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Week 9 :“ WORD CHOICE IN EDITING “

Matakuliah : EDITING

Tahun : 2006

Versi : 01/01

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Learning Outcomes

You are expexted

to be able to use editing system

to find and edit

incorrect words in a manuscript.

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Introduction

If you frequently find words like "awkward," "vague,“or "wordy" in between the lines and on the marginsof your graded papers, this is the handout for you.

Keep in mind that this handout is intended for use during therevision process. Finding the right words is fundamentally anissue of choice, which means first locating what’s not quiteright with original choices.

Revising for word choice is not about prettifying your writingor sounding sophisticated; it is about expressing your ideasclearly and effectively.

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Steps in EditingReview your Diction:Remember that others are reading your paper and

that even the choice of one word can affect their

response to it. Try to anticipate their response, and

choose your words accordingly.

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Steps in Editing

Example:

• Original: The media's exploitation of the Watergate scandal showed how biased it was already.

• Edited: The media's coverage of the Watergate scandal suggests that perhaps those in the media had already determined Nixon’s guilt.

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Increasing Clarity by Eliminating Wordiness:I came to the realization that = I realized

thatShe is of the opinion that = She thinks thatConcerning the matter of = AboutDuring the course of = DuringIn the event that = IfIn the process of = During, while

Helpful Hints for the Wordy

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Clichés: Why to avoid them and how

Clichés are catchy little phrases so frequently used

that they’ve become trite, corny, or annoying. They

are problematic in our writing because theiroveruse has diminished their impact and becausethey require several words where just one woulddo. Example:Agree to disagree = DisagreeLast but not least = LastUp in the air = Unknown/undecided

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Can you read these right the first time?1) The bandage was wound around the wound.

2) The farm was used to produce produce.

3) The dump was so full that it had to refuse more refuse.

4) We must polish the Polish furniture.

5) He could lead if he would get the lead out.

Word Traps

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