Making an amazing composition

作文题目：假设你叫李毅 , 现在上高三 , 你的叔叔现在在美国工作 . 你觉得父母管得太严了 , 自己解决不了这个问题 , 于是发邮件给叔叔 , 希望他跟父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 . 要点如下 : 1. 学习上要求太高 , 自己达不到他们的期望值 , 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 , 让自己很沮丧 ; 2. 不准看电视 , 上网 ; 3. 不准自己和女生交朋友 ; 4. 觉得自己和父母有代沟 , 不能很好沟通。注意 :1. 词数不少于 120 个字 ;2. 电子邮件的开头结尾已经写好 , 不计入总字数

注意：词数不少于 120 个左右；文章开头与结尾已给出，不计入总数Dear uncle, How are you these days ?I’m writing to tell you my trouble with my parents.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Best wishes ， Yours, Li Yi

Step 1 Cross-question 审题 Style( 文体 ):__________________

Person( 人称 ): 第 ____________ 人称为主

Tense( 时态） :____________

Key points : ____________

An email

一，三

一般现在时为主

作文题目：假设你叫李毅 , 现在上高三 , 你的叔叔现在在美国工作 . 你觉父母管得太严了 , 自己解决不了这个问题 , 于是发邮件给叔叔 , 希望他跟父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 . 要点如下 : 1. 学习上要求太高 , 自己达不到他们的期望值 , 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 , 让自己很沮丧 ; 2. 不准看电视 , 上网 ; 3. 不准自己和女生交朋友 ; 4. 觉得自己和父母有代沟 , 不能很好沟通 .注意 :1. 词数不少于 120 个字 ;2. 电子邮件的开头结尾已经写好 , 不计入总字数

1.学习上要求过高2.达到某人的期望值3.对 … 管得太严4.拿 … 做比较5.让某人沮丧6.不准 … 某人干7.阻止某人干8.看电视9.上网10.劝某人不干… 11.与… 交朋友12.与… 沟通13.觉得 verb.14.代沟 15. 教育方式

1.expect too much of me2. meet /reach one’s expectations3. be hard on sb/ be strict with sb.4. compare …with/to…5. make sb upset/discouraged6. don’t allow sb to do sth 7. forbid sb from doing sth8. watch TV9. surf the Internet10.discourage sb from doing sth/persuade sb not to do sth 11.make friends with12. communicate with13. sense/feel/feel like14. a generation gap15.the way of education

Step 2 Preparation for words and phrases

Step3 Make sentences要点 1 . 学习上期望太高，自己达不到他们的期望值 . 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 , 让自己很沮丧。Their requirement about my study is too high to get a satisfied answer, because I can’t reach their goal.

My parents think highly of my study. I can’t reach it when I was try my best to do it.

Step3 Make sentences要点 1 . 学习上期望太高，自己达不到他们的期望值 . 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 , 让自己很沮丧。

1.______expect too much of me .2._____not able to meet their expectation.3._______often compare me with the neighbours’ children.4. _____ makes me upset. 表述要点时 , 确定 ________确定 ____________

TheyI’mThey

It /That

主语，人称时态，语态

Step3 Make sentences要点 1 . 学习上期望太高，自己达不到他们的期望值 . 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 , 让自己很沮丧。

The goal they set for me is beyond my ability. What makes me upset is that they often compare me with the children nearby.

王蕾

Step3 Make sentences要点 1 . 学习上期望太高，自己达不到他们的期望值 . 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 , 让自己很沮丧。

They urge me to achieve high grage which are impossible for me at all. What worse, it drives me sad that they frequently compare me with my neighbours’ children.

刘煜

Step3 Make sentences

They demanded that I can’t watch TV or go surfing and I can’t make friends with girls.

shouldn’t

要点 2 不准看电视，上网

要点 2 不准看电视，上网They don’t allow me to watch TV or surf the Internet.

Step 3 Make sentences

• They provide me from making friends with girls.

Step 3 Make sentences

要点 3 不准自己跟女生交朋友prevent

• They don’t let me be friend with girls.

• They even discourage me from making girl friends.

要点 3 不准自己跟女生交朋友They discourage me from making friends with girls

forbid …from doingdiscourage …from doingprevent …from doing stop …from doingkeep…from doing

Step 3 Make sentences

表述要点时 , 所选择的词语及短语应避免重复。

要点 4 觉得和父母有代沟，不能很好地沟通。There is a wide river between me and them.I think there is a generation gap in my parents and me.

I feel there is a deep generation gap between us, which stop us from communication to the heart of each other.

Make sentences

I try to communicate with them, but there seems to be a gap between us.

张珊珊

要点 4 觉得和父母有代沟，不能很好地沟通。1.I feel that there is/exists a generation gap between parents and me. I can’t communicate well with them .

Make sentences

遣词造句需要推敲

要点 5 自己解决不了这个问题 ,希望和父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 .

Step 3 Make sentences

王晶， 刘煜，刘琼，王伟炫，戴迎，张珊珊，黄安珣，马印，童博雅，刘佳奇，黄佩玉，王蕾，李丹娜，黄蕾

要点 5 自己解决不了这个问题 ,希望和父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 .

My dear uncle, what should I do, can you gave me advice, hope you returning soon.

Step 3 Make sentences

I know you can help me.

I really want your tips.

要点 5 自己解决不了这个问题 ,希望和父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 .

Step 3 Make sentences

I hope you can have a talk with my parents to persuade them to change their education style.

If you persuade my parents to changes the form of education, I believe the situation will be changed.

要点 5 自己解决不了这个问题 ,希望和父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 .

Step 3 Make sentences

I hope you can have a talk with my parents to persuade them to change their education style.

王伟炫

要点 5 自己解决不了这个问题 ,希望和父母谈谈 , 劝说他们改变教育方式 .

I can’t solve the problem .I hope you can persuade them to change the way of education.

Step 3 Make sentences

要点 1 a. 学习上期望太高，自己达不到他们的期望值 .

They expect too much of me _____I’m not able to meet their expectations.

,but

表达要点句子时 ,应理清句子间的 ____________逻辑关系

.However,I’m;however,I’m

Step4 Make amazing sentences

要点 1 b. 并且经常拿自己和邻居家的孩子比 ,让自己很沮丧1.And they often compare me with the neighbours’ children. It / That makes me upset.

2.And they often compare me with the neighbours’ children ,________makes me upset.which

表述要点多尝试使用学过的 __

_______;____________

3. And what upsets me is _______they often compare me with the neighbours’ children.

that

定语从句和名词性从句 等 .

2 不准看电视 , 上网 ; 不准自己跟女生交朋友。

2._________do they discourage me from watching TV or surfing the Internet; _______ they stop me from making friends.

Not only

but also

表述要点多尝试使用学过的句型。

1.They don’t allow me to watch TV or surf the Internet;_____ do they let me make friends with girls.

Step4 Make amazing sentences

nor,and nor do

3.They don’t allow me to watch TV or surf the Internet; nor do they let me make friends with girls ,saying___________________.

Step4 Make amazing sentences

it is a waste of time.

( 请补充细节 )

it has a bad effect on my study. I am expected to focus on my study.

表达要点时要补充必要的细节以增加句子的生动性和感染力。Have a discussion with your partners.

4.As far as I’m concerned,due to ａ generation gap between parents and me ,I can’t communicate well with them,

__________________talking little but arguing a lot .( 请补充细节 )

Have a discussion with your partners.

Step4 Make amazing sentences

so that we talk little but argue a lot

Summary of writing skills

表述要点时 :

1. 确定主语 , 人称 , 时态 , 语态。2. 理清句子间的逻辑关系。3. 多尝试使用学过的句型。

1. 所选择的词语及短语应避免重复。2. 补充必要的细节以增加句子生动性和感染力。3. 遣词造句需推敲。

Dear Uncle,How are you these days? I’m writing to t

ell you my trouble with my parents.In my opinion, my parents are too strict

with me. To begin with,__________________________________________________. And__________________________________What’s worse____________________________________________________________._______________________________________________________________________._In a word,_____________________________

总

总分述要点

_____________________________________.

Now ____________________________.I would appreciate it if you_________________________________________. I’m looking forward to your reply.

Best wishes,Yours,Li Yi

参考范文Dear Uncle,

How are you these days? I’m writing to tell you my trouble with my parents.

In my opinion, my parents are too strict with me. They expect too much of me but I really can’t reach their expectations. Besides, they often compare me with my neighbours’ children, which makes me rather depressed. What’s worse , they even don’t allow me to watch TV or surf the Internet ;nor do they let me make friends with girls saying loudly it is just a waste of time.

In a word, as far as I’m concerned,with a wide generation gap between us , we can’t communicate well with each other, talking little but arguing a lot.

Till now, not knowing what I shall do with it, I would appreciate it if you could do me a favor to talk to my parents and persuade them to change the way of education. I’m looking forward to your reply.

Best wishes,Yours, Li Yi

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