Read Item 1, the newspaper article called Do you really want to be in our tribe? By Jan Muir

1. What do you learn from Jan Muir’s newspaper article about where Bruce parry has been and what he was doing? (8 marks)

• Work in pairs to underline all information that tells you about where Bruce Parry has been and what he was doing – number each piece of information

• Join another group to assess your points – have you got the same number of points? Have you underlined the same information?

• Remember you score marks for showing that you have read and understood the article – it is important that you find all the information

Bruce Parry would rather be described as an expeditionary than an explorer,

but he.s not splitting hairs. For much of the past year, he has been splitting

rats in half instead, then scooping out their innards for lunch or chargrilling

their tails for a nice evening snack.

.If you have been living on raw, dry sago for a week, which sucks the moisture from

your mouth and is like eating chalk, then you are grateful for anything different you

can get.

I ate and drank a lot of pretty grim stuff, but the truth is that I don.t mind the odd

locust - it tastes like a prawn - and the secret to drinking blood is to do it quickly.

Otherwise it tastes stringy as it goes down.

The redoubtable Parry and his ironclad intestines feature in the television series,

Tribe. Over the past 12 months, he has lived with some of the most remote tribes on

the planet; eating, sleeping and living the way they do, taking part in their rituals and

adopting as many of their customs as he could.

.It.s about getting in the zone, immersing myself in the culture of each area,. is how

he describes it. I could be accused of being a wannabe tribesman, of wanting to be a

tribal dude but that is now how I see it. I see it as me doing what they wanted me to

do, showing them respect and hanging out with them. And they loved it. It.s all been

an amazing journey, an incredible experience.

I am grateful for it all..

Parry.s travels have looped across the globe. In the Arunachal Pradesh region of

India, he was the Þ rst white man in living memory to visit the Adi people, while with

the cannibalistic Kombai tribe of West Papua, he used stone tools and ate

(non-human) meals cooked with hot stones. While with the Suri in Ethiopia, he had

his skin slashed with razor blades and thorns as part of an ancient ritual ceremony.

.The women laughed at me. They thought I was a terrible wimp because I ß inched,.

he says.

Today in a London restaurant he clings on to a glass of champagne and looks

shattered.

We have sweet grilled scallops, delicious ribbons of ham and a hillock of spaghetti

with crab and aubergine sauce all of which Parry dispatches lustily . and a bottle of

wine which, amongst its many excellent characteristics, is not one which tastes

stringy going down the throat.

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On your marks: 3, 2, 1 …

• What do you learn from Jan Muir’s newspaper article about where Bruce Parry has been and what he has been doing?

10 mins

Exemplar material

Candidate 1From this newspaper article I have learned that Bruce Parry is an expeditionary that has been living with some of the most remote tribes on the planet for the last 12 months. He ate everything they ate, even if he didn’t like it, ‘if you have been living on raw, dry sago for a week, which sucks the moisture from your mouth and is like eating chalk, then you are grateful for anything different you can get.’ But surprisingly there was some things he didn’t like ‘I don’t mind the odd locust.’ The two quotes show that even though a lot of the things he are were disgusting to him, and a lot of the things he did were hard, such as ‘his skin slashed by razor blades and thorns’, he still carried on for the whole 12 months, and has had an incredible experience.

The candidate shows some engagement with the text and understanding of some of the things Parry did. Quotation is relevant, although one quotation is very long. Reactions to Parry’s experiences are noted.More to say: there is more to be said about specific places and experiences

4/8 (band 2)

Candidate 2:Bruce Parry is a fascinating expeditioner. As the reader, we learn that from Jan Morris’s article that Bruce Pary has travelled to many different places in Asia and Africa. We learn that he has visited places such as the ‘Atunachal Pradesh region of India’ and other places such as Ethiopia. Jan Moir successfully portrays Parry’s journey and what he actually does, ‘he has lived with some of the most remote tribes on the plane; eating sleeping and living the way they do.’ Therefore, as the reader, we can establish that Parry is immersing himself in different tribes and acting like one of them. He has lived with a variety of different people, taken part in their strange traditions and been part of the community. He has tasted many different foods that would not be common to British and Westernised people. He has given us an insight into what life is like in some of the most remote places on this planet. We also learn from Moir’s article that the series ‘Tribe’ is rather like a documentary with Parry commentating on his experiences in the places he visits. To conclude, we learn from Moir’s article of Parry’s journey through different parts of the world, places that aren’t generally talked about in our society. He has taken part in their customs and traditions and has educated us on the things people eat, drink and do in other places around the globe.The candidate makes some perceptive remarks about what parry has been doing, showing understanding of the purpose of his ‘immersing himself’ and ‘being part of the community’. Reference is also made to his TV series and its purpose. But, the article lacks specific examples of things Parry did and how he reacted.More to say: specific detail

6/8 (Band 3)

Now, mark your own according the mark scheme

• Swap with your shoulder partner and assess each others marking.

• Set yourself a target of 3 things to improve next time

Now read Item 2, the article and the picture which goes with it called new life revealed in rainforests of the deep by Sophie Tedmanson

Q2: How do the headline and the whole picture add to the effectiveness of the text?

Presentations Features

Size, fontBold, italic, underliningHeadlines, subheadings, pictures, graphics, charts, graphs, logos, website addresses, colour

Structural Features such as:

Paragraphs, bullet points, sections, boxes

Introduction, conclusion, summary, repetition

Discourse features, such as firstly, secondly, in conclusion, numbering

Gap Audience Purpose

Read the article and complete the following activity

1. Read the article and identify the GAP:genre (what type of text), audience (who is created for) and purpose (what it aims to do)

2. Look carefully at the article. Identify and list as many presentational and structural features as you can. You can use the lists above to help you make a start.

3. Link the presentational and structural features to the GAPThere are four common purposes of writing: to inform, to

entertain, to argue or persuade, to advise

Read the exam mark scheme for the this question

• Make some bullet points for you to have as your personal targets for answering the question

• Q2: How do the headline and the whole picture add to the effectiveness of the text?

Use PEED for Q2 :PointEvidenceExplainDevelopment : this could be evaluating the effectiveness of the feature, focusing on a specific word or detail, giving your opinion

How to write about structure and layout

The headline, ‘Chantelle’s Secret Wedding Shocker’, gets the reader’s attention. It is short and hints at what the article will be about, making the reader want to find out more. For example, the word ‘secret’ will interest readers because it implies that new information will be revealed.

Point

Evidence Explanation Development

REMEMBER TO LINK EVERY POINT BACK TO THE AUDIENCE AND PURPOSE

The photograph of the hurricane damage shows us what the article is about, even before we read any of the words. It is effective because it is easy to understand quickly and makes us want to know more. The photograph also only shows the devastation – it doesn’t show any of the buildings that are left standing or any signs of life. This reinforces the terrible impact of the hurricane.

How to write about graphics, captions and imagesPoint – states the purpose of

the image

Says why it is effectiveShows how effective it is by describing its effect on the reader

Consider the effect of the feature:• Text columns: organise text, makes it easier to find information,

makes text appear shorter and easier to read (large blocks of text could put readers off)

• Text boxes: Draw readers attention to information/facts/ key details; adds impact to the text; makes text easier for reader to navigate; grabs reader’s attention; breaks up text making it easier to read

• Bullet points and numbered lists: used to summarise ideas/information; breaks points down making them easier to follow; emphasises the order

• Colour: creates mood/atmosphere, links to themes, draw attention, exaggerate differences, can be emotive, match image

• Font style and size: bold font to make text standout, italics to highlight quotes, underlining to highlight and grab attention, capital letters to make headings stand out

Q2: How do the headline and the whole picture add to the effectiveness of the text? (8 marks)

Use PEED for Q2 :PointEvidenceExplainDevelopment : this could be evaluating the effectiveness of the feature, focusing on a specific word or detail, giving your opinion

LINK TO PUROSE AND AUDIENCE

10 MINS

Read and assess an exemplar answer:The headline, large and in bold, catches the eye and gives a quick and succinct summary of the article. It tells us about the ‘New Life’ found such as the ‘live stingray’, ‘black coral’, and ‘bamboo coral’. It also says about the ‘Rainforests of the deep’ in the title which summarises the huge undersea mountains which measure half a mile high and fifteen miles wide. It also allows us to soon find out about the underwater canyons. The picture is eye-catching and colourful. It gives us an interesting few images to learn what the underwater corals looks like which are surprisingly colourful for organisms that are kilometres under the ocean. It shows us their shape and the strangeness of them shows us why scientists are so interested in them. The other illustration computerised gives us a cross-section of the ocean. The colours are again eye-catching and allows us to get a scaled idea of how deep the marine life are and how tall the mountains are. It also shows how a tiny amount of the ocean is actually protected. The title allows the reader a quick summary of what is to be presented in more detail in the article, whilst the illustration provides some colour and actual evidence of the life. They both compliment an informative article.

The candidate has offered a brief response but it is very focused on the purpose of the headline and the picture and the links with the writing. Some detail is offered and understanding is shown of what ‘New life’ and ‘Rainforest of the deep’ refer to. Effects are noted.

More to say: there is more to say about the choice of actual words in the title and about the detail in the picture

6/8 (Band 3)

Now mark your own according to the mark criteria

• Swap with someone else and assess your marking – discuss

• Set yourself 3 targets for improvement