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Agenda: •Turn in Persuasive Essay (if needed)• Finish Crafting Expository Essay!

Homework:•Finish expository essay tonight if you did not finish in class. It is due at the start of class tomorrow – 3/13.

HSPE Writing Day 1: Tues. 3/18; HSPE Writing Day 2: Wed. 3/19;HSPE Reading Test: Thurs. 3/20

10th Grade EnglishWednesday12 Mar. 2014

Expository PromptNew Student

A new student is moving to your town and will soon begin his first day at your high school. Write a multiple-paragraph essay for the new student explaining what he will need to know to be successful.F?P?A?T?

Proofreading Thesis:

Declares 3 POINTS that will be addressed in each body paragraph

Commas: Coordinating Conjunctions (FANBOYS) Subordinate Clause + Independent Clause If . . . , then . . . statements

Usage: Your vs. You’re There vs. Their vs. They’re To vs. Too

Spelling: Use the dang dictionary – PLEASE!!!

Copyright 2006 Washington OSPI. All rights reserved.

Explain the difference between these

two sentences. Be specific.

A.The room was a mess.

B.Rumpled bedspread, piled up clothes, and a jumbled dresser greeted me as I pushed my way into the room.


Definition of telling and showing

Telling is the use of broad generalizations. Showing is the use of details, facts, statistics,

examples, anecdotes, quotations, description – elaboration – to develop, persuade, explain, or to enliven a story.


Show with Description

White shirts are dumb.

White shirts are hard to clean, show pizza stains, and make you look like a waiter in a cheesy restaurant.


Telling vs. Showing 1

There are many fascinating things to see at the Farmers’ Market, which has been around for a long time.

Rows of tangerines, crisp red apples, long purple eggplants, and succulent strawberries invite the shopper to stop at every farmer’s stand. Many of the farmers in the Farmers’ Market have sold their home-grown vegetables and fruits since the early 1900’s when the market was the only place to buy fresh food in the city. Now the market has expanded to include bakeries, funky antique stores, and a comic book vendor. The market is a visual feast for tourists and a keepsake for our town.

What does elaboration look like? Example Sentence Starters:

For example, . . . For instance, . . .



General vs. Specific

Rewrite the sentence on the left, using specific and interesting language.

School lunches are (good) (bad).

Choose either side.


Showing Sentences - your turn

With a partner, write several sentences that show rather than tell.

The pumpkin rolled down the hill. The man in the car was angry. You should have been at the concert. The blue car won the race. The pizza was delicious.


Showing Sentences

Select a narrowed topic of your own. Write a telling sentence on that topic. Write a paragraph or two that shows your

telling sentence. Share with a partner.


Reflection

If you had to explain today’s lesson to someone who could not attend class today and who also needs extra help, what would you tell them?


Agenda—Day 3

Discuss the Elaboration Scoring Guide and score two papers

Practice with elaboration

Score for elaboration

Reflect


How to Score Elaboration

Discuss the Elaboration Scoring Guide.

Look at the examples on the following two slides and score them using the Elaboration Scoring Guide.


Gr 10 - Drama - student sample (Pre-lesson)

Besides helping to forget the problems life throws at us for a while, acting is a fun learning experience. You get to pose as characters who are much different from yourself. You can be heroes or villains. Acting is also good because for a short period of time, you get to walk in someone else’s shoes. With acting, you can be whatever you like.


Gr 10 - Drama - student sample (Post-lesson)

Besides helping to forget the problems life throws at us for a while, like bad grades on a test or fighting with your girlfriend, acting is a fun learning experience. You get to pose as characters who are much different from you, such as Vin Diesel, Ryan Atwood, or even Harry Potter. My friend Benjamin, who goes to Metro High School, had to play a really geeky guy in our school’s production of “Bye Bye Birdie.” Actually, he’s popular and plays drums in a band and could be a poster boy for Abercrombie. Acting is also good because for a short period of time, you get to walk in someone else’s shoes yourself. You can be an evil janitor, Martin Luther King, Jr., or a giant mouse. With acting you can be whatever you like.


Write to a prompt.Your teacher has learned that a 10th grade student from another state is moving to your area. Write a multiple-paragraph letter to the new student explaining what it is like to live in your community.

Remember to • Select and narrow a topic.• Plan the organization of your paper.• Use details and elaboration strategies.• Show, don’t tell!


Score your papers.

With a partner, read your papers and use the Elaboration Scoring Guide to score your elaboration. Highlight areas where you used details that show rather than tell.


Reflect.

After assessing your paper, what did you learn about your ability to elaborate?

How was the scoring guide helpful? Be specific.

What do you think you should work on next? Put this onto your goal form as well.


Agenda– Day 4

Quick write Understand layering Identifying layering on the WASL Reflect


Quick Write

Explain why you like candy or some other food. Elaborate. Use the Elaboration Strategies handout for ideas. When you are finished, highlight the elaboration

strategies you used and identify them. Share the strategies you used with a partner.


Layering Elaboration

A thoughtful writer. . .

-Layers one sentence after another.-Each new sentence adds to or develops the thought

…like rings around a bull’s-eye.


Lists vs. Layers

Don’t add boring, list-like sentences just to make the paragraph longer.

REMEMBER – length doesn’t always mean quality elaboration.

List-like example - Having lots of choices is the reason why I eat at school. I love nachos. I like the pizza at school. Sometimes I order salad when I am feeling full. I have some favorite vegetables.


Layering sounds like

Having lots of food choices is the reason why I like my school’s lunchroom.I can select my favorite foods for lunch everyday. I sometimes pick cheesy nachos with the melted cheese sauce smothered over the hot crispy chips. If I don’t want anything that greasy, like nachos or pizza, I can choose a “made-for-me” salad. This means I get to choose what goes on it and my favorite veggies, including olives, peppers, and tomatoes. The best thing is I can pick a food that fits my attitude that day.

TOPIC


Another Layering ExampleSkiing down a Black Diamond run gives a rush

like no other. What appears like a peaceful sport is really a contrast to the 50-mph feel of the wind in your face, waist-high moguls to weave in-and-out of while your thighs scream, “Stop!” With a wind-chill of minus 10, you still have sweat dripping under your long johns as your adrenaline pumps through your veins. You can’t wait to get to the bottom of the run and do it again.


More Practice with Layering

On the WASL, students who had higher scores layered rather than listed their details.

Look at the WASL examples and discuss in groups how listing is different from layering.

Share with the large group.


Layering - your turn

Choose one of the following two topics. Then write a paragraph practicing elaboration by layering each sentence and developing the main idea.

1. The parking lot at _______ High is where the real education takes place at school.

2. _______ is what I live for on the weekends.


Read for conventions. Basic spelling (including homonyms) Capitalization Punctuation

Periods (run-togethers), apostrophes (possessives), commas, question marks especially in rhetorical questions

Subject-verb agreement, particularly number agreement with “their” (pronoun referents and verb agreement)

Complete sentences Paragraphing Conventions on your own personal list in your folder


Reflection

Look at the Quick Write you wrote at the beginning of this class today.

What kinds of elaboration strategies did you use?

Can you find evidence of layering? Underline a sentence that you could change in

which you could add some layered details.


Agenda -- Day 5

Write to a WASL expository prompt Read for conventions Compare with WASL Scoring Guides Reflect


Remember Use what you’ve already learned about

choosing a topic narrowing the topicorganizing your ideaschecking for conventions


Remember

Use what you’ve already learned aboutelaboration, showing vs. telling,layering,using specific details.


Write On Demand

Write to this prompt.You have been asked to choose one or two items that will show what life is like in your high school in 2005. The one or two items will be placed in a time capsule, a container that will be assembled, buried, and then opened sometime in the future. Write a multiple-paragraph letter to your school board identifying the one or two items and explain why you have selected them.

You may use a commercially published thesaurus and/or dictionary in print form.


Read for conventions. Basic spelling (including homonyms) Capitalization Punctuation

Periods (run-togethers), apostrophes (possessives), commas, question marks especially in rhetorical questions

Subject-verb agreement, particularly number agreement with “their” (pronoun referents and verb agreement)

Complete sentences Paragraphing Conventions on your own personal list in your folder


Compare with WASL Scoring Guides. Review the WASL Scoring Guide and

Expository Checklist.

Write.What did you do well?What is still a challenge?


Compare with WASL Scoring Guides, continued Now have a partner identify and discuss

What were the areas of strength? In what areas could the paper be stronger?

On your own Score your own paper.What score did you earn, and why?


Reflection Today you experienced writing in a testing

situation. What different approaches to choosing,

narrowing, and organizing a topic did you try?How have you improved?What kinds of elaboration did you try and

what kinds do you still need to work on? Add these to your goal form.


Feedback, please

We welcome your comments. Please feel free to try these lessons and send feedback to Nikki Elliott-Schuman at [email protected]. We appreciate your labeling the subject line as Feedback: OSPI Instructional Support Materials.

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