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AN INTRODUCTION TO TECHNICAL WRITING
What is Technical Writing?
It is called transactional writing which requires give-and-take, a dialogue, a follow up and/or
input. When you write a memo, you expect a reaction. Maybe you want a suggestion, a job
completed, or problems solved. If you write a letter you expect to make a sale to receive an
answer to an enquiry. When you write instructions, you know that someone will follow the
steps you've outlined.
The purpose of technical writing is to link you and your boss, you and clients, you and
vendors, and you and co-workers. Technical writing creates action. When you write successful
technical correspondence, someone on the other end responds.
PURPOSES
Technical writing can accomplish many purposes, and is often determined by audience, which
then affects the tone of the correspondence. Let's say that you're writing a memo, and your
purpose is to get action. Who is your audience and what tone is required? If it is for the
manager, the tone for a request or proposal is positive, and polite. If it is to a subordinate, the
tone might be more authoritative.
CLARITY
The ultimate goal of good technical writing is clarity. If you write a memo, letter, or report
which is unclear to your readers, which your readers can't understand, then what have you
accomplished? You've wasted time. First, your readers don't understand your point or can't
follow your train of thought. They must write to follow-up enquiry to determine your needs.
This wastes their time. Once you receive the inquiry, you must rewrite your correspondence,
trying to clarify your initial intentions. You've now written twice to accomplish the same goal.
This wastes your time.
To avoid these time-consuming endeavors, write for clarity. But how do you do this?
Provide Specific Detail
One way to achieve clarity is by supplying specific, quantified information. If you write using
vague, abstract adjectives or adverbs, such as some or recently, your readers will interpret
these words in different ways. The adverb recently will mean thirty minutes ago to one reader,
yesterday to another, and last week to a third reader. This adverb, therefore, is not clear. The
same applies to an adjective like some. You write, "I need some information about the
budget." Your readers can only guess at what you mean by some. Do you want the desired
Budget Increase for 1992, the budget expenditures for 1990, the allotted budget increase for
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1991, the guidelines for implementing a budget increase, the budgeted allotment for travel, or
the explanation for the budget decrease for training?
Look at the following example of vague writing caused by imprecise, unclear
adjectives. (Vague word usage is underlined. The flawed example is then followed by
improvements whereby the writing states specific dates and specifications.
ACTIVITY REPORT DRAFT
The engineer who wrote this report realized that it was unclear. To solve the problem, she
rewrote the report, quantifying the vague adjectives.
ACTIVITY REPORT REVISION
Your goal as a technical writer is to communicate clearly. To do so, state your exact meaning
through specific, quantified word usage.
Use Easily Understandable Words
Another key to clarity is using words which your readers can understand easily. Avoid obscure
words, and be careful when you use acronyms, abbreviations and jargon.
Obscure Words
A good rule of thumb is to write to express, not to impress; write to communicate, not to
confuse. If your reader must use a dictionary, you're not writing clearly. Try to make sense of
the following examples of unclear writing (pg 3).
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During the week of 10/4/91, we spent approximately twelve hours in Dept.15 trying
different machine settings, techniques, and thicknesses to perform mold protectors. Here's a report on our findings.
030' Thick Sheet At 240F, this thickness worked well.
015" Thick Sheet This material is less forgiving, but after decreasing the heat to 200F, we could produce good parts. Still, material at .015" thickness causes handling problems.
Our latest attempt at molding perform protectors has led to some positive result. We spent several hours in Dept.15 trying different machine setting and techniques. Several good parts were molded using two different sheet thicknesses. Here's a summary of the findings. First, we tried the thick sheet material. At 240F, this thickness worked well. Next, we tried the thinner sheet material. The thinner material is less forgiving, but after a few adjustments we were making good parts. Still, the thin material caused the most
handling problems.
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It's hard to believe, but these examples were written by business people who were trying to
communicate something. However, the examples are filled with unintelligible, uptight, old-
fashioned, long-winded, stiff, bureaucratic, obtuse, musty, cobwebbed words which no one
should use in this century. The words are too difficult to understand.
The following is a list of difficult, out-of-date terms and their modern alternatives.
Obscure words
aforementioned
initial
In lieu of
Accede
As per your request
issuance
This is to advise you
subsequent In
as much as
Ascertain
Pursuant to
forward
cognizant
Endeavor
remittance
disclose
Attached herewith
Pertain to
Supersede Obtain
Easy words
already discussed
first
instead of
agree
as you requested
Send
I'd like you to know
Later
Because
Find out
After
Mail
know
try
Pay
Show
Attached
About
Replace
get
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Your job duties will be to assure that distributed application modifications will execute without abnormal termination through the creation of production JCL system testing.
The following rules are to be used when determining whether or not to duplicate message:
Do not duplicate non-duplicatable messages.
A message is considered non-duplicatable if it has already been duplicated.
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Impressive writing is correspondence we can understand easily. A modern thrust in technical
writing is to write the way you speak unless you speak poorly. Try to be casual, almost
conversational. As shown in the preceding chart, replace obscure words with easy words.
Abbreviations and Acronyms
An abbreviation is a shortened form of a word or phrase that is used in place of the entire
word or phrase. "CPU" for central processing unit, "BTU" for British thermal unit, and "SGML"
for Standard Generalised Markup Language are examples of abbreviations. An acronym is an
easily pronounceable word formed from the initial letters or major parts of a compound term.
"GUI" for graphical user interface, "pixel" for picture element, and "ROM" for read-only memory
are common acronyms.
Basic Guidelines for Abbreviation and Acronyms
When using abbreviations or acronyms, follow these guidelines:
Do not use the Latin abbreviations e.g., i.e., vs., op. cit., viz., and etc.
In most cases, write out the full word or phrase and enclose its abbreviation or
acronym in parentheses the first time the word or phrase is used.
Then, continue using the abbreviation or acronym alone.
A local area network (LAN) consists of computer systems that can
communicate with another through connecting hardware and software. Your
company probably uses a LAN>
Do not spell out acronyms and abbreviations that are trademarked terms.
Avoid using acronyms and abbreviations in the plural form.
Acronyms and abbreviations in the plural form can potentially cause problems for
assistive technologies and for localization.
If you cite a term only once or twice in a document, show both the abbreviation or
acronym and the spelled-out version at each occurrence.
If an abbreviation or acronym is used often in a document, repeat the spelled-out
version at the first appearance in each chapter where the abbreviation or acronym
appears.
When writing out the full word or phrase, do not capitalize any letters unless the letters
are capitalized as part of a standard or begin a proper noun.
floating-point unit (FPU)
Internet Protocol (IP)
Do not shorten trademarked terms.
When using an acronym, ensure that its pronunciation is natural and obvious to a
reader.
The acronym "SCSI", for example, pronounced "skuzzy". A user who does not know
that "SCSI" is pronounceable might expect to see "an SCSI port", not a SCSI port". In
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such cases, provide a pronunciation key when you first use the acronym by itself, as in
this example.
A small computer system interface (SCSI, pronounced "skuzzy") cable
connects the disk drive to the SCSI port.
Punctuating Abbreviations and Acronyms
While you usually do not have to add punctuation to abbreviations and acronyms, the
following list provides a few exceptions:
Use periods in abbreviations that look like words.
U.S. for United States
No. for number
Use punctuation marks other than a period in abbreviations or acronyms when that
punctuation is standard form.
I/0 for input/output
3-D for three-dimensional
Add an "s" and no apostrophe to form the plural of abbreviations or acronyms that
contain no periods.
PCs
ISVs
GUIs
Add an apostrophe and "s" to form the plural of abbreviations or acronyms that use
internal periods.
M.S.'s
Ph.D.'s
Use Verbs in the active Voice versus the Passive Voice
It has been decided that Joan Smith will head our Metrology department.
The preceding sentence is written in the passive voice (the primary focus of the sentence,
John Smith, is acted on rather than initiating the action). Passive voice causes two problems.
1. Passive constructions are often unclear. After reading the preceding sentence, our
question is who decided that John Smith will head the department? To solve this
problem and to achieve clarity, replace the vague, indefinite pronoun 'it' with a precise
noun: "Mike Handle-decided that Joan Smith will head our Metrology Department."
2. Passive constructions are wordy. Passive sentences always require helping verbs
(has been). When we revise the sentence to read "mike Handler decided that Joan
Smith will head our Metrology Department," the helping verbs has been disappears.
The revision ("Mike Handler decided that Joan Smith will head our metrology Department") is
written in the active voice. When you use the active voice, your subject (Mike handle) initiates
the action.
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Another common problem with passive voice construction concerns prepositions, look at the
following example:
Overtime is favored by hourly workers. (6 words) Passive voice
Again, this sentence, written in the passive voice, uses a helping verb (is), has the subject
(hourly workers) acted on rather than initiating the action, but also includes a preposition (by).
The sentences are wordy. The revised sentence read as follow:
Hourly workers favor overtime. (4 words) Active voice
We have omitted the helping verb 'is', we have deleted the prepositions 'by', and the subject,
'hourly workers', whom initiates the action. The sentence is less wordy and clearer.
CONCISENESS
After clarity, your second major goal in technical writing is conciseness. Conciseness is
important for at least two reasons.
First, remember how time consuming technical writing may be in the work
environment? American workers spend approximately eight hours per week writing, and
additional time reading and revising others' writing. Conciseness in writing can help reduce
some of this time. If you write concisely, providing thorough detail in fewer words, you can
save yourself time and take up less of your readers' time.
Second, concise writing can aid comprehension. If you dump an enormous number of
words on your readers, they might give up before up before finishing your correspondence or
skip and skim so much that they miss a key concept. Wordy writing will lead your readers to
think. "Oh no! I'll never be able to finish that. Maybe I can skim through it. I'll probably get
enough information that way." Conciseness, on the other hand, makes your writing more
appealing to your reader, they'll think, "oh, that's not too bad: I can read it easily." If they can
read your correspondence easily, they will read it with greater interest and involvement. This,
of course, will aid their comprehension.
Let's look at some poor writing-writing which is wordy, time consuming to read, and not easily
comprehensible.
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Please prepare to supply readout your findings and recommendations to the officer of the Southwest Group at the completion of your study period. As we discussed, the undertaking of this project implies no currently know incidences of impropriety in the Southwest Group, nor is it designed specifically to find any. Rather it is assure ourselves of sufficient caution, control, and impartiality when dealing with areas such potential vulnerability. I am confident that we will be better served as a company as a result of this effort.
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Is that paragraph (pg 6) easy to understand? No, it's not. Why? What gets in your way? Do
you have difficulty following it because you are an outsider and are not aware of the situation
that generated it? That's only one of the problems. The reason you have difficulty
understanding this paragraph is because it's poorly written. It causes difficulty for two reasons:
(a) the paragraph is too long, and (b) the words and sentences in the paragraphs are too long.
Limit Paragraph Length
The number of lines per paragraph compared to the number of words per paragraph is
arbitrary. Obviously, as the writer, you must decide what's best. Some paragraphs, due to the
complexity of the subjects matter, might require more development. Other paragraphs
requiring less development can be shorter.
Nonetheless, an excessively long paragraph is ineffective. In a long paragraph, you
force your reader to go through many words and digest large amounts of information. This
hinders comprehension. In contrast, short, manageable paragraphs invite reading and help
your reader understand your content.
As a rule of thumb, a paragraph in a memo, letter, or short report should consist of (a)
no more than seven-typed lines, and (b) no more than sixty words. Sometimes you can
accomplish these goals by cutting your paragraph in half: find a logical place to stop a
paragraph and then start a new one. Even the next difficult example can be improved in this
way.
Limit Word and Sentence Length
In addition to the length of the paragraph seen in the example given, the writing is flawed. The
paragraph is filled with excessively long words and sentences. This writer has created an
impenetrable wall of haze-the writing is foggy. In fact, we can determine how foggy this prose
is by assessing it according to Robert Gunning's Fog Index.
Fog Index
) Count the number of words in successive sentences. Once you reach approximately
one hundred words, divide these words by the number of sentences. This will give you
an average number of words per sentence.
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Please prepare to supply readout to your findings and recommendations to the officer to the Southwest Group at the completion of your study period. As we discussed the undertaking of this project implies no currently know incidences of impropriety in the Southwest Group nor is it designed specifically to find any.
Rather, it is to assure ourselves of sufficient caution, control, and impartiality
when dealing with an area laden with such potential vulnerability. I am confident that we will be better served as a company as a result of this effort.
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) Now count the number of long words within the sentences you've just reviewed. Long
words are those with three or more syllables. You can't count (a) proper names, like
Leonardo Da Vinci, Christopher Columbus, or Alexander DeToqueville: (b)long words
that are created by combining shorter words, such as chairperson or policeperson; or
(c) three-syllable verbs created by ed or es endings, such as united or arranges. ( a
good example of a multisyllabic word is the word mul-ti-syl-lab-ic-)
) Finally, to determine the fog quotient, add the number of words per sentences and the
number of long words. Then multiply your total by 0.4.
Given this system, let's see how the original difficult paragraph scores. The paragraph is
composed of ninety-two words in four sentences. Thus, the average number of words
sentence is twenty-three. The paragraph contains sixteen multisyllabic words
(recommendation, officer, completion, period, undertaking, currently, incidences,
impropriety, specifically, sufficient, impartiality, area, potential, vulnerability, confident, and
company.)
23
+ 16
(words per sentence)
(multisyllabic words)
(Total) 39
39
X .4
(Total)
(fog factor)
(fog index level) 15.6
What does 15.6 mean? Look at the following fog index reading level:
Fog index Reading Level
Fog Index By Grade By Magazine
17
16
15
14
13
college graduate
College senior
College junior
College sophomore
College freshman
No popular magazine
Score this high.
Danger line
Fog Index By Grade By Magazine
12
11
High school senior
High school junior
Atlantic monthly
Time and Newsweek
10
9
8
7
6
High school sophomore
High school freshman
Eighth grade
Seventh grade
Sixth grade
Reader's Digest
Saturday Evening Post
Ladies' home journal
Modern romances
Comics
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The paragraph is written at a level midway between college junior and senior, definitely above
the danger line.
Why is this level of writing considered dangerous? A fog index of 15.6 enters the
danger zone for two reasons:
) Approximately eighteen percent of Americans graduate from college. Thus if you're
writing at a college level, you're alienating approximately eighty-two percent of your
audience.
) Studies show that college graduates read at approximately a tenth grade level. Thus,
even if you are writing to college graduates, you can't assume their reading skills are
proficient.
Given these facts, many businesses ask their employees to write at a sixth-to-eight-grade
level. To accomplish this, you would have to strive for an average of approximately fifteen
words per sentence and no more than five multisyllabic words per one hundred.
15
+5
20
(words per sentence)
(multisyllabic words)
(Total)
20
x.4
8.0
(Total)
(fog factor)
(fog index level)
You can't always avoid multisyllabic words. Scientists would find it impossible to write
if they could never use words like electromagnetism, nitroglyc-erine, telemetry, or
trinitrotolulene. The purpose of a fog index is to make you aware that long words and
sentence create reading problems. Therefore, although you can't always avoid long words,
you should be careful when using them.
Here are ways to lower a potentially high fog index.
Use the Meat Cleaver Theory of Revision
One way to limit the number of words per sentence is to cut it into thirds. The following
sentence, which contains forty-four words, is too long:
Version 1
To maintain proper stock balance of respirators and canister elements and to
ensure the identification of physical which may negate an individual's previous fit-test,
a GBC- 16 Respirator Request and Issue Record will need to be submitted for each
requested for use.
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If we use the meat cleaver approach, we can make this sentence more concise and easier to
understand.
Version 2
Please submit a GBC-16 Respirator Request and Issue Record for each
requester respirator. We then can maintain proper respirator and canister element
stock balances. We also can identify physical limitations which may negate an
individual's previous fit-test.
This sentence, now cut into a third, is more digestible. Because we have less to swallow
whole, we can understand the content more easily.
Avoid Shun Words
In the preceding examples, the original sentence contains forty-four words: the revised version
is composed of three sentences, totaling thirty-eight words.
Where did those missing six words go?
One way to write more concisely is to shun words ending in-tion or-sion- words ending
in a shun sound. For example, the original sentence reads "to ensure the identification of
physical limitations." To revise this, we simply wrote "identify physical limitations. "That's three
words versus six in the original version. Deleting three words in this case reduces wordiness
by fifty percent. Shun words are almost always unnecessarily wordy.
Let's try another example. Instead of writing "I want you to take into consideration the
following," you could write "consider the following." That's nine words versus three, a 66.6%
savings toward conciseness.
Look at the following shun words and their concise versions:
Shun Word
Came to the conclusion
With the exception of
Make revisions
Investigation of the
Consider implementation
Utilization of
Concise Version
Concluded (or decided)
Except for
Revise
Investigate
Implement
Use
Avoid Camouflaged Words
Camouflaged words are similar to shun words. In both instances, a key word is buried in the
middle of surrounding words (usually helping verbs or unneeded prepositions). For example,
in the phrase with the exception, the key word expect is Camouflaged behind the unneeded
with, the, -tion, and of. Once we prune away these unneeded words, the key word expect is
left, making the sentence less wordy.
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Camouflaged words are common. Here are some examples
versions:
and their concise
Camouflaged Word
Make an amendment to
Make an adjustment of
Have a meeting
Thanking you in advance
For the purpose of discussing
Arrive at an agreement
At a later moment
Concise Version
Amend
Adjust
Meet
Thank you
Discuss
Agree
Later
Avoid the Expletive Pattern
Another way to write more concisely is to avoid the following expletives:
There is, are, was, were, will be
It is, was
There are three reasons why the procedure will save money.
This sentence can be revised to read, "The procedure will save money for three reasons," the
original sentence contains ten words: the revision has eight. We've omitted two words by
deleting the expletive there. Your response to this revision could be "so what, big deal, who
cares? What's the point of deleting two words?" Deleting two words doesn't seem like much.
However, the omission equals a twenty-percent savings toward conciseness. In one sentence,
that might be a minimal achievement, but if you can delete two words from every sentence,
the benefits will add up.
The expletive 'it' creates similar wordiness, as in the following sentence:
It has been decided that ten engineers will be hired.
If we delete the expletive it, the sentence reads, "Ten engineers will be hired." The original
sentence contained ten words: the revision has five. We've achieved a fifty-percent saving
toward conciseness
Omit Redundancies
Redundancies are words which say the same thing. Conciseness is achieved by saying
something once rather than twice. For example, in each of the following instances, the
boldface words are redundant:
During the year of 1991
(1991 is obviously a year; the words the year of are redundant.)
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In the month of December
(As in the preceding example, the month of is redundant; what else is
December?)
Needless to say
(If it's needless to say, why say. It?)
The computer will cost the sum of $1,000.
(One thousand dollars is a sum)
The result so far achieved prove
(A result, by definition, is something which has been achieved.)
Our regular monthly status reports require
(Monthly status reports must every month; regularity is a prerequisite.)
We collaborate together on the project.
(One can't collaborate alone!)
The other alternative is to
(Every alternative presumes that some other option exists.)
This is a new innovation.
(As opposed to an old innovation?!)
The consensus of opinion is to
(The word consensus implies opinion.)
Here are examples of wordy phrases and their concise revisions:
Wordy Phrase
In order to purchase
At a rapid rate
It is evident that
With regard to
In the first place
A great number of times
Despite the fact that
I of the opinion that
Due to the fact that
Am in receipt or
Enclosed please find
As soon as possible
In accordance with
In the near future
At this present writing
In the likely event that
Rendered completely inoperative
Concise Revision
To purchase
Rapidly (or state the exact speed)
Evidently
Regarding
First
Often (or state the number of times)
Although
Thinks
Because
Received
Enclosed is
By 11:30 A.M.
According to
Soon
Now
If
Broken
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ACCESSIBILITY
Another primary objective of effective technical writing is accessibility-placing data on the
page in such a way that your readers can easily absorb it. If you give your readers
excessively long paragraphs, pages full of wall-to-wall words, your readers either will give up
before they've begun or be unable to remember what they've read. In either instance, you fail
to communicate technical information effectively.
For example, look at the inaccessible presentation of the meeting minutes in Figure 1.
These minutes are neither concise nor clear. You are given so much data in such an
unappealing format that your first response upon seeing the correspondence probably is to
say, "Ughh! That's ugly. I don't want to read that."
Good technical writing doesn't just string together sentences. It presents information in a
manner that
friendly.
is accessible and that invites the reader into the correspondence-it is reader
FIGURE 1: Inaccessible Meeting Minutes
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The meeting at the Carriage Club was attended by thirty members and guests. After the
dinner, Ray Clemmons introduced the guest speaker, university chancellor George Smith, and
noted his accomplishments and experience prior to education-U.S. Navy commander, Oak
Ridge Laboratory researcher, and politician. Dr. Smith's topic, Industry and Education
Collaboration, was very interesting and included a history of special projects enjoyed by both
academics and corporate heads. Dr. Smith suggested that we engineers could work with
education to (1) to provide training seminars, (2) help in urban development, and (3) provide
intern opportunities. Recent industry/education collaboration includes training seminars in
computers fiber optics, and human resource options. The chancellor's primary thrust was a
request for financial aid from industry for urban development. He said money had already
been donated by a large realty firm. Our support would take him over the top. Finally, the
chancellor also noted that industry could help itself, as well as the community, by providing
intern programs for university undergraduate majors. These internships could be half-or full-
day "shadowing" sessions where students worked with engineers to get a feel for their future
job responsibilities. The chancellor stated that these internships not only would add to the
students' theoretical knowledge would make them better engineers when we hired them.
Everyone would benefit. After the speech, our VP introduced new business, calling for
nominations for next year's officers, gave us the agenda for our next meeting, and adjourned
the meeting.
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How can you make these minutes more inviting? How can you break up the wall-to-
wall words and make key points jump off the page? To achieve accessibility, you need to
reformat using any of the following highlighting techniques:
1. White space: Achieved by indenting or double/triple spacing between lines, words,
or even letters within words.
2. Numbering: Enumeration creates itemized lists which can show sequence or
importance and which allow for future easy reference. The first item listed is either
the first in a sequence or the most important point in a list.
*Bullets: Bullets are created by using asterisks, dashes, a lowercase o, degree sign,
open boxes, etc.
Alphabetization: This is another way to create itemized lists. The only negative
aspect is that you'll run out at twenty-six. If you have twenty-seven points, then what
do you do?
Boldface: Created on a computer or typewriter by double striking.
All caps: this is the low-tech answer to boldfacing. Whereas you need computer
technology to boldface, you can highlight with all caps even if you're using an antique
typewriter.
Underlining: underlining and all caps are similar in that you must use both carefully.
If you underline too frequently or place frequently or place too much information in all
caps, none of your information will be emphatics. You must choose carefully what you
want to emphasize.
Italics: italics and underlining are similar highlighting techniques.
Heading: heading are an excellent way to break up the monotony of wall-to-wall
words and to achieve clarity. When you use heading (one to three words, preferable
underlined, set in boldface, and/or set apart from the text to create white space), you
tell the reader in just a few words what is to come in the subsequent paragraph(s).
This gives the reader a running start and helps clarify your intent.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
9.
10. Windowing: if you indent your key points and enclose them in a box, you're
windowing. Here's an example:
Windowing draws your reader's attentions to an idea, thus making it more emphatic.
You can also use underlining and boldface in the box, as we have in the preceding
example.
11. Emphatics words: in the preceding window, we preface our comments with the
emphatics word Note. Other such emphatics words are caution, danger, and warning.
12. Color: another way to make emphatic words leap off the page is to color them.
Danger would be red, for instance, caution yellow, and warning orange. You can
emphasize key ideas within a memo or letter by using a highlighter.
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Note: be sure to hand-tighten the nuts at this point. Once you've completed the installation, then go back and securely tighten all nuts.
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13. Punctuation: though not quite as emphatic as other highlighting techniques,
Punctuation marks such as brackets (), parentheses (), quotation marks " ", or
exclamation marks '!' can draw a reader's attention to a key idea.
14. Graphics: to have clearer view of the message.
Highlighting is not an irrelevant aspect of effective writing. If your goal is to communicate
effectively, highlighting is mandatory. With this in mind, let's reformat the previously
reviewed meeting minutes (figure 2).
Once we reformat the text, using number, underlining, headings, bullets, and white
space, the minutes not only are more appealing visually but also they are easier to
access. At a glance, readers can see that three main topics were discussed in the speech,
and they can easily refer to the [point in which they are most interested.
FIGURE 2: Accessible Meeting Minutes
*Bullet points and enumerated lists
If the sentences in a paragraph need to be written in sequence, then this suggests that there
is something that relates them and they form some kind of a list. The idea that relates them
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The meeting at the Carriage club was attended by thirty members and guests. After the dinner, Ray Clemmons introduced the guest speaker, University chancellor George Smith, and noted his accomplishment and experience prior to education:
o U.S Navy commander o Oak Ridge Laboratory researcher o Politician
Dr. Smith's topic, Industry and Education Collaboration, was very interesting and included a history of special projects enjoyed by both academics and corporate heads. Dr.Smith suggested that we engineers could work with education in the following three ways:
1. Provide training seminars: recent industry/education training collaborations include sessions on computers, fiber optics, and human resource options.
2. Provide intern opportunities: industry could help itself and the community through internship for university students. This internship could be half or full- day "shadowing" where student's worker with engineers to acquire hand-on experience to balance their theoretical knowledge gained in college. This would make the students better engineers when we hired them.
3. Help with urban development: this was Dr. Smith's primary thrust. He needed
financial aid from industry. A large donation had already been received from a realty firm. Our support would push him over the top.
After the speech, our VP introduces new business, calling for nominations for next year's officers, gave us the agenda for our next meeting, and adjourned the meeting.
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should be used to introduce the list. For example, the following paragraph is a mess because
the writer is trying to make what is clearly a list into one paragraph:
Getting to university on time for a 9.00am lecture involves following a number of
steps. First of all, you have to set your alarm - you will need to do this before
you go to bed the previous night. When the alarm goes off you will need to get
out of bed. You should next take a shower and then get yourself dressed. After
getting dressed you should have some breakfast. After breakfast you have to
walk to the tube station, and then buy a ticket when you get there. Once you
have your ticket you can catch the next train to Stepney Green. When the train
arrives at Stepney Green you should get off and then finally walk to the
University.
The following is much simpler and clearer:
To get to university for a 9.00am lecture:
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
9.
Set alarm before going to bed the previous night
Get out of bed when the alarm goes off
Take a shower
Get dressed
Have some breakfast
Walk to the tube station
Buy ticket
Catch next train to Stepney Green
Get out at Stepney Green
10. Walk to the University
The simple rule of thumb is: if what you are describing is a list, then you should always display
it as a list.
The above is an example of an enumerated list. The items need to be shown in numbered
order. If there is no specific ordering of the items in the list, then you should use bullet points
instead. For example, consider the following paragraph:
Good software engineering is based on a number of key principles. One such
principle is getting a good understanding of the customer requirements
(possibly by prototyping). It is also important to deliver in regular increments,
involving the customer/user as much as possible. Another principle is that it is
necessary to do testing throughout, with unit testing being especially crucial. In
addition to the previous principles, you need to be able to maintain good
communication within the project team (and also with the customer).
The paragraph is much better when rewritten using bullet points:
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Good software engineering is based on the following key principles:
Get a good understanding of the customer requirements, possibly by
prototyping.
Deliver in regular increments, involving the customer/user as much as possible.
Do testing throughout (unit testing is especially crucial).
Maintain good communication within the project team (and also with the
customer).
ACCURACY
Clarity, conciseness, and accessibility are primary objectives of technical writing.
However, if your writing is clear, concise, and accessible but incorrect-grammatically or
textually-then you've wasted your time and destroyed your credibility. To be effective, your
technical writing must be accurate.
Accuracy in technical writing requires that you proofread your text. The examples of
inaccurate technical writing on page 17 are caused by poor proof-reading (we've underlined
the errors to highlight them).
Note that the First City Federal Savings and Loan incorrectly put the customer's street as the
last name.
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First City Federal Saving and Loan 1223 Main Oak Park, Montana
October 12, 1991
Mr, and Mrs David Harper 2447N. Purdom Oak Park, Montana
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In additional to all the other errors, it should be "Dog and Cat Shop," of course. All the errors
make the writer look incompetent.
To ensure accurate writing, use the following proofreading tips:
1. Let someone else read it. We miss errors in our own writing for two reasons. First, we
make the error because we don't know any better. Second, we read what we think we
wrote, not what we actually wrote. Another reader might help you catch errors.
2. Use the gestation approaches. Let your correspondence sit for a while. Then, when you
read it, you'll be more objective.
3. Read backwards. You should only read backwards to slow yourself down and to focus
on one word at a time to catch typographical errors.
4. Read one line at a time. Use a ruler or scroll down your PC to isolate one line of text.
Again, this slows you down for proofing.
5. Read long words syllable by syllable. Do you see that the word responsibility is
misspelled? You can catch this error if you read it one syllable at a time (re-spon-si-bi-li-
ty)
6. Use technology. Computer spell checks are useful for catching more errors. They might
miss proper names, homonyms (their, they're, or there) or incorrectly used words such
as device to mean devise.
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National Bank
1800 Commerce Street Houston,TX
September 9, 1991
Adler's Dog and Oat Shop
8893 Southside
Bellaire, TX
Dear Sr:
In response to your request, your account with us has been close out. We are summated a check in the amount of $468.72 (your existing balance). If you have any questions, please fill free to contact us.
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7. Check figures, scientific and technical equations, and abbreviations. If you mean
$400,000, don't write $ 40,000. Double check any numbers or calculations. If you mean
to may say HCI (hydrochloric acid), don't write HC (a hydro-carbon).
8. Read it out loud. Sometimes we can hear errors that we can't see. For example, we
know that an outline is incorrect. It just sounds wrong. An out-line sounds better and is
correct.
9. Try scattershot proofing. Let your eyes roam around the page at random. Sometimes
errors look wrong at a glance. If you wander around the page randomly reading, you
often can isolate an error just by stumbling upon it.
10. Use a dictionary. If you're uncertain. Look it up. If you commit errors in your technical
writing, your readers will think one of two things about you and your company: (a) They'll
either conclude that you are stupid, or (b) you're lazy, in either situation, you lose. Errors
create a negative impression at best; at worst, a typographical error relaying false
figures, calculations, amounts, equations, or scientific/medical data can be disastrous.
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MECHANICS OF REPORT CONSTRUCTION
Strategies for improving sentence clarity by using:
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
Active Voice
Parallel Structure
Transitions
Word Choice
Non-sexist Language
1. ACTIVE VOICE
Sentence in active voice are usually easier to understand than those in passive voice because
active-voice constructions indicate clearly the performer of the action expressed in the verb. In
addition, changing from passive voice to active often results in a more concise
Excessive use of the passive voice only makes writing more tedious to read.
sentence.
A. Indirect vs. Direct
B. Wordy vs. Concise
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Passive (more wordy)
Active (more concise)
Action on the bill is being
considered by the committee.
The committee is considering action on the
bill.
By then, the soundtrack will have
been completely remixed by the
sound engineers.
By then, the sound engineers will have
completely remixed the soundtrack.
Passive (indirect)
Active (direct)
The entrance exam was failed by over
one-third of the applicants to the
school.
Over one-third of the applicants to the
school failed the entrance exam.
The brakes were slammed on her as
the car sped downhill.
She slammed on the brakes as the
car sped downhill.
Your bicycle has been damaged.
I have damaged your bicycle.
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C. Unclear vs. Clear
2. PARALLEL STRUCTURE
Parallel structure is the presentation of related information in a sentence in a consistent,
balanced manner, thereby contributing to writing clarity. Parallel structure is particularly
important in sentences containing conjunctions, such as and, but, or, eitheror,
neithernor, not onlybut also.
Balancing Items in a Series
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Don enjoys swimming, tennis, and to work
in his garden.
Don enjoys swimming, tennis, and
working in his garden OR
Don enjoys swimming, tennis, and
gardening.
The parallel sentences are clearer than the non-parallel one because the items in the
series are balanced grammatically; that is, they are all NOUNS.
Jason had to vacuum the carpets, to wash
the windows, and emptying the
wastepaper baskets before he leaves work
Jason has to vacuum the carpets, to wash
the windows, and to empty the wastepaper
baskets before he goes home.
The parallel sentence is clearer than the non-parallel one because the items in the
series all begin with an infinitive phrase. (An infinitive phrase is 'to' followed by a verb;
this combination forms a noun)
PASSIVE (unclear)
ACTIVE (clear)
To save time, the paper was written on a
computer. (who was saving time?)
To save time, Daisy wrote the paper on a
computer.
Seeking to lay off workers without taking
the blame, consultants were hired to break
the bad news. (who was seeking to lay off
workers?)
Seeking to lay off workers without taking
the blame, the CEO hired consultants to
break the bad news.
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Balancing Similar Information
Balancing Contrasting Information
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NOT PARALLEL
PARALLEL
Lindsay likes small discussion classes
better.
Lindsay likes small discussion classes
better than huge lecture courses.
The parallel sentences are clearer than the non-parallel one because it indicates what is
being contrasted with small discussion classes.
Not only is Dr. Libby a fine dentist but also
an outstanding guitarist.
Dr. Libby is not only a fine dentist but also
an outstanding guitarist.
The parallel sentence is clearer than the non-parallel one because the information
following the correlative conjunctions (not only, but also) is balanced grammatically, that
is, by two adjectives and one noun.
NOT PARALLEL PARALLEL
My sister's dog is frisky but obeys well.
My sister's dog is frisky but obedient.
The parallel sentence is clearer than the non-parallel one because the related
information has been balanced grammatically; that is frisky and obedient are both
adjectives.
Howard promised to attend the party and
he would bring refreshments.
Howard promised to attend the party and
to bring refreshments. OR
Howard promised that he would attend
the party and that he would bring
refreshments..
The parallel sentence is clearer than the non-parallel one because of their grammatical
consistency, that is through infinitive phrases (the first parallel sentence) and dependent
clauses (the second parallel sentence).
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Parallelism
How do you write parallel subheading?
Headings and subheadings that set off specific sections of your report also need to be
parallel. For example, if you use a two-word adjective/noun combination to introduce one
section of your report (i.e. Program Advantages), then use the same grammatical structure to
introduce the next section (i.e. Anticipated Problems).
Look at the following example outlines:
It is not necessary for all your headings to be parallel with all your subheadings, but headings
should be parallel with each other and subheadings should be parallel with each other.
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WRONG
BUT
I. Modifying a Graph
A. Data selection updating
B. To add or delete columns
C. How to change colors
D. Titles and legends
I. Three stages of the process
A. The specimen is dried
B. Removing all pollutants
C. Atomization
I. The Overall View
II. To Understand the Terminal Phase
III. About the Constant-Bearing
Concept
I. Modifying a Graph
A. Changing the data
B. Adding or deleting columns
C. Changing the colors
D. Adding titles and legends
I. Three stages of the process
A. The specimen is dried
B. The pollutants are removed
C. The specimen is atomized
I. The Overall View
II. The Terminal Phase
III. The Constant-Bearing Concept
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3. TRANSITIONAL DEVICES (Connecting Words)
Transitional devices help you carry over a thought from one sentence to another, from one
idea to another, or from one paragraph to another with words or phrases. And finally,
transitional devices link your sentences and paragraphs together smoothly so that there are
no abrupt jumps or breaks between ideas.
Look at the right column of the table for examples of words or phrases that express this logical
relationship.
4. WORD CHOICE (Words which are often confused)
What is the difference between the two words?
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Moral Morale
Unique Unusual
Roll Role
Its It's
Cite Sight
LOGICAL RELATIONSHIP TRANSITIONAL EXPRESSION
Similarity
Also, in the same way, just as.so too, likewise,
similarly
Exception I Contrast
But, however, in spite of, on the one hand.on the
other hand, nevertheless, notwithstanding, in contrast,
on the contrary, still, yet
Sequence I Order First, second, third,.next, then, finally
Time
After, afterward, at last, before, currently, during,
earlier, immediately, later, meanwhile, now, recently,
simultaneously, subsequently, then
Example
For example, for instance, namely, specifically, to
illustrate
Emphasis Even, indeed, in fact, of course, truly
Place I Position
Above, adjacent, below beyond, here, in front, nearby,
there
Cause and effect Accordingly, consequently, hence, so, therefore, thus
Additional support or
evidence
Additionally, again, also, and, as well, besides, equally
important, further, furthermore, in addition, moreover,
then
Conclusion I Summary
finally, in a word, in brief, in conclusion, in the end, in
the final analysis, on the whole, thus, to conclude, to
summarize, in sum, in summary
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5. STANDARDS FOR THE USE OF NUMBER IN REPORTS
Quantities may either be spelled out or expressed in numerical form.
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No. Rule Example
1
Spell out numbers nine and
under; use figures for higher
numbers.
The auditor found 13 discrepancies in the stock
records.
The auditor found nine discrepancies in the stock
records.
2
Spell out the numbers that begin
a sentence.
Seventy-three bonds and six boxes were destroyed.
Three boys were drowned in that river.
3
Keep all numbers in
comparisons in the same form.
We managed to salvage three lathes, one drill, and
thirteen welding machines.
Sales increases over last year were 9 percent on
automotive parts, 14 percent on hardware, and 23
percent on appliances.
4
When two series are in a
sentence, use words for one
and numerals for the other.
Three salespersons exceeded $1,500, fourteen
exceeded $1,000, and thirty-one exceeded $500.
5
Use figures for days of the
month when the month
precedes the day.
July 3, 2004
I shall be there on the 13th.
Ms Mimi signed the contract on the seventh of July.
Sales have declined since the 14th
of August.
Residence Residents
Stationary Stationery
Effect Affect
Among Between
Principals Principles
Implied Inferred
Oral Verbal
Personnel Personal
Accept Except
Different Difference
Complement Compliment
Contributed Attributed
respectively respectfully
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6. NON-SEXIST LANGUAGE
These are techniques for shifting from sexist to nonsexist language. However, not all
strategies suit all writing styles. So, only use the ones that work best for the writing.
Technique 1 : Avoid Personal Pronouns Altogether
One easy way to avoid sexist language is to delete or replace unnecessary pronouns.
Example:
Technique 2 : Use Plural Pronouns Instead of Singular
In most contexts you can shift from singular to plural pronouns without altering meaning.
The plural usage avoids the problem of using masculine pronouns.
Example :
Technique 3 : Use Forms Like "He or She", "Hers or His", and "Him or Her"
This solution requires the writer to include pronouns for both genders. However, this stylist
language may bother some readers because they tend to feel the structure "her or his" is
wordy and awkward. Many readers are bothered even more by the slash formations
"he/she", "his/her" and "her/him". Avoid this usage.
Example :
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Sexist language Nonsexist language
The president made it clear that each
McDuff branch manager will be
responsible for the balance sheet of his
respective office.
The president made it clear that each
McDuff branch manager will be
responsible for the balance sheet of his or
her respective office.
Sexist language Nonsexist language
1) Each geologist should submit his
time sheet by noon on the Thursday
before checks are issued.
2) Each nurse should make every effort
to complete her rounds each hour.
1) All geologists should submit their time
sheets on the Thursday before checks are
issued.
2) Nurses should make every effort to
complete their rounds each hour.
Sexist language Nonsexist language
During his first day on the job, any new
employee in the toxic-waste laboratory
must report to the company doctor for his
employment physical.
During the first day on the job, each new
employee in the toxic-waste laboratory
must report to the company doctor for a
physical.
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Technique 4 : Shift to Second-Person Pronouns
Consider shifting to the use of "you" and "your", words without any sexual bias. This
technique is effective only with documents in which it is appropriate to use an instructions-
related "command" tone associated with the use of "you".
Example :
Technique 5 : Be Especially Careful of Titles and Letter Salutations
When you do not know how a woman you are writing to prefers to be addressed, use
"Ms.". Even better, call the person's employer and ask if the recipient goes by "Miss",
"Mrs.", "Ms." Or some other title.
When you do not know who will read your letter, never use "Dear Sir" or "Gentlemen"
as a generic greeting. Such mistake may offend women reading the letter and may even
cost you some business. "Dear Sir or Madam" is also inappropriate. It shows you do not
your audience. Instead, call the organization for the name of a particular person to whom
you can direct your letter. If you must write to a group of people, replace the generic
greeting with an "Attention" line that denotes the name of the group.
Example:
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Sexist language Nonsexist language
1) Dear Miss Finnegan: (to a single
woman for whom you can determine no
title preference)
2) Dear Sir: or Gentlemen:
1) Dear Ms. Finnegan:
2) Attention: Admissions Committee
Sexist language Nonsexist language
After selecting her insurance option in
the benefit plan, each new nurse should
submit her paperwork to the Human
Resources Department.
Submit your paperwork to the Human
Resources Department after selecting
your insurance option in the benefit
plan.
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THE TECHNICAL WRITING PROCESS
Good writers recognize that writing is a process or a cycle of tasks. Following are the
interrelated stages or tasks in the process:
Prewriting
Drafting
Revising
Editing and proofreading
Publishing
Prewriting
The prewriting stage is the part of the writing process dedicated to planning. This stage
is based on your analysis and it may include researching and collecting data, organising
your information, and outlining your communication.
Organising Your Message
Before starting any writing, you must decide on the sequence, or order, in which to present
your information. Some common patterns of organization are as follows:
Chronological
Spatial
Comparison-and-contrast
Most-important-to-least-important
Cause-and-effect
Chronological organization means that your information is organised according to time
or according to when an event occurred. Usually events are described from the earliest to
the latest, or in ascending order. The reverse, moving from the latest to the earliest, is
called descending order. The following example shows chronological organization for the
history of photography. In this example, the events are in ascending order.
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Example of Chronological Organization
1. Joseph Niepce, 1826, pinhole camera 2. Louis Daguerre, 1837, highly detailed picture 3. William Fox Talbot, 1839, light-sensitive paper negatives 4. George Eastman, 1888, celluloid roll film
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Spatial organization means that ideas area arranged according to placement or
geography. For example, a piece of equipment might be described as being composed of
a number of parts; a description would explain how each part works in relation to the other,
going from front to rear, top to bottom, or left to right. As another example, sales figures
might be presented according to geographic region. Consider the following example
featuring spatial organization.
In spatial organization, transitions, or bridge words, are used to help the reader
locate various parts. Example of transitional words include below, next to, overhead,
behind, adjacent to, and above. Visuals are particularly helpful when you're using a spatial
organization; they can help your audience see the physical relationships between parts.
Comparison-and-contrast order arranges information according to similarities and
differences. When you talk about the advantages and disadvantages of something, you
are using comparison-and-contrast order. When you describe the ways objects,
processes, or policies are similar, you are comparing. When you explain how items are
different, you are contrasting. Investigative reports that discuss two or more items often
use the comparison-and-contrast arrangement.
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Example of Comparison-and-Contrast Order
Cars that run on steam are fast and easy to start. However, the water tank has to be refilled every 50 miles, and you have to wait 20 minutes after lighting the boiler before you can drive. Cars that run on electricity are quiet and clean. They require little servicing, and the motor starts easily. However, an electric car has a limited driving range and is slower than other types of car.
Example of Spatial Organization
If the copy machine jams, first check the paper-feed tray on the left side of the machine to be sure all papers are aligned properly. Directly above the paper intake are the paper- feed rollers. Remove any paper stuck inside these rollers.
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A most-important-to-least-important order is simply a listing of points. This arrangement
is used in reports that examine an issue and reach a conclusion or recommendation, such
as determining the location of a new factory or selecting a vending machine service for the
employee lounge. When more than one point is given, the most important idea is
presented first and the consecutive points are listed in descending order of importance.
When information is arranged according to the factors and the results of those factors, a
cause-and-effect order is used. Many scientific reports use this type of organization. The
scientist begins by collecting data to support an unproven hypothesis. After the data is
organized and studied, the scientist reaches a conclusion. Common transition words used
in a cause-and-effect order are therefore, consequently, based on, because of, due to, as
a result, and ifthen.
Outlining
Outlining is a key part of your prewriting process. In order for your audience to grasp
your meaning, your thoughts must be organized and your understanding of what you want
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Example of Cause-and-Effect Order
Eggs, beef, lamb, and poultry were cooked at different temperatures to determine the lowest internal temperature that protects against food-borne illness. Cooking food to an internal temperature of 160 degrees was found sufficient to prevent most illness. Because some foods are most tasty when cooked to a higher degree of doneness, lamb, pork, and beef should be cooked to 170 degrees. Due to a new resistant strain of salmonella, which still lives at temperatures of 170 degrees, poultry should be cooked to an internal temperature of 180 degrees.
Example of Most-Important-to-Least-Important Order
After studying several presentation graphics software packages, I recommend that our company purchase Show-Off for the following reasons:
1. The clip art library is the most extensive of any currently available. 2. The help and tutorial programs provide excellent assistance to the novice. 3. The user can define the color palette. 4. The program automatically creates legends.
5. The program provides a simple checker.
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to convey must be absolutely clear. A well-organized outline can help you achieve this
goal.
Numbering systems. A formal multilevel outline takes the form of a series of
headings of different levels. These headings are called level heads. Two level-head
numbering systems, the alphanumeric system and the decimal system, are shown in
Figure 1.1 below. In the alphanumeric system, the level 2, level 3, and level 4 heads may
use parentheses, as shown in the figure, or they may use periods after the introductory
letter or number.
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Organizing Data for an Outline. : Imagine that you need to report your day's
activities and that the list of activities in Figure 1.2 below is the data you have compiled.
How you translate the data into useful information for a report will depend on the answers
to the content, message, audience, purpose, product (CMAPP) questions you devise.
Drafting an Outline. Assume that your CMAPP analysis reveals that your
your marketing instructor has asked you for an update on your project. You decide that
product will be a memo and that you will concentrate on three main topics:
Marketing project itself
Other courses that have a bearing on the project
Related activities
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You conclude that many of the items in Figure 1.2 might be relevant. The others will not
translate into useful information, so you ignore them. Your next step is to organize under
appropriate headings the data elements you have kept, along with the introductory information
your instructor will expect to see in the memo. This stage is often complicated by the fact that
some data items may appear to fit under more than one topic, so you have to make content
decisions as well. Completion of these tasks will result in a first draft of a formal multilevel
outline similar to the one shown in Figure 1.3 below
Finalizing an outline. After you organize the data elements under appropriate
headings, you should refine your outline. This stage in the process of translating data into
useful information is a painstaking one, particularly if you are working with an outline for a
longer, more complex document. Three principles - subordination, division, and
parallelism - are central in revising and finalizing your outline.
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1. Subordination. The principle of subordination says that every item that appears under
a particular level head must logically be a part of the subject matter of that level head.
Conversely, the item must not deal with a different issue and must not be equivalent or
greater importance or scope.
Your CMAPP analysis will allow you to determine what is appropriate in your
circumstance. When you find an entry that violates the principle of subordination, you may
decide to change the sequence of items, to create another separate level head, or to
change the wording of a level head so that it reflects what you really mean.
2. Division. The principle of division states that you cannot subdivide the content of any
level head into fewer than two parts. For example, if you have a 'I.A' head, you must have
at least a 'I.B' head.
How you fix a division problem also depends on the results of your CMAPP analysis.
You might decide to remove an item, to add an item (taking care not to contradict the
principle of subordination), or to make the item a higher level head. What you do depends
on what you decide you really mean.
3. Parallelism. The principle of parallelism requires that all level 1 heads exhibit the
same grammatical structure, that all level 2 heads exhibit the same grammatical structure,
and so on. Note that the structure of level 1 heads may be different from the structure of
level 2 heads, which may be different from the structure of level 3 heads, and so on.
The solution to a parallelism problem is to reword items until each of the same-level
heads exhibits the same grammatical structure. When applying the principle of parallelism,
you may find the easiest grammatical structure to work with is a noun or noun phrase.
The principle of parallelism applies not only to outlines, but also to bulleted and
numbered lists in a document. Each item in a list must have the same grammatical
structure.
Figure 1.4 offers a possible completed outline that is finalized from the initial multilevel
outline shown in Figure 1.3. There is no single correct version because you may have
several possible ways to fix any subordination, division, or parallelism problems. The final
version of your outline should always be based on your CMAPP analysis.
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Drafting
After you have finalized your outline, you can begin to develop your ideas. As you write your
draft, remember to use words that promote goodwill and encourage your receiver to accept
your message.
It is best to try to write your draft in one sitting. Keep your outline and pre writing notes
nearby. If you find that you need more information, don't stop to do research. Instead, write
yourself a note and move on to the next idea in your message. The whole point of drafting
is to develop your ideas. You are not yet concerned with typographical errors, grammar, or
spelling. You do, however, want to achieve the appropriate tone, or voice, for the
message.
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While you can always change things later, include as many specific details in your
draft as possible. Chose your words carefully because the words you use help shape the
tone and style in your message. However, try not to spend a lot of time at any particular
word or phrase. Make a note to go back and check a thesaurus or dictionary later.
Revising
To revise is to make changes. Many writers spend as much or more time revising as they
do creating their first draft. It is in the revision stage that a writer makes sure the message
says exactly what it should.
Before you revise a draft, put it aside for at least a few hours, if possible. You'll come
back to the document with a fresh perspective. To begin the revision process, read your
draft all the way through, focusing on your original CMAPP analysis. Try to step back and
put yourself in the place of the receiver. Is the message focused? Do you see gaps in
logic? Do the paragraphs flow well? Have you included all the vital information? Did you
stray from your point? Reorganize sentences or paragraphs as needed and read the draft
again.
The ABC
As you revise your message, keep the ABCs of communication - accuracy, brevity, and
clarity - in mind. These elements are always essential parts of your CMAPP analysis.
Accuracy.
questions:
When composing and revising your message, ask yourself the following
Have I chosen the right facts for this situation? In other words, are all my facts
pertinent to my context, my audience, and my purpose?
Is all my data correct? (Have I checked?)
Remember that your audience "needs" your information. But your audience does not
need data that will muddy the issue. Recall as well that your message represents you to
your audience, and thus your reputation hangs on it. Imagine the consequences if your
audience were to find an error in your information: Your message would lose credibility, as
would you, the "messenger" . Once lost, your credibility with the audience may be hard to
regain.
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Brevity. A practical definition of brevity might be "Say what you need to say and
then stop." If you include material in your document or presentation that is not relevant to
your context, message, audience, and purpose, your audience may be confused, irritated,
and/or bored - and all your efforts will have been wasted. Consider the following
examples:
To cut down on wordiness, use the active voice rather than the passive voice. When
you write in the active voice, the subject of the sentence performs the action of the verb.
In the passive voice, the subject receives the action. Consider the following example:
Passive: The best idea was submitted by Vernon.
Active: Vernon submitted the best idea.
Clarity
Clarity is a function of the words and grammatical structures you use, the organization of
your information, the logic and cohesion of your arguments, and the way you present your
message to your audience. When examining your message for clarity, ask yourself the
following questions:
Is everything as clear as I can make it?
Can I safely assume that my message will be as understandable to my audiences as it
is to me?
Consider the following example:
Poor: For the majority of people who compromise our society, money is perceived in
but two states of tangible matter, either as currency or as coins.
Most people think money is currency and coins. Better:
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Poor Better
During the month of June, employees can preview the full and complete Annual Report for the year 20-before it is distributed to stockholders
During June, employees can read the complete 20-Annual Report before it is distributed
When you present complex information, you need to ask yourself if a graphic illustration would make it easier to understand.
Use a graphic illustration to make complex information easier to understand.
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Bias-Free Words
In today's diverse workplace, it is particularly important that you do not offend your audience
by showing biases. Bias-free words are free of prejudice, or unfair assumptions, and do not
influence the audience in any particular or unfair direction. Courteous communications are
sensitive to stereotypes and biases that involve gender, race, age, and disability.
Gender Bias. In today's workplace, women work as pilots, air traffic controllers, police
officers, and construction workers. Men work as nurses, administrative assistants, and
kindergarten teachers. The words used for today's workers should be free of gender bias to
reflect these realities. Note the difference between the gender-biased words and the neutral
words in the following list.
Race and Age Bias. A simple way to avoid biases of race and age is to avoid
mentioning these factors at all unless they are essential to your meaning. The following
sentences are examples of avoiding race and age bias
Disability Bias. Avoid disability bias by avoiding reference to a disabling condition. If
you must mention the condition, use unbiased words, as shown in the following examples.
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Biased Words
Unbiased Words
Afflicted with, suffering from
Crippling defect, disease
Has
Condition
Biased Words
Unbiased Words
We hired an Asian lawyer. Have you met the little old man?
We hired a lawyer. Have you met the man?
Gender-Biased Words
Neutral Words
Foreman Waiter/waitress Stewardess Salesman Policeman Fireman Manmade Executives and their wives
Foreperson, supervisor Server Flight attendant Salesperson Police officer Fire fighter Manufactured Executives and their spouses
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Editing and Proofreading
To edit is to alter or refine a written message to improve it. When you edit, you are fine-tuning
your message with an eye on sentences, phrases, and words. Editing tools to keep on hand
or to reference online include the following:
A language handbook or style guide.
A dictionary
A thesaurus
The Grammar and Style Handbook can help you answer specific grammar and mechanics
questions. An editing checklist is another useful tool. Consider the points in the Checklist
whenever you edit your work.
Proofreading is the process of reviewing and correcting the final draft of your message. As
you proofread your document, look for general content errors as well as mechanical errors,
such as incorrect spacing, misspelled words, incorrect capitalization or incorrect punctuation.
Nearly all word-processing software programs include a spell checker and a grammar
checker. These programs are helpful, but do not assume that they will replace the editing and
proofreading process. Spell checkers will not help you with most proper nouns or with word
substitutions. Your spell checker won't know that you meant to key in 'being' instead of 'begin'.
Only careful proofreading can detect errors like this one.
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Checklist
Effective Editing
Read your document aloud and listen for awkward sentences. If you stumble over a
phrase, chances are it needs editing.
Check sentence types and lengths. Are all your sentences about the same length? If
so, create some variety. Are any sentences long or complicated? Consider splitting
them into two sentences.
Look at sentence beginnings. If many sentences start with the same word, add some
variety. Avoid starting sentences with I, my, it is, and there is.
Use language appropriate for your audience. Avoid the slang, jargon, and informal
language commonly used in everyday speech.
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The following list describes six effective proofreading methods.
1. Scroll the screen. Move the cursor down the screen of the computer as you proofread
each line.
2. Read aloud. Read aloud to slow down and examine words more carefully.
3. Compare drafts. Check the final draft against the previous edited copy.
4. Proofread the hard copy. Proofread the printed document even if you've already
edited it on the screen.
5. Proofread backwards. Read each line from the right to left, or start at the end of the
document and read the entire message backwards.
6. Use two proofreaders. One proof reader reads aloud from the previous edited copy,
while the other proof reader checks the final copy.
Publishing
When your proofreading process is complete, you're ready to prepare and publish the final
document. To publish your message is to deliver it to the receiver or make it available to
the public. Before publishing, evaluate your message from a visual viewpoint. Your
finished product should not only sound good when your receiver reads it, it should look
good too. Effective visual presentation of material in your technical communication is
critical to your success.
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Watch for overused words. Be original. Replace overused words and phrases with
fresh, vivid language.
Check for clarity, completeness and tone. Look at your message from your
receiver's viewpoint. Is the message clear? Will the receiver know exactly what to do
or how to respond? Does the tone promote goodwill?
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TYPES OF REPORTS
At one time or another, you'll be asked to write a report. Reports can vary in length.
Generally, a shorter report (approximately one to five pages) will be formatted differently than
a longer report (more than five pages long). Your report will satisfy one or all of the following
needs :
Supply a record of work accomplished
Record and clarify complex information for future reference
Present information to a large number of people
Record problems encountered
Document schedules, timetables and milestones
Recommend future action
Document current status
Record procedures
The most common types of reports include the following:
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Accident/Incident reports
What happened, how did it happen, when did it happen, why did it happen, who was involved
Feasibility reports
Can we do it, should we do it?
Options for the recycling/re-use of waste materials in a
paper-production plant
Potential applications of a small industrial robot system
Inventory reports
What is in storage, what has been sold, what needs to be ordered?
Staff utilization reports
Is labor sufficient and efficiently used?
Progress reports (weekly, monthly, quarterly, annually)
What is our status? What have been accomplished and what needs to be done?
Construction of an urban storm-water drainage system
Installation of an industrial heating and air-conditioning
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Travel reports
Where did I go, what did I learn, who did I meet?
Lab reports
How did we do it?
Performance appraisal
reports
How is an employee doing on the job?
Incident reports
A document that records what happened in a particular situation. Also assumes that the incident is not likely to be repeated.
A report from a safety officer on an accident in a large
industrial operation
A report on the installation of a new telephone exchange
Proposal reports
How to convince readers to adopt an/a idea/product/service?
A proposal to reduce energy consumption in a wool- processing plant
An improved layout for a school chemistry laboratory
Inspection reports
The act of considering or examining something in order to judge its value, quality, importance, extent, or condition. Is the condition up to the expected standard? What can be improvised?
Critical examination of something aimed at forming judgement or evaluation
An evaluation of the machinery/tools/vehicles/office supplies/computer software or hardware
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CRITERIA FOR WRITING SHORT REPORTS
All reports share certain generic similarities in format, development and style.
FORMAT
Every report should contain four basic units: heading, introduction, discussion, and
conclusion/recommendations.
1) Heading
The heading includes the date on which the report is written, the name(s) of the people to
whom the report is written, the name(s) of the people from whom the report is sent, and the
subject of the report (subject line should contain a topic and a focus).
2) Introduction
The introduction supplies an overview of the report. It can include three optional subdivisions :
Purpose - a topic sentence (s) explaining why you are submitting the report (ratio