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Informative EssayProvide an explanation

You must use 2 of the “Key Words” in your essay.

Question: What is one central idea expressed through all the texts, and how is the central idea developed?

Thesis—Rough Draft:

In the articles “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts.

What is missing in the thesis according to the question?

•Talk to a partner

•1 minute.

Question: What is one central idea expressed through all the texts, and how is the central idea developed?

Thesis—Rough Draft:

In the articles “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of figurative language and diction.

•Talk to a partner

•1 minute.

• Write an essay in which you discuss the development of one central idea you have identified in the text(s you’ve been studying. Be sure to explain how the central idea is developed (Style: figurative language, irony, diction) and how it is shaped and refined by specific details.

• Find examples all of your examples of figurative language, irony, diction, and see what two out of the three you can use to for your thesis.

• You must use TWO out of the three stylistic choices.

Write your own rough draft of a thesis.

Take out the hamburger/hamburger paper.

Write thesis in the diamond (middle).

Question: What is one central idea expressed through all the texts, and how is the central idea developed?

•Use this template to write your own thesis:

Thesis: In the articles (Article #1 Title, by Author #1), and (Article #2 by Author #2), the central idea of fearing the other

is developed throughout the text by the use of (2 out of 3: Irony, diction, metaphor/similes).

(If you don’t like this template, feel free to be creative and write your own! Just make sure you answer the essay prompt.)

Question: What themes are introduced in The Crucible and how are the themes developed over the course of the text?

•Use this template to write your own thesis:

Thesis: In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.

(If you don’t like this template, feel free to be creative and write your own! Just make sure you answer the essay prompt.)

• What are your first steps in starting an essay?

What is a thesis?

• A thesis is an answer to a question.

– How did hip-hop change popular culture?

Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis.

General Statement

“Sweet Spot”

Too Narrow

Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis.THESIS

Question: How did hip-hop change popular culture?

General Statement: The main idea was proven with lots of things.

Sweet Spot”: The idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.

Too Narrow: The idea of fearing the “other” is developed in the third sentence by Ascher, who is also a vegetarian, but she was a vegan 5 years ago, until her husband left her—Brent Staples is a great writer. He’s also attractive, and he talked about lots of thing and used things like irony and stuff.

F.A.T.T. Thesis

Include “F.A.T.T.” in your thesis.

•Focus: What is the main idea?•Author: Author’s full name•Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”•Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?

F.A.T.T. Thesis• Focus: What is the main idea?• Author: Author’s full name• Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”• Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?

In the article(Text), “Rap the World”(Title) by Dean Young(Author) (Focus) hip hop influenced popular culture through dress, language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with the youth.

Introductions• What do you know about introductions?

Introductions

• Take out a piece of paper.

• Write “1st Draft” on this paper.

Introductions: Informative Essay

• You can use two types of introductions for this informative essay:– Interesting Fact– Personal Anecdote

Introductions• Anecdote

• Think of a personal moment of your subject matter for your thesis. My subject: Fear of the Other

• The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries paralyzed the entire class—Dana had a form of Autism which included behaviors like self-harm.

• My Filipino neighbor had a dead pig over his shoulder, its ears flopping with each of my neighbor’s step.

• As the woman wearing the Burka walked through the airport, even children paused and stared at her.

Introduction• Anecdotal Using Scene

• Use 3 out of the 5 senses• Quickest way to emotionally convince the reader• Pure storytelling

Introduction• Scene: Write 3 sensory details about a

time you witnessed/experienced “the other.”

EXAMPLE: When Dana Campbell began hitting herself and screamed during class (5th grade).

3 SENSORY DETAILS• Dana Campbell’s shrieks and cries• Tony’s Funions• Mrs. Travis’ forearm muscle and veins

IntroductionScene: Write 3 sensory details.The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries (Sensory detail #1paralyzed the entire class. Dana had a form of Autism that included behaviors like self-harm, and today, it was a severe episode that shed blood. Her blond hair was clumped near the scalp with blood. My best friend, Tony, had just opened his Funions (Sensory detail #2), and the pungent scent made me want to wretch. Mrs. Travis side stepped desks and ran down the aisle, grabbing Dana’s wrist, Mrs. Travis’ forearms corded with veins and muscle (Sensory detail #3). I was afraid to help. I was afraid of Dana, since her behaviors were so frighteningly different from my own. She was the “other,” and when I categorized her as such, it was easy to dismiss compassion toward her.

Introductions• Find one interesting fact about your

thesis, and write it down as your first line of your essay.

Introductions• Interesting Statement of Fact

• Look up an interesting fact about the subject matter of your thesis. My subject: Compassion is dismissed when fear takes over

Introductions

• Start first sentence with interesting fact• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:• Six million Jews were murdered.

In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.

Introductions

• Start first sentence with interesting fact• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:• Six million Jews were murdered.

In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.

Finding Quotes to support your thesis

• Take out a piece of paper.

• Hamburger-Hamburger a regular piece of paper.

• Write your thesis in the middle diamond.

• Choose two quotes to support your thesis on the two halves.

Hamburger Hotdog Paper

Writer’s Name: Tommy KimQuote #1Author: Lazaear AscherTitle: “On Compassion”

Say: “Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street, there is a small French bread shop where you can sit and eat a buttery, overpriced croissant and wash it down with rich cappuccino” (Ascher 47).

Quote #2Author: Brent StaplesTitle: “Walk On By: Black Men in Public Spaces”

Say: “My first victim was a woman—white, well dressed, probably in her early twenties. I came upon her late one evening on a deserted street in Hyde Park, a relatively affluent neighborhood…” (Staples 383).

In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.

Introduction

• How do you find quotes to support your thesis?

Outline (Do Steve Jobs Assignment)

• Choose two quotes to support your thesis.

How do you analyze evidence/quotes?

Quote #1

Say: QUOTE demonstrating Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile

“Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street, there is a small French bread shop where you can sit and eat a buttery, overpriced croissant and wash it down with rich cappuccino” (Ascher 47).

Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Summarize the use of Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile.Ascher recounts an incident in which she witnesses a homeless man enter an affluent café.

*MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): How does the Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile support the main idea?In this case, Ascher is carefully using the word “rich” to describe a beverage in order to emphasize the contrast between the upscale café and its customers to the homeless man that enters. Ultimately, this use of diction portrays the homeless man as even more anomalous and develops the idea of the “other” through contrast, of rich and poor, of familiar and aberrant.

Quote #2Say: “My first victim was a woman—white, well dressed, probably in her early twenties. I came upon her late one evening on a deserted street in Hyde Park, a relatively affluent neighborhood…” (Staples 383).

Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Staples ironically explains his position as a predator, preying on a white woman on a nightly stroll, when in reality he is simply walking down the street as an African American man, innocent and in fact wanting to be considerate.

MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In other words, he takes on the position as a predator so the reader can better understand what he experiences, using irony to persuade the reader of the appalling judgment made on him based simply on his skin color, based simply on being an “other.”

Quote #1 (Do as a class)Say: QUOTE demonstrating Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile

Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Summarize the use of Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile.

MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): How does the Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile support the main idea?

Hamburger Hotdog Paper

Writer’s Name: Tommy KimQuote #1Author: Lazaear AscherTitle: “On Compassion”

Say: “Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street, there is a small French bread shop where you can sit and eat a buttery, overpriced croissant and wash it down with rich cappuccino” (Ascher 47).

Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Ascher recounts an incident in which she witnesses a homeless man enter an affluent café. .

MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, Ascher is carefully using the word “rich” to describe a beverage in order to emphasize the contrast between the upscale café and its customers to the homeless man that enters. Ultimately, this use of diction portrays the homeless man as even more anomalous and develops the idea of the “other” through contrast, of rich and poor, of familiar and aberrant.

Quote #2Author: Brent StaplesTitle: “Walk On By: Black Men in Public Spaces” Say: “My first victim was a woman—white, well dressed, probably in her early twenties. I came upon her late one evening on a deserted street in Hyde Park, a relatively affluent neighborhood…” (Staples 383).

Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Staples ironically explains his position as a predator, preying on a white woman on a nightly stroll, when in reality he is simply walking down the street as an African American man, innocent and in fact wanting to be considerate.

MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In other words, he takes on the position as a predator so the reader can better understand what he experiences, using irony to persuade the reader of the appalling judgment made on him based simply on his skin color, based simply on being an “other.”

In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters.

Introduction• Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and

scene)• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog

paper

Introduction• Take out your 1st draft• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog

paper• Take out your 13 moves list

IntroductionWrite your thesis and transition into your thesis after your introduction:Example:The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries paralyzed the entire class. Dana had a form of Autism that included behaviors like self-harm, and today, it was a severe episode that shed blood. Her blond hair was clumped near the scalp with blood. My best friend, Tony, had just opened his Funions, and the pungent scent made me want to wretch. Mrs. Travis side stepped desks and ran down the aisle, grabbing Dana’s wrist, Mrs. Travis’ forearms corded with veins and muscle. I was afraid to help. I was afraid of Dana, since her behaviors were so frighteningly different from my own. She was the “other,” and when I categorized her as such, it was easy to dismiss compassion toward her. . (Move #1) There have been writers exploring the same conflict I had when encountering the “other,” using rhetorical techniques to persuade the reader to accept their point of view.. (Move #2) In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction. .

Introduction• Take out the essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem”

by Tommy Kim.

Introduction• Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see

what kind of moves Mr. Kim has!

Expository Essay Moves• Take out the essay “We Are All the

Other” by Tommy Kim.

• You will highlight each move

• I will call on you

• Read the first three words of the sentence for each move.

Informational Essay Moves

Underline and number each of these moves:

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis Paragraph #1

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1 Paragraph #2

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2 Paragraph #3

12.Transition into last paragraph

13.Restatement of thesis Paragraph #4

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

9. Say #2

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2

12.Transition into last paragraph

13.Restatement of thesis

Expository Essay Moves

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2

12.Transition into last paragraph

13.Restatement of thesis

Expository Essay Moves:Copy these moves and check them off as

you write.1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2

12.Transition into last paragraph

13.Restatement of thesis

Introduction• Take out your introduction (scene/statement of

fact)• Take out your say-mean-matter

hamburger/hamburger paper• Take out my essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem”• Take out your 13 moves list (we just copied them

down)

EssayTake out the following and begin your essay:• Introduction (interesting statement of fact)•Hamburger/Hamburger paper•My rubric, paragraph by paragraph

1.Transition INTO thesis.

2.Thesis

3.Introduction to quote

4.Say #1

5.Mean#1

6.Matter#1

7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8.Introduction to quote

9.Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2

12.Transition into last paragraph

13.Restatement of thesis

Move #1• Write a transition from your introduction into your

thesis.

• Sample you can steal: “There have been writers exploring the topic of__________, using rhetorical techniques to persuade the reader of their arguments.

Move #1

• Remember to use TWO of the key words in your essay.

Move #1 and 2• Write your thesis after your transition into your

thesis.The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries paralyzed the entire class. Dana had a form of Autism that included behaviors like self-harm, and today, it was a severe episode that shed blood. Her blond hair was clumped near the scalp with blood. My best friend, Tony, had just opened his Funions, and the pungent scent made me want to wretch. Mrs. Travis side stepped desks and ran down the aisle, grabbing Dana’s wrist, Mrs. Travis’ forearms corded with veins and muscle. I was afraid to help. I was afraid of Dana, since her behaviors were so frighteningly different from my own. She was the “other,” and when I categorized her as such, it was easy to dismiss compassion toward her. . (Move #1) There have been writers exploring the same conflict I had when encountering the “other,” using rhetorical techniques to persuade the reader to accept their point of view.. (Move #2) In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction. .

MOVE #3, PARAGRAPH #2!• Introduce quote “move”• Use the following template:

In (Writer’s Name) essay, (Title of essay), he/she uses (Rhetorical technique) to persuade the reader of his/her position.

Move #4 - 6• (Move # 4) “Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street,

there is a small French bread shop where you can sit and eat a buttery, overpriced croissant and wash it down with rich cappuccino” (Ascher 47).

(Move # 5) Ascher recounts an incident in which she witnesses a homeless man enter an affluent café.

(Move # 6) In this case, Ascher is carefully using the word “rich” to describe a beverage in order to emphasize the contrast between the upscale café and its customers to the homeless man that enters. Ultimately, this use of diction portrays the homeless man as even more anomalous and develops the idea of the “other” through contrast, of rich and poor, of familiar and aberrant.

Move #7 & 8• Transition “move” into paragraph #3• Use the following template:

Not only is (Rhetorical technique #1) used to

emphasize , (Rhetorical

technique #2) is also used to .

Paragraph #3: Moves 9-11Move 9 (Say): “My first victim was a woman—white, well dressed, probably in her early twenties. I came upon her late one evening on a deserted street in Hyde Park, a relatively affluent neighborhood…” (Staples 383).

Move 10 (Mean) Staples ironically explains his position as a

predator, preying on a white woman on a nightly stroll, when in

reality he is simply walking down the street as an African

American man, innocent and in fact wanting to be considerate.

Move 11 (Matter) In other words, he takes on the position as a predator so the reader can better understand what he experiences, using irony to persuade the reader of the appalling judgment made on him based simply on his skin color, based simply on being an “other.”

Paragraph #4: Moves 12-13

• This (Main idea) espoused by both (Writer #1) and (Writer #2) is tied to my own experience of (main idea). (Summarize your scene, or touch on it again). (Then use the pronoun “we” or “us” and connect the main idea to the rest of the world).

Essay Rubric• If you are finished, turn in the following,

stapled:

1. Your Essay

2. The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the paper your partner WROTE on)

Finish!

1. Turn in your rough draft in the back tray.

2. If you are not done, finish the essay this weekend or come into tutoring Tuesday morning. 15 week is fast approaching.

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