高三英语阶段性检测试卷评讲 --- 书面表达

               Task of writing

教育部在 2007 年工作要点中明确提出：加强教育改革和发展，开展师范生免费教育的试点，引导各地建立鼓励优秀人才当教师的新机制。

假定你是中国某高中的学生李华，你的朋友约翰在网上看到了与以上信息相关的消息。下面是他刚发给你的电子邮件，请你回复。词数： 120 左右。

Dear Li Hua,I just happened to learn that China’s decided to give free education to no

rmal university students in the near future and I’m really interested in your response to the news. What do your schoolmates think of the policy? Do you want to be a teacher yourself?

John

Analysis of key points

1. Your response (as well as several reasons);

2. Your classmates’ opinions (maybe divided);

3. Will you be a teacher yourself ?

Analysis of students’ writing

Dear John,

I have received your letter, which you want to know my response to the news.Well, I’m really pride to discuss this hot policy with you.My ideas are : 1. The policy’s appearance will result in the Chinese education system’s change, and the change will let our nation be more prosperous. 2. There are many students from poor families can go to universities. When my classmates learnt the news, they were very excited. They said they were glad to be teachers because teachers were great jobs. It was teacher that spread knowledge and help us out of confusion. But I don’t want to be a teacher because I’m not interested. How about you ?Are you considering to be a teacher?

Li Hua

Dear John,

I have received your letter, which you want

to know my response to the news.Well, I’m

really pride to discuss this hot policy with you.

I’m glad to receive your letter saying that you…

proud

My ideas are : 1. The policy’s appearance

will result in the Chinese education system’s

change, and the change will let our nation be more

prosperous. 2. There are many students from poor families can go to universities.

As far as I’m concerned, the policy will result in

great change in the Chinese educational system ,

and then our nation will be more prosperous.

Many students from poor families can go to universities.

When my classmates learnt the news, they were very excited. They said they were glad to

be teachers because teachers were great jobs.

It was teacher that spread knowledge and help us out of confusion.

…They say that they are glad to be teachers

because teaching is a great job.

It is a teacher who / that spreads knowledge and helps

us out of confusion.

But I don’t want to be a teacher because I’m not interested. How about you ?

Are you considering to be a teacher ?

Li Hua

My interest doesn’t lie in teaching, much as I admire teachers. How about you ?

Are you considering being a teacher in your area ?

Conclusion of mistakes

1. Simple and direct translation;

2. A confusing structure;

3. Illogical order;

4. Verb tenses not in agreement;

5. Chinglish expressions;

6. Improper sentence patterns;

7. Drifting off the topic or leaving out some required information.

Enjoying a model writingDear John ,

I’m very glad that you’re so much concerned with the policy. Brought into effect about one year ago, it has drawn attention of the whole nation, since education is closely linked to the development of a country.

My classmates are mostly inspired by the news.They hold the idea that it has provided a good opportunity for those students who have a desire to be teachers but can’t afford the high tuition. As a consequence of these talented students taking up teaching, we can surely expect a great promotion in the area of education.

I myself come from a poor family and being a teacher is my dream from childhood. Thanks to the policy, I’ll have a chance to devote myself to teaching and I’ll be more than glad to do that.

Li Hua

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Practical ways to help

In your daily study:

1. build up a good vocabulary and grammar system;2. obtain materials from your textbooks: recite 10-20 s

entences per unit;3. exchange your writings with your classmates and lear

n from each other;4. check your writings with the model writing and study

any good points in it.5. read all that are available.

Practical ways to help

While taking an exam:1. make sure you have enough time for writing;2. study the requirements carefully;3. organize the information in a proper order and prepare a rough draft;4. put it on your answer sheet in a beautiful handwriting;5. check by reading it again.

Practice of another task

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