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Improving Descriptive Writing
Painting an Original Picture
Purpose of Descriptive Writing
Describe something in an original and unique so that it appeals to the five senses
Touch it Taste it
Hear it See it
Smell it
Keys of Being Descriptive
Be original Be creative Stretch your imagination For example, instead of this:
• The hot, yellow sun went behind the mountain and covered the valley in red.
The sun cut itself on a sharp peak and bled into the valley.—John Steinbeck
Try this:
How’s This?
She was super hero beautiful. Her hair was as black as coal, her lips red as blood.
Is it original and creative?
Clichés: The Descriptive Killer
1 : a trite phrase or expression; Also : the idea expressed by it
2 : something (as a menu item) that has become overly familiar or commonplace
Finding Clichés Through Experience If you have seen it
Or heard it
It’s probably a cliché
Finding Clichés Through Others
Ask someone really old
(You know, anyone over 21)
Finding Clichés On-line
Choose a keyword to look up Go to a cliché website and look up the
keyword Cliché finder is one of the best places to look:
http://www.westegg.Com/cliche/ You may have to try more than one keyword
Fixing Clichés
Identify the clichés Replace them with more descriptive writing
– Think of a new comparison– Look up words in a thesaurus– www.m-w.com
A Little Practice Each of you will be given a poem Identify ALL the clichés Replace half of them (you can choose the easiest
ones if you’d like) Don’t worry about making it rhyme We’ll do the first stanza together
Which of the following do think are clichés?
She’s as pure as the driven snow,Her face is as white as a sheet,Her hands are as smooth as silk,Her nails as red as a beet.
She’s as pure as the driven snow,Her face is as white as a sheet,Her hands are as smooth as silk,Her nails as red as a beet.
She’s as pure as the driven snow,
Her face is as white as a sheet,
Her hands are as smooth as silk,
Her nails as red as a beet.
Her hair is like the golden sun,
Her eyes blue like the sky,
She’s as beautiful as an angel,
and as hot as a firecracker on the 4th of July.
Her temper is as quick as lightning,
Her hatred cold as ice,
Her laughter is loud and clear,
But her crying is as quiet as mice.
Her beauty may be skin deep,
But her mind is as sharp as a knife.
I’m just small potatoes,
And she seems larger than life
They say she’s one in a million,
But I don’t believe what they say.
If she’s all that and a bag of chips,
Why say it with a cliché?
Same Old New Girl
Assignments turned in tomorrow at the beginning of class will be eligible for full credit