to what extent do you agree?
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Essay writing strategies
The essay
The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Identifying the issues
Traffic in cities today is a problemTraffic problems are mainly due to
individuals travelling for work, study or shopping purposes
Today people can work, study or shop from home
Clarifying position
Agreeing/disagreeing with the three ideas
Agreeing partly but not agreeing it is the only way
Signalling your position with linking words
Even though people can work from home, nevertheless , it is unrealistic to think they (people) would all want to.
It is certainly true that distance learning is very efficient. However, there would be a lack of social contact for students.
It may be the case that this presents a possible solution, but it would be a very unpopular one.
Putting the paragraphs in a logical order
1. Traffic is a problem and causes of traffic problems
2. Distance working, studying and shopping possibilities
3. Limitations of this solution 4. Homeworking can reduce the problems, but not
the only solution
Signalling the organization
1. It is certainly true that today traffic in cities has become a major problem. Probably this is mainly due to individuals (instead of people) travelling for work, study (instead of education) or shopping purposes
2. It is also true today such daily commuting (instead of travelling) is not always necessary because people can do these things (avoiding repetition instead of travelling, education, shopping) from home.
3. However, even if everyone had the opportunity to work from home, it is unrealistic to think they would all want to.
4. So, in conclusion, I think while this practice (avoiding repetition) could decrease the traffic problems in our cities, it is mostly unlikely to be an acceptable solution. In terms of other solutions, perhaps we need to think of
Supporting main ideas
It is certainly true that today traffic in cities has become a major problem. This is obvious from the number of vehicles on our roads and the amount of pollution they cause
Probably this is mainly due to individuals travelling for work, study or shopping purposes. This is evident in the rush hours we experience every morning and evening.
It is also true today such daily commuting is not always necessary because people can do these things from home. We can see
this in the options Information Technology gives us today.
Using impersonal expression for a more academic style
It’s obvious that/It is the case that /It is certainly true that/Probably this is mainly due to