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Create Strong Verbs (6)

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waswerehasgivemakecome

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1 Original

Owing to environmental protection, lead and halogensubstances are gradually banned for 3C products inEurope, Japan and USA before 2007.

RevisedEnvironmental concerns led to the eventual banning oflead and halogen substances in 3C products acrossEurope, Japan and the United States before 2007.


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2 Original

To meet the higher assembly temperature, it will be aserious costs impact of electrical components withoutusing halogen flame retardants, or even no alternativematerials for this request.

RevisedWithstanding a higher assembly temperaturesignificantly increases costs of electrical componentswhen not using halogen flame retardants, especially withno alternative materials currently available.


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3 Original

The customer feedback the quality and on time deliveryproblem to our company from last Friday, and ask us forimprovement plan by this Friday.

RevisedFeedback received last Friday from a customer onproblems involving product quality and on time deliveryled to a request for our company to submit a modifiedstrategy within a week.


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4 Original

Since the lack of an effective proposal for demand from

consumer will lead to no in time responses.

RevisedThe lack of an effective proposal to respond effectively to

consumer demand will decrease productivity.


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5 Original

Owing to the credit card is popularized in Taiwan, thebanking institutions have the completed customers data,and how to analyze the customers data to optimize themarketing management will be critical for banking

survival in the future.

RevisedThe increasing popularity of credit card use in Taiwanhas enabled banking institutions not only to acquireextensive customer data, but also to analyze such data

to optimize marketing management practices, which isessential for corporate survival.


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6 Original

A digital receiver adopting the method proposedhere or apparatuses on carrier recovery has a bettertracking performance and is competitive to other

products in the same field. Revised

A digital receiver adopting the proposed methodduring carrier recovery can perform better in termsof tracking than conventional models, thus making

products more competitive.


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7 Original

Automatic Optical Inspection systems (AOI) are the methods forinspecting layers of printed circuit boards during manufacturing

production. By scanning PCB panels into the system, AOI canperform a detection of defects and even mark thee defects directlyon the panel. However, existing automatic optical inspection (AOI)

systems have been proved unreliable due to inevitable human errorsas their efficiencies in detecting patterns defects of printed circuitboards, especially when circuit becomes finer and pattern inspectionby humans take a great deal of time.

RevisedAutomatic optical inspection systems (AOIs) inspect layers of printed

circuit boards during manufacturing. By scanning PCB panels intothe system, AOI can detect defects and mark them directly on the

panel. However, current AOIs lack the ability to detect patterndefects of printed circuit boards efficiently, especially with theincreasing shrinking size of circuits and errors caused in patterninspection manually owing to the considerable amount of timeinvolved.


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8 Original

Via the comparison results of the peak value of von Mises stress onthe BGA tin balls, we found that the optimal design of the PCB withBGA tin balls is using the under-fill glue material. This solution isreally effective to strengthen the entire structure of PCB with BGA tinballs. But the side effect is that it will raise the material cost and

maintenance cost for a special machine. Revised

Comparing the results of the peak value of von Mises stress on theBGA tin balls reveals that the optimal design of the PCB with BGAtin balls uses the under-fill glue material. Despite strengthening theentire structure of PCB with BGA tin balls effectively, this solution

raises material costs and maintenance costs for a customizedmachine.


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