Here is my cover sheet.

English 1101 Final Portfolio Project Title

Table of Contents

Analytical Cover Letter ....................................................................................................................1

Quality Comparison .........................................................................................................................4

Least Successful Article Response ......................................................................................5

Most Successful Article Response .......................................................................................7

“What’s the Difference?” .....................................................................................................9

Revision Samples ...........................................................................................................................11

Least Successful Article Response (with markup) ............................................................12

Least Successful Article Response (final) .........................................................................14

Most Successful Article Response (with markup) .............................................................16

Most Successful Article Response (final) ..........................................................................18

Most Successful Essay (with markup) ...............................................................................20

Most Successful Essay (final) ............................................................................................25

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June 30, 2010 Matthew R. Horton, Ph. D. Assistant Professor of English Gainesville State College Oconee Campus 313b Oconee Classroom 1201 Bishop Farms Parkway Watkinsville, GA 30677 Dear Dr. Horton, First paragraph. Second paragraph. Third paragraph. Fourth paragraph. Fifth paragraph. Sixth paragraph. Sincerely, Michael G. Smith

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Least Successful Article Response

Hell Hath No Limits, Unless We Reconsider

Barry, Wendell. "Faustian Economics: Hell Hath No Limits." Harper's Magazine. The Harper's

Magazine Foundation, May 2008. Web. 25 August 2011.

Wendell Berry wants us to understand human’s tendency to think of themselves as

limitless creatures. He believes that humans see themselves as higher powers than any other

beings and that we make decisions for the entire world based on our human needs. For example,

he believes that humans use the world’s natural resources as if they will always be available to

us. Natural resources can only be used for a certain amount of years until they do not exist. He

thinks that humans are using these resources as if they do not have limits because humans only

want what is best for them at the moment. Once the natural resources have diminished, the

humans alive at the point in time will have to search for resources somewhere else. According to

Berry, this makes us selfish, since we are only concerned about ourselves and not the humans

that will live after us. He explains that humans have lost their “neighborliness, stewardship,

thrift, temperance, generosity, care, kindness, friendship, loyalty, and love” for others. A simple

review of our lives should make us revaluate how we can become these words in our daily lives

again.

This article is culturally significant because humans are wasting resources in order to

improve the economy. The part of human culture this article is pertaining to is the economy,

which has to do with all humans because money is a necessity to life. Although it is a challenge

to simply change the way of our society, it is an important factor of the world’s future. Limiting

ourselves to using a restricted amount of natural resources is worth considering because these

resources will not always subsist. We can gain a longer time to use these resources if we limit

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our consumption. By creating other sources of power and fuel, we can prolong the use of the

natural resources all over the world. It is significant because almost all areas of our world are

dependent on the use of natural resources. Cars, which exist in all parts of society, need oil.

Students at schools and universities need to have paper to complete assignments. People’s choice

to reconsider the consumption of natural resources is critical for the world’s future inhabitants.

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Most Successful Article Response

Taking a New Path of Education

Thompson, Clive. "How Khan Academy Is Changing the Rules of Education." Wired Magazine.

Conde Nast Digital, 15 July 2011. Web. 10 Nov. 2011.

Thompson believes that there is a new era to education. Khan Academy is an online

approach to teach students new ideas and increase their success rate. After interviewing students

and their teacher, Thompson realized that this website is allowing students to overachieve faster

than they could in a typical classroom. Thompson believes that Khan Academy is increasing the

students’ ability to do mathematical problems because of its one on one teaching. This permits

the each of the students to have more attention and help individually, which leads to an increase

of scores. Thompson explains how the students are doing mathematical problems that are usually

taught in high school or even college. He believes that this technological advance is the future in

education. Thompson states, “his foundation had researched unemployment and found math to

be a significant stumbling block” when referring to Bill Gates’ foundation. This is simply

another reason why Thompson believes that this new form of education on the internet is

extremely necessary for our nation’s students, since they will be our future employees.

This article is significant to our culture because our nation’s students will become the

future adults and workers in the United States. To enhance our employees’ abilities and

knowledge, it is in our best interest to educate them to their greatest ability while they are in

school. The area of culture that this article examines is the entire nation because education

affects everyone. Every child must attend school and every other citizen will parent, employ, or

have some sort of relationship with these children. Because education affects so many different

people, it is important to realize how much of an impact this Khan Academy and other online

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education can educate our nation’s future leaders. With an improvement of everyday learning,

students will be more equipped to tackle daily problems. The improvement can increase our

employment rate and therefore economy. The result of higher education in our nation is a better

future for everyone who lives here.

Here is my difference piece.

Least Successful Article Response

Hell Hath No Limits, Unless We Reconsider

Bearry, Wendell. "Faustian Economics: Hell Hath No Limits." Harper's Magazine. The Harper's

Magazine Foundation, May 2008. Web. 25 August 2011.

Wendell Berry wants us to understand human’s the tendency to think of themselves

ourselves as limitless creatures. He believes that humans see themselves as higher powers

having more power than any other beings and that we make decisions for the entire world based

on our human needs. For example, he believes that humans use the world’s natural resources as

if they will always be available to us. Nevertheless, nNatural resources can only be used for a

certain amount of years until before they do not cease to exist. He thinks that humans are using

these resources as if they do not have limits because humans only want what is best for them at

the moment. Once the natural resources have diminished, the humans alive at the point in time

will have to search for resources somewhere else. According to Berry, this makes us selfish,

since we are only concerned about ourselves and not the humans that will live after us. He

explains that humans have lost their “neighborliness, stewardship, thrift, temperance, generosity,

care, kindness, friendship, loyalty, and love” for others. A simple review of our lives should

make us revaluate how we can become these words in our daily lives again.

This article is culturally significant because humans are wasting resources in order to

improve the economy. The part of human culture this article is pertaining to is the economy,

which has to do with all humans because money is a necessity to life. Although it is a challenge

to simply change the way of our society, it is an important factor of the world’s future. Limiting

ourselves to using a restricted amount of natural resources is worth considering because these

resources will not always subsist. We can gain a longer time to use these resources if we limit

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our consumption. By creating other sources of power and fuel, we can prolong the use of the

natural resources all over the world. It is significant because almost all areas of our world are

dependent on the use of natural resources. Cars, which exist in all parts of society, need oil.

Students at schools and universities need to have paper to complete assignments. People’s choice

to reconsider the consumption of natural resources is critical for the world’s future inhabitants.

Least Successful Article Response

Hell Hath No Limits, Unless We Reconsider

Berry, Wendell. "Faustian Economics: Hell Hath No Limits." Harper's Magazine. The Harper's

Magazine Foundation, May 2008. Web. 25 August 2011.

Wendell Berry wants us to understand the tendency to think of ourselves as limitless

creatures. He believes that humans see themselves as having more power than any other beings

and that we make decisions for the entire world based on our human needs. For example, humans

use the world’s natural resources as if they will always be available to us. Nevertheless, natural

resources can only be used for a certain amount of years before they cease to exist. He thinks that

humans are using these resources as if they do not have limits because humans only want what is

best for them at the moment. Once the natural resources have diminished, the humans alive at the

point in time will have to search for resources somewhere else. According to Berry, this makes

us selfish, since we are only concerned about ourselves and not the humans that will live after us.

He explains that humans have lost their “neighborliness, stewardship, thrift, temperance,

generosity, care, kindness, friendship, loyalty, and love” for others. A simple review of our lives

should make us revaluate how we can become these words in our daily lives again.

This article is culturally significant because humans are wasting resources in order to

improve the economy. The part of human culture this article is pertaining to is the economy,

which has to do with all humans because money is a necessity to life. Although it is a challenge

to simply change the way of our society, it is an important factor of the world’s future. Limiting

ourselves to using a restricted amount of natural resources is worth considering because these

resources will not always subsist. We can gain a longer time to use these resources if we limit

our consumption. By creating other sources of power and fuel, we can prolong the use of the

natural resources all over the world. It is significant because almost all areas of our world are

dependent on the use of natural resources. Cars, which exist in all parts of society, need oil.

Students at schools and universities need to have paper to complete assignments. People’s choice

to reconsider the consumption of natural resources is critical for the world’s future inhabitants.

Most Successful Article Response

Taking a New Path of Education

Thompson, Clive. "How Khan Academy Is Changing the Rules of Education." Wired Magazine.

Conde Nast Digital, 15 July 2011. Web. 10 Nov. 2011.

Thompson believes that there is a new era to education. Khan Academy is an online

approach to teach students new ideas and increase their success rate. After interviewing students

and their teacher, Thompson realized that this website is allowing students to overachieve faster

than they could in a typical classroom. Thompson believes that Khan Academy is increasing the

students’ ability to do mathematical problems because of its one on one teaching. This permits

the each of the students to have more attention and help individually, which leads to an increase

of scores. Thompson explains how the students are doing mathematical problems that are usually

taught in high school or even college. He believes that this technological advance is the future in

education. Thompson states, “his foundation had researched unemployment and found math to

be a significant stumbling block” when referring to Bill Gates’ foundation. This is simply

another reason why Thompson believes that this new form of education on the internet is

extremely necessary for our nation’s students, since they will be our future employees.

This article is significant to our culture because our nation’s students will become the

future adults and workers in the United States. To enhance our employees’ abilities and

knowledge, it is in our best interest to educate them to their greatest ability while they are in

school. The area of culture that this article examines is the entire nation because education

affects everyone. Every child must attend school and every other citizen will parent, employ, or

have some sort of relationship with these children. Because education affects so many different

people, it is important to realize how much of an impact this Khan Academy and other online

education can educate our nation’s future leaders. With an improvement of everyday learning,

students will be more equipped to tackle daily problems. The improvement can increase our

employment rate and therefore economy. The result of higher education in our nation is a better

future for everyone who lives here.