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Revising From Wide Shot to Close Up
Part 2: Medium Shots
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Wide Shot to Close Up review
Wide shot = big picture
Medium shot = paragraphs
Close shot = sentences
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We’ve already practiced revising from the wide shot
Here’s a quick review:
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For wide shot (big picture) revising, consider:Did you answer the essay prompt question(s) correctly and thoroughly?
Did you remain focused on answering the prompt question(s) throughout your entire essay?
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Let’s quickly review how directors use wide, medium and close shots to tell a story
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Here’s short clip of the opening scene from Ray (2004) directed by Taylor Hackford
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Here’s short clip of the opening scene from The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly (1967) directed by Sergio Leone
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Now let’s transition to medium shots and learn about how you can use them to “direct” your writing
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Medium Shot (Paragraphs)Does each paragraph remain focused on one topic?
Because this is a research essay, the topic is usually a single source.
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Example:
In your evaluation essay, does each paragraph focus on how well a single source answered your question and/or the strengths and weaknesses of a single source?
Only the transition/intro paragraph should deviate from this focus.
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Let’s take a look at an example paragraph and see if we can revise to make it a strong medium shot in the student’s “movie”
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Two quick reminders:
1 - We know the student’s research question is "What are the effects of teen suicide and how can it be prevented?"
2 - We’ve read the abstract of the source the author evaluates in the example paragraph
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Let’s break this paragraph down line by line, then we’ll decide how to revise
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So let’s think about the big patterns we noticed
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Patterns:
Plenty of information about the source’s content
Some digressions into personal opinion
Good evaluation, but not always 100% clear
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Before you revise in groups, think about the essay prompt
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Prompt (excerpt):
The main purpose of this Essay is to evaluate the arguments made in your sources. By “evaluate,” I mean that you should offer a critical opinion on them (evaluate their strengths and weaknesses).
see: http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
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The two big tasks for this essay were:Which sources offer the best answers to your research question? Why? How?
Point out strengths and weaknesses in your sources.
see: http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
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Now that we’ve broken down the essay, get into your learning groups and try to revise the paragraph so it stays on topic and fulfills the essay prompt
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When you’re done revising, we’ll look at each group’s work
We’ll choose two and put them in the slideshow, which I’ll re-post on the blog and Canvas (I’ll tweet a link as well)
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View this slideshow on the blog (using the slideshare viewer) at the blog here:http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
note to self: have actual link above when it’s finished
You can also download it from the blog or Canvas and find a link on the class twitter feed