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Narrowing and Refining Your Thesis Statement
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A thesis statement is “a single declarative sentence that states what you want your readers to know, believe, or understand after having read your essay.”
Thanks to Professor John Tagg for this definition. See end of slide show for source information.
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FINDING YOUR FOCUS
As you gather ideas, your first order of business is to narrow your topic into something manageable in scope and size.
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Why is it important to narrow your focus?
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…in one sitting.
If your topic is too broad, it would be like trying to eat an entire pie…
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“College freshmen suffer from the blues and that’s why they’re dropping out of college.”
FOR EXAMPLE
WHAT’S WRONG WITH THIS THESIS STATEMENT?
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Too much to “digest” in a single essay.
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Why not have a small slice of pie instead?
That’s the idea of a narrowed
focus.
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Instead of writing about college freshmen (too broad), write
about a specific aspect related to college freshmen:
Freshman Experience Programs
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And instead of making a blanket generalization about your subject (“they suffer from
the blues”), present a LIMITED BUT
CONTENT-RICH FOCUS that will interest and engage
your readers.
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BY CONTENT-RICH
I mean one that passes the
“SO WHAT?” test.
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Engage your readers with
something new, fresh, interesting,
challenging. Make them WANT to read your essay.
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Freshman Experience Programs can help new freshmen adjust to the social and academic challenges of college life.
Something like this:
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Freshman Experience Programs can help new freshmen adjust to the social and academic challenges of college life.
SPECIFIC TOPIC
LIMITED POSITION
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DO THE MATH: CRAFTING YOUR THESIS
Specific topic
+ Limited position
= Interesting, Content-
Rich, Focused thesis
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Crafting Your Thesis
Freshman Experience Programs
+ Help new freshmen adjust to college
life
= Interesting, Content-
Rich, Focused thesis
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COMMON ERRORS
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PRACTICE
The following slides contain thesis statements that need work. Apply the principles you just learned and revise these into strong, focused, content-rich thesis statements.
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The legal minimum age for purchasing alcohol should be 18 rather than 21 for (the following) reasons.
STATEMENT OF FACT POSITION STATEMENT
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REVISE A STATEMENT THAT INTO
Cultivating relationships is an important part of remaining socially healthy among college freshmen.
GOES WITHOUT SAYING A FOCUSED DISCUSSION
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REVISE A STATEMENT THAT’S INTO ONE THAT’S
Birth order can influence children’s personalities in startling ways.
OF INTEREST TO MOSTLY TO WRITER
PROBABLY OF INTEREST TO MANY READERS
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REVISE A THESIS THAT’S INTO ONE THAT’S
By living in an apartment, first year students can learn valuable lessons in financial planning and time management.
GENERALIZED FOCUSED, SPECIFIC
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CAN YOU SUM UP?
¨ Is clear ¨ Asserts one main idea
¨ Passes the “so what”? test
¨ Has a limited focus
¨ Uses specific language
¨ Is recognizable (the reader “gets it”)
q Biting off more than you can chew.
¨ Goes without saying; of interest only to the writer
¨ Broad, generalized focus ¨ Vague, non-specific ¨ Ambiguity; reader doesn’t
“get” it.
A Good Thesis What to Avoid
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PRACTICE
Apply the principles you just learned to your own thesis
statement, creating (or revising) as needed to make it strong, clear,
focused, and interesting. Work with a partner or peer tutor,
as needed.
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ACKNOWLEDGMENTS Some information about thesis statements was excerpted from “The Discovering Ideas
Handbook,” by John Tagg. You may access this source at http://daphne.palomar.edu/handbook/handbook.htm#toc
Created by Elaine Minamide Palomar College
Updated Spring 2015