ESSAY WRITING TASK 2 WORKSHOP

ESSAY WRITING TASK 2 WORKSHOPEPT PREPARATION / REVISION

CELPADInternational Islamic University Malaysia

11ELD, CELPAD : SNECU WORKSHOP

EPT examination : 3 hoursReading 4 passages with 40 questions each 1 hour 30 minutesWriting B Essay 1 hourWriting A Data Analysis 30 minutes

2ESSAY WRITINGTime suggested/allocated : 60 minutesNumber of words : 250 wordsParagraph : 41 - Introductory paragraphs2 - Body Paragraph 13 - Body Paragraph 24 - Concluding Paragraph

3ESSAY WRITINGALLOCATION OF TIME : 1 HOUR60 MINUTES 6 STEPS OR 10 MINUTES for EACH STEP STEP 1 : MIND MAP / OUTLINE (to write the Thesis Statement)STEP 2 : INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPHSTEP 3 : BODY PARAGRAPH 1STEP 4 : BODY PARAGRAPH 2STEP 5 : CONCLUDING PARAGRAPHSTEP 6 : EDITING AND REVISING4Step 1 : MIND MAP / OUTLINE1. INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH1.1 HOOK ATTENTION GETTER : FUNNEL OR GENERAL TO SPECIFIC / RHETORIC QUESTION / ANECDOTE / STARTLING FACT / DEFINITION / DIALOGUE / QUOTATION1.2 BRIDGE 1 OR 2 SENTENCES TO LINK HOOK TO THESIS STATEMENT1.3 THESIS STATEMENT STAND, EMPHASIS, FOCUS AND MAIN IDEA 1 & MAIN IDEA 2

5Step 1 : MIND MAP / OUTLINE2. BODY PARAGRAPH 12.1 TOPIC SENTENCE 1 2.1.1 SUPPORTING DETAIL 1 & EXAMPLE FOR SD 1 2.1.2 SUPPORTING DETAIL 2 & EXAMPLE FOR SD 22.2 CONCLUDING SENTENCE 1

6Step 1 : MIND MAP / OUTLINE3. BODY PARAGRAPH 23.1 TOPIC SENTENCE 2 3.1.1 SUPPORTING DETAIL 1 & EXAMPLE FOR SD 1 3.1.2 SUPPORTING DETAIL 2 & EXAMPLE FOR SD 23.2 CONCLUDING SENTENCE 2

7Step 1 : MIND MAP / OUTLINE4. CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH4.1 CONCLUDING STATEMENT4.2 SUMMARY OF SELECTED POINTS / IDEAS4.3 RECOMMENDATION / PREDICTION

8QUESTION??What is the question?Which part is the question?How to answer the question?9Sample QuestionYou should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Achieving advancement in technologyequates to modernity. However, this comeswith a steep price for urbanites to pay as they have to face many prevalent problems like gridlock and family disintegration. Therefore, working from home provides the onlysolution to these current problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree?You should write a report of about 250 words.

10Sample QuestionYou should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Achieving advancement in technology equates to modernity. However, this comes with a steep price for urbanites to pay as they have to face many prevalent problems like gridlock and family disintegration. Therefore, working from home provides the only solution to these current problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree?You should write a report of about 250 words.

11To Understand the QuestionWork from home = the only solution to current problemsIssues?Today many problems but 1 solution (work from home)Problems:a) traffic congestionb) crimes robbery / kidnappingc) social problems drug abuse / juvenile delinquencyAGREE OR DISAGREE OR BOTH?

12Answering the QuestionAgree!Why? How? How working from home IS the ONLY / BEST solution to many problems?

13Answering the QuestionDisagree!Why? How? How working from home IS NOT the only/best solution to many problems?

14Answering the QuestionAgree and Disagree!Why? How? Work from home and OTHER solutions

15Mind Map : Agree16Mind Map : Disagree17Mind Map : Both (A)18Mind Map : Both (B)19Ready to Write? INTRODUCTION3-5 sentences only. Essay begins with introductory paragraph.Give attention to Thesis Statement (Ths St)!20Thesis Statement1 sentence (the longest!)The last sentence of Intro ParaConsists of :Stand agree / disagree / bothEmphasis to what extentFocus - question2 Main Ideas (1 for each Body Paragraph)Passive Voice

21Thesis Statement : AgreeIt is firmly agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems because of the quality of family time and fulfilling working condition.22Thesis Statement : AgreeIt is firmly agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems because of the quality of family time and fulfilling working condition.23Thesis Statement : DisagreeIt is totally disagreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the disadvantages of working from home and the advantages of government financial aids.24Thesis Statement : DisagreeIt is totally disagreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the disadvantages of working from home and the advantages of government financial aids.25Thesis Statement : Both (A1)It is both agreed and disagreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the quality of family life besides the advantages of government financial aids.26Thesis Statement : Both (A1)It is both agreed and disagreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the quality of family life besides the advantages of government financial aids.27Thesis Statement : Both (A2)It is both agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the quality of family life even though it is disagreed on because of the advantages of government financial aids.28Thesis Statement : Both (A2)It is agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the quality of family life even though it is alsodisagreed on because of the advantages of government financial aids.29Thesis Statement : Both (B1)It is both agreed and disagreed that many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they can focus on important matters besides because lack of social contact respectively.30Thesis Statement : Both (B1)It is both agreed and disagreed that many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they can focus on important matters besides because lack of social contact.

31Thesis Statement : Both (B2)It is agreed that many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they can focus on important matters even though it is also disagreed on because lack of social contact.

32Thesis Statement : Both (B2)It is agreed that many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they can focus on important matters even though it is also disagreed on because lack of social contact.

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1. INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH1.1 HOOK ATTENTION GETTER : FUNNEL OR GENERAL TO SPECIFIC / RHETORIC QUESTION / ANECDOTE / STARTLING FACT / DEFINITION / DIALOGUE / QUOTATION1.2 BRIDGE 1 OR 2 SENTENCES TO LINK HOOK TO THESIS STATEMENT1.3 THESIS STATEMENT STAND, EMPHASIS, FOCUS AND MAIN IDEA 1 & MAIN IDEA 2

34ESSAY : INTRODUCTIONAs defined by the Oxford Advanced Learners Dictionary, work is a job or a task which a person does to earn money and home is a house where people live in usually with the family. So, work from home can be defined as earning money by doing tasks or jobs in a house where family resides. There are many advantages to this type of employment and this can be the best solution to many problems. Therefore, it is undoubtedly agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems because it can help in fulfilling quality family time as well as fulfilling working conditions.35ESSAY : INTRODUCTIONIs working from home the only solution to all the problems of today? Working from home can be a solution to some problems but not for all. When people work from home, they can spend more time with their family and this creates a harmonious and loving family unit, thus preventing crimes from being committed. Therefore, it is totally agreed that working from home is not the only nor the best solution to current setbacks due to the disadvantages of working from home and the advantages of government financial aids as another solution.36ESSAY : INTRODUCTIONBy 2010, almost 75% of the companies in developed countries have adopted work from home type of employment. This way of working was unheard of before the new millennium. However, this has both advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, it is agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the quality of family life even though it is also disagreed because of the advantages provided by government financial aids.37ESSAY : INTRODUCTIONWork from home is the best way to be employed, said Maria Daud, the chairperson of an NGO for single mothers. This way of working was unheard of before the new millennium. However, this has both advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, it is both agreed and disagreed that many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they can focus on important matters besides because lack of social contact.38Ready to Write? BODY PARAGRAPHS 6 sentences only.Start with Topic Sentence (TS).Paraphrase Topic Sentence (TS) to make Concluding Sentence (CS)!39ESSAY : BODY PARAGRAPHSTo begin with, when parents work from home, they can ensure a safe and family life. Working from home, parents will be able to monitor their childrens activities and therefore can prevent the children from being involved in negative activities such as vandalism. For illustration, when parents are constantly at home, they can ensure the activities in and out of the home which their children are occupied with, will always be the positive ones. Not only that, when the parents are around, their childrens welfare will be taken care of. To explain, the parents can guide their children from befriending bad friends who can influence the children to become juvenile delinquents. In short, the peacefulness and the harmony of a family can be ensured when people work from home.40Ready to Write? CONCLUSION3-5 sentences only. Start with a Concluding Sentence (CS).Paraphrase the Topic Sentence (TS) to make Concluding Sentence (CS).Summarise / highlight important points.DONT write any new points / ideas.414. CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH4.1 CONCLUDING STATEMENT STAND, EMPHASIS, FOCUS4.2 SUMMARY OFMAIN IDEA 1 & MAIN IDEA 2

42ESSAY : CONCLUSION

All in all, because of the plus points of working from home and the strength of monetary help from the country, it can be both agreed and disagreed that working from home is not the ultimate way out of modern worries. After all, the priority is to ensure happiness among the citizens because with that, city folks have no basis to commit crime. 43Paraphrasing: Intro / ConclThesis StatementConcluding StatementTherefore, it is undoubtedly agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems because it can help in fulfilling quality family time as well as fulfilling working conditions.All in all, because of the plus points of working from home which are fulfilling quality family time as well as fulfilling working conditions, it can be firmly agreed that working from home is the ultimate way out of the modern worries.44Paraphrasing: Body ParagraphTopic SentenceConcluding Sentence To begin with, when parents work from home, they can ensure the safety of and the harmony within their family. In short / In brief / To sum up, the peacefulness and the harmony within a family can be ensured when people work from home.45Revising and EditingRevisingRevising is finding & correcting problems with content; changing the ideas in your writing to make them clearer, stronger, and more convincing.

Editing Editing is finding and correcting problems with grammar, style, word choice & usage, and punctuation.

46RevisingThis steps allows us to focus on the fluency of our paper. It is important to revise any errors we see or encounter while reading and take out any unnecessary words. This is your chance to add or take out any unnecessary parts, make sure it is easy to follow and comprehend, ask yourself is it written at the best level, and to make sure no words are repetitive. 47RevisingRevising helps to improve your writing Ask these questions Have I used the best ideas or words? Am I showing others that I know what I am writing about? Have I used the best examples or words to describe my ideas or thoughts?

48RevisingLook for:Unity Does everything refer back to main point?Does each topic sentence refer to the thesis?Does each sentence in each BP refer back to the topic sentence?49RevisingLook for:Coherence Are all points connected to form a whole?Are transitions used to move from one idea to the next?

50RevisingLook for:Details and support Does each BP contain at least two examples?Is each example followed by at least one supporting detail?

51Revising To do listTake a break from your draft before attempting to revise.Read your draft quietly and listen to your words.Put yourself into the examiners shoes.Look for consistent problem areas.Get feedback from peers.Get help from a tutor.

52EditingKeep an Error Log to help you identify your problem areas and improve your writing.When editing, review your paper for one type of error at a time; dont try to read through looking for everything at once.Editing is much like revising in the sense that you are making changes in structure, punctuation, and word choice.

53EditingAsk these questions Have I used complete sentences? Are there any run-ons? Are my language conventions correct? What about Spelling, Capitalization and Punctuation and Grammar? Have I used editing marks to make corrections?54Revising and EditingPractice makes perfect!Revise and Edit your work and get the feedback from your friends and Tutor.

55EPT BANDING / GRADINGOverall Band 6Overall Band 7Address all parts of the task some may be more fully covered than others.Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression.Uses cohesive devises effectively.Uses adequate range of vocabulary.Attempts to use uncommon words.Errors do not impede communication.Uses a mix of simple and complex sentences. Address all parts of the task.Present a clear position throughout the responsePresent, extent and support main ideas.Uses a range of cohesive devises appropriately.Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision.Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation.Uses a variety of complex structures.

56Themes / Topics for EPTGeneral topic based on recent issuesCan be answered by all KulliyyahsOpinion-basedPopular themes include:Education, Leisure activities, Sports, Technology, Communication, Growth / Development, Work place, Business, Employment, Environment, Globalization57Thank You and Wassalam.58