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2/2/ What are admission staff looking for in your Essay? The human behind the roster of activities and grades – what are your values, interests, motivations, passions. Students who will be a good fit for their institution - suitable programs, contributions & diversity, special qualities, talents, and character. Track record, focus, depth of commitment.TRANSCRIPT
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The College Application EssayYour opportunity to reveal the person behind the application facts and figures.
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How important are the essays in the selection process?
Very important for private colleges and universities. Very important for highly selective schools Important for the UC and other public universities Exception – CSU’s (California State Universities do not
include essays as part of their application they are strictly number schools – GPA and Test Scores)
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What are admission staff looking for in your Essay?
The human behind the roster of activities and grades – what are your values, interests, motivations, passions.
Students who will be a good fit for their institution - suitable programs, contributions & diversity, special qualities, talents, and character.
Track record, focus, depth of commitment.
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What are admission staff looking for in your Essay?
Writing ability– Organization, development, and support – effective
evidence– Style, diction and syntax– Writing conventions – correct grammar, punctuation,
spelling…
Instructions
The essay demonstrates your ability to write clearly and concisely on a selected topic and helps you distinguish yourself in your own voice.
What do you want the readers of your application to know about you apart from courses, grades, and test scores?
Choose the option that best helps you answer that question and write an essay of no more than 650 words, using the prompt to inspire and structure your response.
Remember: 650 words is your limit, not your goal. Use the full range if you need it, but don't feel obligated to do so. In addition, the application won't accept a response shorter than 250 words.
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The Common Application:2015=2016 Essay Prompts
Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later success. Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?
Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?
Describe a problem you’ve solved or a problem you’d like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma-anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution.
Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal, that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or family.
Additional Information (650 words)
Please provide an answer below if you wish to provide details of circumstances or qualifications not reflected in the application. You may enter up to 650 words.
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Supplemental Essay Prompts These essays are much shorter essays.
What is the most significant challenge that society faces today? (50 word limit)
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences that was particularly meaningful to you. (About 150 words)
College X students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development. (250 word limit)
Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (250 word limit)
What matters to you, and why? (100 to 250 words)
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University of California
Two different prompts must be addressed No letters of recommendation Courses and Grades are self reported Minimum GPA 3.0 just to be eligible to apply Holistic review – UC’s spend time evaluating your
academic achievements in light of the opportunities available to you and your demonstrated capacity to contribute to the intellectual life at UC.
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The 14 factors they weigh are:
Academic grade point average in all completed "a-g" courses, including additional points for completed UC-certified honors courses.
Scores on the following tests: ACT Plus Writing or the SAT Reasoning Test.
Number of, content of and performance in academic courses beyond the minimum "a-g" requirements.
Number of and performance in UC-approved honors, Advanced Placement, International Baccalaureate Higher Level and transferable college courses.
Identification by UC as being ranked in the top 9 percent of your high school class at the end of your junior year (Eligible in the Local Context, or ELC).
Quality of your senior-year program as measured by the type and number of academic courses in progress or planned.
Quality of your academic performance relative to the educational opportunities available in your high school.
Outstanding performance in one or more specific subject areas Outstanding work in one or more special projects in any
academic field of study.
Recent, marked improvement in academic performance as demonstrated by academic GPA and the quality of coursework completed or in progress.
Special talents, achievements and awards in a particular field, such as visual and performing arts, communication or athletic endeavors; special skills, such as demonstrated written and oral proficiency in other languages; special interests, such as intensive study and exploration of other cultures; experiences that demonstrate unusual promise for leadership, such as significant community service or significant participation in student government; or other significant experiences or achievements that demonstrate the student's promise for contributing to the intellectual vitality of a campus.
Completion of special projects undertaken in the context of your high school curriculum or in conjunction with special school events, projects or programs.
Academic accomplishments in light of your life experiences and special circumstances, including but not limited to: disabilities, low family income, first generation to attend college, need to work, disadvantaged social or educational environment, difficult personal and family situations or circumstances, refugee status or veteran status.
Location of your secondary school and residence.
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The UC Essay Prompts
Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
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Adds clarity, depth and meaning to information collected in other parts of the application
Completes and complements the application for admission
An admission decision will never be based on the content of a personal statement alone
Purpose of the Personal Statement
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Essay Timeline
Write an essay with Mr. Murray in English IV Summer – explore all topics, research, develop 2 – 4 ideas Begin drafts no later than 4 – 6 weeks prior to the deadlines Meet with Ms. Masten for feedback (content) & English teacher for
editing & structureDeadlines: Private Early Action(EA), Restricted Early Action (REA), Early
Decision(ED) – Nov 1 - 15 UC application period is Nov. 1- Nov 30 Private – regular admission varies Dec. 15, Jan 1, Feb 15
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How Do I Find a Good Topic?
THINK – What do I want the admissions committee to know about me that is not already in my application? What significant experiences have I had? What events or people have shaped me? How am I unique? What interests me?
BRAINSTORM – with family, friends, and counselor for topic ideas
READ – sample essays online and in published collections for ideas
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What will the admissions staff be looking for:
– What’s important to this applicant?
– What qualities/characteristics define this applicant?
– Which of these qualities/characteristics is most prominent?
– Do these qualities appeal to me and my institute’s mission?
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Topics to avoid:
Tired overused topics - “my amazing summer vacation or mission trip”
Rehashing your resume Stories of early childhood – more interested in present YOU Your worst misdeeds Comedy routines Boyfriends or girlfriends A “woe is me tale”
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Not Your Classroom Essay….
Creative Freedom The personal statement essay is not your typical classroom, academic
essay with thesis statement and supportive paragraphs beginning with topic sentences. You have much more creative freedom with your college essay.
Slice of Life This essay is, in essence, a “story” about a slice of your life that reveals
important aspects of your character.– What makes you tick? – Are you adventurous, political, an entrepreneur, artistic? – What events in your life have shaped you?
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Not Your Classroom Essay Continued…
SHOW Don’t TellShow by examples, incidents, and descriptive storieshow you are creative, political, artistic, etc.
Make it Personal
The UC website’s advice is to “be open. Be reflective. Find your individual voice and express it honestly” - in part, this means using your own vocabulary (but not slang) and your own ideas.
Make it personal!
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Show your STYLE
Use vivid verbs rather than depending on adjectives to make descriptions come alive
Use your own “voice” Edit the extraneous – I can help you with this!!! Grab the reader’s attention early - with your first
sentence if possible Show don’t tell – use a “slice of your life” story that
illustrates a value, lesson learned, passion etc. Be specific. Be dynamic
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Opening Sentences
I change my name each time I place an order at Starbucks. Some fathers might disapprove of their children handling
noxious chemicals in the garage. I stand on the riverbank surveying this rippled range like
some riparian cowboy—instead of chaps, I wear vinyl, thigh-high waders and a lasso of measuring tape and twine is slung over my arm.
Cancer tried to defeat me, and it failed. Sitting cross-legged on the floor of a Bhimanagar slum
dwelling in Bangalore, I ran my fingers across a fresh cut on my forehead.
As an Indian-American, I am forever bound to the hyphen.
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Wrap it Up
Write Revise -Proofread for grammar and spelling Edit extraneous, awkward wording, boring verbs First review - visit counselor to read over essay with you as the first
review Revise again and don’t forget to meet with me one more time for
further feedback Proofread, proofread, proofread - for grammar and spelling. Final draft - Have a teacher proofread before you submit.
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A Final Message From Admissions Staff:
While it is acceptable to receive feedback or helpful suggestions, applicants’ personal statements should reflect applicants own ideas and be written by them alone.
I want to help so PLEASE:
1. Send me the final copy of your English IV college essay.2. Make sure to see me (as often as needed) in the fall when you are working on the rest of your essays and all your applications.
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Advice from Seniors:
Questions?
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