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Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most importantconsideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people choose their jobs based on the size of the salary offered .

Personally, I disagree with the idea that money is the key consideration when

deciding on a career because I believe that other factors are equally important.

On the one hand, I agree that money is necessary in order for people to

meet their basic needs . For example, we all need money to pay for housing,

food, bills, health care, and education. Most people consider it a priority to at

least earn a salary that allows them to cover these needs and have a reasonable

quality of life. If people chose their jobs based on enjoyment or other non-

financial factors, they might find it difficult to support themselves. Artists and

musicians, for instance, are known for choosing a career path that they love, but

that does not always provide them with enough money to live comfortably and

raise a family.

Nevertheless, I believe that other considerations are just as important as

what we earn in our jobs. Firstly, personal relationships and the atmosphere in

a workplace are extremely important when choosing a job. Having a good

manager or friendly colleagues, for example, can make a huge difference to

workers levels of happiness and general quality of life . Secondly, many

peoples feelings of job satisfaction come from their professional achievements,

the skills they learn, and the position they reach, rather than the money they

earn. Finally, some people choose a career because they want to help others

and contribute something positive to society.

In conclusion, while salaries certainly affect peoples choice of profession, I do

not believe that money outweighs all other motivators .

(275 words, band 9)


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o V d ! : non-financial, etc.

Dng phrase thay v clause.

o V d ! : I disagree with the idea that money is the key consideration

when deciding on a career .

3/ Vocabulary:

The size of the salary offered: M3c l '= ng #'( c #* ngh 6 The key consideration: V5n #* #ng quan tm nh 5tConsider it a priority: Xem #i*u g # quan tr $ng h =n nh Ang #i*u cn l 8iCareer path: Con #'2 ng s D nghi 1pCertainly affect peoples choice: Ch Hc ch Hn %nh h ') ng #/ n s D lDa ch $n c 0anhi*u ng '2 iOutweigh all other motivators: N&ng h =n/quan tr $ng h =n cc y / u t : cn l 8i

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