ZS Script Development

EXT.BLANK SCREEN

REPORTER (VOICE OVER)

The tragic deaths of several members of the Bloom

family has sparked a rage within the small community.

Though not the first family to suffer this fate let us

hope it's the last. The twins-twin are the only one

left. ELIZA and IVY Bloom were so close before-

FADE IN

EXT. DAY. STREET.

IVY, an eccentrically dressed girl with brown hair who is average height

walks past ELIZA, IVY'S twins house shaking a tub of pills.

INT. DAY. THE BLOOM HOUSEHOLD.

ELIZA a professional girl with brown hair and average height, inside the

house also shaking a tub of pills creating a synchronous rhythmic sound

to clash with the music in the background.

TITLE: FRACTURE

ELIZA stands in front of a mirror dressed in smart

casual clothing, she turns to the left.ELIZA looks down

at her wrist showing her watch.

FLASHBACK TO:

INT. DAY. THE BLOOM HOUSEHOLD.

IVY stands in front of the mirror laughing and smiling at her

appearance.She wears casual clothes and leaves quickly when she hears

something in the house.

PRESENT

ELIZA looks on the ground at a loose pair of

handcuffs,then at a clear glistening knife nearby, her

eyes go to family photos then back to the knife and

looks down at the floor.

Radio turns on.

REPORTER (VOICE OVER)

The murderous serial killer responsible for the deaths

of many is yet to be found. Who will she strike

next?Should we be losing faith in our police?

ELIZA stares down at the knife that is in her hand confused.

The sound of the pills shaking starts again and she drops the knife

causing a clanging sound to fill the space. She picks up the knife places

it back where it was and leaves the house.

The shaking pills stops.

ELIZA runs her hands through her hair and leaves.

Comment [s1]: Editing. This could be done in various ways in order for a voice over to be successful we must be sure to have a strong overlay for the voice over to be put on top of. To create a more “mysterious” effect we could have the screen set to blank and have this voice over on top to create enigmas and create confusion in the audience or have montage editing.

Comment [s2]: This fade in transition should be kept simple again in order to continue building enigmas within the audience.

Comment [s3]: Match on action

Comment [s4]: cross cutting

Comment [s5]: The title should have a black background and the text should be white in order to connote purity in this world of evil. This will last for around 3-5 seconds.

Comment [s6]: This should be focused on when editing including a continuity shot I order to increase verisimilitude. Helping the viewer make sense of the action by implying spatial relationships and ensuring smooth flows from shot to shot.

Comment [s7]: This should be illustrated with lots of images in one frame shot gradually increasing in sync with the music clearly showing the audience that this is a flashback.

Comment [s8]: The change I times may create confusion for the audience especially when it comes to editing we must be able to clarify and identify the conventions of the “flashback” or being in the present time. This could be as simple as having the word “present” being edited in a corner.

Comment [s9]: Increasing pace, having a short shot duration conveys action and urgency making the audience panic.

Comment [s10]: This may be playing off screen and will use again face paced editing and may come in form of a voice over thus being asynchronous.

Comment [s11]: Action must be shown through insert shots

ZS Script Development

EXT. DAY. STREET.

ELIZA makes her way to work passing the graveyard on the way there, her

eyes drift to the gravestones lingering on one longer than the others,she

shakes her head and continues walking.Enters the police station.

ELIZA walks past the police station with MASON a dark

haired tall police detective her colleague,having an

inaudible conversation as the pill shaking grows

louder.ELIZA looks behind her feeling eyes on her.

IVY watches from the distance resting on a tree. She pours some pills

onto the floor and walks away leaving them in the grass.

ELIZA leaves MASON with a brisk goodbye and walks away clasping her hands

together.

On her street again she looks around before entering her house again.

Comment [s12]: Eyeline match

Comment [s13]: POV shot must be edited in order for the 180 degree rule not to be broken.

Comment [s14]: No drastic editing needed having it slow paced increases the realism of the situation.