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English 105, Meeting 4by Teri Tosspon, Heald College

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Meeting 4Review: Commas/Capitalization, Thesis Intros/ConclusionsNew material: Run on SentencesBody ParagraphsCompare/Contrast

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Futbol del Tosspon or some variation thereof15 minutes to correct the capitalization and punctuation on the handoutDecide a batting orderchoose which player is going first. That player is responsible for answering the question drawn.The ball will move one line forward for each ITEM the player corrects from the handout, IN ORDERIf they player misses one, the other team has a chance to steal the ball and move it down the field the opposite direction. If they make an error, the original team can steal backBoth teams will try to move the ball down the fieldWhen a team scores, the ball starts all the way at the other end of the field.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Combining SentencesCoordinating 1.Use a comma & a coordinating conjunctionThe speaker rose to his feet, and the room became quiet.2. Use a semicolon, an adverbial conjunction, and a comma I worked hard; therefore, I expected results.3. Use a semicolonI worked hard; I expected results

Subordinating1. Subordinating ConjunctionsWhile he was eating breakfast, the news came on.

2. relative pronoun. (Who, whose, whoever, what, whatever, whichever, when, that)The researcher who was studying diabetes had a breakthrough.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Ask for student input as much as possible. 4ClausesA clause is a group of words with a subject and a verbSubjectVerbYoustink.Sallyis talking.SubjectVerbIlovegrammarSallyis talkingloudlyMost clauses have further information after the verbPowerpoint TemplatesPage #Two Types of ClausesIndependent clause (Main clause)Can stand alone as a sentenceCan be joined to another clauseFred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder.Dependent clause (Subordinate clause)Cannot stand alone as a sentenceMust be joined to an independent clauseBecause he wanted to make his own firecrackers.

A word that joins clauses is a conjunctionPowerpoint TemplatesPage #

Joining ClausesA dependent clause can be joined to an independent clause to make a sentenceFred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder because he wanted to make his own firecrackers. OrBecause he wanted to make his own firecrackers, Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder.When the sentence starts with the dependent clause, it must have a comma before the independent clause

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Run-ons green book pg 32-34Run-ons are independent clauses that have been combined incorrectly. There are several types:The AND run-onThe Fused run-onThe comma splice

We will be going into detail on each one

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #The and run on (pg 146)two or more relatively long independent clauses with a coordinating conjunction without any punctuation.

Goal 1 AND per sentence (some situations warrant 2)(Because this has no punctuation, we have to read it in one breath.) I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA and we liked each other immediately and we soon became friends and we often hang out at each others houses.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #9The Fused run ontwo or more independent clauses run together without any punctuation. The girls made the fire the boys cooked the steaks.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #The comma splice run-on The comma splice: two or more independent clauses run together with only a comma.

I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA, we soon became friends.

Sounds right? It is actually two separate independent ideas/clauses. We COULD add a ; (semicolon) to make it correct, or we could separate into two sentences.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Run-onsIn the story of Fred, identify what kind of run-on these are!Fred didnt throw the firecracker, he placed it between his legs, he wanted to put the lighter away first.Comma spliceFusedThe fuse burned too quickly before he could throw it the explosive blew up between his legs.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #There are 3 ways to fix Run-OnsMake into 2 (or more) separate sentences.Make a compound sentence *using the methods of coordination*Make a complex sentence *using the methods of subordination*

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Practice- Packet1. I'd like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now. 2. She gives wonderful parties, I can't wait for her next one. 3. The people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together. 4. I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma my brother lives out there. 5. He was beaming he got an A on the exam.

1. No Change! I'd like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now. 2. Run On! She gives wonderful parties. I can't wait for her next one. 3. Fragment! The people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together. 4. Run on! I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma; my brother lives out there. 5. Run on! He was beaming. He got an A on the exam.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #14Body Paragraphs (p 47)Chpt 3, Turn to pg 50Think of your essay like a Hamburger. MmmWithoutall of the piecesits just not complete!

Introduction/HookParagraphs prove your thesis. Your thesis is the MEAT!!! ConclusionPowerpoint TemplatesPage #Each Paragraph has a part to playYour individual paragraphs are like pieces of pie.

Topic sentenceProve your point: Evidence, a story, a quote, data, research Why does this point matter to your topic???Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Topic Sentence (pg 50)Supports the thesis by clearly stating a main point in the discussionAnnounces what the paragraphs will be aboutControls the subject matter of the paragraphIts like an umbrella for the paragraphAll of the information in the paragraph should RELATE to the topic sentence The Topic sentence shouldprove or discuss a portion ofthe thesis!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Focusing & Placing (pg 53)Focusing be specific(read examples pg 53)

Placement usually the first sentence in the body paragraph, but does not HAVE to be (read examples pg 54-55)

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph Development (59)Include enough supporting info/evidence to make readers understand the topic sentenceMake the information clear and specificAvoid vague generalities and repetitious ideas

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph Length (pg 62)Long enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be interesting.Avoid one- or two-sentence paragraphsDivide long-ish paragraphs at a logical point.Use transitional phrases

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph UnityStick to the subjectUnify sentences around a central or main idea- the topic sentenceUnify paragraphs around a thesis

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph CoherenceUse a recognizable orderTimeSpaceDeductiveInductiveUse transitional phrasesUse examples, compare/contrast, sequence, resultsAvoid whiplash maintain coherence!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #PracticePg 57, Letter CAdd topic sentence to the paragraphsNot all inventors had it easy in life. Items originally owned by Elvis have increased in value substantially.Most people do not consider writing a real occupation. Just as records are kept for collge football winners, records are kept for college football losers!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Exposition: Compare and ContrastPg 227Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Compare and Contrast these 2 clipsExposing the subject: give information about it

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KLIqErnQCuw

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pMiCJefpn9Q25Compare/Contrast

Alice in WonderlandTrailersChoose a partner. Work together to do a compare/contrast of the trailers1 do the point-by-point comparison (sample on pg 228)1 do the Block Method comparison (sample on pg 228)1951 vs 2010

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1951 Version

ColorsHappy/brightGreens/yellowsCharactersChild Alice Silly, over-the-topWordsConstant text on screenDescriptive + Sentences2010 Version

ColorsDarkReds and blacksCharactersNearly adult AliceIntense, scaryWordsAlmost NO textText it actorsnames, etc.

Block method: Trailer for Alice in WonderlandPowerpoint TemplatesPage #Point by PointThesis: The 2010 version of Alice in Wonderland a was MUCH darker and more sinister movie than the 1951 version.Colors1951 Version: Happy/bright; Greens/yellows2010 Version: Dark; Reds/blacks

Characters1951: Child Alice; Silly, over-the-top2010: Nearly adult Alice; intense/scary!Tone1951: Wonder, surprise; Mischievous2010: evil/harmful magic; fearful, intense

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Known Issues (pg 230-231)So what? Why should your reader care? FIND A PURPOSEDirect your thesis to a particular audienceDescribe your subjects clearly and distinctlyAvoid a choppy essay use transitions! (pg 231)

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Paragraph planning part 2Take each one of your topicsfrom the pre-writeDevelop each onemore fully into a paragraphwith an example(quotes, stories, data, facts, etc.)This will help you determine what you need to researchThe queen of hearts was similar in both films.The Queen in the 1951 version was fat, angry and yelling at her staff, ordering, Off with his head for a card off who had minor slip of talking to Alice.The queen of hearts was evil, self-centered, and murderous in both films. But in the 1951 version, shes not as brutal. In comparing the first appearance of the queen in each movie, it was noted1951 movie, 22:302010 movie, 18:11It shows that both films are similar in the main characters personalities. The queen is less scary. Most of 1951 A-in-W s characters were more innocent and childlike than the 2010 versionThe Queen in the 2010 version was small, angry and yelling at her staff, saying You're right, Stayne. It is far better to be feared than loved.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #AssignmentChoose your topicchoose from: 231-232http://homeworktips.about.com/od/essaywriting/a/compare.htmDo a pre-write for your topic (during class today)Complete 2-3 Paragraph plan handoutsDetermine what kind of information you will need for your quotesNext week: how to introduce quotes.Research. Find sources and appropriate quotes/data/information/opinions.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Some additional topic optionspg 231-232Halloween night to prom night.Your best friend to your archenemy.Weeds to flowers.Slave insurrection to the Revolutionary War.Being the president to being a homeless person.Being a snob to being a nerd.Christopher Columbus to early astronauts.School bullies to dictators.Writing essays to going to the dentist.Church sermons to campaign speeches.Acting to lying.Hurricanes to blizzards.The 1970s to another decade.

The decisions of Red Riding Hood to the decisions of Goldilocks.Wandering on the African plain to drifting in the open sea.Making an apple pie to making a mud pie.Being afraid to being bored.The influence of music to the influence of books.The influence of celebrities to the influence of parents.Learning to ride a bike to learning to drive a car.Going to a movie to watching a movie at home.Spending time with your friend to spending time with your dog.Playing Wii games to playing real games.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #HomeworkCompare/Contrast 1st draft DUE @ beginning of NEXT MEETING (50 points)Read: Compare/Contrast Student Essays pgs 233-239Research ScaffoldVocab 3 choose 10 words from the articles you choose for your compare contrast paper or GRE words