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Writing an interesting introductory paragraph
30th September 2013
COMPOSITION WRITING TIPS
Let’s review good writing habits and commonly made errors.
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COMPOSITION WRITING
HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
(1) 1st person account – a personal recount (2) Good to begin with a dialogue (D), makes
the writing more dramatic.(3) Use past tense throughout for a personal
recount/ story-telling.
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COMPOSITION WRITING
HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
(4) Write in 4 paragraphs (OCSR)(5) Be realistic about in your story
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COMPOSITION WRITING
AN ACT OF VANDALISM
(6) 3rd person account – telling a story(7) A passion for art went overboard,
the kid began to paint the wall.
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(1) He when to school.Went
(2) Went the family went out, … When
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN
DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes
(2) Be realistic – A man was jogging in the park when he ran straight into a bench. He was
blocked by the bench and collapsed over the bench. Is it realistic?
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COMPOSITION WRITING
Be realistic. Do you think it is likely that this man, while jogging, ran into a bench accidentally and fell over the bench? GET REAL !!
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes(3) Always “SHOW”, never “TELL”
TELL: “This was what happened that day…Jim went to get some paint…”
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESSCommonly made mistakes
(3)(a) Don’t begin a sentence with “And”
And he found a bottle of spray paint rolling on the floor.
A bottle of spray paint was found rolling on the floor.
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESSCommonly made mistakes
(3)(b) Don’t begin a sentence with “So” He was bored at home. So he thought of
spraying some paint on the wall.He was bored at home. An idea came to
him. He thought of spraying some paint on the wall.
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESSCommonly made mistakes
(4) “The boy used crayons to vandalise the floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture?
Always follow the picture(s) (at least one picture) closely.
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COMPOSITION WRITING
“The boy used crayons to vandalise the floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture?Always follow the picture(s) (at least one picture) closely.
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COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING
SOMEONE IN DISTRESSCommonly made mistakes
(6) Use the 1st person or 3rd person account consistently and correctly in your writing.
Tom was glad his parents had gone to work. I was left alone by myself.
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AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS
Commonly made mistakes(7) Use past tense consistently for all personal
recounts and story-telling.
apologisedEg He quickly apologise to the police officers
and promised never to do it again.
COMPOSITION WRITING
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Writing an interesting introductory paragraph
30th September 2013
Styles of writing an interesting
introductory paragraph!*Revision
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Writing tips?
Your aim is to interest the reader and KEEP him/her interested.
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How to make our introductory paragraph better??
DialogueDescription of
feelings/weather/state
Adding adjectives/adverbs
Adding similes/idioms
Flashback
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Examples: “Mum! Where are my shoes?” yelled Megan as
she realised she was late for school.OR
"What are you laughing it? I'm late for a major exam that determines the rest of my life and the two of you are giggling! You must have
something to do with this!" I yelled in frustration. I guess my tone was nasty as my
youngest brother started crying.
Dialogue
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The sun was shining brightly and the birds were chirping cheerfully. It seemed like a day that nothing would go wrong.
But…OR
Perspiration was trickling down the sides of my [WHO] face, every step causes a drop that was dangling at my chin to
splatter on the tar road. It was the day of my PSLE examination.
ORI woke up this morning thinking it was six in the morning. The room was dark, the air was fresh and most importantly, my
trusty clock had its shorter hand pointing at six and its longer hand in the opposite direction.
Description of feelings/weather/
state
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I proudly walked down the aisle to collect the wonderful prize. I excitedly looked to my lovable parents, who were cheering happily for me. I gave a broad grin and recalled the day of the stressful competition…
Adding adjectives/adverbs
FLASHBACK!
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When she laughed, the sunlight went splashing off her teeth like diamonds in search of adventure. I
was as happy as a lark when I received my birthday present.
Adding similes/idioms
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AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
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AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
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AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
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AN ACT OF VANDALISM
WRITTEN UNDER TEST CONDITIONS
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Compiled by Mr Tan based on good ideas
from P34 works
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Compiled by Mr Tan based on good ideas
from P34 works
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Compiled by Mr Tan based on good ideas
from P34 works
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Compiled by Mr Tan based on good ideas
from P34 works
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KAHOOT QUIZ TIME ON FRIDAY 23/10
20 questions will be taken from the last 27 slides. Treat this as
a revision for the coming SA2 Paper 1 examination.