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IELTS - EFFECT OF CELEBRITIES ON YOUTH
candy07 6
May 23, 2014 #1
Topic - Celebrities are usually famous for glamour and ealt! rat!er t!an t!eir
ac!ie"ements $ome say ta%ing t!em as an e&le can be dangerous for young
people
To !at e&tent do you agree or disagree '
(esponse -
)oung people all o"er t!e orld are greatly influenced by media and celebrities T!ese
celebrities are popular among younger generations because of t!eir glamorous
lifestyles *t is agreed t!at folloing celebrities can be dangerous for t!e yout! T!isill be pro"en by loo%ing at !o !ealt! and personality of young people is affected by
folloing celebrities as t!eir mentors
+irst of all, it is seen t!at folloing celebrities blindly affects t!e !ealt! of adolescents
Many young people indulge t!emsel"es in drugs and start smo%ing at an early age +or
e&le , in a sur"ey carried out in a uni"ersity , it as as%ed to students t!at !y did
t!ey start smo%ing, t!en around forty percent of indi"iduals ansered t!at t!ey anted
to loo% li%e t!eir fa"orite screen actor !ile smo%ing cigarettes T!is e&le ma%es it
clear t!at imitating celebrities !as a negati"e influence on !ealt! of young indi"iduals
$econdly, it is belie"ed t!at !en yout! follos celebrities it affects personality of young
people in a bad ay dolescents follo not only t!e ma%e up and attire of t!eir fa"orite
stars but also t!eir be!a"ior +or instance recently in a poll conducted by an merican
magaine it as found t!at most of t!e parents and teac!ers complain t!at teenagers
use derogatory ords and abusi"e language at !ome and at sc!ools$o, t!is e&le
ma%es it ob"ious t!at t!ese glamorous celebrities !a"e a poor effect on t!e conduct of
young people
T!us to conclude , it can be said t!at !en young people follo celebrities ,it affects
t!eir !ealt! as ell as be!a"ior in a negati"e ay T!is !as an o"erall effect on
personality and future of an indi"idual T!erefore it is recommended t!at young people
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s!ould be educated not to follo t!ese celebrities blindly, rat!er t!ey s!ould focus on
t!eir career so t!at t!ey may !ope for a brig!t future
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ug 6, 2014 #1
.lease elegant guys in t!e forum gi"e me a !and it! my essay )ou are elcome to lea"e any
of your feedbac% or e"en rate my if you do not mind ll of your comments are !ig!ly
appreciated T!an% you e"erybody in ad"ance
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*t is true t!at many celebrities noadays are famous for t!eir glamour and affluence, but not
t!eir !ard or%, and some people t!in% t!at t!ey ould set a bad e&le for young
generations /oe"er, * belie"e t!at ot!er people deser"e to be an e&le of inspiration on
account of t!eir ac!ie"ements
n t!e one !and, a number of famous people do ac!ie"e fame it!out putting muc! effort into
t!eir life of or% T!ese people mig!t be %non for t!eir glamorous lifestyle and t!eir means *n
addition, some of t!em also deri"e t!e fame from t!e e&ploitation of mass media in order to
attract t!e attention of audiences good e&le ould be .aris /ilton, an !eiress, !o is
famous for not!ing but e&tra"agant and dissolute style of li"ing T!erefore, s!e mig!t spread t!e
message of a con"enient life it!out muc! endea"or
n t!e ot!er !and, t!ere is still a cluster of famous idols !ose accomplis!ments are t!e
adeuate inspiration for young people ctor, musicians and sports stars are con"entional
models of suc! celebrities T!ey alays contribute t!eir best talent, determination and ambition
to t!e success of t!eir ob Ta%e minem, a !ite rapper, as an e&le, it! !is great
perse"erance, !e !as earned t!e name of t!e greatest ali"e performer of t!e blac%-dominant
genre of music Conseuently, !e is ob"iously an uni"ersal symbol of famous indi"iduals !o
ac!ie"ing t!e success by t!eir adroitness and application
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n t!e !ole, it appears to me t!at t!e influence of celebrities to t!e yout! are positi"e as ell
as negati"e
ELTS - EFFECT OF CELEBRITIES ON YOUTH
candy07 6
May 23, 2014 #1
Topic - Celebrities are usually famous for glamour and ealt! rat!er t!an t!eir ac!ie"ements
$ome say ta%ing t!em as an e&le can be dangerous for young people
To !at e&tent do you agree or disagree '
(esponse -
)oung people all o"er t!e orld are greatly influenced by media and celebrities T!ese
celebrities are popular among younger generations because of t!eir glamorous lifestyles *t is
agreed t!at folloing celebrities can be dangerous for t!e yout! T!is ill be pro"en by loo%ing
at !o !ealt! and personality of young people is affected by folloing celebrities as t!eir
mentors
+irst of all, it is seen t!at folloing celebrities blindly affects t!e !ealt! of adolescents Many
young people indulge t!emsel"es in drugs and start smo%ing at an early age +or e&le , in a
sur"ey carried out in a uni"ersity , it as as%ed to students t!at !y did t!ey start smo%ing, t!en
around forty percent of indi"iduals ansered t!at t!ey anted to loo% li%e t!eir fa"orite screen
actor !ile smo%ing cigarettes T!is e&le ma%es it clear t!at imitating celebrities !as anegati"e influence on !ealt! of young indi"iduals
$econdly, it is belie"ed t!at !en yout! follos celebrities it affects personality of young people
in a bad ay dolescents follo not only t!e ma%e up and attire of t!eir fa"orite stars but also
t!eir be!a"ior +or instance recently in a poll conducted by an merican magaine it as found
t!at most of t!e parents and teac!ers complain t!at teenagers use derogatory ords and
abusi"e language at !ome and at sc!ools$o, t!is e&le ma%es it ob"ious t!at t!ese
glamorous celebrities !a"e a poor effect on t!e conduct of young people
T!us to conclude , it can be said t!at !en young people follo celebrities ,it affects t!eir !ealt!
as ell as be!a"ior in a negati"e ay T!is !as an o"erall effect on personality and future of an
indi"idual T!erefore it is recommended t!at young people s!ould be educated not to follo
t!ese celebrities blindly, rat!er t!ey s!ould focus on t!eir career so t!at t!ey may !ope for a
brig!t future
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IELTS: 2edia coe!a(e of cele!i"ie# i# $ain( ane(a"ie effec" on c$ild!en
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$ep 2, 2014 #1.lease gi"e me feedbac% on my essay T!an%s so muc!
2any &eo&le eliee "$a" edia coe!a(e of cele!i"ie# i# $ain( a ne(a"ie effec" on
c$ild!en
To %$a" e/"en" do you a(!ee o! di#a(!ee %i"$ "$i# o&inion1
T!ere are "ariety different perspecti"es on t!e uestion of !et!er or not t!e appearance of
celebrities on mass media is !a"ing ad"erse influence on c!ildren 5!ile some people still !old
a conser"ati"e "ie t!at media co"erage of celebrities can effect c!ildrens be!a"iors and
de"elopment in a negati"e ay *t is my personal belief t!at t!e biograp!ies and ac!ie"ementsof famous people can benefit c!ildren in many ays
pponents of t!e appearance of t!e famous argue t!at celebrity scandals damage t!e
c!ildrens perception of success $ome singers, and actors, for e&le, are infamous for t!eir
abuse of drug and alco!ol /oe"er, t!at is only a small number Many celebrities inspire and
uplift c!ildren t!roug! t!eir life and accomplis!ments and moti"ate c!ildren to gain similar
ac!ie"ements +urt!ermore, a large of number celebrities came from poor families, and !ad to
face many !ards!ips and o"ercome many obstacles on t!eir ay to fame
*n addition, many celebrities de"ote t!eir time and resources for t!e ad"ancement of society
*ndeed, t!eir products suc! as songs, art pieces, and films contain t!e undeniable "alue for
people all around t!e orld Moreo"er, some famous people !a"e establis!ed c!arity funds to
!elp people li"ing in de"eloping countries and t!ose !a"ing serious diseases 7ill 8ates, for
e&le, ta%es actions to !elp t!e poor in t!ird orld countries, and ngelina 9olie gi"es
!umanitarian aid to !elp many people from all al% of life
ll in all, it !as been pro"en t!at celebrities are %non as people !o !a"e t!e interests of
society at !eart Celebrities create acti"ities t!at can benefit communities, especially t!e
c!ildren in many ays *n ot!er ords, celebrities not only teac! c!ildren t!e ay to be
successful but t!ey also raise t!eir %noledge about t!e orld
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T!is is a good start to t!is essay T!ere is actually room for more discussion Most specially in
t!e 2nd paragrap! !ere you ere discussing t!e negati"e impact t!at t!e actions of celebrities
sometimes !a"e on c!ildren T!at portion ould !a"e been !elped tremendously if you
mentioned some celebrities !o acted negati"ely in real life and in t!e process, influenced t!eir
young fans toards negati"e actions as ell &plaining t!at t!e ay t!at t!e c!ildren dress li%egang members and tal% toug! and disrespectfully are attributes t!at t!ey pic% up from t!e ay
t!at t!e media presents t!is as a part of t!e celebritys ay of life and t!us, is a good t!ing
T!e paragrap! about t!e publicied t!e positi"e effect of celebrities is pure genius on your part
T!e ngelina 9olie bit, is classic 7ut 7ill 8ates is not a celebrity in t!e true sense of t!e ord so
* ould c!oose someone else for t!e male counterpart .er!aps ;eonardo <i Caprio' ;oo% up
!is foundation * %no !e also does a tremendous amount of c!arity or%
=o, t!e main problem of t!is essay is t!at, all t!oug! it is ell ritten and you pro"ided bot!
sides of t!e argument, you forgot to ta%e a personal stand on t!e issue by agreeing or
disagreeing to t!e statement and e&plaining !y T!is could be done in t!e 4t! paragrap! of t!e
essay *t is ob"ious t!at you support t!e stance t!at t!e celebrities !a"e a positi"e effect on t!e
c!ildren * strongly suggest you present your personal reasons for belie"ing so Most li%ely by
mentioning !o a particular positi"ely influenced you !en you are at an impressionable stage
in your life T!us ma%ing t!at person a role model to you based upon t!e ay t!e media
co"ered t!e life of t!e celebrity
)our last paragrap! is also effecti"e 7ut remember to restate t!e prompt and reiterate your
t!esis in t!e closing statement T!en your essay ill be all set for grammar re"ie >-?
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$ep 2, 2014 #3 All in all, it has been proven that celebrities are known as people who have attract theinterests (interest is uncountable of society at heart. Celebrities create activities thatcan benet communities, especially the children in many ways. In other words,celebrities not only teach children the way to be successful ,but they also raise theirknowledge about the world.
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$ep 2, 2014 #4Many celebrities inspire and uplift children through their life and accomplishmentsand motivate children to gain similar (similar has a vague conceptachievements.!urthermore, a large of number celebrities came from poor families, and had to facemany hardships (uncountableand overcome many obstacles on their way to fame.
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/ere are some pieces of ad"ice * !ope, t!ey ill be !elpful ?
"here are variety di#erent perspectives on the $uestion of whether or not theappearance of celebrities on mass media is having adverse in%uence on
children. &hile some people still hold a conservative view that media coverage ofcelebrities can e#ect children's behaviors and development in a negative way. It is mypersonal belief that the biographies and achievements of famous people can benetchildren in many ways.
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is perfect "ideo lesson on t!is grammar topic 8oogle searc! by %ey ords eng"id mean!ile
and !ile?
!urthermore, a large of number celebrities came from poor families, and had to facemany hardships and overcome many obstacles on their way to fame.
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Ean(ie#&en t!an%s so muc! * am really appreciated !en you tell me to rite about
;eonardo <i Caprio bsolutely, *ts better t!an 7ill 8ates !en * need to gi"e an e&le about
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$ep 2, 2014 #H"here are variety di#erent perspectives on the $uestion of whether or not theappearance of celebrities on mass media is having adverse in%uence on children.
%, t!is is your opening sentence and t!erefore it s!ould be strong enoug! to grab your
readers attention $o, dont rite "ery long sentences 5rite a s!ort sentence t!at comes it!
an interesting idea and a good punc! lso try and a"oid redundant ords in your sentences
t!at you use to lengt!en t!e sentence
People have varying views on how the media coverage on celebrities would affect the young
children.5!ile some people still !old a conser"ati"e stereotype "ie t!at media co"erage of
celebrities it can effect c!ildrens be!a"iors and de"elopment in a negati"e ay,
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5!ile some people still !old a conser"ati"e "ie t!at media co"erage of celebrities can effect
c!ildrens be!a"iors and de"elopment in a negati"e ay
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o"er all, its a good essay
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5ell ritten essay to a point but * !ig!ly encourage you to follo ot!er peoples ad"ice but greatt!ou D
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$ep 4, 2014 #10 All in all, it has been proven that celebrities are known as people who have theinterests of society at heart. Celebrities create activities that can benet communities,especially the children in many ways. In other words, celebrities not only teachchildren the way to be successful but they also raise their knowledge about the world.
/i nguoiD 8ood essay again * am going to re-rite your essay a little bit /ope it ill be !elpful
1?In other words, celebrities not only teach children the way to be successful but they also raise
their knowledge about the world.
* am not sure it is a great idea t!at you mentioned t!at celebrities ill raise %ids %noledge
about t!e orld +rom my point of "ie, in t!e conclusion part, you s!ouldnt come up it! a
ne argument !ic! you !a"ent touc!ed in t!e pre"ious paragrap!s * obser"e you tal%ed
about celebrities raising c!arity and setting t!emsel"es as idols to t!e %ids
So, why don't you write a sentence covering most of the main points you talked about above?Like, in other words, celebrities not only demonstrate their gird and courage by overcoming the
hardship in their life, but also let the kids realie it is more important to help other people to get
rid of poverty and predicament.
2?!elebrities create activities that can benefit communities, especially the children in many
ways.
$orry i dont fully understand !at t!is sentence means .lease rectify me if * am rong !ere
"re you saying that celebrities make big contribution to the society from which children benefitmostly?
I will redo this sentence this way. !elebrities devoted themselves to the communities, especially
by raising charity and helping underpriviledged kids.