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Jaden Angle

Ms. Caruso

Engl 1102

April 11, 2013

CAP Project

Memo:

In this article I am responding to Abbey Lewiss article called Reddit Rape Thread: Why

I Dont Care What Rapists Have To Say, with the purpose to explain that even though the sites

she responded to in her article may be a little ridiculous and we should not be listening to what

rapists have to say rather than the victims, we do not live in a rape culture. Throughout my

article I will strive to prove that claiming we live in a rape culture is untrue and really extreme.

The audience is pointed towards Abbey Lewis and everyone who has read herarticle.

Lewis, Abbey. "Reddit Rape Thread: Why I Don't Care What Rapists Have To Say." Feminspire.

(2012): n. page. Web. 25 Mar. 2013.

http://feminspire.com/reddit-rape-thread-why-i-dont-care-what-the-rapists-have-to-say/

Do We Live In a Rape Culture? No!

April 11, 2013 / By Jaden Angle

Rape, such a horrifying and intimidating word, an action that many people would rather

not even think about because of how morally wrong and disgusting it is, but the truth is that it

happens every day in our culture. The article Reddit Rape Thread: Why I Dont Care What

Rapists Have To Say by Abbey Lewis, even claims that we live in a rape culture. While I agree

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with most of the statements in Abbeys article, I totally disagree with her making the allegation

that we live in a rape culture. Now do not get me wrong, I am not saying that I believe rape is ok

because I truly am against rape and despise it! It truly saddens me to think that so many people

have been raped and are continuing to get raped. I am all for finding ways to prevent rape.

Abbey Lewis states in her article that, Of course society has a desire to learn about rape

so it can combat it more effectively, but surely, SURELY the priority should be to privilege the

voices of the victims, and learn from their experiences, and ensure their place in the discussion,

before we even consider turning to hear what the rapists have to say?(par.3). This quote just

means that the victims voice should absolutely be valued over the rapists voice, which is a valid

point that I am in total agreement with. She also explains that Reddit and Jezebel are arguing

that women can change their way of life to defend themselves by paying attention to the threads

of why rapists rape, which is on their sites (Lewis par.6), (Reddit and Jezebel is the two sites

Abbey is responding to in her article). Through this she is trying to claim that those sites are

saying the victims should make different choices rather than the rapists, and that is totally the

wrong approach. We should not put the voices of the rapists above the victims and should

definitely not put the blame and shame on the victims.

But with all that said, I believe Abbeys allegation about us living in a rape culture to be

untrue.Now, not saying that rape is not a big problem, but so is many different things such as

murders, kidnappings, and burglary. You do not see people going around saying we live in a

murder culture or a kidnapping culture do you? No. So just because these things happen in our

culture does not mean we label the whole culture, and imply that everyone is in agreement with

all these bad things happening. The Canadian University Press could not have said it better,

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calling attention to the quote in thisto more seamlessly work it into the

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you, but why? Show your reader.

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you initially talk about these sites.

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It saddens me that there is a very strong and vocal movement asking every woman alive

to think of the world as hostile to her, to think of herself as constantly in danger,

constantly under attack. Walking with a sign that says Stop the raping implies that

somewhere out there is a group of people whose agenda is, indeed, to prolong the

raping.(par.5).

This is exactly what making the allegation that we live in a rape culture is implying.

While I truly sympathize with Abbey and her strong feelings towards rape and these sites

that are giving value to the voices of rapists over victims, we can clearly see that claiming we

live in a rape culture would be overly exaggerating. So even though rape is immoral and blaming

the victim is totally unethical, we do not live in a rape culture. Comment [BC11]:

Jaden,

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Let me know if youd like to talk abo

work at any point. Im looking forwa

seeing what youll do for your portfo

-Ms. C


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Works Cited

Lewis, Abbey. "Reddit Rape Thread: Why I Don't Care What Rapists Have To Say." Feminspire.

(2012): n. page. Web. 25 Mar. 2013.

Canadian University Press, "The allegation that we live in a rape culture is deeply sexist."

Sheaf. (2011): n. page. Web. 25 Mar. 2013.Comment [BC12]: Keep in mind t

very difficult to use only one source

that you are an expert in the field.


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Pre-Writing

In this CAP Project I will be responding to the article Reddit Rape Thread: Why I Dont

Care What Rapists Have To Say, written by Abbey Lewis. The context of the article is that

Abbey is responding to the website Reddit who recently posted a thread encouraging rapists to

come forward and tell their side of the story, and to the website Jezebel who in response to the

Reddit thread wrote an article entitled Rapists Explain Themselves On Reddit, And We Should

Listen. Also I believe the audience of Abbeys article is the writer of the Jezebel article and to

the people who have read it; and this articles purpose was to explain to the audience that we live

in a rape culture and that we should not be listening to what rapist have to say, but to what the

victims have to say. Abbey is trying to get the point across, that by websites influencing rapists

to tell their side of the story we are making it seem that what rapist have to say is more important

and are pretty much sending the message that people should try not to get raped rather than,

people should not rape anyone at all. In which I totally agree with this article.

The first time I read through this article I was really surprised to find out about the

other articles influencing the voice of rapist. With that said I stand in agreement with Abbey that

we should not be putting the voice of rapist over the voice of the victims, but what led me to

respond to this article is that Abbey consistently states that we live in a rape culture and I do not

necessarily agree with that. So I feel that in my response to that I would like to say that, I do not

think we live in a rape culture just because a few websites were trying to hear the voices of

rapists and not the victims. I say that because Abbey stating we live in a rape culture is saying

that majority of the people in our culture think rape is acceptable and I do not believe that to

stand true at all.

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In my response I will include the elements of context, audience, and purpose. The

context is that I will be responding to Reddit Rape Thread: Why I Dont Care What Rapists

Have To Say, written by Abbey Lewis, and that she believes we live in a rape culture. This

response will be intended for Abbey Lewis, with the purpose to explain that even though the

sites she responded to may be a little ridiculous and we should not be listening to what rapists

have to say rather than the victims, we do not live in a rape culture. So I believe the best way for

me to respond shall be in the form of an article because not only will Abbey be able to see my

opinion so could everyone else who believes we live in a rape culture.

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