“i would not have made this so long except that i do not have the leisure to make it shorter.”...
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“I would not have made this so long except that I do not have the leisure to make it shorter.”
Blaise Pascal
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New York Times, April 7, 2007
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Readability Index
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Playboy Enterprises Inc. has _____ to outsource most of ___ business operations of its ________ magazine, as it seeks __ stem losses and restore ___ cachet that helped embed ___ brand in the popular ______.
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Playboy Enterprises Inc. has agreed to outsource most of the business operations of its namesake magazine, as it seeks to stem losses and restore the cachet that helped embed the brand in the popular culture.
(Wall Street Journal, November 23, 2009)
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•Choose more specific verbs•Eliminate expletive structures•Convert nouns into verbs•Preserve content and tone
Concision: How can I say more with less?
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Choose more specific verbs
This report is an analysis of the problem.
This report analyzes the problem.
Savings = 3 words
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Choose more specific verbs
The administration was supportive of our program.
The administration supported our program.
Savings = 2 words
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Eliminate expletive structures
There will be a demonstration of the new system today.
A representative will demonstrate the new system today.
Savings = 2 words
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Eliminate expletive structures
It is necessary for us to find a solution to this problem.
We must solve this problem.
$avings = 7 words
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Convert nouns into verbs
His report contains a recommendation that we purchase a new printer.
His report recommends that we purchase a new printer.
Savings = 2 words
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Convert nouns into verbs
Who is responsible for the supervision of the temporary staff?
Who should supervise the temporary staff?
Savings = 4 words
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Preserve content and tone
The article includes a discussion of methods for the retention of employees.
The article discusses employee retention.
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Preserve content and tone
The application deadline pass last week on February 1.
You missed the February 1 deadline.
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