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Elaboration: Strategic Teaching

To Improve Student Writing

in Grades 3 - 5

OSPI Elementar Instructional Support !aterials "or Writing

These materials were developed byWashington teachers to help students improve their writing.

On the OSPI Website

Version 1 Fer!ary 2007



"o the "ea#her Slides 1$11 are %or tea#her !se. "hey in#l!de align&ent 'ith the ()*s+ lin,s tothe WAS)+ and p!rpose o% the !nits. "herea%ter+ the slides are &eant %or the

st!dents. "he tea#her dire#tions are in the notes. -o! &!st do'nload this

Po'erPoint to print notes.

"o !se any !nit+ yo! &!st print and revie' the notes pages %or the !nit. "his is

done in the print &en!. It is di%%erent %or PCs and a#s+ !t yo! 'ill need to %ind

/otes Pages or /otes respe#tively in the print &en!."he notes pages

#ontain #r!#ial instr!#tions and s!pple&entary &aterials %or s!##ess%!l

i&ple&entation.

ost o% these !nits in#l!de partner andor gro!p 'or,. A syste& needs to e in

pla#e %or partner and gro!p 'or, 3e.g.+ 'hat are the r!les and e4pe#tations5.

6nits in these &od!les need to have e4tended pra#ti#e. "hey are not &eant to

e individ!al+ one day lessons.



OSPI Writing Instructional Support !aterials

Elementar#ore $evelopment Team

%i&&i Elliott-Schuman$ OSPI+ Proe#t 8ire#tor

#harlotte #arr$ 9etired Seattle S8+ Fa#ilitator

Tana #icero$ A!!rn S8

'dia-'a(uatra )esler$ Spo,ane S8

Sharon Schilperoort$ OSPI+ Writing Assess&ent "OSA

#ec #armac&$ Selah S8

%anc Spane$ P!yall!p S8

*aren *earns$ Seattle S8



P!rpose "o share tea#hing strategies that 'ill

help st!dents develop 'riting that

elaorates a single idea and addressesthe needs and interests o% a parti#!lara!dien#e.

*laoration is #riti#al %or #lear ande%%e#tive 'riting.



Align&ent 'ith ()*s $ WritingEALR 3. The student writes clearly and efectively.Component 3.1.1 Develops ideas and organies writing.

!LE 3.1.1 " 3rd !rade !LE 3.1.1 " #th !rade !LE 3.1.1 " $th !rade

+nal,es ideas selects topic addsdetail and elaborates.

Sele#ts %ro& a 'ide range o%topi#s 3e.g.+ %riendship+ vol#anoes5.

aintains %o#!s on spe#i%i# topi#.

Provides details andor s!pport

3e.g.+ e4a&ples+ des#riptions+reasons5.

6ses personal e4perien#e and

oservation to s!pport ideas.

8evelops #hara#ters+ setting+ and

events in narratives.:Sele#ts appropriate title %or a pie#eo% 'riting.

+nal,es ideas selects a narro/topic and elaborates using speci"ic

details and0or e1amples.

arro's topi# 3e.g.+ %ro& generaltopi#+ s!#h as /pets+ to spe#i%i#topi#+ s!#h as /y dog is s&art.5.

Sele#ts details relevant to the

topi# to elaorate 3e.g.+ adds detailto ea#h &ain point !sing &ore thanone senten#e; !ses spe#i%i# 'ordsand phrases+ reasons+ ane#dotes+%a#ts+ des#riptions+ and e4a&ples5.6ses personal e4perien#es+oservations+ andor resear#h tos!pport opinions and ideas 3e.g.+#olle#ts+ organi



Align&ent 'ith ()*s Writing

#ontin!edEALR 3. The student writes clearly and efectively.

Component 3.% &ses appropriate style.

!LE 3.%.% " 3rd grade !LE 3.%.% " #th grade !LE 3.%.% " $th grade

2ses language appropriate "or aspeci"ic audience and purpose.: Sele#ts spe#i%i# 'ords 3e.g.+

holleredvs. said5 andspe#iali



Align&ent 'ith ()*s

A#ross the C!rri#!l!&

eading4.4. 6nderstands se>!en#e in in%or&ationale4pository te4t and

literarynarrative te4t. 3?rd@th5

4.4. Applies !nderstanding to ti&e+ order+ andor se>!en#e to

#o&prehend te4t. 3th5

4.4.3 6nderstands story ele&ents. 3?rd5

4.4.3 6nderstands and analy



Align&ent 'ith ()*s

A#ross the C!rri#!l!&

!ath4.. Analy


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*laoration d!ring S#ien#e



)in, to the WAS) "he >!ality o% elaoration is dire#tly related to s#ores on

the Content+ Organi



iliography #al&ins ). Units of Study for Teaching Writing, Grades !",

Deine&ann, #$$%.

Gere,&., Christenbury, '., Sassi,(. Writing on )emand,Deine&ann+ 200.

Graves 8. & *resh 'oo+ at Writing, Deine&ann+ 1EE.

outman 9. Writing ssentials, Deine&ann+ 200.

7emelman S. $aniels D.+8deA. -est ractice/ 0ew Standardsfor Teaching and 'earning in &merica1s Schools, "hird edition+Deine&ann+ 200.

OSPI 'esite Grade 6Writing +nchor Set +nnotations'''.,12.'a.!s#!rri#!l!&instr!#t'[email protected]
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*laoration 6nits

"ale o% Contents $e"ining Elaboration - slides 3-9

2sing uestions to Elaborate - slides ;-4!estionsJ

3 have nice friends. They ma+e me

laugh and they teach me things at

recess. 6y friends are 7ay, mily, &nn,and &ndy. They taught me how to do

tric+s on the bars.


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!estions As,ed y the Writer3 have nice friends.

What &a,es the& ni#eJ

They ma+e me laugh and theyteach me things at recess.Who are yo!r %riends and 'hat do they

tea#h yo!J

6y friends are 7ay, mily, &nn, and&ndy. They taught me how to do

tric+s on the bars.


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9eaderGs !estions8id this 'riter ans'er the readerGs>!estionsJ

When 3 learned how to roller s+ate, 3 was onlyfive years old. 6y mom taught me how toroller s+ate, but she +ept on falling down.

Soon 3 was the best roller s+ater in my family.&nd when 3 went on a field trip in secondgrade to 8oller 9alley, almost everyone wasfalling down.


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!estions ot Ans'ered y

the WriterWhen learned how to roller skate, was

only !ive years old. "y mom taught me how

to roller skate, but she kept on !alling down.

"hen ho' did yo! learnJ

Soon was the best roller skater in my !amily.

So ho' did this happenJ

And when went on a !ield trip in se#ond grade to$oller %alley, almost everyone was !alling down.

What does this have to do 'ith learningJ

Do' does it tie to yo!r learning to s,ateJ


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9eaderGs !estions

3 li+e it when it rains.

)etGs %inish 'riting this paragraph

together y thin,ing ao!t 'hat the

reader 'o!ld as, and ans'ering thereaderGs >!estions.


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9eaderGs !estions3 li+e when it snows.

-o! are no' going to get a #han#e to

%inish 'riting this paragraph 'ith a

partner. "hin, ao!t 'hat the reader'o!ld as, and then ans'er the

readerGs >!estions.


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6sing !estions %or *laoration$

your turn

&&&&& makes a good pet.

6sing this state&ent+ thin, ao!t 'hat

>!estions the a!dien#e &ight as,.

Write several senten#es that elaorate andans'er the >!estions yo! thin, the

a!dien#e &ight as,.


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)A-*9I( vs. )IS"I(


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)ayering *laoration

+ thought"ul /riter laers one sentence a"teranother.

Each ne/ sentence adds to or develops thethought li&e rings around a bull@s-ee.


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)ayering *laoration*a#h idea is #are%!lly

sta#,ed on the ne4t

li,e ri#,s in a 'all

or rings on a tall tree.


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)ayering *laoration *very senten#e and detail %its 'ith the

rest o% the topi# li,e a set o% nesting dolls.


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)ayering vs. )isting -o! and a partner 'ill re#eive an

envelope.

"a,e the yello' senten#e strips o!t o%

the envelope and p!t the& in the orderyo! thin, they sho!ld e arranged.


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)ayering vs. )isting o' ta,e the red senten#e strips o!t o%

the envelope and p!t the& in the orderyo! thin, they sho!ld e arranged.


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)isting

6y bracelet is special to me. The

bracelet means a lot to me because itgives me good memories of my friend.

&nd because it is very special to me.3t1s special in another way. 3t gives megood luc+. That1s why my bracelet isspecial to me.


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)ayering6y bracelet is the ob4ect that means the most tome. 3t means a lot because my bracelet bringsme good luc+. 3t brought me luc+ on the first day 3

went to my new school. When 3 entered myclassroom 3 saw a girl with a bracelet 4ust li+emine. :er name was Talli. 0ow we are bestfriends and we wear our bracelets wherever we

go. When 3 wear it, 3 thin+ of all of fun times Talliand 3 have had and it reminds me that 3 have agreat friend.


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)ayering 9ead the %ollo'ing topi# senten#e.

"ogether 'e 'ill add senten#es thatdevelop the topi# y layering.

9e&e&er that ea#h senten#e &!st

!ild on the previo!s one.

The "ield trip /as "antastic.


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)ayering

9ead the %ollo'ing topi# senten#e.

With a partner ta,e t!rns adding senten#es that develop the topi# y

layering.

$essert is m "avorite part o" the meal.


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)ayering $your turn 9ead the %ollo'ing topi# senten#e.

Write a paragraph and pra#ti#e addingsenten#es that develop the &ain idea ylayering. "he s!e#t 3in the /lan,5 #ane anything 3rain+ ho&e'or,+ &y pet+#o&&er#ials+ et#.5+ !t it #anGt e a

person.

AAAAAAAAis ver annoing.


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Co&ing Soon K

2007 S!&&er Instit!tes *laoration od!le

6sing Pre#ise )ang!age to *laorate

6sing 9easons to *laorate

6sing *4a&ples to *laorate

6sing 8e%initions to *laorate

6sing 8es#ription to *laorate

6sing Ane#dotes to *laorate

Sho'+ 8onLt "ell 9e#ogni


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