Good afternoon, everyone, On the morning of April 29,2007,from 10:00 to 11:00, hundreds of millions of students from primary, middle schools and universities all over China joined in a national student sports program. Eleven million students in Jiangsu took an active part in this program. The Ministry of Education calls on students to exercise for an hour every day, in the hope that they will have good health to work fifty years and enjoy their whole life. Personally, I think it's a good idea for us senior 3 students to have daily exercise. Although we take an hour a day for ecercise, it is well worth it. Taking exercise helps build up our body and keep a clear mind. Therefore, we can work more efficiently. Thank you!

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Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship. Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen more to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

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书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求

第五档（ 21-25 分） 完全完成了试题规定的任务 :准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏应用了较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致；具备较强的语言应用能力有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。

第四档（ 16-20 分） 完成了试题规定的任务 :比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。

第三档（ 11-15 分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。能说出短文的基本内容，但逻辑关系较混乱，要点有遗漏， 没有写自己的认识应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求有一些语法结构和词汇的错误，但不影响理解 应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。

The polished points :The polished points :

A. 较高级词汇

B.丰富的语法结构

C.恰当使用过渡词或过渡句, 使文章结构紧凑 ;

D. 段落的优化

1. I used to like reading and writing poems at middle school.

2. Suddenly I thought of a good idea.

3.You can find my house easily.

I used to take delight in/ be fond of reading and writing poems at middle school.

All of a sudden, a good idea occurred to me.

A good idea suddenly struck me.

You have no trouble/difficulty in finding my house .You can find my house without any difficulty .

较高级的词汇、短语

• 4.Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable.

• 5.In our school, there are twenty–six classrooms.

• 6.The old photo made me think of my happy childhood.

Thanks to the good weather , our journey was comfortable.

Our school is made up of twenty–six classrooms.Our school consists of twenty–six classrooms.

The old photo reminded me of my happy childhood.

较高级的词汇、短语

1. I used to take delight in/ be fond of reading and writing poems at middle school.

2. All of a sudden, a good idea occurred to me.

A good idea suddenly struck me.

3. You have no trouble/difficulty in finding my house .

You can find my house without any difficulty .

4. Thanks to the good weather , our journey was comfortable.

5. Our school is made up of twenty-six classrooms.

Our school consists of twenty-six classrooms.

6. The old photo reminded me of my happy childhood.

较高级的词汇、短语

• 1. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.

　

• 2. I was walking along Park Road towards the east. At that time, an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.

丰富的语法结构

On hearing the bad news of his death, she went pale with sorrow.

I was walking along Park Road towards the east when an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.

丰富的语法结构• 3. The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street.

It is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.

• 4. He is surprised that the little girl knows so many things.

The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.

To his surprise , the little girl knows so many things.

What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.

丰富的语法结构• 5. We can achieve our goal only in this way.

• 6.He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.

Only in this way can we achieve our goal .

It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.

Not until he had read the news in the newspaper did he know what had happened.

较高级的语法结构1.On hearing the bad news of his death, she went

pale with sorrow.

2. I was walking along Park Road towards the east when an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.

3. The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.

4. To his surprise , the little girl knows so many things.

What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.

5. Only in this way can we achieve our goal .

6. It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.

Not until he had read the news in the newspaper did he know what had happened.

使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词

逻辑角度 合适的过渡性词汇⑴ 排序关系

⑵ 并列关系⑶ 举例关系⑷ 转折关系

⑸ 因果关系⑹ 归纳总结

⑺ 递进关系

first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least

and; too; as well as; along with; together with

for example; for instance; like; such as; as to

but; however; while; though; on the contrary

because; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence (of); thus; therefore

in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusion

what’s more; besides; to make matters worse; what’s worse; worse still; furthermore

This village is very

small. It has nearly

100 families and

about 500 people. It

used to be very poor.

It has changed a lot

since 1978 . People

here are richer than

before. Now it is

taking on a new look.

段落优化 1 段落优化 1

This village is very small ，which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are leading a richer and happier life than before. Now it is taking on a new look.

As far as I am concerned, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents however busy we are. What’s more, our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live a happy life. Only when all of us care for the aged can we build a harmonious society

段落优化 2 段落优化 2I think, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents though we are busy. Our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live happily. We can build a harmonious society only when all of us care for the aged.

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--- 覆盖所有的要点

--- 应用了较高级的词汇和丰富的语法结构

--- 有效地使用了连接成分，使全文结构紧 凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。

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