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Monsters: A Physical Being or a Physiological Disorder?
Chelsea Phillips
Mrs. Karen Redding
English 1102
2 May 2012
English 1102 Final Portfolio Title
Table of Contents
Analytical Cover Letter…………………...………………………………………………..………...……1
Quality Comparison……………………………………………………………………………………….……
Least Successful Paper (The original final draft submitted to me) ……………...……3
Most Successful Paper (The original final draft submitted to me)….……………...…5
“What’s the Difference?” Paragraphs………………………………………………………………..8
Revision Samples………………………………..………………………………………...…………………
Least Successful Paper (with mark-up) ……………………………...………….…………….…9
Least Successful Paper (new final version) …………..……………...………………….……11
Most Successful Paper (with mark-up) ……………………………...…………..……….……15
Most Successful Paper (new final version) …………..……………...……….……….……18
Free Choice Essay (with mark-up) ……...…………………………...……………..…….……22
Free Choice Essay (new final version) …….………………………...………………...……26
Analytical Letter
2 May 2012
Karen P. Redding
Assistant Professor of English
Gainesville State College
Oconee Campus
Office 206
1202 Bishop Farms Parkway
Watkinsville, Ga 30677
Dear Mrs. Redding,
As I look back over the semester I am toughly pleased with the progress I have made as
an academic writer. When the semester started I was honestly not looking forward to my
second English class. For as long as I can remember I remember I have not been continent in my
writing. I struggled with getting my thoughts organized and written down in a way that the
reader could understand.
After sitting down and talking to you I realized that I had good ideas and they were well
organized, what I needed was to explain my ideas further. For example, in the scene where
they are looking for Sonny in the warehouse full of NS-5 robots and the robots are standing
uniform in the warehouse, Del places a gun to several of the robots’ heads, and there is no
reaction. The fact that there was no reaction proves that the life of the robots is artificial. It is
inhuman to stand by idly while one’s own get s shot (Phillips paper 2). In the last sentence I
explained further, so now the reader understands why it is that the robots actions are in
Analytical Letter
human. Another thing I needed to improve on was my topic sentences. Alex Proyas uses color
to suggest the idea of artificial life (Phillips paper 2).
I really enjoyed the theme of monsters, and learning about all of the different types and
how they played a role in literature. I also enjoyed learning about the films, and how the use of
lighting and position of the camera suggest different things. Through the online discussions I
have learned that everyone’s thought process is different. By reading and commenting on the
discussions I got to see the information from a different point of view and it helped me to form
a solid understanding of the information and topics covered in this class.
I want to thank you for taking the time to answer Email, talking with me in class, and in
your office. You have helped me become a more confident writer and I cannot thank you
enough.
Sincerely,
Chelsea Marie Phillips
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Chelsea Phillips
English 1102/Professor Redding
Paper 1
24 January 2012
“Monsters in Today’s Western Society”
Monsters play a huge role in today’s western society. I feel like every time I turn around,
I'm hearing something about a new monster show or movie either an exorcism, vampire, serial
killer or zombie. So how do we identify monsters? Are monsters a category of living beings or a
label we apply to a given situation in which we do not understand? Generation after generation
monsters stick around, why do they play such an important role in our lives?
Ingbebretsen’s article, Politics in the Making, is about why we have monsters and how
our society depends on monsters to function. Monsters give us guidelines of how not to act
(Ingebretsen 29). The tabloids amplify the stories of monsters by watching the story unfold
society can see the actions that were frowned upon so they can avoid the same mistakes. One
example used by Ingebretsen is Jeffery Dahmer, who was a serial killer and sex offender. One
proposition from Ingebretsen that the monster must be staked. Jeffery Dahmer was brutally
beaten to death by an inmate with a broom. The article states that the monster must die, but it
can never me our fault. “By framing Dahmer as a ‘monster’ we are excused from
complicity”(Ingebreten 25). We can excuse the wrongful act of the inmate and our hands are
clean of his killing. The monster has been staked so society can rest easy knowing the monster
is dead.
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In Asma’a article Monsters and the Moral Imagination he explains the spike in monster
interest in today’s society. Like Ingebretsen, Asma believes the tabloids play a big role. He also
believes the anxiety caused by 9/11, or the war in Iraq, maybe even the poor economy play a
role. Much like Ingebretsen, Asma believes in order for us to know our values we must face
affliction like, distress, grief, misery, suffering, trials, worry, or wretchedness, monsters help us
to envision ourselves in the situation and rehearse our responses. Asma states, “We turn to
monsters as a way to help us envision a good and secure life”(Asma2). These monsters may not
be vampires or werewolves but people in our everyday lives.
Towards the end of Ingebretsen’s article he writes, “Although monsters may be coded
as foreign or outlandish, rarely are they alien. They are us, are failed selves”(Ingebretsen 29).
This makes the idea of humanized monsters so much scarier. If the monster is human, how do
you pick him or her out in a crowd, how do you know who the monster is? What stops someone
from pegging you as a monster. Ingebretsen states that a truly effective monster is local, always
nearby (Inbebresten 31). Such as a mentally ill man who snaps at a coffee shop and starts a
stabbing frenzy, the front line of war or a robbery.
Both Asma and Ingebretsen support the idea that monsters are part of our everyday
lives. Monsters are in the Western society to help us cope with anxiety and identify our values.
Without monsters essentially we would be lost. We would have no one to set the boundary for
how far is to far.
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Chelsea Phillips
English 1102/Professor Redding
Paper 2
27 February 2012
I, Robot:Digging Down Deep
I, Robot is a science fiction thriller, based on a series of books. The series is compiled of
nine short stories written by Isaac Asimov and published in 1950. Alex Proyas, the director of I,
Robot, is a seasoned science fiction thriller director known for such films as Knowing, The Crow,
and Dark City. The film is set in the year 2035, a time where the world is greatly dependent on
technology. The film starts by explaining the three laws of robotics. Law one, a Robot may not
injure a human being or, through inaction, allow a human being to come to harm. Law two, a
robot must obey orders given it by human beings except where such orders would conflict with
the first law. Law three, a robot must protect its own existence as long as such protection does
not conflict with the first or second law.
Due to the three laws of robotics, society has deemed robots safe. Robots are used in
homes, as well as businesses. They are used for dog walking, trash service, mail delivery, and
personal at-home assistants. Del Spooner, Will Smith’s character, seems to be the only person
who does not like robots; in fact, he hates them. The headquarters of the robot industry is
called United States Robots or USR for short. The USR is located right in the heart of Chicago,
where Del Spooner lives and is a local cop. When the co-founder of the USR and inventor of the
three Laws of robotics is found dead, Del is put on the case. Spooner suspects that the death
was a homicide, not a suicide; he thinks that a robot is responsible. He has a hard time getting
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anyone to take him seriously, as people feel a robot cannot possibly harm a human being.
Susan Calvin, played by Bridget Moynahan, is a robot psychiatrist who works for the USR.
Susan has been told to assist Del in any way she can to get the case cleared. She soon becomes
Del’s unlikely sidekick.
I, Robot was a great movie that kept our interest the whole time. No matter how many
times Del was told that it was impossible for a robot to harm a human, he still tried to break
through to them. He never gave up. In I, Robot, Alex Proyas uses light, shadows, and color in
order to highlight the falseness of artificial life and show good versus bad.
When reviewing some of the individual clips in I, Robot, we noticed little clues that the
director gives the audience. For example, the robots are lit with an internal light; this light is a
symbol for their artificial life. In the scene where they are looking for Sonny in the warehouse
full of NS-5 robots and the robots are standing uniform in the warehouse, Del places a gun to
several of the robots’ heads, and there is no reaction. The fact that there was no reaction
proves that the life of the robots is artificial. It is inhuman to stand by idly while one’s own kind
is shot. Another example is Spooner’s car accident. The robot that saves him has the same
artificial light in his eyes. It is very unlikely that a human would have saved Spooner over Sarah,
the twelve-year-old girl in the other car.
Alex Proyas uses color to suggest the idea of life. For example, the NS-5 robots have
colored eyes, and the NS-4 robots have colored exterior. It is more difficult to trust technology
and a fellow human. By using colors on the exterior or for their eyes makes the robots start to
look more familiar. Another example is V.I.K.I., which is the system that is very colorful and
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bright as if the system were alive. When Del Spooner injects the serum that will terminate
V.I.K.I., color starts to dissolve and becomes black; this signifies her death
Throughout the movie shadows are used to propose good versus bad and can be seen
with the use of shadows. In I,Robot the use of the shadow is on the good guy, not the bad as in
most cases. In the scene where the NS-5 robots first attack Del Spooner in the tunnel, the
robots are well lit by lights in the tunnel, and Spooner is covered in shadows. As we know that
Del Spooner is the good guy in this case, we can see that the robots are bad. Another example
is when the robots are walking through town telling all of the humans to return home. The
robots are well lit again in this scene, and there is a faint shadow on the ground behind each of
them. All of the people in the street have shadows on their faces and bodies; there is also a
dark shadow on the ground behind them.
In conclusion, I Robot was an interesting movie. The determination of the main
character kept the action and suspense throughout the movie. The director makes great use of
lights, colors, and shadows to bring the movie together creating the theme of the movie,
showing that robots can be looked at as humans.
Quality Comparison
I think that my second paper is the more successful of the two papers I have written this
semester. In my second paper my thesis is clear and my topic sentences help the reader jump
right into the paragraph. In my first paper my thesis was not very clear and I had a hard time
staying on topic. My second paper does have a little more back ground information than
needed, but over all I think it is a better paper.
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Chelsea Phillips
English 1102/Professor Redding
Paper 1
24 January 2012
“Monsters in Today’s Western Society”
Monsters play a huge role in today’s western society. I feel like every time I turn
around, I'm hearing something about a new monster show or movie either an exorcism,
vampire, serial killer or zombie. So how do we identify monsters? Are monsters a
category of living beings or a label we apply to a given situation in which we do not
understand? Generation after generation monsters stick around, why do they play such
an important role in our lives?
Ingbebretsen’s article, Politics in the Making, is about why we have monsters and
how our society depends on monsters to function. Monsters give us guidelines of how
not to act (Ingebretsen 29). The tabloids amplify the stories of monsters by watching the
story unfold society can see the actions that were frowned upon so they can avoid the
same mistakes. One example used by Ingebretsen is Jeffery Dahmer. One proposition
from Ingebretsen is that the monster must be staked. Jeffery Dahmer was brutally
beaten to death by an inmate with a broom. The article states that the monster must die,
but it can never me our fault. “By framing Dahmer as a ‘monster’ we are excused from
complicity”(Ingebreten 25). We can excuse the wrongful act of the inmate and our
hands are clean of his killing. The monster has been staked so society can rest easy
knowing the monster is dead.
In Asma’a article Monsters and the Moral Imagination he explains the spike in
monster interest in today’s society. Like Ingebretsen, Asma believes the tabloids play a
Comment [c1]: no spacing then double space
Comment [c2]: no quotes in title
Comment [c3]: Remove
Comment [c4]: Needs to be rewritten so that It’s not a question but a statement
Comment [c5]: A Politics of Persuasion
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big role. He also believes the anxiety caused by 9/11, or the war in Iraq, maybe even the
poor economy play a role. Much like Ingebretsen, Asma believes in order for us to know
our values we must face affliction like, distress, grief, misery, suffering, trials, worry, or
wretchedness, monsters help us to envision ourselves in the situation and rehearse our
responses. Asma states, “We turn to monsters as a way to help us envision a good and
secure life” (Asma2). These monsters may not be vampires or werewolves but people in
our everyday lives
Towards the end of Ingebretsen’s article he writes, “Although monsters may be
coded as foreign or outlandish, rarely are they alien. They are us, are failed selves”
(Ingebretsen 29). This makes the idea of humanized monsters so much scarier. If the
monster is human, how do you pick him or her out in a crowd, how do you know who
the monster is? What stops someone from pegging you as a monster? Ingebretsen states
that a truly effective 2monster is local, always nearby (Inbebresten 31). Such as a
mentally ill man who 2snaps at a coffee shop and starts a stabbing frenzy, the front line
of war or a robbery.
Both Asma and Ingebretsen support the idea that monsters are part of our
everyday lives. Monsters are in the Western society to help us cope with anxiety and
identify our values. Without monsters essentially we would be lost. We would have no
one to set the boundary for how far is to far.
Comment [c6]: need to shorted
Comment [c7]: Asma 2
Comment [c8]: Needs more about why monsters help us envision a good and secure life
Comment [c9]: cite
Comment [c10]: ,how would one know when enough is enough/ how would we know where the boundaries are/how far is too far?
Comment [c11]: too
Comment [c12]: works cited page
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Chelsea Phillips
English 1102/Professor Redding
Paper 1
24 January 2012
Monsters in Today’s Western Society
Monsters play a huge role in today’s western society. I feel like every time I turn around,
I'm hearing something about a new monster show or movie an exorcism, vampire, serial killer
or zombie. Monsters are next to impossible to identify. There are several categories that
monsters could be places in. For example Sully from Monster Inc. was a monster but he was
kind and gently not scary and vicious. Then there is Jeffery Dahmer who was a Serial killer, child
molester and a cannibal. Generation after generation monsters stick around so there must be
some significance to the role they play in our lives.
Ingbebretsen’s article, A Politics of Persuasion, is about why we have monsters and how
our society depends on monsters to function. Monsters give us guidelines of how not to act
(Ingebretsen 29). The tabloids amplify the stories of monsters by watching the story unfold
society can see the actions that were frowned upon so they can avoid the same mistakes. One
example used by Ingebretsen is Jeffery Dahmer, who was a serial killer and sex offender. One
proposition from Ingebretsen is that the monster must be staked. Jeffery Dahmer was brutally
beaten to death by an inmate with a broom. The article states that the monster must die, but it
can never me our fault. “By framing Dahmer as a ‘monster’ we are excused from
complicity”(Ingebreten 25). We can excuse the wrongful act of the inmate and our hands are
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clean of his killing. The monster has been staked so society can rest easy knowing the monster
is dead.
In Asma’a article Monsters and the Moral Imagination he explains the spike in monster
interest in today’s society. Like Ingebretsen, Asma believes the tabloids play a big role. He also
believes the anxiety caused by 9/11, or the war in Iraq, maybe even the poor economy play a
role. Much like Ingebretsen, Asma believes in order for us to know our values we must face
affliction like, distress, grief, misery, or wretchedness, monsters help us to envision ourselves in
the situation and rehearse our responses. Asma states, “We turn to monsters as a way to help
us envision a good and secure life” (Asma2). These monsters may be vampires, werewolves, or
serial killers knowing our values and rehearsed responses help to feel secure and at ease we
feel like we would be caught less off guard.
Towards the end of Ingebretsen’s article he writes, “Although monsters may be coded
as foreign or outlandish, rarely are they alien. They are us, are failed selves”(Ingebretsen 29).
This makes the idea of humanized monsters so much scarier. If the monster is human, how do
you pick him or her out in a crowd, how do you know who the monster is? What stops someone
from pegging you as a monster. Ingebretsen states that a truly effective monster is local, always
nearby (Inbebresten 31). Such as a mentally ill man who snaps at a coffee shop and starts a
stabbing frenzy, the front line of war or a robbery.
Both Asma and Ingebretsen support the idea that monsters are part of our everyday
lives. Monsters are in the Western society to help us cope with anxiety and identify our values
(Asma 1). Without monsters essentially we would be unsure about when enough was enough.
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We would have no one to set the boundary for how far is too far. Monsters help us have a
better understanding of where we stand between good and evil.
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Work Cited
Asma, T. Stephen. Monsters and the Moral Imagination. Web. 20 January 2012.
Ingebretsen, Edward. “Monster Making: A Politics of Persuasion.” Journal of American Culture. ESBCO Host. Web. Accessed Jan 17, 2012.
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Chelsea Phillips
English 1102/Professor Redding
Paper 2
27 February 2012
I, Robot: Digging Down Deep
I, Robot is a science fiction thriller, based on a series of books. The series is compiled of
nine short stories written by Isaac Asimov and published in 1950. Alex Proyas, the director of I,
Robot, is a seasoned science fiction thriller director known for such films as Knowing, The Crow,
and Dark City. The film is set in the year 2035, a time where the world is greatly dependent on
technology. The film starts by explaining the three laws of robotics. Law one, a Robot may not
injure a human being or, through inaction, allow a human being to come to harm. Law two, a
robot must obey orders given it by human beings except where such orders would conflict with
the first law. Law three, a robot must protect its own existence as long as such protection does
not conflict with the first or second law. . In I, Robot, Alex Proyas uses light, shadows, and color
in order to highlight the falseness of artificial life and show good versus bad
Due to the three laws of robotics, society has deemed robots safe. Robots are used in
homes, as well as businesses. They are used for dog walking, trash service, mail delivery, and
personal at-home assistants. Del Spooner, Will Smith’s character, seems to be the only person
who does not like robots; in fact, he hates them. The headquarters of the robot industry is
called United States Robots or USR for short. The USR is located right in the heart of Chicago,
where Del Spooner lives and is a local cop. When the co-founder of the USR and inventor of the
three Laws of robotics is found dead, Del is put on the case. Spooner suspects that the death
Comment [c1]: A closer look
Comment [c2]: too wordy
Comment [c3]: or trust
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was a homicide, not a suicide; he thinks that a robot is responsible. He has a hard time getting
anyone to take him seriously, as people feel a robot cannot possibly harm a human being.
Susan Calvin, played by Bridget Moynahan, is a robot psychiatrist who works for the USR.
Susan has been told to assist Del in any way she can to get the case cleared. She soon becomes
Del’s unlikely sidekick.
I, Robot was a great movie that kept our interest the whole time. No matter how many
times Del was told that it was impossible for a robot to harm a human, he still tried to break
through to them. He never gave up. In I, Robot, Alex Proyas uses light, shadows, and color in
order to highlight the falseness of artificial life and show good versus bad.
When reviewing some of the individual clips in I, Robot, we noticed little clues that the
director gives the audience. For example, the robots are lit with an internal light; this light is a
symbol for their artificial life. In the scene where they are looking for Sonny in the warehouse
full of NS-5 robots and the robots are standing uniform in the warehouse, Del places a gun to
several of the robots’ heads, and there is no reaction. The fact that there was no reaction
proves that the life of the robots is artificial. It is inhuman to stand by idly while one’s own kind
is shot. Another example is Spooner’s car accident. The robot that saves him has the same
artificial light in his eyes. It is very unlikely that a human would have saved Spooner over Sarah,
the twelve-year-old girl in the other car.
Alex Proyas uses color to suggest the idea of life. For example, the NS-5 robots have
colored eyes, and the NS-4 robots have colored exterior. It is more difficult to trust technology
and a fellow human. By using colors on the exterior or for their eyes makes the robots start to
look more familiar. Another example is V.I.K.I., which is the system that is very colorful and
Comment [c4]: aff of this is about the movie not about how Alex Proyas uses light ,color ,and shadows to highlight he falseness of artificial life and show good versus evil.
Comment [c5]: not needed need another sentence about how the light in the eyes is relevant
Comment [c6]: artificial
Comment [c7]: super computer that controls the USR main building
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bright as if the system were alive. When Del Spooner injects the serum that will terminate
V.I.K.I., color starts to dissolve and becomes black; this signifies her death.
Throughout the movie shadows are used to propose good versus bad and can be seen
with the use of shadows. In I, Robot the use of the shadow is on the good guy, not the bad as in
most cases. In the scene where the NS-5 robots first attack Del Spooner in the tunnel, the
robots are well lit by lights in the tunnel, and Spooner is covered in shadows. As we know that
Del Spooner is the good guy in this case, we can see that the robots are bad. Another example
is when the robots are walking through town telling all of the humans to return home. The
robots are well lit again in this scene, and there is a faint shadow on the ground behind each of
them. All of the people in the street have shadows on their faces and bodies; there is also a
dark shadow on the ground behind them.
In conclusion, I Robot was an interesting movie. The determination of the main
character kept the action and suspense throughout the movie. The director makes great use of
lights, colors, and shadows to bring the movie together creating the theme of the movie,
showing that robots can be looked at as humans.
Comment [c8]: the robots also have the internal light signifying artificial life
Comment [c9]: the conclusion needs to be rewritten
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Chelsea Phillips
English 1102/Professor Redding
Paper 2
27 February 2012
I, Robot: A Closer Look
I, Robot is a science fiction thriller, based on a series of nine short storieswritten by Isaac
Asimov and published in 1950. Alex Proyas, the director of I, Robot, is a seasoned science
fiction thriller director known for such films as Knowing, The Crow, and Dark City. The film is set
in the year 2035, a time where the world is greatly dependent on technology. The film starts by
explaining the three laws of robotics. Law one, a Robot may not injure a human being or,
through inaction, allow a human being to come to harm. Law two, a robot must obey orders
given it by human beings except where such orders would conflict with the first law. Law three,
a robot must protect its own existence as long as such protection does not conflict with the first
or second law.
In I, Robot, there are little clues that the director gives the audience so they can experience
the movie the way he intended. For example, the robots are lit with an internal light; this light
is a symbol for their artificial life. In the scene where they are looking for Sonny in the
warehouse full of NS-5 robots and the robots are standing uniform in the warehouse, Del places
a gun to several of the robots’ heads, and there is no reaction. The fact that there was no
reaction proves that the life of the robots is artificial. It is inhuman to stand by idly while one’s
own gets shot. Another example is Spooner’s car accident. The robot that saves him has the
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same artificial light in his eyes. Thought the robots eyes are modeled after human eyes,
humans do not have an internal light.
Alex Proyas uses color to suggest the idea of artificial life. For example, the NS-5 robots
have colored eyes, and the NS-4 robots have colored exterior. Naturally it is more difficult to
trust technology and a fellow human. By using colors on the exterior or for their eyes makes
the robots start to look more familiar, more alive. Another example is V.I.K.I., which is the
super computer that controls the main building of the USR. V.I.K.I is very colorful the system is
blue, green, purple white and brightly lit as if the system were alive. When Del Spooner injects
the serum that will terminate V.I.K.I., the color starts to dissolve and fade the system becomes
black; this signifies the death of V.I.K.I.
Throughout the movie shadows are used to propose good versus bad and can be seen
with the use of shadows. In I,Robot the use of the shadow is on the good guy, not the bad as in
most cases. In the scene where the NS-5 robots first attack Del Spooner in the tunnel, the
robots are well lit by lights in the tunnel and the artificial internal light, and Spooner is covered
in shadows. As we know that Del Spooner is the good guy in this case, we can see that the
robots are bad. Another example is when the robots are walking through town telling all of the
humans to return home. The robots are well lit again in this scene by their internal light and
there is a faint shadow on the ground behind each of them. All of the people in the street have
shadows on their faces and bodies; there is also a dark shadow on the ground behind them. The
use of the shadows helps the audience to identify who is good and who is bad. The robots are
well light with the internal light signifying artificial life in this case they are the bad guys so
artificial life is bad.
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In conclusion, Alex Proyas did a fabulous job with the using the equipment he had to
give the audience the clues they needed to fully understands the movie. He gave a constant
reminder that even thought the robots had some human characteristics their life was artificial
and fake. He also used the shadows to highlight the characters that were good and bad.
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Works Cited
I,Robot. DIR. Alex Proyas. Perf. Will Smith. Twentieth Century Fox Film Corporation. 2004
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Discrimination is the unfair treatment of a person, racial group, or minority
based on prejudice. The movie Crash tells the story of several individuals living in Los Angeles
over a day and a half. The movie shows how each of the individuals are discriminated against.
While watching the movie Crash I saw several examples of discrimination these are two that
stood out to me. Jean Cabot says that she wants the locks on the house changed again in the
morning. She does not feel safe because the man changing the locks is a Mexican. She believes
that the Mexican is a gang banger because he has a shaved head and tattoos. She tells her
husband that the Mexican is going to sell the house keys to some of his gang friends. Jean
Cabot’s reaction to the Mexican is an example of simple discrimination and institutional
discrimination because she is looping him in with the Hispanic minority group. The other
example when the Persian and his daughter are in the pawn shop trying to buy a gun for the
store. The owner of the pawn shop yells “Yo, Osama! Plan a jihad on your own time.” This is an
example of simple individual discrimination and because he is judging the man on his skin color
and by the way he is speaking
A stereotype is a set of inaccurate, simplistic generalizations about a
group that allows others to categorize them and treat them accordingly. When Jean Cabot was
judging the Hispanic character Lucien she was placing him in a stereotype. She thought that he
was a gang banger and wanted to sell the keys to her house just because he was. However, he
was a hardworking family man just trying to support his wife and young daughter. Another
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Comment [c2]: Needs a better hook
Comment [c3]: Needs to be italicized
Comment [c4]: Needs to be italicized
Comment [c5]: The first is when….
Comment [c6]: , Lucien,
Comment [c7]: Lucien
Comment [c8]: Lucien
Comment [c9]: Lucien being a
Comment [c10]: Second
Comment [c11]: His accent
Comment [c12]: he was a Mexican with tattoos
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example of a stereotype is when the cops pull the black couple over. Even after realizing that
they had the wrong car the cop still proceeds with harassing the couple. He assumes that
because they are black that they must be up to no good. When in reality they were coming
from a dinner party and had done nothing wrong. The cop has a hatred for blacks because his
father owned a business where he employed people of color. In the end the companies owned
by colered people were the only ones to receive benefits. His father’s business shut down. The
cop blames the people of color all of them for the of his father’s company failing.
Though Crash does an excellent job breaking down several stereotypes; however,
there are a few that it does not break down. For example, when Jean Cabot is walking down the
street, in the beginning of the movie, and she sees the two black characters she moves closer to
her husband. She is assuming that the two black males are out to jump her or rob her. Shortly
after the couple passes the two males they draw guns and commandeer their vehicle. She
placed the two males in a stereotype that they were thugs that were out for her money. They
were not out for her money, but they were out for her car. This movie is very controversial. I
feel that this movies purpose is to make every ethnic take a second look at discrimination. Just
about every ethnic group is depicted in this movie and it shows how someone’s actions can
cause a ripple effect on discrimination.
In the end I feel that every character was discriminated against. Some of the people
changed their attitudes by the end of the movie. For example, the car thief is offered money for
the Chinese men and instead of taking the money he takes them to Chinatown and sets them
free.
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Chelsea Phillips Professor Katie James Sociology 1101 12 April 2011
Crash
“The divide of race has been America's constant curse. Each new wave of immigrants
gives new targets to old prejudices. Prejudice and contempt, cloaked in the pretense of
religious or political conviction, are no different. They have nearly destroyed us in the past.
They plague us still. They fuel the fanaticism of terror. They torment the lives of millions in
fractured nations around the world. These obsessions cripple both those who are hated and, of
course, those who hate, robbing both of what they might become” a quote by Bill Clinton.
The movie Crash tells the story of several individuals living in Los Angeles over a thirty six hour
period. The movie shows how each of the individuals are discriminated against.
Discrimination is unfair treatment of a person, racial group, or minority
based on prejudice. While watching the movie crash I saw several examples of discrimination,
here are two that stood out to me. The first is when Jean Cabot played by Sandra Bullock tells
her husband that she wants the locks on the house changed again in the morning. She does not
feel safe because, Lucien, the man changing the locks is a Mexican. She believes that the Lucien
is a gang banger because he has a shaved head and tattoos. She tells her husband that Lucien
going to sell the house keys to some of his gang friends. Jean Cabot’s reaction to Lucien being a
Mexican is an example of simple discrimination and institutional discrimination because she is
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looping him in with the Hispanic minority group. The second example when the Persian and his
daughter are in the pawn shop trying to buy a gun for the store. The owner of the pawn shop
yells “Yo, Osama! Plan a jihad on your own time.” The pawn shop owner assumed that he was
Arab because of the color of his skin. This is an example of simple individual discrimination and
because he is judging the man on his skin color and by his accent
A stereotype is a set of inaccurate, simplistic generalizations about a
group that allows others to categorize them and treat them accordingly. When Jean Cabot was
judging the Hispanic character Lucien she was placing him in a stereotype. She thought that he
was a gang banger and wanted to sell the keys to her house just because he was a Mexican.
However, he was a hardworking family man just trying to support his wife and young daughter.
Another example of a stereotype is when the cops pull the black couple over. Even after
realizing that they had the wrong car one of the cops still precedes to harassing the couple. He
assumes that because they are black that they must be up to no good, but they were coming
from a dinner party and had done nothing wrong. The cop has a personal hatred for colored
people. When he was younger his father owned his own business, where he employed people
of color. When times got really tough the companies owned by colored people were given
benefits and the companies owned by whites were not, many of his colored employs left. His
father could no longer keep the business open and closed. The cop blames the people of color
for the failing of his father’s company.
Though Crash does an excellent job breaking down several stereotypes; however,
there are a few that it does not break down. For example, when Jean Cabot is walking down the
street, in the beginning of the movie, and she sees the two black characters she moves closer to
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her husband. She is assuming that the two black males are out to jump her or rob her. Shortly
after the couple passes the two males draw guns and commandeer their vehicle. She placed the
two males in a stereotype that they were thugs that were out for her money. They were not out
for her money, but they were out for her car. This movie is very controversial. I feel that this
movies purpose is to make every ethnic group take a second look at discrimination. Just about
every ethnic group is depicted in this movie and it shows how someone’s actions can cause a
ripple effect on discrimination.
In the end I feel that every character was discriminated against. Some of the people
changed their attitudes by the end of the movie. For example the car thief is offered money for
the Chinese men and instead of taking the money he takes them to Chinatown and sets them
free.
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