Meeting 2: Tosspon’s English 105

Review Chpt 1: PrewritesThesis Statements – Chpt 2Description – Chpt 11Reading/Writing – Chpt 8

Your Diagnostic Essays• Check your email. Open the

attachment. • Review my comments by clicking on

“Review” and then clicking “Next” or “Accept” on the menu bar.

Grammar Log• For each #’d error (not ALL errors),

use the Grammar Log to correct. • This is worth 10 points per paper. No errors

means you automatically get the 10 points.

#6

In the beginning the dog wasn’t sure what he wanted to do.

In the beginning, the dog wasn’t sure what he wanted to do.

Correct the error

Find how toCorrect your Errors by using the syllabus (pg 9) and the green handbook.

Common Errors• We will be adding these to our

weekly lesson

• Fragments• Run Ons• Hook/Introductions• Wordiness• Semicolons

• ESL? Verb Tense Shifts? See pages 337-358 (green)

REVIEW CHPT 1Awesome. PreWrites, etc

When you Write. First:Select a subject

• Start early• Find the best space for

you• Select something in which

you currently have a strong interest

• Narrow a large topic

Practice a Pre-Write: Looping!• Practice B, pg 18• Select two of the large subjects.

– With a partner, use looping (described on pg 9)

– create a focused topic for 3-5 pg essayHow? Freewrite for 5 minutes about the

topic. When time’s up, look back for the “center of gravity” sentence.

Use that “center of gravity” sentencefreewrite THAT as your jumping-off point.

Review the 2nd freewrite. Find another “center of gravity”. Begin a 3rd Freewrite using that paragraph.

How? Freewrite for 5 minutes about the

topic. When time’s up, look back for the “center of gravity” sentence.

Use that “center of gravity” sentencefreewrite THAT as your jumping-off point.

Review the 2nd freewrite. Find another “center of gravity”. Begin a 3rd Freewrite using that paragraph.

Discover your Audience

• How to Identify your readers– Who is the audience?– Why are they reading it –

what do they hope to gain?– What knowledge does your

audience have about the subject?

– What is your audience’s attitude towards your subject?

Special qualities of your audience?

1. They don’t like to be bored. (if you are bored writing it, they’ll be bored reading it)

2. They hate confusion and disorder3. They WANT to think and learn4. They want to see/feel what YOU

see/feel5. They are turned off by

pretentious/phony voices.

Chapter 2

Pg 31

The Thesis

• What is a working thesis• What does a “working thesis”

do?• Can “Working thesis” change?

JigSaw: group work• Each group assigned a section• Read the section• Explain to the class what it is

as group explains, read along, highlight. – We will be playing a game w/ this info

Good thesis-States opinion (pg 33)-Asserts 1 idea (pg 33-34)-Has something to say (pg 34-35)-Is limited to fit (pg 35-36)-Clearly/specifically stated (36)-1st or 2nd paragraph (36-37)

Avoid Common Errors-Don’t just announce topic-Don’t clutter with “I think”-Don’t just state a fact-Don’t ask it as a question

Game! Pin the Thesis• Groups each will get a set of

thesis statements. Record the #’s you have!

• Decide which are “adequate” and which are “inadequate”– Use tape to put statements onto

the corresponding location. – Be prepared to justify your

choice to the class.

• On 1 page per group, rewrite the inadequate thesis statements.

Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33)

• States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subject

• Assert ONE main idea• Have something worthwhile to say• Limit thesis to fit the assignment• State thesis clearly, in specific

terms• In first or second paragraph.

Thesis Statement Answers• Identify whether each is adequate or not,

explain the problem

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Essay Map• Use the handout to help you develop

a topic. Choose from the list on pg 40 or pg 18.

• Narrow the topic (what specific related things are you going to talk about, and what is your opinion about it)

• Take those “reasons” and summarize them in the first 1-2 of paragraphs (map for your reader).

Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33)

• States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subject/topic

• Assert ONE main idea• Have something worthwhile to say• Limited to fit the assignment• Stated clearly,

in specific terms• In first or second paragraph.

– 1st Paragraph should be a “hook”

Jeopardy Quiz!• jeopardylabs.com/play/heald-english-105-week-22

• May get in groups of 4, may use notes/book/syllabus/handouts =D

Categories:• Syllabus• Chapter 1, Chapter 2• Pre-Writing Strategies• Classmates

Description: Chpt 11, pg 323

• What is description? • Read “Tree Climbing” pg

333• What do you notice? How is

description used? – each description had a

purpose!– Used specific/appropriate

details– Vivid descriptions!

Vivid descriptions (pg 326)Sensory details• Sight – The clean white corridors of the

hospital resembled the set of a sci-fi movie.

• Sound/Hearing At night, the only sounds … quiet squeakings of sensible white shoes.

• Smell The green beans … smelled stale and waxy

• Touch The hospital bed sheets felt as rough and heavy as a feed sack.

• Taste Every four hours…whose aftertaste reminded me of the stale licorice my great-aunt kept in candy dishes around her house.

Problems to avoid (pg 327)

• Remember your audience

• Erratic organization

• Sudden change in perspective

They haven’t seen it! Be specific, not vague (big, beautiful, bad, scaryThey haven’t seen it! Be specific, not vague (big, beautiful, bad, scary

Arrange your details: first to last, left to right, top to bottom, head to foot, the most startling to least, most important to least.

Stay consistent – if you’re describing interior or at a distance, stay there or explain the shift. “as the car approached I could see…” etc.

Practice! Paintings tell a Story

• First, brainstorm what the character(s) may see, feel, hear, smell, taste, touch.

• Tell the story of this painting (may work in groups or solo).

• You may usethis as a pre-writefor yourDescriptionEssay. Duenext week.

Descriptive Essay: Draft (due @ beginning of class next week, 50pts )

• Choose a topic from pg 331-332– You may propose a topic if none appeal

to you. I must approve your proposal.

• Write a 2-3 pg essay– MLA Format

Prewrite!

• Use one of the pre-writing strategies from Chpt 1