Unit 1 Assessment Unit 1 Assessment FeedbackFeedback

Formal Formative AssessmentFormal Formative Assessment

General FeedbackGeneral Feedback

► Pre-write until it hurtsPre-write until it hurts► Follow directions…Follow directions…

If the question asks you to base your response on If the question asks you to base your response on the question before…make sure your answers the question before…make sure your answers jivejive

►Most points were lost for this reasonMost points were lost for this reason►Needed to nail the characteristics for a 5 in Needed to nail the characteristics for a 5 in

order to get itorder to get it► Couldn’t just have 4 poorly explained Couldn’t just have 4 poorly explained

specific examplesspecific examples

Be on Time or EarlyBe on Time or Early

►Block 1: 9/20- 45%Block 1: 9/20- 45%►Block 3: 10/21- 48%Block 3: 10/21- 48%►Block 4: 13/19- 68 %Block 4: 13/19- 68 %►Block 5: 10/20- 50%Block 5: 10/20- 50%►Follow Directions and turn your work Follow Directions and turn your work

in.in.

Question 3Question 3

►Yes, what the Nazis did was horribleYes, what the Nazis did was horrible They are guiltyThey are guilty

►However, punishment is based on ID However, punishment is based on ID formation, not the fact that they are formation, not the fact that they are guiltyguilty

Paragraph StructureParagraph Structure

►Topic sentence, make sure it relates Topic sentence, make sure it relates back to argumentback to argument

►Evidence, multiple examples (elevated Evidence, multiple examples (elevated examples from class) examples from class)

►Conclusion, explain importance of Conclusion, explain importance of what you just saidwhat you just said

Specifically..Specifically..

► The most effective paragraphsThe most effective paragraphs Explained the contextExplained the context

►Said which type of individual came from this societySaid which type of individual came from this society►How the individual turned outHow the individual turned out

Concluding sentence was related back to argument Concluding sentence was related back to argument and stated importance of the paragraphand stated importance of the paragraph

► Example: Clearly, Andrew Carnegie overcame Example: Clearly, Andrew Carnegie overcame his difficult context and improved his life as his difficult context and improved his life as well as the lives of many other Americans. well as the lives of many other Americans. Thus, individuals form their own identity.Thus, individuals form their own identity.

TransitionsTransitions

►Words are effectiveWords are effective Then, next, Second Then, next, Second

►Sentences are even better!Sentences are even better! Just like Adolf Hitler, Vlad the Imapler had Just like Adolf Hitler, Vlad the Imapler had

a difficult childhood and formed his own a difficult childhood and formed his own identity.identity.

Likewise, Charles Manson formed his own Likewise, Charles Manson formed his own identity despite his surroundings in 1960s identity despite his surroundings in 1960s America. America.

GrammarGrammar

►No Comma Splices!No Comma Splices! Don’t join two complete sentences by a Don’t join two complete sentences by a

commacomma

►Andrew Carnegie went to the steel Andrew Carnegie went to the steel mill, he was a busy man.mill, he was a busy man. Andrew Carnegie went to the steel mill; he Andrew Carnegie went to the steel mill; he

was a busy man.was a busy man. Andrew Carnegie went to the steel mill Andrew Carnegie went to the steel mill

and he was a busy manand he was a busy man

SpellingSpelling

►Nazi not Natzi (sounding it out doesn’t Nazi not Natzi (sounding it out doesn’t help you here)help you here)

►Their, there, and they’reTheir, there, and they’re►1960s, Nazis 1960s, Nazis

Not 1960’s or Nazi’s Not 1960’s or Nazi’s Unless you mean possession Unless you mean possession

►Don’t use I, we, you, your Don’t use I, we, you, your ►Be formalBe formal

Concluding ParagraphsConcluding Paragraphs

►Rephrase your argumentRephrase your argument►Tell me why your thesis is important, Tell me why your thesis is important,

why this answer matterswhy this answer matters►Example: If individuals don’t control Example: If individuals don’t control

their identity formation, they can’t be their identity formation, they can’t be found guilty for crimes committed.found guilty for crimes committed.

Where to go for help…Where to go for help…

►Mr. McLaughlinMr. McLaughlin►Dr. MordenteDr. Mordente►Writing booksWriting books► Block 1: Catherine BarnaBlock 1: Catherine Barna

Paragraph StructureParagraph Structure► Block 3: Josh GelberBlock 3: Josh Gelber

Detail SelectionDetail Selection► Block 4: Gio CzareckiBlock 4: Gio Czarecki

Phrasing Phrasing ► Block 5: Gabby MundBlock 5: Gabby Mund

Example Integration Example Integration