝑐𝑜𝑟𝑒

𝑚𝑎𝑥𝑖𝑚𝑢𝑚 𝑠𝑐𝑜𝑟𝑒 𝑥 100%

After the data had been formed into percentage, they were, then, analysed and

interpreted according to the following table:

Table 3.5

Score Interpretation Criteria, Adapted from Riduwan and Sunarto6

Percentage Interval Description

81% - 100% Very Good

61% - 80% Good

5 Riduwan and Sunarto, Pengantar Statistika untuk Penelitian Pendidikan, Sosial,

Ekonomi, Komunikasi dan Bisnis, (Bandung: Alfabeta, 2013), p. 23. 6 Ibid.

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Percentage Interval Description

41% - 60% Enough

21% - 40% Bad

0% - 20% Very Bad

Moreover, students' tests writing ability, analytical scoring rubric adapted from

J. B. Heaton was used. There are five aspects in the analytical scoring rubric, i.e.,

content, organization, vocabulary, language use, and mechanics. The table below is

the analytical scoring rubric:

Table 3.6

Analytical Scoring Rubric7

Aspects Score Judgement

Content

30–27 knowledgeable, substantive

26–22 some knowledge of subject, adequate range

21–17 limited knowledge of subject, little substance

16–13 does not show knowledge of subject, non-substantive

Organization

20–18 fluent expression, ideas clearly stated

17–14 somewhat choppy, but main ideas stand out

13–10 non-fluent, ideas confused or disconnected

9–7 does not communicate, no organization

Vocabulary

20–18 sophisticated range, effective word choice and usage

17–14 adequate range, occasional errors, but meaning not

obscured

13–10 limited range, frequent errors

9–7 little knowledge of English vocabulary

Language

Use

25–22 effective complex construction

21–19 effective but simple construction

17–11 major problems in simple/complex construction

10–5 virtually no mastery of sentence construction rules

7 J. B. Heaton, Writing English Language Tests, (UK: Longman, 1988), p. 146.

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Aspects Score Judgement

Mechanics

5 demonstrates mastery of conventions

4 occasional errors of spelling, punctuation

3 frequent errors of spelling, punctuation, capitalization

2 dominated by errors of spelling, punctuation, etc.

In tabulating the score, each aspect in the rubric was counted. Then, to get the

mean of students' writing score in each test, the formula below was used:8

Mx = Σx

N

Notes:

Mx = mean

𝛴x = individual score

N = number of students

To know the class percentage that could pass the minimum mastery criteria,

the formula used was:9

𝑃 =𝑓

𝑁 𝑥 100 %

Notes:

P = the class percentage

F = total percentage score

N = number of students

H. Trustworthiness

To check the validity of the data, one of triangulation methods was used.

Triangulation is a technique in collecting data by combining various techniques in

collecting data in order to check the credibility of data.10 Thus, as supported by

8 Anas Sudijono, Pengantar Statistik Pendidikan, (Jakarta, PT Raja Grafindo Persada,

2011), p. 81 9 Ibid., p. 43. 10 Sugiono, op. cit., p. 330.

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Mills, both qualitative and quantitative data may be involved and strengthen each

other. To make it simple, triangulation is a mean to support both data as it may

collaborate the strength of each data, besides it may also cover the weaknesses of

each data.11 Moreover, Stainback as cited in Sugiono explains that enhancing a

person’s understanding about what she or he is looking for, rather than just learning

the fact of phenomena, is what triangulation for.12

Among kinds of triangulation, methodological triangulation referring to the use

of more than one method for gathering data was applied in order to strengthen the

data since the validity of data is established only if the conclusions from each of the

methods reaches the same point. Furthermore, to do this triangulation method, the

data taken from observation and questionnaire was collaborated with the results of

the tests.

I. Criteria of Success

To determine the criteria of success in each cycle, the English teacher and also

the researcher decided to make requirements that the cycle would be concluded as

success only if both the result of observation was categorised as very good (81%—

100%) and the Minimum Mastery Criterion could be passed by, at least, 75% of the

students. In conclusion, if one of both aspects had not yet met the requirements,

then the next cycle should be conducted to solve the problems having not yet been

solved in the previous cycle.

11 Geoffrey E. Mills, Action Research: A Guide for the Teacher Researcher, (Boston:

Pearson Education, Inc., 2011), Fourth Edition, p. 93. 12 Sugiono, loc. cit.

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CHAPTER IV

RESEARCH FINDINGS AND INTERPRETATION

This chapter presents research findings before, during, and after the

implementation of classroom action research to improve students' discussion text

writing skills through teacher indirect feedback technique and also interpretation of

the results.

A. Research Findings

1. Findings before the Implementation of CAR

Before implementing the research, any kinds of information were gathered

through teacher pre-interview, pre-questionnaire, pre-observation, and also pre-

action test.

a. Result of Interview

The English teacher was interviewed on Tuesday, June 24, 2014 at 10 am. It

was done to know generally the class situation, students’ achievement, and also

students’ and teachers’ attitude toward the teaching and learning process of writing.

Three problems were pointed out based on teacher’s interview. Firstly, problem

mentioned was that the students sometimes had not yet been interested to prepare

what they were going to write; they preferred talking and joking with their friends

until the class ended. They argued that they were depressed while working under

pressure, and needed a lot of time to get the inspiration and the data needed. Thus,

it was hard for them to collect their work in the end of the meeting and for the

teacher to directly correct their work. Secondly, after the writing tasks became a

homework, the teacher found that the students had not yet put their best

performance in their writing. They just wrote what they wanted to write, neglected

the text structure, and put little attention about what they wrote which led to some

problems, for example, grammatical errors. It is true that they had not yet interested

in writing because of its complexity. Thus, there were so many students that were

hard to achieve minimum mastery criterion (KKM) made by the teacher. Lastly, the

teacher said that it had been so hard when her students asked her to give them

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reasons for their score since she just gave them the score without any comments or

feedback. Moreover, she argued that it took a lot of time to give them comments to

each work since she taught more than three class per week. As a result, students

became unmotivated since some of them felt like they were hard to have clear

direction about how to write well, and some others felt like their teacher had not yet

found appropriate techniques to improve their skills.

It could be concluded that four aspects need considering; they are students’

preparation to write, diligence in doing writing tasks, involvement while learning

writing skills, submission punctuality.

b. Result of Pre-Observation

Pre-observation was conducted to observe the process of pre-action writing test

before implementing the action. It was held on Tuesday, January 6th, 2015, and

started from 07.00—08.30 a.m. The class consisted of 31 students; 17 male students

and 14 female students. Below is the result of pre-observation.

Table 4.1

Results of Pre-Observation Sheets

Students’ Number Diligence Submission Punctuality

S1 2 3

S2 2 3

S3 3 3

S4 2 3

S5 2 3

S6 2 3

S7 2 3

S8 2 3

S9 1 3

S10 2 3

S11 2 3

S12 2 3

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Students’ Number Diligence Submission Punctuality

S13 2 3

S14 1 3

S15 1 3

S16 3 3

S17 2 3

S18 2 3

S19 2 3

S20 2 3

S21 2 3

S22 2 3

S23 2 3

S24 1 3

S25 3 3

S26 1 3

S27 1 3

S28 2 3

S29 3 3

S30 2 3

S31 2 3

Each Aspect’s Score

Total 60 93

Percentage 64.52% 100%

Overall Aspects’ Score

Total 153

Percentage 82.26%

Based on the result of pre-observation above, generally, it could be concluded

that the teaching and learning process was Very Good. However, the description

could be seen in one aspect, submission punctuality. Another aspect, students’

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diligence, could actually be concluded that they are diligent enough. Most students

seriously did the test though teacher should always supervise what they were doing.

Moreover, based on teacher’s observation journal, some students sitting in the

first two front rows seriously did the test. However, those sitting in the next rows

should always be supervised. Then if the teacher did not pay attention or supervise

them, some students preferred to play games on their smartphone than to do the

test. For example, four students in the right corner preferred to play games on their

smartphone than to do the test. Besides of that, they also liked to chat with their

friends during the test. For example, five female students sitting in the third and

fourth row near the door liked to chat during the test. Lastly, some students tended

to do the test with their friends in group rather than work individually. In

conclusion, generally, they are diligent enough in doing the test though some of

them really needed supervising.

c. Pre-Action Test

Lastly, pre-action test was done in January 6, 2015 at 07.00—8.30 a.m. This

test was actually conducted in order to mainly prove what the teacher had said about

the class situation when writing test being conducted and about students’

achievement which were found below the standard. Findings showed that almost

half of the class could not reach the Minimum Mastery Criterion (75). Below is the

students’ pre-action writing test scores:

Table 4.2

Students’ Pre-Action Writing Test Scores

Students’ Number Scores Number of Words

S1 73 231

S2 76* 247

S3 86* 297

S4 61 253

S5 79* 289

S6 78* 247

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Students’ Number Scores Number of Words

S7 77* 260

S8 75* 257

S9 57 225

S10 72 290

S11 73 220

S12 71 283

S13 73 281

S14 53 254

S15 68 280

S16 86* 226

S17 74 292

S18 72 267

S19 72 239

S20 77* 245

S21 74 241

S22 72 251

S23 78* 289

S24 63 262

S25 82* 243

S26 59 288

S27 57 294

S28 69 242

S29 81* 296

S30 73 235

S31 74 287

Mean: 72.1 261.65

*Students who could pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion (75)

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Based the result of pre-action test, it could be concluded that there were still 20

students having not yet met the Minimum Mastery Criterion (75). The minimum

score gained was 53, while the highest was 86. From the data above, it could be

concluded that students of XII IPA 4 needed to improve their writing skills. Besides

of that, the range number of words students could write was between 220—297

words, with the average number of words students could produce was 262 (261.65).

Then, as the test was also designed to standardise the range number of words for

the next cycles, the researcher decided the range number of words between 200—

300 words.

2. Findings during the Implementation of CAR

a. Cycle 1

1) Planning

In this phase, a lesson plan was designed to try solving problems in the teaching

and learning process of writing skills. The problems needed solving were not only

about the students’ achievement but also students’ attitude in the classroom. It was

started from making a lesson plan consisted of standard competence, basic

competence, and indicators that will be reached by the students. In addition, the

selected material and exercises were also determined into a lesson plan. Besides of

that, based on the findings in the pre-observation, as students liked to chat with their

friends during the test and tended to do the test with their friends in group rather

than work individually, then they would be divided into some groups in order to

make the learning process be more active. Lastly, the teacher decided to take three

meetings in this cycle. The first one is for teaching and learning about discussion

text, the second one was for conducting the test, and the last day was used for

students to revise their writing the teacher had given feedback on.

2) Acting

The action in the first cycle was completely done in three meetings; January 7th,

13th, and 20th, 2015. The teaching and learning process was done based on the lesson

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plan having been made. The first one was the introduction to the materials. Students

were introduced with the schematic structure which they should also made.

Moreover, based on the findings in the pre-observation, as students liked to chat

with their friends during the test and tended to do the test with their friends in group

rather than work individually, then they were divided into some groups in order to

make the learning process be more active. The groups consisted of five students per

each and were freely chosen by students. Then, three topics to discuss were also

distributed. After that, they were asked to make a framework of the text and then

presented it by choosing one representative person. After all, the teacher provided

five topics for students to choose. Then, as a homework, they were asked to make

a framework based on the topics students chose. In this meeting, three aspects were

observed, they were students’ response to teacher’s explanation, active discussion

in group, and active interaction with the teacher.

In the second meeting, firstly students were asked to submit their own

framework they would use for their own writing. While teacher was examining the

frameworks, students were preparing for everything they needed for the writing

test. After that, the frameworks were given back to students and then they were

asked to exemplify the framework they had made into a four-paragraph discussion

text. After this meeting, students’ writing was corrected and feedback was given by

the teacher outside the classroom. In this meeting, three aspects were observed, they

were students’ preparation, diligence in doing the test, and submission punctuality.

In the third meeting, students’ writing was distributed. Then, teacher explained

the codes given on their paper in order to make students understand the meaning of

all codes. Then, they were asked to directly revise their own writing. In this

meeting, three aspects were observed, they were students’ response to teacher’s

explanation, diligence, and submission punctuality.

3) Observing

In this phase, the teacher observed the four aspects that should be improved in

the teaching and learning process. In the first meeting, findings showed that most

students paid little attention to teacher’s explanation. Though they listened to

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teacher’s explanation, sometimes they preferred talking to their friends, playing

games on their gadgets. Even, some students paid no attention at all on teacher’s

explanation. Two students were sleeping. Others went outside for the number one,

but went back to class very late. Besides of that, students’ interaction with the

teacher was also still low. Though some of them had tried to ask the teacher, the

frequency was still rare. After that, when they were grouped, some students liked

to be in group with those who have sufficient knowledge about English, for

example, Students 3, 5, and 16. However, when they had been in group, they did

not want to be involved in the group and spent more time joking and chatting with

their friends. Besides, after observing some students, students 17 and 21 could be

classified as silent students. The positive thing was that they still did what teacher

asked. In addition, while they presented the results of their discussion, the situation

were conducive and students paid full attention.

In the second meeting, generally overall activities could be categorised as Very

Good. All students could submit their work on time. When the bell rang as a sign

that the subject was over, the submitted their work. However, while checking

students’ homework, teacher found that most students had a trouble making

framework of the text. It could be seen as some of them actually brought their

framework but did not meet the criteria and some others, even, did not bring and

make the framework. However, there were still some students bringing and making

a good framework. After that, generally, students did the test seriously though some

of them should be supervised by the teacher. An important thing that should be

noted was that some students who did not bring or make the framework found

difficulties in doing the test as they were confused about what they had to write.

This problem should be solved in the next cycle.

In the third meeting, generally, students were very diligent in revising their

work though some of them still needed supervising. While teacher was explaining

the codes or feedback codes on students’ paper, most students were seriously

listening to teacher’s explanation. However, teacher also noticed that some students

felt confused about the codes given by the teacher, then they prefer asking their peer

than asking the teacher though sometimes they had to ask the teacher too. Lastly,

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students’ submission punctuality still needed to be considered. There were still

some students who could not submit their revised writing on time; they took two or

more than two days to revise their writing. To observe this aspect, observation was

not only done in the classroom, but also outside classroom. To make it clear, below

is the results of observation sheets of the first cycle:

Table 4.3

Results of Observation Sheets of Cycle I

Students’

Number

Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

A B C A B C A B C

S1 3 3 2 2 3 3 3 3 3

S2 2 2 2 2 3 3 3 2 2

S3 2 2 2 3 3 3 3 3 2

S4 3 3 2 2 2 3 3 3 2

S5 2 2 1 3 2 3 3 2 3

S6 2 2 1 2 3 3 2 2 3

S7 1 1 1 2 1 3 2 2 3

S8 2 2 1 2 3 3 2 2 2

S9 3 3 2 3 3 3 2 3 1

S10 2 1 1 2 2 3 2 3 1

S11 2 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 2

S12 2 2 2 2 3 3 2 3 3

S13 2 3 2 2 2 3 3 3 1

S14 1 2 1 1 2 3 2 2 3

S15 2 2 2 1 2 3 2 2 3

S16 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S17 3 2 3 1 3 3 2 2 1

S18 1 1 1 1 1 3 1 1 3

S19 1 1 1 1 1 3 2 2 3

S20 2 2 2 1 2 3 3 2 1

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Students’

Number

Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

A B C A B C A B C

S21 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3

S22 1 1 1 1 1 3 3 1 1

S23 2 2 1 3 3 3 2 2 3

S24 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 1

S25 1 1 1 1 1 3 3 1 3

S26 1 1 1 1 1 3 2 1 1

S27 3 3 2 3 2 3 3 2 3

S28 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3

S29 2 2 2 3 3 3 3 2 3

S30 2 2 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S31 2 3 3 1 3 3 3 3 3

Each Aspect’s Score in Each Meeting

Total 64 66 54 64 73 93 79 72 72

Percent.

(%) 68.82 70.97 58.06 68.82 78.49 100 84.95 77.42 77.42

Overall Aspects’ Score in Each Meeting

Total 184 230 223

Percent.

(%) 65.95% 82.44% 79.93%

Overall Aspects’ Score for Overall Meetings

Percent.

(%) 76.12%

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Notes:

Table 4.4

Description of the Codes in Table 4.3

Codes Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

A Students’ response to

teacher’s explanation

Students’

preparation

Students’ response to

teacher’s explanation

Codes Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

B Discuss actively in

group

Students’ diligence Students’ diligence

C

Active interaction with

the teacher

Students’

submission

punctuality

Students’ submission

punctuality

Based on the data analysis of table 4.3 above, it could be concluded that

students’ overall activities in the first cycle was 76.12% which could be categorised

as Good. In the first meeting, students’ overall activities was 65.95 which could be

categorised as Enough. The first aspect, students’ response to teacher’s explanation

was 68.82% could be categorised as Enough, the second aspect was 70.97% which

could be categorised as Good, however, the third aspects was only 58.06% which

could be categorised as Bad.

Moreover, in the second meeting, students’ overall activities was 82.44 which

could be categorised as Very Good. The first aspect, students’ response to teacher’s

explanation was 68.82% which could be categorised as Enough, the second aspect

was 78.49% which could be categorised as Good, and the third aspects was only

100% which could be categorised as Very Good. Lastly, in the third meeting,

students’ overall activities was 79.93% which could be categorised as Good. The

first aspect, students’ response to teacher’s explanation was 84.95% which could

be categorised as Very Good, the second aspect was 77.42% which could be

categorised as Good, and the third aspects was only 77.42% which could be

categorised as Good.

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Besides data from observation sheets, students’ post-action writing test I scores

were also used to observe students’ writing improvement. Below is the students’

post-action writing test I scores:

Table 4.5

Students’ Post-Action I Writing Test Scores

Students’ Number Post-Action I Scores

S1 87*

S2 78*

S3 93*

S4 92*

S5 89*

S6 79*

S7 85*

S8 77*

S9 94*

S10 82*

S11 89*

S12 76*

S13 86*

S14 81*

S15 78*

S16 93*

S17 76*

S18 89*

S19 82*

S20 92*

S21 84*

S22 76*

S23 86*

S24 93*

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Students’ Number Post-Action I Scores

S25 91*

S26 79*

S27 90*

S28 85*

S29 81*

S30 78*

S31 86*

Total 2627

Mean: 84.74

*Students who could pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion (75)

Based on the result of Students’ Post-Action I Writing Test Scores above, it

could be concluded that after revising their writing, all students could pass the

Minimum Mastery Criterion (75). Besides of that, the average score was also

increased to 84.74 while in pre-action test, the average was only 72.1 which meant

that it was still under the Minimum Mastery Criterion.

4) Reflecting

After the first cycle had been conducted, the conclusion of this cycle was drawn.

It could be seen that students’ writing score in this cycle actually could be improved.

However, there were still many things that should be improved. In the first meeting,

all of the aspects observed needed to be observed as they had not yet meet the

criteria of success. Moreover, in the second meeting, students’ preparation should

be improved in the next cycle. Lastly, in the last meeting, students’ submission

punctuality should be noted to get improved. After reflecting the teaching and

learning process in the first cycle, it could be concluded that next cycle needed to

be conducted to solve the problems having not yet been solved in the first cycle.

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b. Cycle 2

1) Planning

In this phase, a lesson plan was designed to try solving problems having not

been solved in the first cycle. Though students’ achievement had met the

requirement for criteria of success, there were still students’ response to teacher’s

explanation, students’ participation in group, students’ interaction with the teacher,

students’ preparation, and students’ submission punctuality after revising their

work that still needed to be improved. Thus, the next cycle should be done to solve

those problems.

Generally, the second cycle was almost the same as the previous one. However,

some changes were planned and had been inserted in the lesson plan of the second

cycle in order to enhance students’ activities. Firstly, as students did not prepare

well for the test, then in the second cycle the teaching process was focussed on

making the framework of what they wanted to elaborate. It was hoped that it might

solve the problems of students’ preparation and submission punctuality as they

might be more prepared. Secondly, as students were tended to be more passive and

to spend their time talking, joking, and chatting with their close friends in group,

the teacher himself divided the students to prevent students being with their close

friend. It was hoped that it might solve the problems of students’ participation in

their group and also interaction with the teacher. Lastly, the teacher decided to take

three meetings in this cycle. The first one is for teaching and learning about making

a good framework, the second one was for conducting the test, and the last day was

used for students to revise their writing the teacher had given feedback on.

2) Acting

The action in the second cycle was completely done in three meetings; January

27th, January 28th, and February 10th, 2015. The teaching and learning process was

done based on the lesson plan having been made. The first meeting was about

making a good framework. Students were taught about how to make a good

framework step by step. Moreover, based on the findings in the first cycle, as

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students liked to chat with their friends in group they chose, then teacher himself

divided the students into five group consisted of six students per each and each

group was given a chosen topic which they had to make the framework of. To make

it clear, each students should make their own framework though they might discuss

their ideas with their peers.

After they had done making the framework, students were asked to collect their

framework collectively per group. Then, they were asked to exchange their work to

another group in order to get feedback or suggestion from their friends from another

group. While doing that activity, students were free to give their suggestion. After

all, the teacher asked students to give their peers’ work back. Then, as a homework,

they were asked to revise their framework and reminded that they had to bring the

framework on the next day. In this meeting, three aspects were observed, they were

students’ response to teacher’s explanation, active discussion in group, and active

interaction with the teacher.

In the second meeting, firstly students were asked to submit their own

framework they would use for their own writing. While teacher was examining the

frameworks, students were preparing for everything they needed for the writing

test. After that, the frameworks were given back to students and then they were

asked to elaborate the framework they had made into a four-paragraph discussion

text. After this meeting, students’ writing was corrected and feedback was given by

the teacher outside the classroom. In this meeting, three aspects were observed, they

were students’ preparation, diligence in doing the test, and submission punctuality.

In the third meeting, students’ writing was distributed. Then, teacher explained

the codes given on their paper in order to do some review and to make students

deeply understand the meaning of all codes. Then, they were asked to directly revise

their own writing. In this meeting, three aspects were observed, they were students’

response to teacher’s explanation, diligence, and submission punctuality.

3) Observing

In this phase, the teacher observed the four aspects that should be improved in

the teaching and learning process. In the first meeting, findings showed that almost

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all students paid full attention to teacher’s explanation because they were required

to make a good framework that they would use in elaborating their writing. Though

some of them still did not show their full attention, they clearly listened to teacher’s

explanation. Besides of that, while explaining the materials, it could be found that

all students had stopped playing their gadgets. Changes could also be seen on

another aspect to observe, students’ participation in the group. As the group and

theme for each group had been chosen by the teacher, students seemed to be more

active in their group. They shared their own ideas, thoughts, and opinion about the

theme. Even, the teacher found that one of the groups tried to debate whether some

materials or ideas they had were relevant, good, or acceptable. Interaction with the

teacher was also improved. It could also be seen that, in this activity, students

mostly preferred to focus on the contents than the form. Lastly, when students gave

feedback to their friends’ work, some students were confused with their friends’

idea. However, they also gave any suggestion to their friends about what their

friends should enhance and what to improve.

In the second meeting, good changes could also be found on students’

preparation. While checking students’ homework, teacher were surprised that all

students brought all their framework and they showed a good effort to make a good

one. Besides of that, while doing the writing test, they seemed to be more focus.

The condition of the class was also so quiet that almost all students focussed on

their own paper. Though some students tried to use their gadgets, teacher found that

they used it to look up some words in English they did not know rather than used it

for unimportant thing. Lastly, all students could submit their work on time. When

the bell rang as a sign that the subject was over, the submitted their work.

In the third meeting, some positive changes could also be found. Firstly, while

the teacher reviewed and gave deeper explanation about the feedback codes,

students were paying full attention. Most students were seriously listening to

teacher’s explanation. Though some of them did not really pay attention, they still

caught what teacher said. Besides of that, while they were given chance to ask,

some students seemed like they wanted to confirm their own opinion rather than

asked about the meaning of the symbols or codes. Moreover, while doing the

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revision, almost all students were very diligent and serious as they wanted to finish

their work on time. Lastly, students’ submission punctuality was increased. Many

students could finish their work on that day. Though some students could not submit

their revised writing on time, but they directly submitted their writing on the next

day. Below is the results of observation sheets of the second cycle:

Table 4.6

Results of Observation Sheets of Cycle II

Students’

Number

Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

A B C A B C A B C

S1 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S2 2 3 2 3 3 3 3 2 3

S3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S4 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S5 3 3 3 3 2 3 3 3 3

S6 3 2 2 3 3 3 2 3 3

S7 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 2 2

S8 2 2 2 3 3 3 2 3 2

S9 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3

S10 2 3 3 3 3 3 2 3 2

S11 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S12 2 3 3 3 3 3 2 3 3

S13 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S14 3 2 2 3 3 3 3 3 2

S15 2 2 2 3 2 3 2 2 3

S16 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S17 3 3 3 3 3 3 2 2 2

S18 2 2 2 3 2 3 3 3 2

S19 3 3 2 3 3 3 2 2 3

S20 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3 2

S21 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

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Students’

Number

Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

A B C A B C A B C

S22 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 2 3

S23 2 3 2 3 3 3 2 2 3

S24 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3

S25 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 2 2

S26 3 3 2 3 3 3 3 3 3

S27 3 3 2 3 2 3 3 3 3

S28 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

S29 3 2 2 3 3 3 3 3 3

S30 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 2

S31 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3 3

Each Aspect’s Score in Each Meeting

Total 86 85 79 93 89 93 85 85 84

Max. 93 93 93 93 93 93 93 93 93

Percent.

(%) 92.47 91.40 84.95 100 95.70 100 91.40 91.40 90.32

Overall Aspects’ Score in Each Meeting

Total 250 275 254

Percent.

(%) 89.61% 98.57% 91.01%

Overall Aspects’ Score for Overall Meetings

Percent.

(%) 93.07%

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Notes:

Table 4.7

Description of the Codes in Table 4.6

Codes Meeting I Meeting II Meeting III

A Students’ response to

teacher’s explanation

Students’

preparation

Students’ response to

teacher’s explanation

B Discuss actively in group Students’ diligence Students’ diligence

C

Active interaction with

the teacher

Students’

submission

punctuality

Students’ submission

punctuality

Based on the data analysis of table 4.6 above, it could be concluded that

students’ overall activities in the second cycle was 93.07% which could be

categorised as Very Good. In the first meeting, students’ overall activities was

89.61% which could be categorised as Very Good. The first aspect, students’

response to teacher’s explanation was 92.47% which could be categorised as Very

Good, the second aspect was 91.40% which could be categorised as Very Good,

and the third aspects was 84.95% which could be categorised as Very Good.

Moreover, in the second meeting, students’ overall activities was 98.57% which

could be categorised as Very Good. The first aspect, students’ response to teacher’s

explanation was 100% which could be categorised as Very Good, the second aspect

was 95.70% which could be categorised as Very Good, and the third aspects was

100% which could be categorised as Very Good. Lastly, in the third meeting,

students’ overall activities was 91.01% which could be categorised as Very Good.

The first aspect, students’ response to teacher’s explanation was 91.40% could be

categorised as Very Good, the second aspect was 91.40% which could be

categorised as Very Good, and the third aspects was 90.32% which could be

categorised as Very Good.

Besides data from observation sheets, students’ post-action writing test II scores

were also used to observe students’ writing improvement. Below is the students’

post-action writing test II scores:

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Table 4.8

Students’ Post-Action II Writing Test Scores

Students’ Number Post-Action II Scores

S1 83*

S2 87*

S3 95*

S4 92*

S5 96*

S6 83*

S7 87*

S8 85*

S9 95*

S10 82*

S11 79*

S12 84*

S13 93*

S14 86*

S15 84*

S16 93*

S17 78*

S18 87*

S19 84*

S20 87*

S21 90*

S22 76*

S23 90*

S24 92*

S25 93*

S26 84*

S27 86*

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Students’ Number Post-Action II Scores

S28 88*

S29 88*

S30 86*

S31 90*

Total 2703

Mean: 87.19

*Students who could pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion (75)

Based on the result of Students’ Post-Action II Writing Test Scores above, it

could be concluded that after revising their writing, all students could pass the

Minimum Mastery Criterion (75). Besides of that, the average score was also

increased to 87.19.

4) Reflecting

After the second cycle had been conducted, the conclusion of this cycle was

drawn. It could be seen that students’ activities and achievement had met the

requirements that the result of observation was categorised as very good (93.07%)

and the Minimum Mastery Criterion could be passed by all of the students (100%).

Besides of that, the problems having not yet been solved in the previous cycle could

be solved in this cycle. Thus, after reflecting the teaching and learning process in

the second cycle and based on the data gained from this cycle, it could be concluded

that the next cycle did not need to be conducted.

3. Findings after the Implementation of CAR

After implementing the research, there are two data that needed discussing.

Those were the result of teacher interview, the comparison of observation sheet

results, and the comparison of the students’ scores of pre-action test, post-action I

test, and post-action II test.

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a. Result of Questionnaire Sheets

The post-questionnaire sheets was distributed on Tuesday, February 10th, 2015

after the implementation of the research. Each sheet consisted of fifteen questions

which were used to know students’ responses about the implementation of teacher

indirect feedback. The following table was the results of post-questionnaire sheets:

Table 4.9

Results of Questionnaire Sheets about Students’ Responses toward the

Implementation of Teacher Indirect Feedback

No. Indicators Items

Number

Percentage

per Item

Percentage

per

Indicator

Criteria

1. Guidance

1 90.3%

91.61% Very Good

4 86%

5 92.5%

6 100%

7 89.2%

2. Help

8 100%

88.60% Very Good

9 79.6%

10 86%

14 77.4%

15 100%

3. Information 2 96.8%

92.47% Very Good 3 88.2%

4. Knowledge

11 83.9%

88.17% Very Good 12 100%

13 80.6%

Overall Percentage 90.22% Very Good

Based on table 4.9, it could be concluded that students’ response towards the

implementation of teacher indirect feedback was Very Good (90.22%). Firstly,

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students’ response toward the use of teacher indirect feedback as guidance gained

91.61%. It could be concluded that by getting teacher indirect feedback, most

students agreed that they were well-guided in revising their writing. Moreover, the

use of teacher indirect feedback as help in their learning process gained 88.60%. It

could be concluded that most students felt that teacher indirect feedback was helpful

in enhancing their skills and participation in learning process. In addition, the

function of teacher indirect feedback which could be used as a tool of information

for students gained 92.47%. Most students felt that feedback provided by the

teacher could inform their strengths and weaknesses. Lastly, the use of teacher

indirect feedback as a tool to increase students’ knowledge in writing skills gained

88.17%. It could be concluded that this kind of feedback could increase students’

knowledge related to their own writing skills and help them understand what errors

they made so that they would not do the same errors later.

b. Result of Writing Tests Score

Besides distributing the questionnaire sheets, it could also be important to show

students’ overall score started from pre-action writing test scores until post-action

II writing test scores. The table below presented the comparison of the scores:

Table 4.10

The Comparison of Students’ Writing Scores of Pre-Action Test, Post-Action

Test I, and Post-Action Test II

Students’

Number

Pre-Action

Test Scores

Post-Action I

Test Scores

Post-Action II

Test Scores

S1 73 87* 83*

S2 76* 78* 87*

S3 86* 93* 95*

S4 61 92* 92*

S5 79* 89* 96*

S6 78* 79* 83*

S7 77* 85* 87*

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Students’

Number

Pre-Action

Test Scores

Post-Action I

Test Scores

Post-Action II

Test Scores

S8 75* 77* 85*

S9 57 94* 95*

S10 72 82* 82*

S11 73 89* 79*

S12 71 76* 84*

S13 73 86* 93*

S14 53 81* 86*

S15 68 78* 84*

S16 86* 93* 93*

S17 74 76* 78*

S18 72 89* 87*

S19 72 82* 84*

S20 77* 92* 87*

S21 74 84* 90*

S22 72 76* 76*

S23 78* 86* 90*

S24 63 93* 92*

S25 82* 91* 93*

S26 59 79* 84*

S27 57 90* 86*

S28 69 85* 88*

S29 81* 81* 88*

S30 73 78* 86*

S31 74 86* 90*

Mean: 72.1 84.74 87.19

*Students who could pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion (75)

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In analysing data gained from students’ writing score, the researcher firstly tried

to find the mean score of each test by calculating the score. Then, based on the table

above, it could be seen that the mean score of pre-action was 72.1, of post-action I

was 84.74, and of post-action II was 87.19. It could be concluded that students’

mean score of pre-action to post-action I was improved 12.64 points and students’

mean score of post-action I to post-action II was also improved 2.45 points.

In addition, after getting the mean score of each test, the number of students

who could pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion was also calculated. Then, based

on the table above, it could be seen that 11 students (35%) could meet the Minimum

Mastery Criterion but 20 students (65%) could not in the pre-action test. However,

in the first and second cycle, it could be seen that all students (100%) could pass

the Minimum Mastery Criterion.

B. Interpretation of the Results

After calculating the data above, the result was interpreted. In the pre-action,

the mean score of pre-action writing test before implementing Classroom Action

Research (CAR) was 72.1 which meant that there were still some students who

could not pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion. It was proved that 20 students

(65%) could not meet the Minimum Mastery Criterion in the test.

However, the mean score of post-action I writing test scores were increased up

to 84.74 (17.53%). It meant that, by applying teacher indirect feedback, students

got improvement on their writing skills. Moreover, the percentage of students who

could pass the Minimum Mastery Criterion was also increased. While in the pre-

action test, there were only eleven students who could pass the Minimum Mastery

Criterion, in the post-action test I, all students could pass the Minimum Mastery

Criterion. Therefore, it could be concluded that after applying teacher indirect

feedback in the learning of writing discussion text, the mean score and the

percentage of the students who passed the Minimum Mastery Criterion was

improved. However, the overall improvement had not achieved the target yet as the

results of observation showed that students’ attitudes in the classroom still needed

to be improved. It could be seen as the overall students’ activities was categorised

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as “Good” which meant that there were still some aspects that needed to be

improved. To sum up, the next cycle should be conducted to cover the problems

having not yet been solved.

After the second cycle had been conducted, based on table 4.6 and 4.8, it could

be concluded that there were a huge improvement on students’ overall activities

and achievement. Firstly, the result of observation showed that students’ attitudes

in the classroom improved as it could be categorised as “Very Good” (93.07%).

Some aspects that needed to be improved could be improved in this cycle.

Moreover, the mean score of the students’ post-action test II also gained

improvement about 2.13%. While the mean score of post-action test I was 94, that

of the post action test II was 96. Lastly, again, all students could also pass the

Minimum Mastery Criterion. Thus, based on the results of the second cycle that had

met all the criteria of success requirements, it could be concluded that the next cycle

did not need to be conducted.

Lastly, to get more information about students’ responses after implementing

the teacher indirect feedback, questionnaire sheets were distributed. Then, the result

of which could be concluded that students’ response was “Very Good”. They agreed

that teacher indirect feedback could guide them in revising their writing, broaden

their knowledge, be used to monitor their improvement during the writing process,

and help them evaluate their writing skill.

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CHAPTER V

CONCLUSION AND SUGGESTION

This chapter presents conclusion and suggestion. The conclusion and

suggestion is drawn based on the findings of the research.

A. Conclusion

The result of this research shows that the use of teacher indirect feedback

technique improves students of XII IPA 4’s writing skills of discussion text. The

conclusion is drawn as the results of the tests increase. Firstly, the average of

students score in pre-action test is only 72.1 which can be concluded that generally

students have not yet met the KKM. However, secondly, that in the post-action I

drastically increases until 84.74 (17.53%). Then, that in the post-action II also

increases until 87.19 (20.93% from the pre-action result)

B. Suggestion

Based on this completely-done research, there are some suggestion for other

English teachers and researchers.

1. Firstly, teachers might apply teacher indirect feedback to help students increase

students’ writing achievement, besides their long-term memory, and self-

learning.

2. Moreover, as this research only focused on one writing material, one class and

one level of study, it is hoped that other teachers or researchers might conduct

teacher indirect feedback for other kinds of writing, classes, and any education

levels to enhance their students’ writing achievement.

3. In addition, based on the findings of the research, students’ attention,

involvement, and engagement in learning process should always be supervised

as they are other essential aspects supporting the success of the teaching and

learning of writing.

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Appendix 1. Students’ Name

List of Students’ Name

No. Students’ Name Sex

1. Arga Pratama Putra Male

2. Ahmad Pebian Male

3. Azizah Pamugarwati Female

4. Debby Puji Lestari Female

5. Delvi Rawati Siregar Female

6. Desi Yusman Female

7. Dwaraka Daru Bisma Male

8. Eki Wulandari Female

9. Elen Fitria Female

10. Elrico Azhari Male

11. Fikri Huda Falah Male

12. Fitria Widiastuti Female

13. Franz Azarya Parasian Male

14. Garry Anggoro Maajid Male

15. Lulu Widianingsih Female

16. Maharani Reza Female

17. Muhammad Naufal Heriza Male

18. Muhammad Ridwan Miftahul Hidayat Male

19. Mochammad Fierhan Male

20. Noverly Female

21. Qisthi Amalia Female

22. Ricky Chandra Dimuka Male

23. Roiyatul Jannah Female

24. Ryan Hermawan Male

25. Sahdon Fernando Male

26. Satria Parama Adithya Male

27. Siti Nur Chamidah Female

28. Thassya Octavia Adella Female

29. Tri Susanti Female

30. Virgita Puspasari Female

31. Zagina Salsabila Firdaus Female

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Appendix 2. Interview Guide and Results

Pedoman Wawancara Guru Bahasa Inggris Kelas XII SMAN 8 Kota

Tangerang Selatan Sebelum Pelaksanaan Penelitian Tindakan Kelas

1. Menurut ibu, selama proses KBM di kelas, bagaimana sikap belajar siswa saat

pembelajaran Bahasa Inggris?

2. Berapa standar nilai KKM yang ibu tentukan dalam mata pelajaran Bahasa Inggris?

3. Secara spesifik pada pembelajaran tentang kemampuan menulis atau writing,

bagaimana tanggapan atau pengalaman yang Ibu miliki mengenai kemampuan siswa/i

Ibu dalam menulis?

4. Strategi, atau metode, atau teknik apa yang ibu gunakan dalam mengajarkan

kemampuan tersebut?

5. Pada pembahasan materi apa ibu menghadapi kesulitan?

6. Menurut pendapat Ibu, kelas mana yang membuat Ibu paling sulit mengajarkan

writing?

7. Apa saja kesulitan yang Ibu temui saat mengajarkan skill tersebut?

8. Saat melakukan penilaian, apakah Ibu memberikan alasan, komentar, atau masukan

tentang hasil penulisan siswa? Bagaimana respon siswa terhadap hal tersebut?

9. Apakah Ibu pernah mendengar atau mengetahui teknik Teacher Indirect Feedback?

Bagaimana pendapat ibu tentang teknik tersebut?

10. Menurut Ibu, apa kelas XII IPA 4 bisa kita gunakan untuk menerapkan teknik tersebut?

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Hasil Wawancara Guru Bahasa Inggris Kelas XII SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang

Selatan Sebelum Pelaksanaan Penelitian Tindakan Kelas

Pewawancara : Agus Sufyan

Guru : Irmawati, S.Ag.

Hari/ Tanggal : 24 Juni 2014

Tempat : Ruang Guru SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan

1. Pewawancara = Menurut ibu, selama proses KBM di kelas, bagaimana

sikap belajar siswa saat pembelajaran Bahasa Inggris?

Guru = Cukup variatif ya, Mas. Ada yang antusias, ada yang biasa

saja, ada juga yang cuek dan tidak peduli. Tapi kebanyakan

dari mereka sepertinya kurang memiliki ketertarikan.

Banyak dari mereka yang mengeluh soal kesusahan belajar

Bahasa Inggris dan masih banyak deh, Mas.

2. Pewawancara = Berapa standar nilai KKM yang ibu tentukan dalam

mata pelajaran Bahasa Inggris?

Guru = Kalau KKM, saya gak terlalu pasang harga tinggi, Mas.

Saya minimalkan 75 saja sepertinya sudah cukup.

3. Pewawancara = Secara spesifik pada pembelajaran tentang

kemampuan menulis atau writing, bagaimana

tanggapan atau pengalaman yang Ibu miliki mengenai

kemampuan siswa/i Ibu dalam menulis?

Guru = Ini dia yang sepertinya penting dibahas, Mas. Saya rasa

berdasarkan pengalaman saya mengajar mata pelajaran

Bahasa Inggris, writing ini sepertinya agak sulit sekali

diajarkan ke siswanya. Seperti yang saya bilang tadi, karena

mereka kesusahan dalam mempelajari Bahasa Inggris,

seperti vocab-nya, dan lainnya. Jadi, agak sedikit sulit kalau

memberi siswa penugasan untuk membuat sebuah tulisan.

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4. Pewawancara = Strategi, atau metode, atau teknik apa yang ibu

gunakan dalam mengajarkan kemampuan menulis?

Guru = Seperti umumnya saja, Mas. Paling ajarkan materi, lalu

diberi penugasan, dinilai, dan selesai materi tersebut.

5. Pewawancara = Pada pembahasan materi apa ibu menghadapi

kesulitan?

Guru = Biasanya sih, saya sulit kalau mengajarkan teks diskusi,

kalau khusus mengajarkan writing ya, Mas. Alasannya

mungkin karena siswa kadang gak bisa seimbang

6. Pewawancara = Menurut pendapat Ibu, kelas mana yang membuat Ibu

paling sulit mengajarkan writing?

Guru = To be honest, sepertinya kelas yang saya bertindak sebagai

wali kelasnya, yaitu XII IPA 4, sepertinya cukup

menyulitkan saya kalau lagi mengajarkan skill writing.

7. Pewawancara = Apa saja kesulitan yang Ibu temui saat mengajarkan

skill tersebut?

Guru = Kalau boleh sebut semua, banyak Mas. Yang pertama,

siswa itu kadang sudah merasa pusing duluan kalau disuruh

nulis. Mereka kalau disuruh cari data-data buat mendukung

tulisannya, kadang suka males. Mereka lebih senang

becanda, main gadget-nya, asik sama dunianya dan

akhirnya sampe jam pelajarannya selesai, mereka gak

selesai tugasnya. Mereka sih alasannya pusing kalau

mengerjakan tugas di kelas, sebentar waktunya, mumet

katanya mereka sih. Akhirnya, saya juga kena imbasnya,

jadi gak bisa koreksi tugas mereka secepatnya. Harus nunda

beberapa hari baru bisa mulai koreksi. Tapi masalah

sebenarnya masih berlanjut, Mas. Kalau sudah jadi PR,

mereka asal aja tugasnya. Yang namanya grammar,

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spelling, dan lainnya itu kadang bikin saya jadi pusing

waktu ngoreksi. Akhirnya, karena saya juga kadang capek

karena saya juga mengajar beberapa kelas, kadang saya

langsung aja kasih nilai dan kalau ditanya siswa kenapa

nilainya seperti itu, saya cuma bisa jawab, ya itu lah

kemampuan kamu.

8. Pewawancara = Saat melakukan penilaian, apakah Ibu memberikan

alasan, komentar, atau masukan tentang hasil

penulisan siswa? Bagaimana respon siswa terhadap hal

tersebut?

Guru = Seperti yang tadi saya katakan ya, Mas. Saya cuma nilai

saja tanpa kasih alasan atau komentar soal tulisan mereka.

Ya akhirnya, siswa juga kadang jadi bingung, bertanya-

tanya, kenapa nilai mereka sepeerti itu. Kadang mereka

seringnya langsung membahas itu sama teman-temannya

saja.

9. Pewawancara = Apakah Ibu pernah mendengar atau mengetahui teknik

Teacher Indirect Feedback? Bagaimana pendapat ibu

tentang teknik tersebut?

Guru = Itu seperti kasih feedback tapi menggunakan kode-kode itu

ya mas? Saya pernah baca tentang itu. Cukup menarik sih,

tapi saya belum pernah mencoba karena siswa juga

terkadang tidak terlalu mementingkan hal semacam itu.

10. Pewawancara = Menurut Ibu, apa kelas XII IPA 4 bisa kita gunakan

untuk menerapkan teknik tersebut?

Guru = Sepertinya mau, nanti saya akan kabari siswanya.

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Ciputat Timur, 24 Juni 2014

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Appendix 3. Observation Sheets of Pre-Action

LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : -- (Pre Action)

Tanggal : 6 Januari 2015

No. Nama Siswa A B

1 Arga Pratama P. 2 3

2 Ahmad Pebian 2 3

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 3 3

4 Debby Puji L. 2 3

5 Delvi Rawati S. 2 3

6 Desi Yusman 2 3

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 2 3

8 Eki Wulandari 2 3

9 Elen Fitria 1 3

10 Elrico Azhari 2 3

11 Fikri Huda Falah 2 3

12 Fitria Widiastuti 2 3

13 Franz Azarya P. 2 3

14 Garry Anggoro M. 1 3

15 Lulu Widianingsih 1 3

16 Maharani Reza 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 2 3

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 2 3

19 M. Fierhan 2 3

20 Noverly 2 3

21 Qisthi Amalia 2 3

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No. Nama Siswa A B

22 Ricky Chandra D. 2 3

23 Roiyatul Jannah 2 3

24 Ryan Hermawan 1 3

25 Sahdon Fernando 3 3

26 Satria Parama A. 1 3

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 1 3

28 Thassya Octavia A. 2 3

29 Tri Susanti 3 3

30 Virgita Puspasari 2 3

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 2 3

Skor total 60 93

Skor maksimal 93 93

Persentase 64.52% 100%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 153

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 186

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 82.26%

Catatan:

1. A = Ketekunan

B = Ketepatan Waktu Pengumpulan Tugas

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Kurang

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Kurang

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Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, kegiatan belajar mengajar pada

pertemuan ini dapat dikategorikan “Sangat Baik.” Akan tetapi, itu hanya dapat dilihat pada

aspek ketepatan waktu dalam mengumpulkan tugas. Di aspek lainnya, secara keseluruhan,

hanya dapat dikatakan “Cukup Tekun.” Sebagian besar menunjukkan sikap tekun dan

serius dalam mengerjakan tugas, hanya bila guru melakukan pengawasan. Hal ini tentunya

dapat berakibat pada baik tidaknya tugas yang telah mereka hasilkan.

Ciputat Timur, 6 Januari 2015

Mengetahui

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Appendix 4. Observation Journal of Pre-Action

Observation Journal

Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

Pre-

Action I Jan 6, 2015

Pre-Action

Test

Some students sitting in the

first two front rows seriously

did the test. However, those

sitting in the next rows should

always be supervised.

Four students in the right

corner preferred to play games

on their smartphone than to do

the test

Five female students sitting in

the third and fourth row near

the door liked to chat during

the test.

Some students tended to do the

test with their friends in group

rather than work individually

Ciputat Timur, January 6th, 2015

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Appendix 5. Pre-Action Test Scores

Pre-Action Test Scores

Students’

Number

Pre-Action Test

1 2 3 4 5 Total Number of

Words

S1 24 13 13 20 3 73 231

S2 22 13 16 22 3 76 247

S3 27 19 15 22 3 86 297

S4 19 15 9 15 3 61 253

S5 22 18 13 22 4 79 289

S6 25 18 10 22 3 78 247

S7 23 15 13 22 4 77 260

S8 22 14 15 21 3 75 257

S9 18 13 9 14 3 57 225

S10 22 15 13 19 3 72 290

S11 21 15 15 19 3 73 220

S12 24 13 15 15 4 71 283

S13 25 15 13 16 4 73 281

S14 18 11 9 12 3 53 254

S15 23 11 15 15 4 68 280

S16 27 18 17 20 4 86 226

S17 22 14 16 19 3 74 292

S18 22 14 14 19 3 72 267

S19 21 15 14 19 3 72 239

S20 22 16 14 22 3 77 245

S21 20 14 16 20 4 74 241

S22 19 15 13 22 3 72 251

S23 23 15 16 20 4 78 289

S24 18 11 15 15 4 63 262

S25 23 18 17 20 4 82 243

S26 22 10 11 13 3 59 288

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Students’

Number

Pre-Action Test

1 2 3 4 5 Total Number of

Words

S27 18 12 9 15 3 57 294

S28 19 15 12 20 3 69 242

S29 22 18 15 22 4 81 296

S30 22 15 15 17 4 73 235

S31 25 15 15 16 3 74 287

Notes:

1 = Content

2 = Organization

3 = Vocabulary

4 = Language Use

5 = Mechanics

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Appendix 6: Lesson Plan of Cycle 1

RENCANA PELAKSANAAN PEMBELAJARAN

(Siklus Pertama)

A. IDENTITAS

Satuan Pendidikan : SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Kelas/Semester : XII (Dua Belas) / Genap

Aspek/Skill : Writing

Alokasi Waktu : 2 x 45 Menit

Jenis Teks : Discussion Text

Tahun Pelajaran : 2014 / 2015

B. STANDAR KOMPETENSI

Menulis

Mengungkapkan makna dalam teks tulis fungsional pendek dan esei sederhana

berbentuk narrative, explanation, dan discussion dalam konteks kehidupan sehari-hari.

C. KOMPETENSI DASAR

6.2. Mengungkapkan makna dan langkah retorika dalam esei dengan menggunakan

ragam bahasa tulis secara akurat, lancar dan berterima dalam konteks kehidupan sehari-

hari dalam teks berbentuk narrative, explanation, dan discussion

D. INDIKATOR

Kompetensi dasar tercapai bila siswa mampu:

1. Mengidentifikasi langkah retorika (schematic structures) dan fitur kebahasaan

(language features) dalam discussion text.

2. Memahami langkah retorika dan fitur kebahasaan dalam discussion text dengan

baik.

3. Membuat kerangka berpikir dan menulis discussion text dengan baik.

4. Menggunakan tata bahasa yang baik dan benar dalam menulis discussion text.

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E. TUJUAN PEMBELAJARAN

Pada akhir pembelajaran, siswa diharapkan mampu:

1. Mengidentifikasi langkah retorika (schematic structures) dan fitur kebahasaan

(language features) dalam discussion text.

2. Memahami langkah retorika dan fitur kebahasaan dalam discussion text dengan

baik.

3. Membuat kerangka berpikir dalam menulis esei.

4. Menulis discussion text dengan baik.

5. Menggunakan tata bahasa yang baik dan benar dalam menulis discussion text.

F. MATERI PEMBELAJARAN

1. Discussion Text

a. Definition of Discussion Text

Discussion text is one of informative texts presenting two contrast arguments

or viewpoints on an issue raised.1 However, it is not a persuasive text allowing

writers to be at one side. Writers should be fair to both the arguments or, in other

words, the writers should take their position in the middle of both arguments. Thus,

the more writers can be balance, the better writers can make a good discussion text.

Besides of that, the arguments should also be supported by data, fact, and evidence.

Moreover, to avoid writers' subjectivity, the number of data should also be the

same.

The arguments usually show each strength and weakness of a subject to give

readers broader insights before they make any decisions. However, not only

strengths and weaknesses, Anderson also stated that “a discussion text gives the

for and against, the positive and negative, or the good points and bad points.”2

From both definition, it can be concluded that in a discussion text, there will be

two different views presented to inform the readers about the issue discussed.

1 Discussion Texts, 2014, (http://assets.readingeggsassets.com). 2 Mark Anderson and Kathy Anderson, Text Types in English, (Australia: MacMillan

Education Australia PTY LTD., 1998), Third Edition, p. 19.

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b. Purpose of Discussion Text

The main purpose of discussion text is, indeed, to discuss about the two

different arguments on an issue. As stated by Anderson and Anderson, “the

purpose of a discussion text is to present to the audience different opinions on a

topic and, at the end, your opinion.”3 Moreover, it enables the readers to have

broader views before having decision about the issue since it is also supported by

the facts and evidence. Although both of them do not give deeper information, they

can give a short explanation about the arguments.

c. Structure and Language Features of Discussion Text

This table represents structure and language features of discussion text:4

Table 1

Structure and Language Features of Discussion Text

Structure Language Features

1. Statement of an issue

In this part, an issue is raised.

2. Arguments for

Arguments that support the issue.

3. Arguments against

Arguments that against the issue.

4. Closing statement

This part consists of writer's balanced

view about all the arguments.

1. The use of general nouns

e.g., machines, cars, etc.

2. The use of thinking verbs

e.g., think, feel, hope, believe, etc.

3. The use of connectives

e.g., in addition, besides, although, even

if, nevertheless, etc.

4. The use of varying degrees of certainty

e.g., perhaps, probably, should, could,

etc.

5. The use of modalities

e.g., must, perhaps, should, etc.

3 Ibid. 4 Discussion Texts, 2014, (http://assets.readingeggsassets.com)

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d. Example of Discussion Text

Home Schooling

Opening Many people may have many different views about home schooling.

Arguments

Pro

1. Provides better opportunities for kids to learn.

a. Be more focus

b. Have more chances to express their emotion in the

learning process

c. Not wondering peer's comments.

2. Enables students to have broader knowledge

a. Learn outside the building, rather than in the square

classroom.

Arguments

Contra

1. Have no good abilities in socializing with their peers

a. Learn alone.

b. Have little chance to socialize, to work with others,

and to understand differentiation in each other.

2. Costs higher than public school.

a. The success of the children is the only thing that they

guarantee.

Closing

Although we have to consider about many advantageous and

disadvantageous of homeschooling, we still have to consider about

our children. We should be able to accommodate what they need

rather than to argue with our opinions and assumptions.

Have you ever heard about home schooling? Is it a good idea to take it as an alternative

of formal education? Since the practice of this kind of institutions have been mushrooming

in Indonesia, many people may have many different views about home schooling.

Some people believe that home schooling provides better opportunities for kids to learn

more than public schooling does. The fact shows that students can be more focus and have

more chances to express their emotion in the learning process without wondering peer's

comments. Moreover, home schooling also enables students to have broader knowledge

since they can learn outside the building, rather than in the square classroom. Are they true?

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On the other side, although some people think that home schooling will bring positive

significances for the students, some other argue that students will not have good abilities

in socializing with their peers because they usually learn alone. When they learn alone,

they will actually have little chance to socialize, to work with others, and to understand

differentiation in each other. Moreover, this program may cost higher than public school.

is it true? It may be true since the success of the children is the only thing that they

guarantee. They have no idea to let their students become an ordinary one.

Although we have to consider about many advantageous and disadvantageous of

homeschooling, we still have to consider about our children. We should be able to

accommodate what they need rather than to argue with our opinions and assumptions.

Should Abortion be Legal?

The debate over whether or not abortion should be a legal option continues to divide

Americans long after the US Supreme Court’s 7-2 decision on Roe v. Wade declared the

procedure a “fundamental right” on Jan. 22, 1973.

Proponents, identifying themselves as pro-choice, contend that abortion is a right that

should not be limited by governmental or religious authority, and which outweighs any

right claimed for an embryo or fetus. They argue that pregnant women will resort to unsafe

illegal abortions if there is no legal option. A fetus is not a human being. Abortion is

terminating a pregnancy, not a baby. Personhood at conception is not a proven biological

fact. Personhood begins at birth. Fetuses are incapable of feeling pain when an abortion is

performed according to Stuart W. G. Derbyshire, PhD, Senior Lecturer at the University of

Birmingham (England). Access to legal, professionally-performed abortions reduces injury

and death caused by unsafe illegal abortions. The World Health Organization estimated in

2006 that “back-alley” abortions cause 68,000 maternal deaths each year in countries where

abortion is not legal. Modern abortion procedures are safe. The risk of a woman’s death

from abortion is less than one in 100,000. Whereas the risk of a woman dying from giving

birth is 13.3 deaths per 100,000 pregnancies.

Opponents, identifying themselves as pro-life, assert that personhood begins at

conception, and therefore abortion is the immoral killing of an innocent human being. They

say abortion inflicts suffering on the unborn child, and that it is unfair to allow abortion

when couples who cannot biologically conceive are waiting to adopt. Unborn babies are

innocent human beings from the moment of conception. They have a fundamental right to

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life, which must be protected. Fetuses feel pain during an abortion according to Kanwaljeet

J. S. Anand, MBBS, DPhil, Professor of Pediatrics, Anesthesiology and Neurobiology at

the University of Tennessee Health Science Center. Moreover the Declaration of

Independence states that “All men are created equal that they are endowed by their Creator

with certain unalienable Rights that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of

Happiness.” Allowing abortion directly contradicts the Founding Fathers’ intentions for an

inalienable right to life in this country.

Women should use contraceptives, not abortion, to prevent unwanted pregnancies. A

Center for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) study showed that 19-25% of women

who received abortions in 2006 had previously had one or more abortions. If abortion were

not available, women would not be so careless.

Taken from: http://thousandsideas.com/discussion-text-should-abortion-be-legal/

The Good and Bad Effects of TV for Children

By Maria Sembiring

Is TV good for children? Actually, TV is one of the most influential for society in two

different sides especially for children; it can be useful, educated, and also addictive, even

harmful. For children, it is hard to avoid television if people in the house are usually

watching TV. It is common for parents to use TV as a substitute babysitter. Also, many

parents buy videos that they think can make their kids are smart. But how does watching

TV really affect children?

In one side, TV is not all that bad; TV impact could give us some eases. First, all

programs on TV are basically designed to entertain and give information to people. They

help them relax and get to know about different news or information. They also make them

laugh because they are amusing. Next, some TV shows can educate, inform and inspire.

Many different programs have been to serve children good lessons through cartoon films,

games, music, sport, and local film series for children. It can be more effective than books

or audiotapes in teaching children about processes like how a plant grows or how to bake

a cake.

In contrast, TV exposes children to negative influences, and promotes negative

behavior. Some programs, however, are sometimes about the exhibition of violence,

sarcasm, crimes, murder, etc. For instance, twenty years of research has shown that children

who are more exposed to media violence behave more aggressively as kids and when they

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are older. They are taught by TV that violence is the way to resolve conflict – as when a

TV hero beats up a bad guy to subdue him. Moreover, it has bad effect for their health.

Children who watch too much TV are usually overweight, according to the American

Medical Association. Children often snack on junk food while watching TV. They are also

influenced by commercials to consume unhealthy food. Also, they are not running,

jumping, or doing activities that burn calories and increase metabolism.

Well, as the consequences of these bad effects, many parents should realize about this

problem. It is better if they can start to follow the good effects by selecting the good

programs for their children today. Not only it, but also they need to control their children

by accompanying them when watching TV while educate them. Last but not least, many

parents should remember to limit time of watching TV for their children because it is bad

for their health and education if it takes a long time.

Taken from: http://thousandsideas.com/discussion-text-the-good-and-bad-effects-of-

tv-for-children/

Are Social Networking Sites Good for Our Society?

The popularity of social networking sites such as Facebook, MySpace, Twitter,

LinkedIn, and Classmates.com more than quadrupled from 2005 to 2009. Many users say

the sites are good for our society, but others contend that the dangers of social media

outweigh the benefits.

Proponents of social networking sites argue that these online communities promote

increased communication with friends and family, familiarize people with valuable

computer skills, and allow contact with people from around the world. Social networking

sites allow people to create new relationships and reconnect with friends and family.

Increased communication, even online, strengthens relationships. Social networking sites

allow for creative expression in a new medium. They provide free messaging, blogging,

photo storage, games, event invitations, and many other services to anyone with access to

a computer and the Internet. Social networking sites bring people with common interest

together, offer exposure to new ideas from around the world, and lower inhibitions to

overcome social anxiety. People who have a difficulty communicating in person are more

comfortable interacting via the Internet.

Meanwhile the opponents argue that social networking sites expose children to

predators, increase vulnerability to computer viruses, lower worker productivity, and

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promote narcissism and short attention spans. Social networking sites entice people to

spend more time online and less time interacting face-to-face. The sites offer many time

wasting activities that supplant more productive activities. Teens spend an average of nine

hours per week on social networking sites. Teens growing up with these sites may not be

aware that the information they post is public and that photos and text can be retrieved even

after deletion. Consequences from over-sharing personal information include vulnerability

to sexual or financial predators and lost job opportunities from employers finding

embarrassing photos or comments. Social networking sites have no way to verify that

people are who they claim to be, leaving people vulnerable to solicitations from online

predators who are able to mask their true identities. In Feb. 2009, MySpace identified

90,000 registered sex offenders with profiles on the site, while Facebook declined to reveal

how many were present on its site. Even if the sites agree to remove sex offenders, they

cannot identify all of them or stop them from creating new accounts.

As social networking sites become more integrated in our modern culture, some people

think that the benefits outweigh any downsides, while others believe the dangers are more

pressing than any upsides.

Taken from: http://thousandsideas.com/discussion-text-are-social-networking-sites-

good-for-our-society/

G. METODE PEMBELAJARAN:

1. Ceramah

2. Diskusi kelompok

H. MEDIA DAN SUMBER PEMBELAJARAN

1. Media Pembelajaran

a. Laptop

b. Proyektor

c. Papan tulis

d. Spidol

2. Sumber Pembelajaran

a. Buku teks yang relevan

b. Internet

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I. LANGKAH-LANGKAH KEGIATAN PEMBELAJARAN

1. Pertemuan Pertama (Rabu, 7 Januari 2015)

Kegiatan Aktifitas Guru Aktifitas Siswa Alokasi

Waktu

Pendahuluan

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan pembelajaran.

Guru mempersilahkan

ketua kelas untuk

memimpin do’a.

Guru memeriksa

kehadiran siswa

Guru mengajukan

pertanyaan pada siswa

mengenai issue-issue

sosial yang sedang

diperdebatkan pada

saat ini.

Siswa merespon

salam dari guru

Ketua kelas

memimpin doa

sebelum memulai

pelajaran

Siswa merespon

pertanyaan guru

dengan

memberikan

pernyataan tentang

issue sosial yang

sedang

diperdebatkan pada

saat ini.

5 menit

Eksplorasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Menyampaikan bahwa

materi hari ini adalah

discussion text.

Siswa

mempersiapkan

hal–hal yang

dibutuhkan dalam

proses

pembelajaran

20

menit

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Inti

Mengarahkan siswa

untuk mengungkapkan

pengetahuan mereka

yang terkait dengan

komponen – komponen

dalam Discussion text

dalam konteks yang

berterima dalam

kehidupan sehari-hari.

Memberikan

penjelasan kepada

peserta didik agar

mampu memahami

informasi tertulis

(definisi, tujuan,

bagian-bagian, dan ciri

kebahasaan dari

discussion text) yang

diberikan dalam

konteks kehidupan

sehari-hari,

seperti buku,

pulpen, dll.

Siswa

mengungkapkan

pendapat mereka

mengenai

komponen yang

terkait dengan

discussion texts

Siswa

mendengarkan

penjelasan guru

dengan saksama.

Elaborasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Memberi siswa

kesempatan untuk

membuat kelompok

yang terdiri dari lima

orang.

Siswa memilih

kelompoknya dan

duduk sesuai dengan

kelompok masing-

masing.

40

menit

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Meminta siswa

mengidentifikasi

dengan tepat informasi

penting dalam teks esei

tulis berbentuk

Discussion text yang

diberikan oleh guru.

Menginstruksikan

siswa untuk

mengklasifikasi

dengan tepat informasi

penting dalam teks esei

tulis berbentuk

Discussion text yang

diberikan oleh guru.

Memberi kesempatan

bertanya bagi siswa

apabila terdapat kosa

kata sulit.

Meminta siswa untuk

membuat kerangka

esei berbentuk

discussion text

berdasarkan teks yang

diberikan.

Secara

berkelompok, siswa

mengidentifikasi

informasi penting

dalam teks esei tulis

berbentuk

Discussion text yang

diberikan oleh guru.

Secara

berkelompok, siswa

mengklasifikasi

informasi penting

dalam teks esei tulis

berbentuk

Discussion text yang

diberikan oleh guru.

Siswa menanyakan

hal-hal yang masih

belum dimengerti.

Secara

berkelompok, siswa

membuat kerangka

esei berbentuk

discussion text

berdasarkan teks

yang diberikan guru.

Konfirmasi

Memberi kesempatan

pada perwakilan

Perwakilan

kelompok

15

menit

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kelompok untuk

mempresentasikan

hasil diskusi

kelompok.

Memberi apresiasi

pada perwakilan

kelompok yang telah

melakukan presentasi.

Menegaskan

pemahaman tentang

tujuan dari Discussion

text yang sesuai

dengan konteks

kehidupan sehari-hari.

mempresentasikan

hasil diskusi

kelompok mereka.

Siswa memberikan

apresiasi terhadap

presentasi dari

masing-masing

perwakilan

kelompok.

Siswa mencatat

penjelasan guru

mengenai discussion

text.

Penutup

Memberikan lima

topik untuk dipilih

salah satunya oleh

siswa untuk tugas pada

pertemuan selanjutnya.

Menjelaskan tugas

untuk memperdalam

materi yang dipelajari

dengan membuat

kerangka penulisan

Discussion text dan

juga mencari data dan

informasi yang terkait

Siswa memilih

salah satu topik

untuk

dikembangkan

menjadi satu teks

esei.

Siswa

mendengarkan

penjelasan guru.

10

menit

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dengan topic yang

mereka pilih.

Mengakhiri kegiatan

pembelajaran dengan

membaca doa dan

salam.

Ketua kelas

memimpin doa dan

mengucapkan

salam.

2. Pertemuan Kedua (Selasa, 13 Januari 2015)

Kegiatan Aktifitas Guru Aktifitas Siswa Alokasi

Waktu

Pendahuluan

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan

pembelajaran.

Guru

menginstruksikan

ketua kelas untuk

memimpin do’a.

Guru memeriksa

kehadiran siswa

Guru meminta siswa

mengumpulkan

kerangka teks yang

telah dibuat.

Guru memberikan

salam untuk

memulai kegiatan

pembelajaran.

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

kerangka teks yang

telah dibuat.

10 menit

Inti

Eksplorasi

Dalam kegiatan eksplorasi,

guru:

15 menit

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Guru memeriksa

kerangka tulisan yang

telah dibuat siswa.

Siswa menyiapkan

alat tulis untuk

pembelajaran.

Elaborasi

Dalam kegiatan elaborasi,

guru:

Menginstruksikan

siswa untuk membuat

teks diskusi yang

sesuai dengan

kerangka teks yang

telah mereka buat.

Siswa membuat teks

diskusi sesuai

dengan kerangka

teks yang mereka

buat.

50 menit

Konfirmasi

Meminta siswa

memeriksa ulang teks

diskusi yang telah

siswa buat.

Memastikan siswa

mengikuti struktur

dalam penulisan

discussion text.

Siswa memeriksa

ulang teks diskusi

yang telah siswa

buat.

10 menit

Penutup

Meminta siswa

mengumpulkan tugas

yang telah dibuat.

Mengakhiri kegiatan

pembelajaran dengan

membaca doa dan

salam.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

tugas

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a dan

salam.

5 menit

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3. Pertemuan Ketiga (Selasa, 20 Januari 2015)

Kegiatan Aktifitas Guru Aktifitas Siswa Alokasi

Waktu

Pendahuluan

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan pembelajaran.

Guru menginstruksikan

ketua kelas untuk

memimpin do’a.

Guru memeriksa

kehadiran siswa

Guru membagikan teks

diskusi siswa yang

telah diperiksa dan juga

lembar daftar kode

feedback

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan

pembelajaran.

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a.

Siswa menerima teks

diskusi yang telah

diperiksa guru dan

juga lembar daftar

kode feedback

10 menit

Inti

Eksplorasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Guru memberikan

penjelasan mengenai

feedback yang

diberikan berupa kode-

kode yang digunakan

untuk memeriksa teks

yang telah mereka

kerjakan.

Siswa

memperhatikan

penjelasan dari guru,

sambil melihat hasil

kerja mereka.

25 menit

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Guru memberikan

kesempatan kepada

siswa untuk bertanya.

Elaborasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Menginstruksikan

siswa untuk

memperbaiki teks

diskusi yang telah

diberikan feedback.

Siswa memperbaiki

teks diskusi yang

telah diberikan

feedback.

45 menit

Konfirmasi

Meminta siswa

memeriksa ulang teks

diskusi yang telah

mereka perbaiki

Siswa memeriksa

ulang teks diskusi

yang telah mereka

perbaiki.

5 menit

Penutup

Meminta siswa

mengumpulkan tugas

yang telah dibuat.

Mengakhiri kegiatan

pembelajaran dengan

membaca doa dan

salam.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

tugas yang yang

telah dibuat

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a dan

salam.

5 menit

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J. PENILAIAN

1. Penilaian sikap

Instrumen : Lembar observasi

a. Pertemuan ke-1

No. Nama Siswa Keterlibatan Dalam Belajar

Respon

terhadap

penjelasan

guru

Aktif

berdiskusi

dalam

kelompok

Adanya

interaksi

aktif dengan

guru

1 Arga Pratama P.

2 ……

Skor total

Skor maksimal

Persentase

Skor total keseluruhan aspek

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek

Persentase keseluruhan aspek

b. Pertemuan ke-2

No. Nama Siswa Kesiapan

Belajar

Ketekunan Ketepatan Waktu

Pengumpulan

Tugas

1 Arga Pratama P.

2 Ahmad Pebian

3 ……

Skor total

Skor maksimal

Persentase

Skor total keseluruhan aspek

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek

Persentase keseluruhan aspek

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c. Pertemuan ke-3

No. Nama Siswa Ketekunan Ketepatan Waktu

Pengumpulan Tugas

1 Arga Pratama P.

2 Ahmad Pebian

3 ……

Skor total

Skor maksimal

Persentase

Skor total keseluruhan aspek

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek

Persentase keseluruhan aspek

2. Penilaian Pengetahuan

Instrumen :

ESSAY TEST

(Discussion text)

List of the Topics:

1. Teachers smoking in school

2. Having only one close friend is good

3. Single-sex school is good

4. Late comers, Go home!

5. Learning outside the classroom is much better than in the classroom

Instruction:

1. Make a four-paragraph essay discussing the topic you have chosen.

2. You are required to write, at least, 200 words. No more than 300 words.

3. Your work will not be taken as data if the number of words that you produce

meet the requirement.

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K. RUBRIK PENILAIAN

1. Penilaian Sikap

No Aspek Sub Aspek Skor Kriteria Penilaian

1 Ketekunan

3 Sungguh-sungguh dalam

mengerjakan tugas.

2

Sungguh-sungguh

mengerjakan tugas ketika

diawas

1 Tidak sungguh-sungguh

dalam mengerjakan tugas.

2 Keterlibatan

dalam belajar

Respon terhadap

penjelasan guru

3 Aktif memperhatikan

penjelasan guru

2 Kurang memperhatikan

penjelasan guru

1 Tidak memperhatikan

penjelasan guru

Keterlibatan dalam

kelompok

3 Terlibat aktif berdiskusi

2 Kurang terlibat dalam

berdiskusi

1 Tidak terlibat aktif dalam

berdiskusi.

Interaksi dengan

guru

3 Aktif bertanya pada guru

2 Sesekali bertanya pada guru

1 Tidak pernah bertanya pada

guru

3 Kesiapan belajar

3

Membawa kerangka

penulisan, dan sesuai

kriteria yang ditentukan.

2

Membawa kerangka

penulisan, tetap belum

memenuhi kriteria.

1 Tidak membawa kerangka

penulisan.

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No Aspek Sub Aspek Skor Kriteria Penilaian

4

Ketepatan waktu

pengumpulan

tugas

3 Tepat Waktu

2 Telat 1 hari

1 Telat 2 hari atau lebih

2. Penilaian Pengetahuan

Aspects Score Judgement

Content

30—27 knowledgeable, substantive

26—22 some knowledge of subject, adequate range

21—17 limited knowledge of subject, little substance

16—13 does not show knowledge of subject, non-substantive

Organization

20—18 fluent expression, ideas clearly stated

17—14 somewhat choppy, but main ideas stand out

13—10 non-fluent, ideas confused or disconnected

9—7 does not communicate, no organization

Vocabulary

20—18 sophisticated range, effective word choice and usage

17—14 adequate range, occasional errors, but meaning not

obscured

13—10 limited range, frequent errors

9—7 little knowledge of English vocabulary

Language

Use

25—22 effective complex construction

21—19 effective but simple construction

17—11 major problems in simple/complex construction

10—5 virtually no mastery of sentence construction rules

Mechanics

5 demonstrates mastery of conventions

4 occasional errors of spelling, punctuation

3 frequent errors of spelling, punctuation, capitalization

2 dominated by errors of spelling, punctuation, etc.

L. PENGHITUNGAN SKOR DAN PERSENTASE

1. Persentase Hasil Observasi

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

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Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Kurang

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Kurang

2. Penghitungan Skor Nilai Tes

a. Skor Maksimum

No. Aspek Skor Total

1 Content 30

2 Organization 20

3 Vocabulary 20

4 Language Use 25

5 Mechanics 5

b. Skor Siswa

No. Aspek Skor Total

1 Content

2 Organization

3 Vocabulary

4 Language Use

5 Mechanics

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Appendix 7. Observation Sheets of Post-Action 1

LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : 1 (Satu)

Pertemuan ke-/ Tanggal : 1 (Satu) / 7 Januari 2015

No. Nama Siswa Keterlibatan Dalam Belajar

A B C

1 Arga Pratama P. 3 3 2

2 Ahmad Pebian 2 2 2

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 2 2 2

4 Debby Puji L. 3 3 2

5 Delvi Rawati S. 2 2 1

6 Desi Yusman 2 2 1

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 1 1 1

8 Eki Wulandari 2 2 1

9 Elen Fitria 3 3 2

10 Elrico Azhari 2 1 1

11 Fikri Huda Falah 2 3 2

12 Fitria Widiastuti 2 2 2

13 Franz Azarya P. 2 3 2

14 Garry Anggoro M. 1 2 1

15 Lulu Widianingsih 2 2 2

16 Maharani Reza 3 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 3 2 3

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 1 1 1

19 M. Fierhan 1 1 1

20 Noverly 2 2 2

21 Qisthi Amalia 3 3 2

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No. Nama Siswa Keterlibatan Dalam Belajar

A B C

22 Ricky Chandra D. 1 1 1

23 Roiyatul Jannah 2 2 1

24 Ryan Hermawan 3 3 2

25 Sahdon Fernando 1 1 1

26 Satria Parama A. 1 1 1

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 3 3 2

28 Thassya Octavia A. 3 3 2

29 Tri Susanti 2 2 2

30 Virgita Puspasari 2 2 3

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 2 3 3

Skor total 64 66 54

Skor maksimal 93 93 93

Persentase 68.82% 70.97% 58.06%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 184

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 279

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 65.95%

Catatan:

1. A = Respon terhadap penjelasan guru

B = Aktif berdiskusi dalam kelompok

C = Adanya interaksi aktif dengan guru

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Buruk

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Buruk

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Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, dalam kegiatan belajar mengajar,

keterlibatan siswa/i kelas XII IPA 4 dapat dikategorikan “Baik”. Hanya saja, masih banyak

siswa yang kurang memperhatikan penjelasan dari guru. Selain itu, ketika mereka berada

dalam kelompok, sebagian besar siswa masih kurang aktif dalam berdiskusi, mereka lebih

senang bercanda gurau dengan teman sekelompok mereka. Selanjutnya, interaksi dengan

guru pun sangat kurang, sebagian siswa sudah mau bertanya, namun masih hanya sesekali

saja.

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LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : 1 (Satu)

Pertemuan ke-/ Tanggal : 2 (Dua) / 13 Januari 2015

No. Nama Siswa A B C

1 Arga Pratama P. 2 3 3

2 Ahmad Pebian 2 3 3

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 3 3 3

4 Debby Puji L. 2 2 3

5 Delvi Rawati S. 3 2 3

6 Desi Yusman 2 3 3

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 2 1 3

8 Eki Wulandari 2 3 3

9 Elen Fitria 3 3 3

10 Elrico Azhari 2 2 3

11 Fikri Huda Falah 3 3 3

12 Fitria Widiastuti 2 3 3

13 Franz Azarya P. 2 2 3

14 Garry Anggoro M. 1 2 3

15 Lulu Widianingsih 1 2 3

16 Maharani Reza 3 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 1 3 3

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 1 1 3

19 M. Fierhan 1 1 3

20 Noverly 1 2 3

21 Qisthi Amalia 3 3 3

22 Ricky Chandra D. 1 1 3

23 Roiyatul Jannah 3 3 3

24 Ryan Hermawan 3 3 3

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No. Nama Siswa A B C

25 Sahdon Fernando 1 1 3

26 Satria Parama A. 1 1 3

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 3 2 3

28 Thassya Octavia A. 3 3 3

29 Tri Susanti 3 3 3

30 Virgita Puspasari 3 3 3

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 1 3 3

Skor total 64 73 93

Skor maksimal 93 93 93

Persentase 68.82% 78.49% 100%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 230

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 279

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 82.44%

Catatan:

1. A = Kesiapan Belajar

B = Ketekunan

C = Ketepatan Waktu Pengumpulan Tugas

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Buruk

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Buruk

Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, kegiatan belajar mengajar pada

pertemuan ini dapat dikategorikan “Sangat Baik”. Akan tetapi, sebagian besar siswa masih

belum melakukan persiapan dengan baik, dalam hal ini, membuat kerangka penulisan yang

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akan mereka gunakan untuk kemudian dijabarkan menjadi sebuah teks diskusi. Masih

banyak yang tidak membawa/ tidak membuat kerangka tersebut. Selanjutnya, dalam hal

ketekunan atau keseriusan siswa dalam mengerjakan tugas yang diberikan, siswa sebagian

besar sudah cukup tekun, namun sebagian lainnya masih perlu diawasi. Hal terakhir yang

diamati adalah ketepatan waktu dalam mengumpulkan tugas. Pada pertemuan ini, seluruh

siswa mampu menyelesaikan dan mengumpulkan tugas mereka pada waktu yang

ditentukan, yaitu saat jam pelajaran bahasa Inggris berakhir.

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LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : 1 (Satu)

Pertemuan ke- / Tanggal : 3 (Tiga) / 20 Januari 2015

No. Nama Siswa A B C

1 Arga Pratama P. 3 3 3

2 Ahmad Pebian 3 2 2

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 3 3 2

4 Debby Puji L. 3 3 2

5 Delvi Rawati S. 3 2 3

6 Desi Yusman 2 2 3

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 2 2 3

8 Eki Wulandari 2 2 2

9 Elen Fitria 2 3 1

10 Elrico Azhari 2 3 1

11 Fikri Huda Falah 3 3 2

12 Fitria Widiastuti 2 3 3

13 Franz Azarya P. 3 3 1

14 Garry Anggoro M. 2 2 3

15 Lulu Widianingsih 2 2 3

16 Maharani Reza 3 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 2 2 1

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 1 1 3

19 M. Fierhan 2 2 3

20 Noverly 3 2 1

21 Qisthi Amalia 3 3 3

22 Ricky Chandra D. 3 1 1

23 Roiyatul Jannah 2 2 3

24 Ryan Hermawan 3 3 1

25 Sahdon Fernando 3 1 1

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No. Nama Siswa A B C

26 Satria Parama A. 2 1 1

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 3 2 3

28 Thassya Octavia A. 3 3 3

29 Tri Susanti 3 2 3

30 Virgita Puspasari 3 3 3

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 3 3 3

Skor total 79 72 72

Skor maksimal 93 93 93

Persentase 84.95% 77.42% 77.42%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 223

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 279

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 79.93%

Catatan:

1. A = Respon terhadap penjelasan guru

B = Ketekunan

C = Ketepatan Waktu Pengumpulan Tugas

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Buruk

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Buruk

Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, kegiatan belajar mengajar pada

pertemuan ini dapat dikategorikan “Baik”. Ketika guru menerangkan, hampir semua siswa

memperhatikan dengan baik penjelasan yang diberikan oleh guru. Hanya beberapa siswa

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saja yang masih kurang bahkan tidak memperhatikan penjelasan guru. Dalam hal

ketekunan atau keseriusan siswa dalam mengerjakan tugas yang diberikan, siswa sebagian

besar sudah cukup tekun, namun sebagian lainnya masih perlu diawasi da nada beberapa

siswa yang masih belum serius dalam melakukan revisi atau perbaikan tugas mereka.

Selain itu, pada aspek ketepatan waktu dalam mengumpulkan tugas, sebagian besar siswa

mengumpulkan tugas dihari yang sama. Akan tetapi, beberapa anak harus mengumpulkan

tugas mereka di keesokan harinya bahkan ada yang mengumpulkan di dua hari selanjutnya.

Pada aspek ketiga ini, observasi dilakukan tidak hanya di dalam kelas, namun juga di luar

kelas.

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Appendix 8. Observation Journal of Post-Action 1

Observation Journal of Post-Action 1

Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

Cycle I I Jan 7,

2015

Introducing

discussion text to

students (Definition,

Purpose, Generic

Structure, and

Language Features)

Most students paid little attention

to teacher’s explanation. Though

they listened to teacher’s

explanation, sometimes they

preferred talking to their friends,

playing games on their gadgets.

Some students, even, paid no

attention on teacher’s explanation.

Two students were sleeping.

Others went outside for the

number one, but went back to class

very late.

In group, students

identified the aspects

in discussion texts,

made the framework

of the texts, and then,

presented the results

to the class.

All students liked to learn in

group.

some students liked to be in group

with those who have sufficient

knowledge about English, for

example, Students 3, 5, and 16.

However, when they had been in

group, they did not want to be

involved in the group and spent

more time joking and chatting

with their friends.

After observing, students 17 and

21 could be classified as silent

students.

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Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

Cycle I

I Jan 7,

2015

In group, students

identified the aspects

in discussion texts,

made the framework

of the texts, and then,

presented the results

to the class.

The positive thing was that they

still did what teacher asked

While they presented the results of

their discussion, the situation were

conducive and students paid full

attention.

II Jan 13,

2015 Post-Action Test

While checking students’

homework, teacher found that

most students had a trouble

making framework of the text. It

could be seen as some of them

actually brought their framework

but did not meet the criteria and

some others, even, did not bring

and make the framework.

However, there were still some

students bringing and making a

good framework.

Generally, they did the test

seriously though some of them

should be supervised by the

teacher. Besides of that, some

students who did not bring or

make the framework found

difficulties in doing the test as they

were confused about what they

had to write.

Fortunately, all students submitted

their work on time. When the bell

rang as a sign that the subject was

over, the submitted their work.

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Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

III Jan 20,

2015

Revision day.

Students had to revise

their writing which

feedback had been put

on.

Generally, students were very

diligent in revising their work

though some of them still needed

supervising.

Most students were seriously

listening to teacher’s explanation.

Some students felt confused about

the codes given by the teacher,

then they prefer asking their peer

than asking the teacher though

sometimes they had to ask the

teacher too.

Lastly, students’ submission

punctuality was still low. There

were still some students who could

not submit their revised writing on

time, even it took two days or

more for them to submit their

writing.

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Appendix 9. Post-Action 1 Test Scores

Post-Action 1 Test Scores

Students’

Number

Post-Action Test 1 Total

1 2 3 4 5

S1 24 18 19 22 4 87

S2 22 15 17 20 4 78

S3 28 19 19 23 4 93

S4 27 19 19 22 5 92

S5 23 19 19 23 5 89

S6 23 18 15 19 4 79

S7 23 19 19 19 5 85

S8 21 15 17 20 4 77

S9 28 19 19 23 5 94

S10 23 17 18 19 5 82

S11 26 19 19 20 5 89

S12 23 13 14 22 4 76

S13 25 19 19 19 4 86

S14 22 16 18 20 5 81

S15 24 15 16 19 4 78

S16 28 19 20 21 5 93

S17 23 15 15 19 4 76

S18 27 19 17 22 4 89

S19 22 18 18 20 4 82

S20 28 19 18 23 4 92

S21 25 19 16 20 4 84

S22 23 15 15 19 4 76

S23 23 19 19 20 5 86

S24 27 19 19 23 5 93

S25 27 19 19 22 4 91

S26 25 15 15 20 4 79

S27 27 19 17 23 4 90

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Students’

Number

Post-Action Test 1 Total

1 2 3 4 5

S28 25 18 17 22 3 85

S29 23 16 18 19 5 81

S30 23 17 15 19 4 78

S31 23 19 19 20 5 86

Notes:

1 = Content

2 = Organization

3 = Vocabulary

4 = Language Use

5 = Mechanics

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Appendix 10: Lesson Plan of Cycle 2

RENCANA PELAKSANAAN PEMBELAJARAN

(Siklus Kedua)

A. IDENTITAS

Satuan Pendidikan : SMAN 8 Kota Tangerang Selatan

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Kelas/Semester : XII (Dua Belas) / Genap

Aspek/Skill : Writing

Alokasi Waktu : 2 x 45 Menit

Jenis Teks : Teks diskusi

Tahun Pelajaran : 2014 / 2015

B. STANDAR KOMPETENSI

Menulis

Mengungkapkan makna dalam teks tulis fungsional pendek dan esei sederhana

berbentuk narrative, explanation, dan discussion dalam konteks kehidupan sehari-hari.

C. KOMPETENSI DASAR

6.2. Mengungkapkan makna dan langkah retorika dalam esei dengan menggunakan

ragam bahasa tulis secara akurat, lancar dan berterima dalam konteks kehidupan sehari-

hari dalam teks berbentuk narrative, explanation, dan discussion

D. INDIKATOR

Kompetensi dasar tercapai bila siswa mampu:

1. Membuat kerangka berpikir dalam menulis esei.

2. Menulis teks diskusi dengan baik.

3. Menggunakan tata bahasa yang baik dan benar dalam menulis teks diskusi.

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E. TUJUAN PEMBELAJARAN

Pada akhir pembelajaran, siswa diharapkan mampu:

1. Membuat kerangka berpikir dalam menulis esei.

2. Menulis teks diskusi dengan baik.

3. Menggunakan tata bahasa yang baik dan benar dalam menulis teks diskusi.

F. MATERI PEMBELAJARAN

1. Example of Discussion Text

Home Schooling

Opening Many people may have many different views about home

schooling.

Arguments Pro

1. Provides better opportunities for kids to learn.

a. Be more focus

b. Have more chances to express their emotion in the

learning process

c. Not wondering peer's comments.

2. Enables students to have broader knowledge

a. Learn outside the building, rather than in the square

classroom.

Arguments Contra

1. Have no good abilities in socializing with their peers

a. Learn alone.

b. Have little chance to socialize, to work with others,

and to understand differentiation in each other.

2. Costs higher than public school.

a. The success of the children is the only thing that

they guarantee.

Closing

Although we have to consider about many advantageous and

disadvantageous of homeschooling, we still have to consider

about our children. We should be able to accommodate what

they need rather than to argue with our opinions and

assumptions.

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Have you ever heard about home schooling? Is it a good idea to take it as an alternative

of formal education? Since the practice of this kind of institutions have been mushrooming

in Indonesia, many people may have many different views about home schooling.

Some people believe that home schooling provides better opportunities for kids to learn

more than public schooling does. The fact shows that students can be more focus and have

more chances to express their emotion in the learning process without wondering peer's

comments. Moreover, home schooling also enables students to have broader knowledge

since they can learn outside the building, rather than in the square classroom. Are they true?

On the other side, although some people think that home schooling will bring positive

significances for the students, some other argue that students will not have good abilities

in socializing with their peers because they usually learn alone. When they learn alone,

they will actually have little chance to socialize, to work with others, and to understand

differentiation in each other. Moreover, this program may cost higher than public school.

is it true? It may be true since the success of the children is the only thing that they

guarantee. They have no idea to let their students become an ordinary one.

Although we have to consider about many advantageous and disadvantageous of

homeschooling, we still have to consider about our children. We should be able to

accommodate what they need rather than to argue with our opinions and assumptions.

G. METODE PEMBELAJARAN:

1. Ceramah

2. Diskusi kelompok

H. MEDIA DAN SUMBER PEMBELAJARAN

1. Media Pembelajaran

a. Laptop

b. Proyektor

c. Papan tulis

d. Spidol

2. Sumber Pembelajaran

a. Buku teks yang relevan

b. Internet

c. Kamus

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I. LANGKAH-LANGKAH KEGIATAN PEMBELAJARAN

1. Pertemuan Pertama (Selasa, 27 Januari 2015)

Kegiatan Aktifitas Guru Aktifitas Siswa Alokasi

Waktu

Pendahuluan

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan pembelajaran.

Guru mempersilahkan

ketua kelas untuk

memimpin do’a.

Guru memeriksa

kehadiran siswa

Guru mengajukan

pertanyaan pada siswa

mengenai

pembelajaran minggu

lalu, terutama

mengenai kerangka

berpikir

Siswa merespon

salam dari guru

Ketua kelas

memimpin doa

sebelum memulai

pelajaran

Siswa merespon

pertanyaan guru

dengan

memberikan

jawaban mengenai

kerangka berpikir

yang telah mereka

pelajari minggu lalu

5 menit

Eksplorasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Menjelaskan kembali

tentang cara membuat

kerangka berpikir

Memberi kesempatan

bertanya bagi siswa

Siswa

mendengarkan

penjelasan guru

Siswa menanyakan

hal-hal yang masih

belum dimengerti.

20

menit

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Inti

Membagi jumlah siswa

menjadi lima kelompok

berdasarkan pilihan

siswa

Memberikan tema teks

diskusi pada masing –

masing kelompok

untuk selanjutnya

dijadikan topic yang

akan mereka

kembangkan dalam

membuat teks diskusi

esok hari.

Siswa duduk

berkelompok sesuai

dengan perintah

guru

Siswa mencatat

tema yang telah

ditentukan oleh

guru untuk tiap

kelompok

Elaborasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Memberikan tugas

untuk membuat

kerangka berpikir

berdasarkan tema

masing – masing

kelompok

Memberi kesempatan

bertanya bagi siswa

Meminta siswa untuk

mengumpulkan secara

kolektif kerangka

Secara

berkelompok,

masing – masing

siswa membuat

kerangka berpikir

berdasarkan tema

masing – masing

kelompok

Siswa menanyakan

hal-hal yang masih

belum dimengerti.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

kerangka berpikir

40

menit

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berpikir yang telah

dibuat

Meminta siswa untuk

saling bertukar

kerangka berpikir

dengan kelompok lain

Meminta siswa

memeriksa kerangka

berpikir siswa dari

kelompok lain sesuai

dengan arahan dari

guru

Menginstruksikan

siswa untuk

mengembalikan

kerangka berpikir

sesuai dengan

kelompok

mereka secara

kolektif

Secara

berkelompok, siswa

saling bertukar

kerangka berpikir

yang telah dibuat

Siswa memeriksa

kerangka berpikir

siswa dari kelompok

lain sesuai dengan

arahan dari guru

Siswa

mengembalikan

kerangka berpikir

sesuai dengan

kelompok

Konfirmasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Meminta siswa untuk

memperbaiki kerangka

berpikir yang telah

diperbaiki oleh

kelompok lain sebagai

pekerjaan rumah

Meminta siswa

untuk memperbaiki

kerangka berpikir

yang telah

diperbaiki oleh

kelompok lain

sebagai pekerjaan

rumah

15

menit

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Mengulas kembali

pembelajaran pada

pertemuan ini

mengenai pembuatan

kerangka berpikir.

Mendengarkan

penjelasan guru

Penutup

Memberikan motivasi

pada siswa untuk

memperbaiki kerangka

berpikir yang telah

dibuat

Mengingatkan siswa

untuk membawa

kembali kerangka

berpikir yang telah

diperbaiki

Meminta siswa untuk

mencari data dan

informasi yang mereka

butuhkan yang terkait

dengan topic yang

akan mereka bahas

Mengakhiri kegiatan

pembelajaran dengan

membaca doa dan

salam.

Siswa

memperhatikan

penjelasan guru.

Ketua kelas

memimpin doa dan

mengucapkan

salam.

10

menit

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2. Pertemuan Kedua (Rabu, 28 Januari 2015)

Kegiatan Aktifitas Guru Aktifitas Siswa Alokasi

Waktu

Pendahuluan

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan

pembelajaran.

Guru

menginstruksikan

ketua kelas untuk

memimpin do’a.

Guru memeriksa

kehadiran siswa

Guru meminta siswa

mengumpulkan

kerangka teks yang

telah dibuat.

Guru memberikan

salam untuk

memulai kegiatan

pembelajaran.

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

kerangka teks yang

telah dibuat.

10 menit

Eksplorasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Guru memeriksa

kerangka tulisan yang

telah dibuat siswa.

Siswa menyiapkan

alat tulis untuk

pembelajaran.

15 menit

Elaborasi

Dalam kegiatan elaborasi,

guru:

Menginstruksikan

siswa untuk membuat

teks diskusi yang

sesuai dengan

Siswa membuat teks

diskusi sesuai

dengan kerangka

teks yang mereka

buat.

50 menit

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Inti kerangka teks yang

telah mereka buat.

Konfirmasi

Meminta siswa

memeriksa ulang teks

diskusi yang telah

siswa buat.

Memastikan siswa

mengikuti struktur

dalam penulisan teks

diskusi.

Siswa memeriksa

ulang teks diskusi

yang telah siswa

buat.

10 menit

Penutup

Meminta siswa

mengumpulkan tugas

yang telah dibuat.

Mengakhiri kegiatan

pembelajaran dengan

membaca doa dan

salam.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

tugas

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a dan

salam.

5 menit

3. Pertemuan Ketiga (Selasa, 10 Februari 2015)

Kegiatan Aktifitas Guru Aktifitas Siswa Alokasi

Waktu

Pendahuluan

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan pembelajaran.

Guru menginstruksikan

ketua kelas untuk

memimpin do’a.

Guru memberikan

salam untuk memulai

kegiatan

pembelajaran.

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a.

10 menit

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Guru memeriksa

kehadiran siswa

Inti

Eksplorasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Guru mengulas kembali

penjelasan mengenai

feedback yang

diberikan berupa kode-

kode yang digunakan

untuk memeriksa teks

yang telah mereka

kerjakan.

Guru memberikan

kesempatan kepada

siswa untuk bertanya.

Siswa

memperhatikan

penjelasan dari guru,

sambil melihat hasil

kerja mereka.

25 menit

Elaborasi

Dalam kegiatan ini, guru:

Meminta siswa untuk

memperbaiki teks

diskusi yang telah

diberikan feedback.

Siswa memperbaiki

teks diskusi yang

telah diberikan

feedback.

45 menit

Konfirmasi

Meminta siswa

memeriksa ulang teks

diskusi yang telah

mereka perbaiki

Siswa memeriksa

ulang teks diskusi

yang telah mereka

perbaiki.

5 menit

Penutup

Meminta siswa

mengumpulkan tugas

yang telah dibuat.

Siswa

mengumpulkan

tugas yang yang

telah dibuat

5 menit

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Mengakhiri kegiatan

pembelajaran dengan

membaca doa dan

salam.

Ketua kelas

memimpin do’a dan

salam.

J. PENILAIAN

1. Penilaian sikap

Instrumen : Lembar observasi

a. Pertemuan ke-1

No. Nama Siswa

Keterlibatan Dalam Belajar

Respon

terhadap

penjelasan

guru

Aktif

berdiskusi

dalam

kelompok

Adanya

interaksi

aktif dengan

guru

1 Arga Pratama P.

2

Skor total

Skor maksimal

Persentase

Skor total keseluruhan aspek

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek

Persentase keseluruhan aspek

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b. Pertemuan ke-2

No. Nama Siswa Kesiapan

Belajar Ketekunan

Ketepatan

Waktu

Pengumpulan

Tugas

1 Arga Pratama P.

2 …….

Skor total

Skor maksimal

Persentase

Skor total keseluruhan aspek

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek

Persentase keseluruhan aspek

c. Pertemuan ke-3

No. Nama Siswa Ketekunan Ketepatan Waktu

Pengumpulan Tugas

1 Arga Pratama P.

2 ………

Skor total

Skor maksimal

Persentase

Skor total keseluruhan aspek

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek

Persentase keseluruhan aspek

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2. Penilaian Pengetahuan

Instrumen :

ESSAY TEST

(Teks diskusi)

List of the Topics:

1. In art, plagiarism is part of creativity

2. Raising the minimum driving age to twenty.

3. Moving the capital city to Pontianak.

4. Having at least one extracurricular is a must

5. Internet access at school.

Instruction:

1. Make a four-paragraph essay discussing the topic you have chosen.

2. You are required to write, 200—300 words.

3. Your work will not be taken as data if the number of words that you produce meet

the requirement.

K. RUBRIK PENILAIAN

1. Penilaian Sikap

No Aspek Sub Aspek Skor Kriteria Penilaian

1 Ketekunan

3 Sungguh-sungguh dalam mengerjakan

tugas.

2 Sungguh-sungguh mengerjakan tugas

ketika diawas

1 Tidak sungguh-sungguh dalam

mengerjakan tugas.

2 Keterlibatan

dalam belajar

Respon

terhadap

penjelasan

guru

3 Aktif memperhatikan penjelasan guru

2 Kurang memperhatikan penjelasan

guru

1 Tidak memperhatikan penjelasan guru

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No Aspek Sub Aspek Skor Kriteria Penilaian

2 Keterlibatan

dalam belajar

Keterlibatan

dalam

kelompok

3 Terlibat aktif berdiskusi

2 Kurang terlibat dalam berdiskusi

1 Tidak terlibat aktif dalam berdiskusi.

Interaksi

dengan guru

3 Aktif bertanya pada guru

2 Sesekali bertanya pada guru

1 Tidak pernah bertanya pada guru

3 Kesiapan

belajar

3 Membawa kerangka penulisan, dan

sesuai kriteria yang ditentukan.

2 Membawa kerangka penulisan, tetap

belum memenuhi kriteria.

1 Tidak membawa kerangka penulisan.

4

Ketepatan

waktu

pengumpulan

tugas

3 Tepat Waktu

2 Telat 1 hari

1 Telat 2 hari atau lebih

2. Penilaian Pengetahuan

Aspects Score Judgement

Content

30–27 knowledgeable, substantive

26–22 some knowledge of subject, adequate range

21–17 limited knowledge of subject, little substance

16–13 does not show knowledge of subject, non-substantive

Organization

20–18 fluent expression, ideas clearly stated

17–14 somewhat choppy, but main ideas stand out

13–10 non-fluent, ideas confused or disconnected

9–7 does not communicate, no organization

Vocabulary

20–18 sophisticated range, effective word choice and usage

17–14 adequate range, occasional errors, but meaning not

obscured

13–10 limited range, frequent errors

9–7 little knowledge of English vocabulary

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Aspects Score Judgement

Language

Use

25–22 effective complex construction

21–19 effective but simple construction

17–11 major problems in simple/complex construction

10–5 virtually no mastery of sentence construction rules

Mechanics

5 demonstrates mastery of conventions

4 occasional errors of spelling, punctuation

3 frequent errors of spelling, punctuation, capitalization

2 dominated by errors of spelling, punctuation, etc.

L. PENGHITUNGAN SKOR DAN PERSENTASE

1. Persentase Hasil Observasi

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Kurang

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Kurang

2. Penghitungan Skor Nilai Tes

a. Skor Maksimum

No. Aspek Skor Total

1 Content 30

2 Organization 20

3 Vocabulary 20

4 Language Use 25

5 Mechanics 5

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b. Skor Siswa

No. Aspek Skor Total

1 Content

2 Organization

3 Vocabulary

4 Language Use

5 Mechanics

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Appendix 11: Observation Sheets of Post-Action 2

LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : 2 (Dua)

Pertemuan ke-/ Tanggal : 1 (Satu) / 27 Januari 2015

No. Nama Siswa Keterlibatan Dalam Belajar

A B C

1 Arga Pratama P. 3 3 3

2 Ahmad Pebian 2 3 2

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 3 2 3

4 Debby Puji L. 3 3 3

5 Delvi Rawati S. 3 3 3

6 Desi Yusman 3 2 2

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 3 3 3

8 Eki Wulandari 2 2 2

9 Elen Fitria 3 3 2

10 Elrico Azhari 2 3 3

11 Fikri Huda Falah 3 3 3

12 Fitria Widiastuti 2 3 3

13 Franz Azarya P. 3 3 3

14 Garry Anggoro M. 3 2 2

15 Lulu Widianingsih 2 2 2

16 Maharani Reza 3 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 3 3 3

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 2 2 2

19 M. Fierhan 3 3 2

20 Noverly 3 2 3

21 Qisthi Amalia 3 3 3

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No. Nama Siswa Keterlibatan Dalam Belajar

A B C

22 Ricky Chandra D. 3 3 3

23 Roiyatul Jannah 2 3 2

24 Ryan Hermawan 3 3 2

25 Sahdon Fernando 3 3 2

26 Satria Parama A. 3 3 2

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 3 3 2

28 Thassya Octavia A. 3 3 3

29 Tri Susanti 3 2 2

30 Virgita Puspasari 3 3 3

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 3 3 3

Skor total 86 85 79

Skor maksimal 93 93 93

Persentase 92.47% 91.40% 84.95%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 250

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 279

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 89.61%

Catatan:

1. A = Respon terhadap penjelasan guru C = Adanya interaksi aktif dengan guru

B = Aktif berdiskusi dalam kelompok

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Buruk

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Buruk

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Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, dalam kegiatan belajar mengajar,

keterlibatan siswa/i kelas XII IPA 4 dapat dikategorikan “Sangat Baik”. Hal ini dapat

dilihat dari sebagian besar siswa memberikan atensinya terhadap penjelasan dari guru.

Selain itu, ketika mereka berada dalam kelompok, hampir semua siswa sudah menunjukkan

keaktifannya dalam berdiskusi, mereka saling bertukar ide dan pikiran. Selanjutnya,

interaksi dengan guru pun sudah mulai sering terlihat, hampir semua siswa menunjukkan

interaksi dengan guru berupa tanya jawab, saling memberikan masukan, dan lainnya,

meskipun tidak semua siswa aktif berinteraksi dengan guru.

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LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : 2 (Dua)

Pertemuan ke-/ Tanggal : 2 (Dua) / 28 Januari 2015

No. Nama Siswa A B C

1 Arga Pratama P. 3 3 3

2 Ahmad Pebian 3 3 3

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 3 3 3

4 Debby Puji L. 3 3 3

5 Delvi Rawati S. 3 2 3

6 Desi Yusman 3 3 3

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 3 3 3

8 Eki Wulandari 3 3 3

9 Elen Fitria 3 3 3

10 Elrico Azhari 3 3 3

11 Fikri Huda Falah 3 3 3

12 Fitria Widiastuti 3 3 3

13 Franz Azarya P. 3 3 3

14 Garry Anggoro M. 3 3 3

15 Lulu Widianingsih 3 2 3

16 Maharani Reza 3 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 3 3 3

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 3 2 3

19 M. Fierhan 3 3 3

20 Noverly 3 3 3

21 Qisthi Amalia 3 3 3

22 Ricky Chandra D. 3 3 3

23 Roiyatul Jannah 3 3 3

24 Ryan Hermawan 3 3 3

25 Sahdon Fernando 3 3 3

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No. Nama Siswa A B C

26 Satria Parama A. 3 3 3

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 3 2 3

28 Thassya Octavia A. 3 3 3

29 Tri Susanti 3 3 3

30 Virgita Puspasari 3 3 3

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 3 3 3

Skor total 93 89 93

Skor maksimal 93 93 93

Persentase 100% 95.70% 100%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 275

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 279

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 98.57%

Catatan:

1. A = Kesiapan Belajar C = Ketepatan Waktu Pengumpulan Tugas

B = Ketekunan

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Buruk

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Buruk

Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, kegiatan belajar mengajar pada

pertemuan ini dapat dikategorikan “Sangat Baik”. Seluruh siswa membawa kerangka

berpikir atau kerangka penulisan yang telah mereka perbaiki dan akan dijabarkan menjadi

sebuah teks diskusi. Selanjutnya, dalam hal ketekunan atau keseriusan siswa dalam

mengerjakan tugas yang diberikan, hampir seluruh siswa menunjukan ketekunannya,

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suasana kelas begitu tenang dan kondusif. Hal terakhir yang diamati adalah ketepatan

waktu dalam mengumpulkan tugas. Pada pertemuan ini, seluruh siswa mampu

menyelesaikan dan mengumpulkan tugas mereka pada waktu yang ditentukan, yaitu saat

jam pelajaran bahasa Inggris berakhir.

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LEMBAR OBSERVASI AKTIVITAS BELAJAR SISWA XII IPA 4

SMA NEGERI 8 KOTA TANGERANG SELATAN

Mata Pelajaran : Bahasa Inggris

Siklus : 2 (Dua)

Pertemuan ke-/ Tanggal : 3 (Tiga) / 10 Februari 2015

No. Nama Siswa A B C

1 Arga Pratama P. 3 3 3

2 Ahmad Pebian 3 2 3

3 Azizah Pamugarwati 3 3 3

4 Debby Puji L. 3 3 3

5 Delvi Rawati S. 3 3 3

6 Desi Yusman 2 3 3

7 Dwaraka Daru B. 3 2 2

8 Eki Wulandari 2 3 2

9 Elen Fitria 3 3 3

10 Elrico Azhari 2 3 2

11 Fikri Huda Falah 3 3 3

12 Fitria Widiastuti 2 3 3

13 Franz Azarya P. 3 3 3

14 Garry Anggoro M. 3 3 2

15 Lulu Widianingsih 2 2 3

16 Maharani Reza 3 3 3

17 M. Naufal Heriza 2 2 2

18 M. Ridwan M. H. 3 3 2

19 M. Fierhan 2 2 3

20 Noverly 3 3 2

21 Qisthi Amalia 3 3 3

22 Ricky Chandra D. 3 2 3

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No. Nama Siswa A B C

23 Roiyatul Jannah 2 2 3

24 Ryan Hermawan 3 3 3

25 Sahdon Fernando 3 2 2

26 Satria Parama A. 3 3 3

27 Siti Nur Chamidah 3 3 3

28 Thassya Octavia A. 3 3 3

29 Tri Susanti 3 3 3

30 Virgita Puspasari 3 3 2

31 Zagina Salsabila F. 3 3 3

Skor total 85 85 84

Skor maksimal 93 93 93

Persentase 91.40% 91.40% 90.32%

Skor total keseluruhan aspek 254

Skor maksimal keseluruhan aspek 279

Persentase keseluruhan aspek 91.01%

Catatan:

1. A = Respon terhadap penjelasan guru B = Ketekunan

C = Ketepatan Waktu Pengumpulan Tugas

2. Mencari persentase:

𝑃𝑒𝑟𝑠𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑒 =𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑡𝑜𝑡𝑎𝑙

𝑠𝑘𝑜𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑘𝑠𝑖𝑚𝑎𝑙𝑥100%

3. Interpretasi persentase:

a. 81% - 100% : Sangat Baik

b. 61% - 80% : Baik

c. 41% - 60% : Cukup

d. 21% - 40% : Buruk

e. 0% - 20% : Sangat Buruk

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Deskripsi hasil observasi: Secara keseluruhan, kegiatan belajar mengajar pada

pertemuan ini dapat dikategorikan “Sangat Baik”. Saat guru memberikan ulasan tentang

kode-kode feedback yang diberikan, hampir seluruh siswa memberikan atensinya untuk

memahami kode-kode yang diberikan guru. Selanjutnya, saat siswa memperbaiki tugas

yang telah diberikan feedback oleh guru, hampir semua siswa cukup tekun dan serius

mengerjakannya. Selain itu, aspek terakhir, yakni pengumpulan tugas, juga mengalami

peningkatan, jumlah siswa yang mampu mengumpulkan tugas tepat waktu cukup

meningkat, selain itu, walaupun masih ada beberapa siswa yang mengumpulkan di

keesokan harinya, namun tidak ada satupun dari mereka yang mengumpulkan tugas pada

atau melewati hari kedua.

Ciputat Timur, 10 Februari 2015

Mengetahui

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Appendix 12. Observation Journal of Post-Action 2

Observation Journal of Post-Action 2

Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

Cycle

II I

Jan 27,

2015

Reviewing and

providing deep

understanding about

how to make a

framework

Almost all students show

their attention to

teacher’s explanation

because they were

required to make a good

framework that they

would use in elaborating

their writing.

Students had stopped

playing their gadgets

In group, students

made the framework

of the texts

As the theme for each

group had been chosen

by the teacher, students

became more active in

their group. They shared

their own thoughts and

opinion about the theme.

One of the groups, even,

tried to debate whether

some materials they had

were relevant.

Interaction with the

teacher was improved. It

could also be seen that, in

this activity, students

mostly preferred to

confirm if their opinion

was good.

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Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

Cycle

II

I Jan 27,

2015

Exchanging the

framework made to

another group in order

to get feedback

While giving feedback,

some students were

confused with their

friends’ idea.

They also gave any

suggestion to their

friends about what their

friends should enhance

and what to improve.

II Jan 28,

2015 Post-Action Test II

While checking students’

homework, teacher were

surprised that all students

brought all their

framework and they

showed a good effort to

make a good one.

Generally, they did the

test seriously. The

condition of the class

was also so quiet that

almost all students

focussed on their own

paper.

Though some students

tried to use their gadgets,

teacher found that they

used it to look up some

words in English they did

not know.

All students submitted

their work on time.

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Cycle Meeting Date Activities Findings

Cycle

II III

Feb 10,

2015

Revision day.

Students had to

revise their writing

which feedback had

been put on.

While teacher was

explaining the feedback

codes, students were

paying full attention.

Most students were

seriously listening to

teacher’s explanation.

Though some of them

did not really pay

attention, they still

caught what teacher

said.

While they are given

chance to ask, some

students seemed like

they wanted to confirm

their own opinion rather

than asked about the

meaning of the symbols

or codes.

While doing the

revision, almost all

students were very

diligent and serious as

they wanted to finish

their work on time.

Lastly, students’

submission punctuality

was increased. Though

some students could not

submit their revised

writing on time, but they

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directly submitted their

writing on the next day.

Ciputat Timur, February 10th, 2015

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Appendix 13. Post-Action 2 Test Scores

Post-Action 2 Test Scores

Students’

Number

Post-Action Test 2 Total

1 2 3 4 5

S1 26 16 17 20 4 83

S2 25 18 18 21 5 87

S3 28 20 19 23 5 95

S4 26 20 20 21 5 92

S5 28 20 20 23 5 96

S6 24 16 17 22 4 83

S7 25 19 17 22 4 87

S8 23 19 16 23 4 85

S9 28 20 19 23 5 95

S10 23 18 15 22 4 82

S11 24 13 19 19 4 79

S12 23 15 19 22 5 84

S13 28 19 19 22 5 93

S14 25 19 19 19 4 86

S15 22 18 19 20 5 84

S16 27 19 19 23 5 93

S17 22 16 17 19 4 78

S18 27 19 16 22 3 87

S19 24 19 17 20 4 84

S20 24 18 18 23 4 87

S21 26 19 17 23 5 90

S22 21 18 13 21 3 76

S23 25 19 19 22 5 90

S24 28 19 17 24 4 92

S25 29 18 19 23 4 93

S26 23 17 18 22 4 84

S27 27 18 16 20 5 86

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Students’

Number

Post-Action Test 1 Total

1 2 3 4 5

S28 25 19 19 21 4 88

S29 27 19 16 22 4 88

S30 24 19 19 20 4 86

S31 24 19 19 23 5 90

Notes:

1 = Content

2 = Organization

3 = Vocabulary

4 = Language Use

5 = Mechanics

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Appendix 14. Grid of Questionnaire Items

Theory Components Indicators Items The comments giving

them information about

what their strength and

weakness are, why they

are wrong, and what to

improve.

informs

strength and

weaknesses

informs the

reason why

they are

wrong

informs what

to improve

students are

informed

about the

strength and

weaknesses

students

understand

why they are

wrong

students

know what to

improve

The feedback

given by the

teacher

informs me

my strengths

and

weaknesses

The feedback

given by the

teacher directs

me to

improvement

The feedback

given by the

teacher

develops my

overall writing

skills

Both teacher and

students need feedback

as the bridge for

informing the ongoing

process to achieve the

learning goals.

bridges

students and

teacher

students are

bridged to the

teacher by

using

feedback

The feedback

given by the

teacher

bridges me

and teacher

Feedback as the way

teacher provides learner

the information related

to their learning

activities in order to

develop their skills.

informs

learner about

their

activities

Feedback is a

component in formative

assessment informing

students’ activities they

are doing and helping

students decide fresh

informs what

students are

doing

helps

students

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targets and plans to

achieve their goals.

decide what

to do

helps

students plan

to achieve the

learning

goals

Indirect feedback is

provided when the

teacher indicates the

location of the error on

the paper without

providing the correct

form.

indicates the

location of

error

provides no

correction

students

know where

they make

errors

The feedback

given by the

teacher is

located

appropriately

The feedback

given by the

teacher

indicates the

mistakes

incorrectly

Letting the writer

knows that there is a

problem but leaving it

for students to solve it.

lets the

students

solve by

themselves

students are

helped to

revise their

writing by

themselves

The feedback

given by the

teacher helps

me solve the

error by

myself

The feedback

given by the

teacher makes

me confused

to revise my

writing

Napaporn also states

that when giving

indirect feedback,

errors are underlined

and codes or symbols

are used to indicate the

type of errors.

using codes

to indicate

the error

Indirect correction is

useful to improve more

to students’ accuracy,

improve

students’

accuracy

students can

increase their

The feedback

given by the

teacher

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benefits teacher for the

time to provide

feedback, and makes

students be more

engaged in learning.

make

students more

engaged in

learning

accuracy in

writing

students feel

that they are

involved

during the

leaning

process

improves my

accuracy in

writing

The feedback

given by the

teacher helps

me be more

engaged in

learning

process

The feedback

given by the

teacher helps

me interact

with the

teacher

Indirect feedback

strengthens students’

memory for longer

period of time and

brings greater

opportunity to the

desired result, such as

decreasing students’

errors.

strengthens

memory for

longer period

decreases

students’

error

students

remember

their errors

students’

error

awareness is

increased

students can

avoid the

same error

they made

The feedback

given by the

teacher lets me

remember the

error I make

for a long time

The feedback

given by the

teacher

increases my

error

awareness

The feedback

given by the

teacher makes

me try to

avoid the same

errors

Indirect feedback could

be more instructional

for both learner and

teacher as discovering

the correct answer is

done by the learner.

instructional

for students

and teacher

The feedback

given by the

teacher is

instructional

for me and my

teacher

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Appendix 15. Results of Questionnaire

Questionnaire Number 15

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Appendix 16. Documentation (Photos)

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Appendix 17. Surat Bimbingan Skripsi

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Appendix 18. Surat Keterangan Penelitian dari Sekolah

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Appendix 19. Correction Symbols

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