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Paragraphs Assignment. Suggestions. General Suggestions. Read assignment carefully/listen in class—many points were missed needlessly Revise writing rather than edit writing—if the only changes made were items Miller corrected or commented upon, the assignment was probably edited not revised - PowerPoint PPT Presentation

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Paragraphs Assignment

Paragraphs AssignmentSuggestionsGeneral SuggestionsRead assignment carefully/listen in classmany points were missed needlesslyRevise writing rather than edit writingif the only changes made were items Miller corrected or commented upon, the assignment was probably edited not revisedKnow that writing is hard workit requires hard work, and sometimes good stuff must be removed

Specific Concerns2nd person (no you, your, yourself)Contractions (do not use them in formal writing)Word choice (attempt action verbs and avoid words like good, bad, thingTense shift (usually writing should be consistently in one tensefor the most part, select a tense, either past or present is often appropriate, and stick with itSpecific ConcernsRun-on sentences

Pronoun/antecedent agreement errors

Be verbsDistressing realizationsAlthough the assignment clearly stated that the revision was worth the same amount of points as the selection, research, and commentary regarding one trait and three grammatical concerns, it seems apparent most students took the revision more seriously than the other half of the assignment.Distressing realizationsSeveral students selected run-on sentences as a concern and discussed them using run-on sentencesSeveral students used you as they discussed writing without using second personSeveral students used contractions as they suggested they needed to avoid contractions.FocusWriting is hard workaddressing everything at once is overwhelming, thus the assignment to focus on one trait and three grammatical concerns

As a class, we will look at three concerns: run-on sentences, pronoun/antecedent agreement, and be verbs.Run-on SentencesRun-on sentences generally occur when a writer separates two (or more) independent clauses with a comma (or commas).

Grammatical definitions which assist in correcting run-on sentences:Clause: a group of words with a subject and a verbDependent (aka subordinate) clause: a clause that can not stand alone as a sentence (contains a subject and a verb but not a complete thought)Independent clause: a clause that can stand alone as a sentence (complete thought)

Grammatical definitions which assist in correcting run-on sentences:Simple sentence: a sentence containing only one independent clause

Compound sentence: a sentence containing two or more independent clauses

Grammatical definitions which assist in correcting run-on sentences:Complex sentence: a sentence containing one independent clause and at least one dependent clause

Compound/complex sentence: a sentence containing at least one dependent clause and two (or more) independent clauses

Punctuating two or more independent clausesTwo independent clauses may be written as two separate sentencesutilize a period and a capital letter to correct

Punctuating two or more independent clausesTwo independent clauses may be divided with a comma and a coordinating conjunction (and, but, so, etc.)

Punctuating two or more independent clausesTwo independent clauses may be separated by a semicolon.

Punctuating two or more independent clausesTwo independent clauses may be separated by semicolon, a conjunctive adverb (however, therefore, moreover, nonetheless, etc.), and a comma

Punctuating two or more independent clausesTwo independent clauses may be separated by a colon if the first introduces a second clause which modifies the first.

This usage occurs infrequentlydo not force!

Student ExamplePotterphiles study the books like it is their job and all of them wish it was.

Correction: Potterphiles study the books like it is their job, and all of them wish it was.(other concern: their is plural; job is singular; two be verbs)Student ExamplePotterphiles study the books like it is their job and all of them wish it was.

Other than a comma before and, how might this run-on sentence be corrected.Potterphiles study the books like it is their job and all of them wish it was.Student ExampleSecond, I have had that same phone for about a year and a half and I started to get tired of my phone.

How to correct?

Other concerns?Second, I have had that same phone for about a year and a half and I started to get tired of my phone.Pronoun/Antecedent AgreementA pronoun must agree with its antecedent (the word it replaces) in number and genderStudent ExampleAny punk girl would fall in love with this skirt at first sight as soon as they saw it in Hottopic.

Correction?

Other concerns?Any punk girl would fall in love with this skirt at first sight as soon as they saw it in Hottopic.Student ExampleIf a defender loses their man the other team might score, if a forward decides to walk back the forward may not get a break away that might conclude in a goal otherwise.

Correction?

Other concerns?If a defender loses their man the other team might score, if a forward decides to walk back the forward may not get a break away that might conclude in a goal otherwise.Be verbsBe verbs (when used properly) are grammatically correct; however, in general, they create weaker prose than action verbs. Be verbs also cause redundancy. Be verbs do not need to be eliminated but most likely reduced in number. If 75% of your verbs are be verbs, try to reduce it to 50%. If 50% of your verbs are be verbs, try to reduce it to 25%.

Student ExampleEvery minute of every day, God is there to help me with my problems or just listen to me when I need someone to talk to; He is an amazing listener.

Improvement?

Other concerns?Every minute of every day, God is there to help me with my problems or just listen to me when I need someone to talk to; He is an amazing listener.Student ExampleNow the monster is ready to begin its day of basketball and school work.

Improvement?

Other concerns?Now the monster is ready to begin its day of basketball and school work.HighpointsStudents should not be discouraged. The previous slides address mistakes and concerns. However, the revisions reflected many positive changes as well. Some students obviously carefully considered a trait and three grammatical errors and thoughtfully commented on future improvement.HighpointsThe monster stumbles out of the square doorway to his cave and stomps upstairs to the kitchen. (nice verbs and sound and visual imagery!)

Despite his best efforts to irritate the world, the plentiful energy bundled in his tiny body provides an excellent antidote to gloomy days. (nice phrasing and word choice)HighpointsAdventure, romance, and excitement outline pages of a novel for people to solve the unfinished mysteries left by the author, writing endings they find satisfying. (thoughtful)

The Triumphant Toe Tale (alliterative title)HighpointsOf the different genres of writing, suspense and adventure novels reign superior. (nice verb)

Pushing my sunglasses back from the tip of my sunscreen drenched nose, I spread my cozy butterfly printed towel upon the comforting sand. (nice imagescompound adjectives do need to be hyphenated)HighpointsThe Trait that I need to improve on most is word choice. Word choice is the use of rich, colorful, precise language in your writing. To improve my word choice I could use a thesaurus. I could also make a list of boring words and try not to use them (despite the grammatical errors and use of second person, the commentary is thoughtful and poses a plan for improvement)HighpointsI can improve my conventions by going over my paper thoroughly. If I decide to make a change, I should read through eh sentence or phrase to make sure everything is right. Also, if another person revised and edited my paper, I would have fewer mistakes (thoughtfulothers should edit but never revise!)

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