how to write an effective business report
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How to Write an Effective Business Report
ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS
Many people have contributed to the development of the ideas presented in
this thesis. Among themI owe a particular debt of gratitude to Professor
CHEN Jie, my supervisor, for her enthusiastic support, expert advice and
timely guidance during the process of the writing and revising ofmy thesis.
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My acknowledgements also go to all the teachers at the Language School,
particularly Professor LUO Guoliang, Professor HUANG Yuanshen,
Professor ZHANG Chunhong, Professor XU Yaqin, and Professor LU
Naisheng, whose lectures have offered me great insights into the thesis.
In addition, I feel grateful to my classmates, from whom I obtained many
enlightening ideas in discussions.
Finally, my great appreciation is reserved for my family and my friends who have loved andsupported me over the years.
For those whose names should have been mentioned but are left out here, I offer my sincereapology.
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WTO
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Table of Contents
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Abstract..1
Chapter One The Business Report
1.1 Reports in general..2
1.1.1 Definition2
1.1.2 Function..2
1.1.3 Classification..3
1.2 Business Reports4
1.2.1 Definition....4
1.2.2 Function..6
1.2.3 ComponentParts.7
1.2.4 RequiredQualities..8
1.2.5 GuidingPrinciples.12
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Chapter Two Communication
2.1 Communication Process...14
2.2 Definition of Communication..16
2.3 Written Communication...16
2.4 Business Communication.17
2.5 Basic Truths of Communication...18
2.6 Adaptation19
Chapter Three Linguistic Requirements for Effective Business Report Writing
3.1 Word Selection22
3.1.1Use Concrete Words.23
3.1.2 Use Familiar Words.24
3.1.3 Choose Short Words26
3.1.4 Use Technical Words with Caution.28
3.1.5 Prefer Active Verbsto Passive ones29
3.1.6 Avoid Overuse of Camouflaged Verbs.31
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3.2 Sentence Construction.33
3.2.1 Emphasize Short Sentences..33
3.2.2 Design EffectiveSentences..38
3.2.3 Give the Sentence Unity39
3.2.4 Write Sentences for Variety...42
3.3 Paragraph..43
3.3.1 Give the Paragraph Unity43
3.3.2 Keep the Paragraph Short..44
3.3.3 Make Good Use of Topic Sentences.45
3.3.4 Move the Paragraph Forward48
3.3.5 Use Transitional devices...48
Chapter Four Steps in Writing the Business Report
4.1 Define the Problem..51
4.2 Analyze the Reader..51
4.3 Collect Information.52
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4.4 Arrange and Interpret Information...52
4.5 Construct the Outline..53
4.6 Write the Draft.53
4.7 Revise the Report.....54
Conclusion.55
Abstract
After Chinas entry into the WTO, more and more foreign enterprises have been targeting China
as a market. The number of foreign-owned companies has increased dramatically. However, a
problem of ineffective communication within a company has emerged as well.
Business report writing as a major means of communication can never be ignored or even
overlooked, because our development in a company depends heavily on how we express
ourselves. Only by effective communication (verbal of non-verbal), can we make known to our
employers what we are doing and how well we are doing. Furthermore, no business can be run
efficiently or can function at all without the regular flow of business reports.
With linguistics as the focus, this thesis falls into 4 chapters altogether.
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Chapter one is a general introduction to the business report, including its definition, component
parts, required qualities and guided principles of successful business report writing. Chapter two
touches the basic theories on communication and the inherent relation between business report
writing and communication. Chapter three discusses linguistic requirements for an effective
business report: word choice, sentence construction, and paragraph building. Chapter four deals
with several procedures for writing an effective business report.
Key Words: communication process, linguistic requirements, business report writing
Chapter One The Business Report
1.1 Reports in General
1.1.1 Definition
There is no doubt that reports are commonplace in the 21st-century business world. Virtually all
organizations use them. And most corporations use them extensively. In fact, it is unlikely that
any modern organization of size could function without using reports. But in spite of the fact that
reports are so commonplace there is disagreement in defining them.
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Definitions in current use range from one extreme to the other. By the broadest definition,
reports are all presentations of information ranging from the extremelyformal to the highlyinformal.1 Narrower definitions limit reports to the more formalized presentations of information
to improve readability. Also, to be impartial and objective a report presents accurate, reliable
information logically, without emotional appeals.
1.1.2 Function
It is well known that todays complex, technological business organizations literally feed on
information. In every phase of business work, people send and receive information. The
information flow involves many forms of communication. Obviously oral communication makes
up a large part of it. In addition, there are all the various types of forms and records that are kept
and exchanged. And of course, there are various forms of written communication. Among the
written forms of business communication, reports play a very major role. They enable
management authority to keep track of normal operations, to learn about unexpected
developments, and to judge whether progress is satisfactory on new projects. They enable the
executive to base his or her decision on the advice of specialists. They are the link between
research and the practical utilization of their discoveries. They sometimes are the only tangible
result of long and expensive work. In general, they comprise one of the most important parts of
the process of communication that is vital to efficient operation in government and industry.
1.1.3 Classification
1Thomas A. Sherman,Modern Technical Writing. New Jersey: Prentice-Hall, Inc, 1982
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Understanding the classification of the report help the writer to focus on the information and
ideas to be expressed and the best format to present them. As they serve various purposes,
reports can be classified according to the following factors.
Subjectmatter
Probably the simplest of all report classifications used is the one by subject matter. Obviously all
reports concern some subject. It is equally obvious that reports can be classified on the basis of
some logical grouping of subjects.
The possibilities of classifying by subject matter are almost limitless, being bound only by the
infinite differences among report topics. Subject classifications, therefore, could be based on tiny
differences in content, or they could follow broader and more general lines. For example, in the
field of accounting, distinctions in subject matter could provide classifications such as cost,
audit, tax, and finance. But such divisions generally are not practical. A more practical and more
widely used subject classification is one that follows broader lines-----for example, one based on
broad subject fields such as accounting, management, economics, finance, engineering, and
marketing.
Function
Reports can be to inform or to analyze. The informational report merely presents the facts and a
summary----without analyzing, interpreting, drawing conclusions, or making recommendations.
The analytical report presents facts, analyzes and interprets them, and makes conclusions as well
as recommendations if needed.
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Formality
Formal reports are generally long and about complex problems. They always include---in
addition to the body---some or all of these prefatory and supplemental parts:
Prefatory parts---cover; title fly; title page; letters of authorization, acceptance, approval,
transmittal; acknowledgments; table of contents; synopsis, abstract, or summary.
Body---- introduction, text, terminal section
Supplemental part---- appendix, bibliography, index
Informal reports usually include only the body. Some informal reports, however, may have a title
page, transmittal, and appendix.
Origin
This is authorized or voluntary. We write authorized reports when requested or authorized to do
so by another person. The voluntary report is written on our own initiative.
Frequency of issue
Reports may be periodic or special. The periodic report comes out at regular intervals, such as
daily, weekly, monthly, or yearly. The special report involves a single occasion or unique
situation.
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1.1 The Business Report
1.2.1 Definition
A business report is an impartial, objective, and planned presentation of factual information that
serves some business purpose.1
A careful inspection of this definition reveals the identifying characteristics of the business
report. As an orderly communication, a report is given some care in preparation. And care in
preparation distinguishes a report from the casual, routine exchanges of information that
continually occur in business. This is not to say that all reports are carefully prepared, but it does
mean that at least something above minimum care is given in their preparation.
The objective quality of a business report is its unbiased approach to the facts presented. The
report seeks truth, regardless of its consequences. The word communication is broad by
definition, concerning all ways of transmitting meaning (speaking, writing, drawing, gesturing,
and such.). For all practical purposes, however, business reports are either written or oral. And
for reasons that will be given shortly, in todays complex business operations the more
significant reports are written.
1 Raymond U. Lesikar,Report Writing for Business. Illinois: Richard D. Irwin, Inc., 1981
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The basic element of the report includes factual informationevents, records, and the various
forms of data that are communicated in the conduct of business. Not all reports are business
reports. Research scientists, medical doctors, ministers, students, and many others write reports.
Thus, the need for the final phrase of the definition is obvious. To be classified as a business
report, a report must serve some business purpose. The purpose may be to solve a problem, such
as how a company can profitably use an electronic computer? The purpose may be to present
information needed in the conduct of business: a weekly report of a salespersons activities, a
summary of the days production, or an explanation of expenditures on a particular project. In
general, a business report is an impartial, objective, planned presentation of facts to one or more
persons for a specific, significant business purpose.
Even though this definition of a business report is specific enough to be meaningful, it is broad
enough to take into account the variations to be found in reports. For example, some reports do
nothing more than present facts. Others go a step further by including interpretations. Still others
proceed to conclusions and recommendations. There are reports formally dressed both in writing
style and in physical appearance. And there are reports that evidence a high degree of
informality. The definition given permits all these variations.
1.2.2 Function
The business report, in a real sense, is the vehicle that enables the organization to gather data in a
single, coherent document, build understanding, solve problems and make decisions.
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The business report is generally problem-oriented or opportunity-oriented. Sometimes it is
written in order to identify and explain a problem facing the corporation. At other times, it is
prepared to present possible solutions to problems. And the business report may be used to
analyze a situation or describe how a unit or department is attempting to overcome previous or
present problems.
The business report is also an action-oriented document. It is not a theoretical paper on an
abstract and inconsequential question. The report puts a fence around a problem, presents an
analysis of situation, offers justified conclusions, and finally, makes carefully substantial
recommendations.
In general, the business report serves several purposes:
To provide management with information needed for sound decision-making, or informing
others of decisions already made.
To provide information for the record: such as minutes of meeting.
To serve as evidence in court cases.1
1.2.3 Component Parts
For ease and understanding, we will talk about the parts by groups. First are the prefatory parts.
Then comes the report body, which, of course, is the meat of all business reports. The final group
consists of appended parts. They are included largely to serve any special interests the reader
1 Warren L. Thomas, Technical Writing. California: Wadsworth Publishing Co., 1988
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may have in the problems or to help the reader in his or her use of the business report. As
illustrated below:
Prefatory parts
Title fly
Title page
Preface or foreword
Table of contents and list of illustrations
The body of the report
Introduction
Text/Body
Conclusions or summaries
Appended parts
Appendix
Bibliography
From the table above, we can get a general idea about the three parts of a business report. The
following are the details of them.
The Prefatory Parts
Title fly Typically it contains only the report title, which displays with eye-appealing balance.
Title page Like the title fly, the title page presents the report title. But it also displays other
information essential to the identification of the business report. Usually, it presents the complete
identification of the writer.
Preface Most business reports contain some form of the personal communication from writer to
reader. And preface performs this function.
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Table of contents If a business report is long enough for a guide to its contents to be helpful, it
should have a table of contents. This table is the report outline in the finished and polished form.
The Report Body
Introduction The purpose of the introduction of the business report is to orient the reader of
the problem at hand.
Text/Body This part presents the information collected and relates it to the problems. Normally
it comprises the bulk of the content of a report. Specifically this part consists of the presentation
of findings of the research. It includes the analysis of these findings and application of them to
the problem. It is all that appears in the logical order report between the introduction and
conclusion sections, including the supporting tables and charts that relate to this part. Truly it is
the heart of the report.
The Ending of the Report The ending of the report usually consists of a summary,
conclusions, recommendations, or a combination of the three.
Appended Parts
Appendix As its name implies, is a section tacked on. It is used for supplementary information
that supports the body of the report but has no logical place within the body. Possible contents
include questionnaires, working papers, summary tables, additional references, other reports, and
so on.
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Bibliography In business report writing, investigations that make heavy use of secondary
research normally require a list of the sources (such as books, periodicals, and newspapers) used.
The bibliography is such a list.
1.2.4 Required Qualities
Like any other kind of writing or report, a business report can be considered good or not mainly
on its success in performing its function: to affect the readers as it is supposed to affect them.
What specific qualities will help it to produce that result? Some of these qualities have been
noticed because they should be the same in other reports as well as in business reports. These
include accuracy, adaptation of the contents and organization to the needs and abilities of the
reader, and effective style. But a business report makes additional demands.
The following discussion will touch upon several specific qualities. Some of them reinforce each
other, but there are times when an excessive effort to achieve one quality will mean the sacrifice
of another. Thus in considering the question of how vigorously to cultivate any of them on a
specific occasion we will need to foresee the circumstances that will probably prevail when our
report is actually used, and decide what the report must be if it is to perform its function under
those circumstances.
Objectivity
Being a basic quality of good business reports, objectivity concerns both the attitude of the
writers and the writing style. We need to maintain an objective attitude by divorcing our
prejudices and emotions from our work and by fairly reviewing and interpreting the information
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we have uncovered. Thus, we approach the problem with an open mind and look at all sides of
each question. Our role is much like that of a judge presiding over a court of law. We are not
moved by personal feelings. We seek truth, and we leave no stone unturned in quest of it. We
make our decisions only after carefully weighing all of the evidence. Whats more, a report built
on the quality of objectivity has another point essential to good report writing. The point is
believability.
Impersonal writing
A report, some writing authorities say, can be just as objective when written in personal style as
when written in impersonal style. Frequently they encounter the argument that impersonal
writing leads to an overuse of passive voice and a generally dull and writing style. This
argument, however, lacks substance. Impersonal writing can and should be interesting.
Completeness
The business report is complete when it contains all the facts the reader needs for the desired
action. If all points and explanations are sufficiently detailed, no misinterpretation will follow.
Completeness is necessary for a successful business report because complete messages are more
likely to bring the desired results without missing important information. Thus, reports that seem
inconsequential can be surprisingly important if the information they contain is complete and
effective.
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To achieve completeness in business report writing, we need to do as follows.
Make all points detailed. Evidence must be precisely stated. The significance of the facts in
relation to the problem must be shown. The treatment for each section of the report must be
complete, or the reader may misunderstand that particular section. The analysis is a basis for the
conclusions, and the conclusions are a basis for the recommendations. All must be used to
accomplish the purpose of the report.
Answer all questions asked. If the business report contains one or more questions, answer all
questions clearly. If there is no information on a particular question, express clearly, instead of
omitting an answer to one or more questions.
Different readers need different levels of completeness. We must consider the reader to achieve
completeness. If the reader is familiar with the problem, few details are needed. If the reader is
uninformed, complete explanations and interpretations are necessary.
Consistency
Consistency means maintaining uniformity by conforming to a predetermined pattern. The writer
must be consistent in the form and style used and in the method of presenting the message to the
reader.
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Consistency in form includes uniformity of typing details such as margins, indentation, degrees
of subject headings, listings, tabulations, numbering of page, footnote and bibliography entries,
and the like. Consistency means following a set pattern concerning abbreviations, hyphenation,
capitalization, spelling, and punctuation. Consistency must be maintained in making
comparisons and in reasoning to reach logical conclusions. Staying with one viewpoint
throughout the business report. Shifting from one to the other is illogical as well as confusing.
Coherence
Smoothness in the flow of information presented is an essential characteristic of good business
report writing. In the well-written business report, each fact is in its logical place, and the
relationship of each fact to other facts and to the plan of the report is clear to the reader.
Coherence gives the business report this smoothness of connection. The best contributor to
coherence is good organization. By relating facts in a logical, natural sequence, coherence is
given to the writing.
Interest
Like all forms of good writing, a good report should be interesting. Actually the quality of
interest is as important as the facts of the report, for without interest, communication is not likely
to occur. If interest is not held, readers cant avoid missing parts of the messages. The writing
must maintain their interest.
To accomplish the result, at least two concrete suggestions can be made. First, organize the body
of the report so that the reader discovers as early as possible what benefits may result if our
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report receives attention. Our skill in organizing in this manner yet at the same time making our
plan logical and coherent will be one of the decisive factors. Second, in the preliminary parts,
namely, the letter of the transmittal, the introduction, or the summary---provide a sentence or two
deliberately calculated to arouse interest by foreshadowing the significance of the report. These
sentences should be specific and concrete.
1.2.5 Guiding Principles
There are many principles involved in good report writing, but the stated ones below are so
important that they may be taken as a guideline on which further developments rest.
First, wed better always have in mind a specific reader, real or imaginary, when we are writing a
report; and always assume that he or she is intelligent, but uninformed.
Second, before we start to write, always decide what the exact purpose of our report is; and make
sure that every paragraph, every sentence, and every word makes a clear contribution to that
purpose, and makes it at the right time.
Use language that is simple, concrete, and familiar. And at the beginning and end of every
section of our report, check our writing according to this principle: we tell the reader what we are
going to tell him.
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Chapter Two Communication
Reports are specialized forms of communication. And just as any other form of communication,they involve the communication process. It is not surprising, therefore, that writing techniques
developed to make the communication process more effective in reports.
2.1 Communication Process
In describing the communication process, I shall use a situation in which two people are
involved. One is a man named Gorge; the other is a woman named Mary. We will begin the
description of the communication process with one of the two people (say Gorge)
communicating something to Mary. The message sent may be formsgestures, facial
expressions, drawings, or, more likely, written or spoken words. The message sent enters the
sensory world of Mary.
The sensory world of Mary consists of all things around her as her sensory receptors detect them.
The sensory receptors, of course, are eyes, ears, and nose that record impressions from reality.
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Thus, the sensory world of Mary contains all that she feels, sees, hears, or smells. From this
sensory world, her receptors pick up impressions and send them to her brain.
It should be noted, however, that Marys receptors cant detect all that exists in the world about
her. Just how much they can detect depends on a number of factors. One determining factor is
the ability of her individual sensory receptors to receive impressions. Not all receptors are
equally sensitive. All ears do not hear equally well. Likewise, eyesights differ. So do abilities to
smell. And so do the other senses vary from person to person.
Another determinant is Marys mental alertness. There are times, for example, when her mind is
keenly alert to all that its senses can detect. There are other times when it is dull--- in a
daydream, or the like.
Still another determinant is the sill of Marys mind. In varying degrees, the mind has the ability
to tune in or tune out the events in the world of reality.
When Marys sensory receptors record something from her sensory world, they relay the
information to her brain. The message sent by Gorge probably would be recorded in this way,
but it could be joined by other impressions, such as outside noises, detection of movements,
facial expressions, and such. In fact, Marys brain receives these impressions in a continuous
flow--- a flow that may contract or expand, go fast or go slow, become strong or become weak.
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This flow of stimulations into Marys mind begins the preverbal stage of communication. At this
stage, the stream of sensory perceptions produces reactions in her mindreactions that will be
given meaning and may trigger a communication response.
It is at this preverbal stage that the most complex part of the communication process occurs. The
sensory perceptions pass through the filter of Marys mind, and they are given meaning. And her
filter is made of all that has ever passed through her mind. Specifically it is made up of all her
experience, knowledge, bias, and emotions. Obviously no two people have precisely identical
filters, for no two people have precisely the same experience, knowledge, bias, and such.
Because peoples filters differ, meanings they assign to comparable perceptions also differ. One
person, for example, may smile pleasantly when his or her filter receives the word liberal;
another with sharply different background may react with violent anger at the same word. In one
persons filter, the word butterball rings a jolly note; in the filter of one who has long been
troubled with weight problems a negative connotation may occur. Even a salespersons cheery
good morning may produce sharply various reactions. In a filter surrounded with happiness,
the full positive meaning is received. A filter of a burdened, emotionally upset mind, on the other
hand, may react with annoyance at these words that break into the minds unhappy state.
Next in the communication process is the symbolizing stage. At this stage, Marys mind reacts to
the filtered information it has received. If the filtered information produces a sufficiently strong
reaction, her mind may elect to communicate some form of response by words, by gesture, by
action, or by some other means.
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When Marys mind does elect to communicate, it next determines the general meaning the
response will take. This process involves the innermost and most complex workings of the mind;and little is known about it. There is evidence, however, to indicate that ones ability here, and
throughout the symbolizing stage, is related to ones mental capacities and to the extent to which
one will permit the mind to react. Especially is one ability to evaluate filtered information and
formulate meaning related to ones ability with language. Apparently ability with language
equips one with a variety of symbol forms, and the greater the number of symbol forms in the
mind, the more discriminating one can be in selecting them.
Mary ends the symbolizing stage by encoding the meaning formed in her mind. That is, she
converts her meanings into symbols, and she transmits the symbols. In most instances, her
symbol form is words, either made as sounds or as marks on paper. She also may select gestures,
movements, facial expressions, diagrams, and such.
Transmittal of the encoded message ends the first cycle of the communication process. The
transmitted signals next enter the sensory world that surrounds Gorge, and then begins a second
cycle, identical to the first. Now, he picks up these symbols through his sensory receptors. They
then travel through his nervous system to his brain. Here they are given meaning as they pass
through his individual filter of knowledge, experience, bias, emotional makeup, and the like. The
filtered meanings may also bring about a response, which Gorge then formulates in his mind,
puts insymbol form, and transmits. The process may continue indefinitely, cycle after cycle, as
long as the participants want to communicate.
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2.2 Definition of Communication
Defining abstract words like communication is very difficult because such words do not
denote any material object to which we can conveniently refer. Many different definitions of theword communication have been formulated.
Since we have a good understanding of the communication process, we can define
communication as a process of sharing meaning between persons through an exchange of
symbols enabling each person to elicit in his or her own mind a meaning similar to that in the
mind of the other.1Communication occurs when a message actually reaches its destination and
is perceived by the receivers as the sender intended. Or in simpler words, communication means
making known, making common.2
2.3 Written Communication
Although the above description of the communication process applies more specifically to face-
to-face communication than to other forms, it generally describes written communication as well.
But there are some significant differences.
The most significant difference between face-to-face communication and written communication
is that written communication is more likely to be creative effort of the mind. The fact is that it is
more likely to be thought out and less likely to be the spontaneous reaction to signs received by
1 Herta O. Murphy,Effective Business Communication. New York: Mcgraw-Hill Inc., 1980
2 Oxford dictionary, fourth edition, P278
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the receptors. More specifically, the message in a written communication is more likely to be a
result of stimuli produced by the mind than of outside stimuli picked up by the sensory receptors.
In a report-writing situation, before beginning work on the report, we writers have decided to
communicate. Before we begin the task of communicating, we gather the information that will
form the basis of their communication. Then through logical thought processes they encode the
communication that will accomplish their communication objective. Thus, there is not likely to
be an interchange of stimuli between communicants, nor is there likely to be any triggering of
desires to communicate. The process is a creative and deliberative one.
Another difference between face-to-face and written communication processes is the time factor.
In face-to-face communication, the encoded messages move instantaneously into the sensory
environments of the participants. In written communication, however, some delay takes place.
Just how long the delay will be is indeterminate. For example, the administrative announcements
may be read minutes after they are written. Routine letters require a day or two to communicate
their content. Research reports may take weeks in communicating their information to the
intended readers. And all such written communications may be filed for possible reference in the
indefinite future. They may continue to communicate for months or years.
2.4Business Communication
Business communication is the process of transferring technical information from someone who
has to someone who needs through the use of special forms and techniques designed to
strengthen the readers comprehension of and response to that information.
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In business communication, we will use special forms for particular purposes. For example,
when we are providing background information on a particular topic, we will use aninformational report; and when we are trying to persuade our readers to do something, we will
use a feasibility report. Whatever the form we choose, we can improve our reports through the
skillful dealing with a wide range of special devices or techniques.
2.5 Basic Truths of Communication
Analysis of the communication process brings out three underlying truths, which are helpful to
understand communication.
Meanings sent are not always received.
First, meanings transmitted are not necessarily the meanings received. No two minds have
identical words, gestures, facial expressions, or any of the other symbol forms; nor do any two
minds attach exactly the same meanings to all the symbols they have in common. Because of
these differences, errors in communication are bound to occur.
Meaning is in the mind.
A second underlying truth is that meaning is in the mind and not in the words or other symbols
used. How accurately meaning is conveyed in symbols depends on how skillful one is in
choosing symbols and how accurately the person receiving the symbols is able to interpret the
meaning intended. Thus, skillful communicators look beyond the symbols used. They consider
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the communication ability of those with whom they want to communicate. When they receive
messages, they dont look at the symbols alone but for the meaning intended by the person who
used them.
Communication is imperfect.
Third is the basic truth that communication is highly imperfect. One reason for this imperfection
is that words are limited and at best are crude substitutes for the real thing. The word man can
refer to any one of a few hundred million human males, and no two are precisely alike. The word
dogstands for any one of a countless number of animals varying sharply in size, shape, color,
and in every other visible aspect. The verb run tells only the most general part of the action it
describes; it ignores the countless variations in speed, grace, and style. The illustrations are not
exceptions; they are the rule. Words simply cant account for the infinite variations and
complexities of reality.
Another reason for communication imperfection is that communicators vary in their abilities to
convey their thoughts. Some find great difficulty in selecting symbols that express their simplest
thoughts; others are highly capable. Variations in ability to communicate obviously lead to
variations in the precision with which thoughts are expressed.
Although the above comments bring to light the difficulties, we human beings do a fairly good
job of communicating with one another. Even so, incidents of miscommunication occur
frequently. Those people who attach precise meanings to every word, who feel that meanings
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intended are meanings received, and who are not able to select symbols well are apt to
experience more than their share of miscommunication.
2.6 Adaptation
The difficulty of communicating was stressed in the communication process. And it is clear that
communication is not a precise activity---that some degree of miscommunication is the rule
rather than the exception. It is also clear that communication involves fitting the message to the
readers mind--- that is, using words and concepts that the reader knows and understands. This
approach to communication is called adaptation.
By adapting to our readers we mean using words and concepts that they understand. Adaptation
involves first visualizing the readers---determine who they are, what they know about the
subject, what are their educational levels, and how they think. Then, keep this information in
mind, and tailor the writing to fit these readers.
In many business situations, adapting to our readers means writing on a level lower than our
own. For example, sometimes we will need to communicate with people below our educational
level. Or we may need to communicate with people of our educational level who simply do not
know much about the subject of our message. On such occasions we will need to write for them
at a lower level than we would normally use.1
Lets look at an example of adaptation.
1 William Zinsser, On Writing Well. New York: Harper & Row Publishers, Inc., 1976
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There is a story told around Washington of plumber who wrote the Bureau of Standards that he
had found hydrochloric acid good for cleaning clogged drains.
He got this response: The efficacy of hydrochloric acid is indisputable, but the corrosive
residue is incompatible with metallic permanence.
Believing that these big words indicated that the Bureau agreed with him, the plumber wrote
back telling how pleased he was that they liked his discovery.
The bureaucrat tried again: We cant assume responsibility for the production of toxic residue
with hydrochloric acid and suggest alternative procedure.
The plumber was even more impressed. Again he expressed his appreciation to the Bureau for
agreeing with him.
The bureaucrat got the message. He replied in words the plumber was certain to understand:
Dont use hydrochloric acid. It will eat hell out of popes.
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To illustrate, assume that we need to write a memorandum to a group of laborers. Our knowledge
of them tells us that their vocabularies are limited. If we are to reach them, we will have to use
the words they know. If we do not, we will not be likely to communicate. On the other hand, if
we had to write the same message to a group of highly educated people, we would have a wider
choice of words from which to choose. Obviously, these people have relatively larger
vocabularies than the laborers. In either case, however, we would select words that are
understood easily by the intended readers.
Lets look at the following paragraph from a company annual report illustrating this basic
principle. The writer of the report apparently viewed the stockholder readers as people who are
not well informed in finance:
Last year our companys total sales were $117,400,000, which was slightly higher than the
$109,800,000 total for the year before. After deducting for all expenses, we had $4,593,000 left
over for profits, compared with $2,830,000 for 1980. Because of these increased profits, we were
able to increase your annual dividend payments per share from the 50 cents paid over the last ten
years.
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Chapter Three Linguistic Requirements for Effective
Business Report Writing
Having understood the communication process, we can say that an effective business report will
communicate well. Because its writing fits the readability of the reader. Thus, we need to take
linguistic requirements into consideration.
3.1 Word Selection
In business report writing, we writers task is to produce in our readers mind the meanings
formulated in our mind. To do this, we need to use written symbols of meaning (words). Thus,
our task is largely one of selecting the right words that communicate best. The right words are
those that have correct and clear meanings in the readers mind.
Selecting the right words depends on our ability to use language, our knowledge of the reader,
and etc. But we should keep in mind one approach --- simplicity in writing. This approach is
supported by three good reasons. First, many of us tend to write at too difficult a level. Instead of
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being friendly, we become cold and stiff. We work to use big words and complex structures.
Winston Churchill was referring to this tendency when he made his classic remark: Little men
use big words; big men use little words. We would do well to follow the example set by this big
man.
The second reason for simplification is that we writer usually know the subject of the message
better than our readers. Thus they are not equally equipped to communicate on the matter. If we
do not work at reducing the message to our readers level, communication will be difficult.
The third reason for simplifying writing is that convincing research supports this approach.
According to the findings of some experts, writing slightly below the readers level of
understanding communicates best.
3.1.1 Use Concrete Words
Successful business report writing is marked by specific words---words that form sharp and clear
meaning in the readers brain. Such words are concrete. Concrete words are the opposite of
abstract words, which are words of fuzzy and vague meanings. In general, concrete words stand
for things readers can see, feel, taste, or smell. Concrete words hold interest, for they move
directly into the readers experience. Because concrete words are best for holding interest, we
should prefer them to abstract words wherever possible.
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Generally speaking, concrete words are the short and familiar words. In addition to be more
meaningful to readers, such words generally have more precise meaning than the other words.
For example, the sentence is filled with long, unfamiliar words: The magnitude of the
increment of profits was the predominant motivating factor in the decision. Written in shorter
and more familiar words, the idea becomes more concrete: The size of the profit gained was the
chief reason for the decision.
The effect of the concrete words can be easily illustrated by comparing the following examples:
Abstract Concrete
a sizable profit A 22 percent profit
a significant loss A 53-percent loss
substantial amount $4,549,000
in the near future by Thursday afternoon
good attendance record 100-percent attendance record
Now let us look at the following passage, and it is an example of some abstract wording.
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It is imperative that the firm practice extreme conservatism in operating expenditures during the
coming biennium. The firms past operating performance has been ineffectual for the reason thata preponderance of administrative assignments have been delegated to personnel who were ill
equipped to perform in these capacities. Recently instituted administrative changes stressing
experience in operating economies have rectified this condition.
This message written for concreteness might read like this:
We must cut operating expenses at least $3,000,000 during the year 2002-2003. Our $2,340,000
deficit for the year 2000-2001 was caused by the inexperience of our two chief administrators,
Mr. Harrison and Mr. Douglas. We have replaced them with Ms. Duff and Mr. Levy, who have
had 13 and 17 years, respectively, of successful experience in operations management.
3.1.2 Use Familiar Words
As a general rule, the familiar everyday words are the best for us to use. Familiar words refer to
those we will use in face-to-face communication or the simple words.
Of course, what is familiar to some people may be unfamiliar to others. This is where the
principle of adaptation comes in. We will have to use our judgment in determining what is likely
to be familiar to our readers.
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Specifically, using familiar words means using the language that most of us use in normal
conversation. We should avoid the stiff, more difficult words that do not communicate so
precisely or quickly. For example, instead of using the more unfamiliar word endeavor, use try.
Instead of using terminate, use end.
The communication advantages of familiar words over the formal complex ones are obvious
from the following contrasting examples.
unfamiliar and complex familiar and easy
accomplish..do
ascertain.. find out
contradict.deny
dissimilar..unlike
erroneous..wrong
evinceshow
encountermeet
facilitate. help
formulate.draw up
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glutinous sticky
gradientslope
initial.. first
incrementincrease
institutebegin
modificationchange
optimum..best
predisposition..tendency
proximity.nearness
reimburse.pay
subsequentlylater
substantiate..prove
utilization.use
ultimatelast
The following contrasting examples illustrate the communication advantages of familiar words
over the less familiar ones.1
1 For some of these examples I am indebted to friends who gave them to me over the years.
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a. The antiquated mechanisms were utilized for the experimentation.
b. The old machines were used for the test.
a. Company operations for the preceding accounting period terminated with a
substantial deficit.
b. The company lost much money last year.
a. The conclusion ascertained from a perusal of pertinent data is that a lucrative market exists for
the product.
b. The data studies show that the product is in good demand.
3.1.3 Choose Short Words
Short words tend to communicate better than long words. Certainly there are exceptions. Some
long words like automobile generally are well known; some short words like vie are understood
only by a few. On the whole, however, word length and word difficulty clearly are related. Thus,
we should concentrate on the short ones and use the long ones with caution. Use a long word
only when we are reasonably certain that our readers know it. Though highly educated readers
are likely to understand long words, yet the heavy proportion of long words interferes with
communication of the message. Without question, the short-word versions communicate better.
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A comparison between the five groups of sentences will show that sentence b in each group is
better, for short words were used.
a. They accededto the proposition to terminate business
b. They agreedto quit business
a. During theprecedingyear the company operated at a financial deficit.
b. Last year the company lostmoney.
a. This antiquated merchandisingstrategy is ineffectualin contemporary business
operations.
b. This oldsales strategy wont workin todays business.
a. Definitive action was effected subsequent to the reporting date.
b. Final action was taken after the reporting date.
a. The decision was predicated on the assumption that an abundance of monetary funds
was forthcoming.
b. The decision was based on the belief that there would be more money.
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Here are other examples of shorter expressions, substitution of long wordings.
along the lines oflike
at the present time..now
in the meantime..meantime
in accordance with..by
in very few cases.seldom
in view of the fact that.since, because
in the event thatif
in advance of.before
in view of foregoing circumstances.therefore
on the basis ofby
subsequent to.after
taking this factor into consideration..therefore
with regard to.about
with a view to to
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3.1.4 Use Technical Words with Caution
Every field has its own technical language. Truck drivers have onelong enough, in fact, to fill
a 36-page dictionary.1To those in the field, much of the jargon is a part of the everyday working
vocabulary. Certainly it is logical to use this jargon in writing to members of the field.
Frequently, one such word will communicate a concept that would take dozens of other words to
describe.
A problem comes about, however, when we use these words to people outside our field. Because
these words are everyday words to us, we tend to forget that everyone does not know them. The
result is miscommunication. We can avoid such miscommunication by using technical words
with extreme caution, because business report is reader-centered. The purpose of the business
report writing is not just to get a message down a paper, but to get it into the mind of the reader.
Especially in longer reports, the boss pays more attention to the opening pages (title page,
abstract, table of contents, and introduction), conclusions or recommendations. In these sections
technical words should be carefully avoided. But in the detailed discussion following, technical
words may be safely used. In fact, most writers on business reports agree that even when we are
writing exclusively for the technically trained reader, it is best to use technical words only when
we need it.1
1 Jean M. Walker, Truck Driving Dictionary and Glossary, American Trucking Association, Inc., Washington,D.C., 1980
1 Gerald Cohen,A World Without People. Arizona State University, 1969
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We can find many examples of misuse of technical writing. For instance, annuity has clear
meaning to one in insurance. But a contract that guarantees an income for a specified period
would have more meaning to uninformed outsiders. When a physician uses cerebral vascular
accidentto other physicians, they understand. Most people would get little meaning from the
words, but they would understand a little stroke.
Lets look at the following sentence written by a physician.
It is a methodology error to attempt to interpret psychologically an organic symptom that is the
end-result of an intermediary change of organic processes instead of trying to understand these
vegetative nervous impulses in their relation to psychological factors that introduce a change of
organic events resulting in an organic disturbance.
Undoubtedly the heavy proportion of technical terms also makes understanding difficult. The
conclusion that may be drawn here is obvious. We may use technical terms in writing to fellow
technicians, but we should use such words in moderation.
These words would be clear to a seasoned railroader:
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Run that hog into four and tie on to that cut and snake it out of there. Then shake it out. After you
finish that, pick up those two reefers on eight and cut them in behind the gondolas on ten. Thatll
wrap up the hot shot. Then tie her together and blue flag her. 1
3.1.5 Prefer Active Verbs to Passive Ones
We should prefer the active to the passive voice. Active voice produces stronger, livelier writing.
It places more emphasis on the action, and usually it saves words.
Active-voice verbs show their subject doing the action. They contrast with the dull passive forms
that act on their subjects. The following contrasting sentences illustrate the distinction.
Active: The auditor inspected the books.
Passive: The books were inspected by the auditor
Clearly, in the first sentence, the doer of the action acts, and the verb is short and clear. In the
second sentence, the helping word were dulls the verb, and the doer of the action is relegated
to a role in the prepositional phrase. The following sentences give additional proof of the
superiority of active over passive voice.
Active: Soft drink sales gained 49 percent.
1 John OHayre, Gobbledygook Has Gotta Go, Bureau of Land Management, Washington, D.C.,1966
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Passive: A gain of 49 percent was recorder for soft drink sales.
Active: The president completely reorganized the administration.
Passive: A complete reorganization of the administration was affected by the president.
Active: Investigators believed that the new process is superior.
Passive: The new process is believed to be superior by the investigators.
The emphasis of active voice does not mean that passive voice should be eliminated or that it is
incorrect. It has its place, and it certainly is correct. The fact is that passive voice is a poor choice
for reports because it slows the reader down in recognizing the pattern of a sentence. When the
mind perceives an actpaying a bill, for exampleit visualizes a person in the act of paying the
bill. It does not visualize the bill being paid. To process the passive into active, the reader
must reverse the pattern. This processing action is almost instantaneous, of course, and the
occasional use of passive voice creates no great loss of time. But when it appears over and over
again in the report, the conversion time begins to build up. And if no performer is ever identified,
the reader enters a world there no one does anything: thing just happen. That mystification
coupled with wasted time, finally leads to frustration. Passive verbs occur in Time magazine only
about 10 to 12 percent of the time. 1
1 Thomas A. Sherman,Modern Technical Writing. Prentice-Hill Inc., 1982
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As a consequence, in revising our report, change as many verbs from passive to active voice as
we can. Doing so helps our readers. To summarize, using active voice verbs saves both words
and time because it is more natural and because it enables readers to recognize sentence patterns
swiftly.
3.1.6 Avoid Overuse of Camouflaged Verbs
When we camouflage a verb, we take the verb describing the action in a sentence and change it
into a noun. Then we have to add action words. For example, suppose we want to write a
sentence in which eliminate is the action to be expressed. We change eliminate into its noun
form, elimination. Now in order to have a sentence, we must add action wordsperhaps was
effected.
Our sentence would then be something like this: Elimination of the surplus was effected by the
staff. We could have avoided the camouflaged construction with a sentence using the word
eliminate: The staff eliminate the surplus.
Here are some additional examples. We could take the good action word cancel and make it into
a noun, cancellation. Then we would have to say something like to effect a cancellation in
order to communicate the action desired. So it would be with these examples:
action verbs Noun form Wording of camouflaged verb
acquire.. acquisition make an acquisition
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appearappearance make an appearance
apply..application make an application
discussdiscussion have a discussion
investigateinvestigation make an investigation
record.recording make a recording
liquidate.liquidation effect a liquidation
reconcile.reconciliation make a cancellation
Note the difference in overall effect in the contrasting sentences:
a. We must bring about a reconciliation of our differences. ( camouflaged verb)
b. We must reconcile our differences. (clear verb form)
From these illustrations we can see that camouflaged words made from the verbs are abstract
nouns. We have discussed the point that we prefer the concrete to the abstract words. Second,
camouflaged wordings frequently require passive voice. And the active voice is preferable.
3.1.7Avoid Misplacing Modifiers
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Modifiers are the describing words that help us to clarify the meaning of what we write. For
example, modifiers help us to describe the subject in a sentence, to tell how the action of the
sentence took place, and to tell our reader where or when something occurred.
Careful use of modifiers makes our meaning clearer and enables us to express our ideas in
color. But careless use of modifiers results in misunderstanding and hard-to-read sentences.
Likewise, if we do not use modifiers at all, our sentences may be uninteresting and colorless, and
if we use too many modifiers, our sentences may be wordy and confusing.
The basic principle for using modifiers is simple to put them as close as possible to the word or
words they are modifying. Naturally, if we want to discuss a potentialmarket, we will want
potentialto appear right before market; we will not put the modifier in some distant part of the
sentence.
Examples:
We have ordered a hundred cupcakes for the children dipped in chocolate.
(wrong: dipped in chocolate modifiers cupcakes, not children)
We have ordered a hundred cupcakes dipped in chocolate for the children.
(poor)
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We have ordered for the children a hundred cupcakes dipped in chocolate. (better)
3.2 Sentence Construction
As we have known, choosing the right words is basic to clear communication. Equally basic is
the task of arranging the words into sentences that communicate clearly. Just as with words,
constructing clear sentences involves adaptation. That is, it involves fitting sentences to the
minds of the intended readers.
Fitting sentences to the minds of readers requires the same kind of analysis of the readers. We
simply need to study our readers to find out how we should communicate with them. We should
especially consider their knowledge of the subject of the report, their education, and their
intelligence. Then, with this information in mind, we should construct the sentences that are
likely to communicate best with them.
As a general rule, the more educated and intelligent our readers are, the better they are to
understand messages. Thus, in writing to the lower levels, we should use the simpler sentence
designsthose easier to understand. In writing to the higher levels, we can use more complex
designs.
In adapting sentences, we should aim a little below the level of our reader. Research tells us that
writing communicates best when it does not tax mind. Thus some degree of simplification is best
for all readers.
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3.2.1 Write Short Sentences
Writing the simpler, more understandable sentences largely involves writing short sentences. The
more words and the more relationships in a sentence, the greater is the possibility for
misunderstanding. Apparently, the mind can hold only so much information at one time. Thus, to
give it too much information is to cause miscommunication
The emphasis on short sentences does not mean that occasionally we may not use long sentences.
We may, and we should if we can construct them clearly. Longer sentences sometimes are useful
in subordinating information. Sometimes the information needed to complete a thought requires
a long sentence.
Writing in simple, short sentences involves two basic techniques. First is the technique of
limiting sentence content; second is the technique of expressing thoughts in fewer words, that is,
of economizing the words used.
Limiting Sentence Content
Limiting sentence content is largely a matter of mentally selecting the thought units and making
separate sentences of most of them. Sometimes, of course, we should combine thoughts into one
sentence. But we should do this only when we have good reason to do so. The advantage of
following this practice is evident from the following contrasting sentences.
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a. Regardless of their seniority or union affiliation, all employees who hope to be promoted are
expected to continue their education rather by enrolling in the special courses to be offered by
the company, which are scheduled to be given after working hours beginning next Wednesday,
or by taking approved correspondence courses selected from a list which may be seen in the
training office. (long and hard to understand)
b. Regardless of their seniority or union affiliation, all employees who hope to be promoted are
expected to continue their education in either of two ways. 1. They may enroll in special courses
to be given by the company. 2. They may take approved correspondence courses selected in the
training office. (short and clear)
a. Some authorities in personnel administration object to expanding normal salary ranges to
include a trainee rate because they fear that probationers may be kept at the minimum rate longer
than is warranted through oversight or prejudice and because they fear that it would encourage
the spread from the minimum to maximum rate range. (long and hard to understand)
b. Some authorities in personnel administration object to expanding the normal salary range to
include a trainee rate for two reasons. First, they fear that probationers may be kept at the
minimum rate longer than is warranted, through oversight or prejudice, Second, they fear that it
would, in effect, increase the spread from the minimum to the maximum rate range. (short and
clear)
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Without question, the longer sentences are difficult to understand. The obvious explanation is the
length of the sentence. So many words and relationships are in this one unit that they confuse the
mind. The result is fuzzy communication at bestcomplete miscommunication at worst. Clearly,
the shorter versions are easy to understand. They fit into the mind better. They give more
emphasis to content and to organization of the subject matter.
Economizing on Words
Economizing on words largely involves consciously looking for shorter ways of expressing
things. In general, the shorter wordings not only save our readers time, but also make reading
more interesting.
Cluttering phrases
Our language is cluttered with numerous phrases that are best replaced by shorter expressions.
Although the shorter forms may save only a word or two here and there, the little saving over a
long piece of writing can be significant.
The following are contrasting pairs of expressions:
Cluttering phrase shorter substitution
along the lines of like
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for the purpose of for
for the reason that because, since
in accordance with by
in very few cases seldom
on the occasion of on
with regard to about
Lets compare the following three pairs of sentences:
a. In the event that payment is not made by January, operations will cease.
b. If payment is not made by January, operations will cease.
a. In spite of the fact that they received help, they failed to exceed to quota.
b. Even though they received help, they failed to exceed the quota.
a. The invoice was in the amount of $30,000.
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b. The invoice was for $30,000.
Surplus words
To write economically, we need to eliminate words that add nothing to the sentence meaning.
We often use extra and meaningless words as a matter of habit. Sometimes eliminating the
surplus words requires recasting the sentence. But sometimes they can just be left out.
Here are some examples of surplus wording from a business report:
a. It will be noted that the records for the past years show a steady increase in special
appropriations.
b. The records for past years show a steady increase in special appropriations.
a. There are four rules that should be observed.
b. Four rules should be observed.
a. In addition to these defects, numerous other defects mar the operating procedure.
b. Numerous other defects mar the operating procedure.
a. By the keeping of production records, they found the error.
b. By keeping production records, they found the error.
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a. I am prepared to report to the effect that sales increased.
b. I am prepared to report that sales increased.
Obviously, by eliminating the surplus words, sentence b. in each pair is strong, without loss of
meaning.
Eliminate redundancies
Most rough drafts are wordier than they should be because they resemble the way we think
and speak. But remember that every unnecessary word wastes a little of our readers time.
And wordy writing is boring. If we dont want our efforts to end up in the readers
wastebasket, we should make sure the writing is concise.
Our goal is not to impress people with the number of words we can write; our goal is simply
to get our message across a reader. To avoid using further words, lets see how we can do
something to cut the flab from the sentences.
The following are some common phrases in our language, which are redundant. We should
stop to think about the words that roll onto our page.
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REDUNDANT..CONCISE
advance planning planning
brief in length brief
collect together collect
desirable benefits benefits
important essentials essentials
merge together merge
past history history
The tip for us business report writers is: Dont bury an idea in several unnecessary words.
Though the temptation to say things twice is often hard to fight, we should cut out extra words
that add length and no real information.1
3.2.2 Design Effective Sentences
Writing sentences also involves giving the right emphasis to content. Any written business
communication contains a number of items of information, not all equally important. Some are
very important, such as a conclusion in a report or the objective in a letter. Some are relatively
unimportant. Our task as report writer is to determine the importance of each item and then to
form our sentences to communicate this importance.
1Warren L. Thomas, Technical Writing. California: Wadsworth Publishing Co., 1988
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Sentence length affects emphasis. Short, simple sentences carry more emphasis than long ones.
The short ones stand out and call attention to their contents. Thus the reader gets one messagewithout the interference of related or supporting information.
Longer sentences give less emphasis to their contents. When two or more ideas are in one
sentence, the ideas share emphasis. If the two ideas are presented equally (in independent clause,
for example), they get about equal emphasis. But if they are not presented equally (for example,
in an independent and a dependent clause), one gets more emphasis than the other.
For instance, we have two items of information to write. One is that the company lost money last
year. The other is that its sales reached a record of high volume. We could present the
information in at least three ways.
The company lost money last year. The loss occurred in spite of record sales.
Although the company enjoyed record sales last year, it lost money.
The company enjoyed record sales last year, although it lost money.
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Which sentence we would use depends on how much emphasis each item deserves. We need to
think the matter through and follow our best judgment. But the point is clear: our choice of
arrangement makes a difference.
3.2.3 Give the Sentence Unity
Good sentences must have unity. For a sentence to have unity, all of its parts must combine to
form one clear thought. In other words, everything that is put together as a sentence should have
a good reason for being together.
Violations of unity in sentence construction fall into three categories: (1) unrelated ideas, (2)
excessive details and (3) illogical constructions.
Unrelated ideas
Placing unrelated ideas in a sentence is the most obvious violation of unity. Of course, putting
two or more ideas in a sentence is not grammatically wrong. But the ideas must have a reason for
being together. They must combine to complete the single goal of the sentence. It is not enough
that the ideas just are on the same subject.
There are three basic ways of giving unity to sentences that contain seemingly unrelated ideas. 1.
We can put the ideas in separate sentences. 2. We can make one of the ideas subordinate to the
other. 3. We can add words that show how the ideas are related.
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The following contrasting pairs of sentences illustrate the technique:
a. Our territory is the southern half of the state, and our sales people cant cover it
thoroughly. ( unrelated )
b. Our territory is the southern half of the state. Our sales people cant cover it
thoroughly. (improved)
a. Operation of the press is simple. But no machine will work well unless it is
maintained. (unrelated)
b. Operation of the press is simple; but, like any machine, it will not work well
unless it is maintained. (improved)
a. We concentrate on energy-saving products, and 70 percent of our business is
from them. (unrelated)
b. As a result of our concentration on energy-saving products, 70 percent of our
business comes from them. (improved)
Excessive details
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Unity can be given by making both clauses active, as in this example:
First we cut prices, and then we reduced quality.
Here is another example:
Job rotation is when you train people by moving them from job to job.
Revised for good logic the sentence might be read like this:
Job rotation is a training method involving moving people from job to job.
3.2.4 Write Sentences for Variety
We all know the clich about the spice of life. Well, variety certainly adds spice to any piece of
writing. 1We should not let our writing become monotonous just because we are writing a
business report.
The key to sentence variety is subordination. We can inject secondary ideas into our sentences in
a multitude of ways. Once we recognize the main point of our sentences, we should be able to
incorporate the less important ideas into phrases or dependent clauses. And the following ways
to subordinate material will help to add variety to our sentences and give proper emphasis to the
points we are conveying.
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For example, we have many versions of the sentences:John is a manager. John works ten hours
a day. John is the companys best salesman.
a. John, who is the companys best salesman, works ten hours a day. (Dependent clause inside
an independent clause )
b. John, the companys best salesman, works ten hours a day. (Appositive in the independent
clause)
c. Since he works ten hours a day, John is the companys best salesman. (Dependent clause +
independent clause)
d. Working ten hours a day, John is the companys best salesman. (Modifying phrase+
independent clause)
3.3 Paragraph Building
Paragraphing is also important to clear communication. Paragraphs show the reader where topics
begin and end, thus, helping to organize the information in the mind. Paragraphing helps to make
the ideas stand out.
3.3.1 Give the Paragraph Unity
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Unity is the primary requirement of the paragraph. When applied to paragraph structure, unity
means that the paragraph builds around a single topic or idea. Thus, all that we include in a
paragraph should develop this topic or idea. When we finished the paragraph, we should have no
difficulty in answering what the paragraph concerns.
Unity is not always easy to determine. All of a report, for example, may deal with a single topic
and therefore have unity. The same could be said for each major division of the report as well as
for the lesser subdivisions. Paragraph unity, however, concerns smaller units than theseusually
the lowest level of a detailed outline. That is, in reports written with detailed outlines, each
paragraph may well cover one of the lowest outline captions. In any event, one good test of a
paragraph is to reduce its content to a single statement. If this statement does not cover the
paragraph content, unity is not likely to be there.
A violation of unity is illustrated in the following paragraph from an application letter.
At the University I studied all the basic accounting courses as well as specialized courses in
petroleum, fiduciary, and systems. I also took specialized coursework in the behavioral areas,
with emphasis on human relations. Realizing the value of human relations in business, I also
actively participated in some social organizations. I selected my elective coursework to round out
my general business education. Among my electives were courses in investments, advanced
business report writing, financial policy, and forecasting. A glance at my resume will show you
the additional courses that round out my raining.
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As the goal of the paragraph is to present a summary of the applicants coursework, all the
sentences should pertain to coursework. By shifting to personal qualities, the third sentence
violates paragraph unity. Taking this one sentence out would correct the fault.
3.3.2 Keep the Paragraph Short
As discussed earlier, paragraphs help the reader to follow the organization plan of the paper.
Writing shorter paragraphs points out more of the details of the organization plan. In addition,
writing marked by short paragraphs is inviting to the eye. People read writing that gives them
frequent breaks more easily than unbroken writing, which is easily proved by illustration. A
glance at the figure below shows the effect of paragraph length.
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Figure 1 is a report written with long paragraphs. Its pages are solid with type. Figure 2 is a
report that has short paragraphs, thus providing frequent rest stops throughout. No doubt we
would prefer the one with short paragraphs. It is more inviting, and it appears to be less difficult.
Perhaps the difference is largely psychological, but it is a very real difference.
Just how long a paragraph should be, of course, depends on the topic. Some topics are short,
some are long, and others are in between. Even so, this general guide can be given on paragraph
length: Most well-organized and well-paragraphed reports may have paragraphs that average
about eight to ten lines. Some good paragraphs may be quite shorteven a single line. And some
may be well above the eight to ten averagely.1
A good rule to follow is to question the unity of all long paragraphs, say those over 12 lines.
After looking over the paragraph, we find more than one topic. When we do, we should make
each topic into a separate paragraph.
3.3.3 Make Good Use of Topic Sentences
One good way of organizing paragraphs is to use topic sentences. The topic sentence expresses
the main idea of paragraph, and the remaining sentences build around and support it. In a sense,
the topic sentence serves as headline for the paragraph, and all the other sentences supply the
story.
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Not every good paragraph must have a topic sentence. Some, for example, serve to introduce
ideas, to relate succeeding items, or to present an assortment of facts that lead to no conclusion.
The central thought of such paragraphs is difficult to put into a single sentence. Even so, we
should use topic sentence whenever we can. We should use them especially in writing reports in
which we must discuss a number of topics and subtopics. Using topic sentences forces us to find
the central idea of each paragraph. Another advantage is that it helps to given us a check for
paragraph unity.
How a topic sentence should fit into a paragraph depends primarily on the subject matter and we
writers plan. Some subject matter develops best by first presenting details and ending with a
conclusion or summary statement (the topic sentence). Others develop best by beginning with the
summary or concluding statement. Other possible arrangements exist.
Topic sentence at the beginning
The most common of all paragraph plans begins with the topic sentence and follows with the
supporting sentences. As this arrangement fits most units of business information, we should find
it useful. In fact, appropriate business information is that one companys writing manual suggests
that this arrangement be used for virtually all paragraphs. As illustrated in the following
paragraph, the plan has merit.
A majority of the economists consulted think that business activity will drop during the first
quarter of next year. Of the 147 economists interviewed, 20 percent looked for continued
increases in business activities; and 13 percent anticipated little or no change from the present
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high level. The remaining 67 percent liked for a recession. Of this group, nearly all believed the
down curve would occur during the first quarter of the year.
Topic sentence at the end
The second most common paragraph arrangement places the topic sentence at the end, usually as
a conclusion. Take the following short passage as an example:
The significant role of inventories in the economic picture should not be overlooked. At present,
inventories represent 4 months supply. Their dollar value is the highest in history. If considered
in relation to increased sales, however, they are not excessive. In fact, they are well within the
range generally believed to be safe. Thus, inventories are not likely to cause a downward swing
in the economy
The passage first presented the supporting details, and from these details they lead the readers to
the conclusion.
Topic sentence within the paragraph
This arrangement is rarely used, and usually for good reason. It does not emphasize the topic
sentence, and usually the topic sentence deserves emphasis. Even so, sometimes we can justify
using this arrangement for special effect, as in this example:
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Numerous materials have been used in manufacturing this part. And many have shown quite
satisfactory results. Material 447, however, is superior to them all. Built with material 447, the
part is almost twice as strong as when built with the next best material. Also, it is three ounces
lighter. Most important, it is cheaper than any of the other products. (topic sentence is
underlined)
Leaving out unnecessary details
In writing paragraph we should include only information we need. The chances are that we have
more information than we need. Thus, a part of our communication task involves selecting what
we need and dropping what we do not need.
What we need, of course, is a matter of judgment. We can judge best by putting ourselves in the
readers place. Ask ourselves questions such as these: How will the information be used? What
will be used? What will not be used? Then make the decisions. If we follow this procedure,
probably we will leave out much that we originally intended to use.
For example, wed better not write:
As a matter of fact, the X-210 copier is not really the kind of machine the company needs, since
the X-200 has the capability of meeting virtually all of our needs
We d better write:
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We do not need the X-210 since the X-200 meets our needs.
3.3.4 Move the Paragraph Forward
Good report writing has movement. Movement is the writing quality that takes the reader in
definite and logical steps toward the goal without side trips and backward shifts. The progress is
steadily forward, namely, step by step. The sentences move step by step to achieve the paragraph
goal, and the paragraphs move step by step to achieve the report goal.
Perhaps movement is best explained by examples. The following paragraph is from the annual
report of The Walt Disney Company:
There are two principal attributes that make a brand powerful from a business perspective. It
must be unique and it must be relevant. Uniqueness is the quality that determines the ability to
use the brand to differentiate one's products. In this sense, the Disney brand is truly unique. And
ESPN, through considerable effort and investment, has also established its uniqueness despite the
tough competition in the sports programming business. However, to be commercially powerful, a
brand must also be relevant to consumers. Clearly, both Disney and ESPN pass this test. Disney
is about family, fun and fantasy. ESPN embodies the edgy and irreverent excitement of sports.
The flow of thought in the preceding paragraph is orderly. The first sentence sets up the
paragraph structure and the parts of the structure follow.
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The information in this paragraph is acceptable for the beginning of report. And the problem
with the paragraph is that the writer does not provide transitional words to move us from one
point to another. A few helpful words will make the paragraph much more accessible and
effective.
John Carson instructed me, as product manager of the Food Service Division, to evaluate our
Lite Fruit marketing strategy. When I analyzed the effect of the marketing campaign on the
division, I found the campaign had run at a loss or two years. To determine the root of the
problem, I studied the divisions recent cost-income data and consumer-trend reports. Now that I
have completed my report, I recommend continuing the Lite Fruit campaign, increasing the price
of Lite Fruit, and directing a large portion of the advertising budget to male consumers.
The few words added to these sentences provide a chronological sense as well as a logical
sequence to the para