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Weekly English

Monday 13th July 2020 StepstoSuccess:•  pasttense•  3rdperson•  powerfuladjec2ves&expandednounphrasestodescribescene•  characterisa2onthroughtheuseofcommasandsemi-colonstocreatealist

useofbracketsanddashesforparenthesis(addi2onaldetailsaboutthesubjectofthesentence)

•  powerfulverbsandadverbialphrasestogivedetailsaboutthemaincharacters

•  varietyofsentencelengths•  useofdialoguetoconveythepersonalityofthecharacter•  powerofthreeindescrip2ons•  specificnounphrasestoconveyclaritytothereader

LI:Towriteextendedsentencesusingcommas,bracketsordashesforparenthesis.

Jim, ,shuffledoutofbed.George( )knockedonthedoorofthebighouse.Shrimps- -lookedpaleandsickly.

Whatphrasescouldyouaddbetweenthecommas,bracketsordashesthatwilltellthereadersomethingnewaboutthesecharacters?

Possiblephrases:Jim,whohadonlyjustwokenup,shuffledoutofbed.George(havingalreadywarnedJimtobeonhisbestbehaviour)knockedonthedoorofthegrandhouse.Shrimps–lyingunderaraggedblankettokeepwarm -lookedpaleandsickly.

No2cehowthisembeddedphraseisalsoarela2veclause?

Lookbackthroughyourplanfromlastweek.Whichsec2onsmakeuptheintroduc2ontoyouraddi2onalchapter?

Formystory,I’mgoingtoincludesec4ons1,2and3inmyintroduc4on,asthosepartsleadJimtothepointofmee4ngthechimneysweep.Sec4ons4-8willbemymainstoryandtheresolu4onwillbethelasttwosec4ons.

LI:Towritetheintroduc2onofanaddi2onalchaptertoStreetChild.

Lookatyourstepstosuccessandtrytoincludetheseasyouwrite.

Nowwriteyouropening.

Exhausted,Jimclumsilypulledhiswayoutfromtheoldteachesthe’dbeentryingtosleepinaFeryetanotherdisturbednight.Stretchingtorelievethes4ffnessinhislimps,hecasthiseyesoverthesleepingbundlesofraggedboyshuddledtogetheralongtherooFopofthelocalfishmarket.Charlie,ascrawnyfiveyearoldladwho’drecentlyjoinedthem,hadscreamedintermiMentlythroughoutthenight,wakingupfromterriblenightmares.Theotherboysaroundhimhadtriedtocomforthimatfirst,buteventuallyeventheyhadrunoutofpa4enceandthreatenedCharliethatifhedidn’tshutup,theythrowhimofftheroof.JimhadtakenpityontheladandofferedCharlietosharethesmallshelterofhisteachest.Duringthenight,Charliehadsobbedsohard,thatJimwrappedhisthinarmsaroundCharlie’seventhinneronesandrockedhimtosleepintheearlyhoursofthemorning.

Thisismymodelfromsec2onone:(No4cethatmysec4ons–orchapters-aredifferentlengths.)

NowitwasfiveinthemorningandthemarketworkerswerearrivingtosetuptheirstallswithfishbroughtuptheRiverThamesfromthecoastaltownsofHerneBayandWhitby,caughtovernightintheNorthSeabyweathered,redfacedfishermen.Fresh,spoMedplaicewiththeirstrangeeyesalongthetopoftheirheads;blueandsilverstrippedmackerel-somewithshrivelledskinwherethey’dbeensmoked;silverscaledseabassstackedheadtotailandhugechunksofwhitehake;allpackedintocratesofice,withcatchesofredlobsters,browncrabsandgreyshrimps-s4llmovingintheircrampedbaskets.Thenoises4rredtheotherboysandJimknewthathe’dhavetobequickifhestoodachanceofgrabbingsomethingforbreakfast.ScramblingofftherooFop,andshinningdowntheoldblackguMeringattheendoftheroof,Jimthreadedhiswaythroughthestalls.Dodgingtheheavycratesthatwerebeingunloadedfromthedock,Jimstolebehindoneofthelargepillarsatthesouthsideofthemarket,nearesttheriver.Hewatched.Asquickasaflash,Jimsnatchedoutahandandretrievedasmallsmokedmackerel(hisfavourite)fromastallwhoseownerhadturnedhisbacktohaulupanothercrate.Hestuffedthemackerelinsidehisshirtandcreptoutofthemarket.Findingaoverturnedbarrelfurtherdownthedock,awayfromthemarket,Jimpulledouthispreciousbreakfastandbegantostuffitinhismouthbeforeanyonefromthemarket,oranotherhungryboy,couldstealitawayfromhim.

Thisismymodelfromsec2ontwo:

ARerabout20minutes,Jimmeanderedhiswaybackthroughthefishmarket.Hewaswatchingtwomenwhowerestrugglingtocarryaverylargecrateofhalibut,whenhebumpedintoamanwalkingtheotherway.Thetall,slimmanwaspushingawoodencartfulloflongbrushesforsweepingchimneys.HestoppedasJimmumbledanapologyandquicklyturnedawaytoavoidapoten2albea2ng.“Heyyouboy!”calledthechimneysweep.“D’yaliveround‘ere?”“Don’tlivenowheremate,”Jimreplied.“Youupforabito’working?Showmeyousarms.Yougotanymuscles?”JimlookedratherconfusedbutliRedhisscrawnyarmandshowedthemanhismuscles.ThesweepchuckledandpointedatJim’sarms.“Youscall‘emmusclesdoyalad?Well,neva’mind,thethinnerthebe^er.Youcomewivmean’I’llseeyousright.Wantsomegrub?Mymisses’llseeyousorted.”SoJimwentwithhim.

Thisismymodelofsec2onthree:

Readbackthroughyourwri2ng.Howmanyofyourstepstosuccesshaveyouincluded?Makesureyouincludeanymissingonesintomorrow’swri2ng.

Plenary:

Tuesday 14th July 2020 StepstoSuccess:•  pasttense•  3rdperson•  powerfuladjec2ves&expandednounphrasestodescribescene•  characterisa2onthroughtheuseofcommasandsemi-colonstocreatealistuse

ofbracketsanddashesforparenthesis(addi2onaldetailsaboutthesubjectofthesentence)

•  powerfulverbsandadverbialphrasestogivedetailsaboutthemaincharacters•  varietyofsentencelengths•  useofdialoguetoconveythepersonalityofthecharacter•  powerofthreeindescrip2ons•  specificnounphrasestoconveyclaritytothereader

LI:Tousesemi-colonsinalist.

Hereisanexampleofhowyoucanusesemi-colonstowriteadescrip2velist:Jimwaswearing:oldraggedtrousersthatwerefartooshortforhim;ataMeredpulloverthathadoncebeenred;ablack,flatcapandthebiggestsmileimaginableonhissmall,cheekyface.Yourturn:WritealisttodescribetheplacewhereJimwasliving.

LI:Towritethebuildupofmystory:

Readyourintroduc2ontoremindyourselfofwhatyouhavealreadywri^en.Remembertokeepyourwri2nginthepasttenseandthethirdperson!Whatarethestepstosuccessthatyouneedtoincludetoday?Nowstartwri2ngyourmainsec2on.

Atfirst,Jimfoundtheworkenjoyable.Georgecha^edtohim,tellingtheboystoriesaboutthefolkthatlivedinthegrandhouses.JimsleptinthewarmkitchenatGeorge’shome,wrappinghimselfinanold,woollenblanket.Inthemorning,hewasgivenabreakfastofteaandbreadandintheevening,hejoinedwiththerestofthefamilyea2ngwhateverfareGeorge’swifehadbeenabletocreateusingtheirmeagrera2ons.Jimfeltuseful,wantedandasifhefinallyhadaplaceintheworld.

Thismymodel:Youwillno4cethatIhavemissedonesec4onofmystoryplan.AsIwaswri4ng,IdecidedthatIwouldmissoutthedescrip4onofhowJimlearnedthejobofachimneysweep,asthiswouldnothelpmovethestoryalong.Youshouldalwaysreviewyourideasandadaptthemifyouthinkyouhaveabe7erideaandwishtochangethem.

However,astheweekswentby,Jimfoundhimself2red.Hewasalwaysworkingandthehourswerelong.ORen,hewouldbetoo2redtoeathissupperandthenthefollowingmorning,Georgewouldhavehimupandoutofthehousebeforehe’dhad2meforbreakfast.Hebegantocough.Notjustanoccasional2ckleinthebackofhisthroat,butapersistent,hackingcoughthatcon2nuedonandoffeveryday.Hisskinwasdry;ingrainedwithsoot;coveredwithdeepcutsandburns.Jim’seyeswereredandsore.NothingheseemedtobegoodenoughforGeorgenow.Hewasalwaysbeingbellowedat;calledhorrible,evilnamesandsmackedaroundtheheadfortheslightestmishap.Theworkwasnolongerfun.JimbegantoplotwayshecouldescapefromGeorgeandreturntohisoldlife.Evenlivingonthestreetshadtobebe^erthanthis!

Yourturn:Writeyourbuildup.Aretheredetailsthatareimportantforyoutokeeporoneswhichyoushouldyouchange?

Plenary:

Howmanyofthesefeatureshaveyounowincluded?Haveyouusedthemmorethanonce?Whatmustyouremembertousewhenyouwritetheresolu2on?

Wednesday 15th July 2020 StepstoSuccess:•  pasttense•  3rdperson•  powerfuladjec2ves&expandednounphrasestodescribescene•  characterisa2onthroughtheuseofcommasandsemi-colonstocreatealistuse

ofbracketsanddashesforparenthesis(addi2onaldetailsaboutthesubjectofthesentence)

•  powerfulverbsandadverbialphrasestogivedetailsaboutthemaincharacters•  varietyofsentencelengths•  useofdialoguetoconveythepersonalityofthecharacter•  powerofthreeindescrip2ons•  specificnounphrasestoconveyclaritytothereader

LI:Touseadverbialphrasestogivedetailsaboutthecharacter,orseeng.

Nowfollowthesamepa^erntowriteadverbialphrasesfortheseclauses:Jimsprinted…Shrimpslaiddown..Thefishmarketwas...

LI:Towritetheresolu2ontoanaddi2onalchapter.

Readthroughyourwri4ngfromtheverybeginning.Areyoureadytocompleteyouraddi4onalchapter?Whichwri4ngfeaturesareyougoingtoincludetoday?

Thisismymodelresolu2on.IwantedtotakeJimbacktowherehebeganthissec2onsothatthestoryofStreetChildcanpickupagainaRerI’veaddedinmyaddi2onalchapter.

Hegazedaroundtofindawaydownofftheroofbutstruggledtothinkclearly.Jimwass2llinshock.Hecouldhavebeentrapped.Hecouldhavedied!AsJimstoodthere,tryingtosortouthisfeelings,heheardGeorgeyellingoutfromthewindow,tellinghimto,‘gethisbonesdownstairsrightaway’.Suddenlyitdawnedontheboy.Itwasnowornever.Ifhedidn’ttakethischancetoescape,thennext2mehewastrappedinachimney,itwouldbehislast.Herememberedhearingofboyswho’dbeenburnedtodeathwhenthesweepsetafiretoencouragethemtoclimbout.Onlylastweek,He’dbeentoldaboutanotherboywho’dbeentrappedsotheyhadtobreakdownthechimney.Ithadcostthesweeptwoweekswagesandtookhisrageoutontheboybybea2nghimsenseless.Hisbodywasfoundfloa2ngintheThamestwodayslater.Thiswasnotgoingtohappentome,Jimdecided.

Stumblingoverthe2les,heclumsilypickedhiswayacrosstheroofandslidontotheneighbouringone.Ontheothersideofthatroof,hespo^edasturdydrainpipeclingingtotherearofthepropertyandclosetoahighbrickwallthatranthelengthofthegarden.Heshinneddown,scurriedalongthewall,dippingundertheboughofatallwillowtree,andfoundhimselfinanalleyclosetotheriver.Dodginginandoutoftheshadows,Jimfollowedthebackstreetsun2lhemadeitbacktothefishmarket.Finallyhestopped,doublingoverandres2nghishandsonhiskneesinexhaus2on.He’dmadeit.Hewassafe.ARerJimhadgatheredhisbreath,helookedupandno2cedShrimpsquicklylimpinghiswayoutthemarket,followedbythebellowingofastallholder.Theownerofthestallhadn’tbeenquickenoughtocatchShrimpsashenickedasmallherringfromthecratenearestthefrontedge,butalsodarenotleavehisstalltogivechase.Jimsmiledtohimself.Fishforteatonighthethought.

Plenary:

Howmanyexamplesofthesefeatureshaveyouincluded?

Thursday 16th July 2020 StepstoSuccess:•  pasttense•  3rdperson•  powerfuladjec2ves&expandednounphrasestodescribescene•  characterisa2onthroughtheuseofcommasandsemi-colonstocreatealistuseof

bracketsanddashesforparenthesis(addi2onaldetailsaboutthesubjectofthesentence)

•  powerfulverbsandadverbialphrasestogivedetailsaboutthemaincharacters•  varietyofsentencelengths•  useofdialoguetoconveythepersonalityofthecharacter•  powerofthreeindescrip2ons•  specificnounphrasestoconveyclaritytothereader

LI:Toeditmyworkforspelling,grammarandpunctua2on.

1.  Checkyouworkforspellingerrors.2.  Checkyourwri2ngisinthepasttense(wasnotis)3.  Checkyourwri2ngisinthirdperson(henotI)4.  Howmanydifferentwayshaveyouopenedyour

sentences?•  Verbeg:Stumbling,Shocked,•  Adverbeg:Slowly,Finally,•  Preposi2onaleg:JustaRernoonthefollowingday,(2me)Infrontoftheramshacklehouse,(place)Withoutcaringfortheconsequences,(manner)

LI:Toeditmywri2ngbyuplevelingmyvocabularychoices.

Asyoucheckyourwork,lookforwordsthatyoumightuplevelforabe^erchoice.Especiallythefollowingwords:•  Said,•  Went•  Place•  Road•  Got•  Big•  Small•  OldHowmanyspecificnounsorpowerfulverbshaveyouused?

Plenary:

Completeafinalreadthroughyourchapter.Dothisbyreadingoutloudbecauseitwillhelpyoutospotanythingelsethatneedstobeedited.

Friday 17th July 2020

StepstoSuccess:•  Ihavefollowedtheinstruc2onstocreatemybook•  Ihavewri^enmychapterinneatandjoineduphandwri2ng•  Ihaveillustratedmybookwithpencildrawings

LI:Topublishanaddi2onalchaptertoStreetChild.

h^ps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=21qi9ZcQVto

Clickonthelinkbelowtomakeamini-foldedbook.YouwillneedasheetofA4paperandsomescissors.

Usingyourverybest,joinedhandwri2ng,publishyourstory.Youcanaddasecondbookifyouneedaddi2onalpages.Leavesomespacestoaddsomesimplepencilillustra2ons.

Monday 20th and Tuesday 21st July 2020

LI:Towriteablurbandre-publishyourchapterasananimatedstory.

Finishyourbookbywri2ngaburbbepublishedonthebackcover.Thisshouldbeateasertoencouragepeopletoreadthestory.

Nowre-createyourstorybookonPurpleMash,usingthe‘Createastory’app.Recordyourselfreadingaloudyouraddi2onalchapterandaddingyourownillustra2ons.