1. SDCUE Fall 2014 Holly French and Janet Ilko

2. Consider the similarities and differences between editing and revision. How can using digital tools enhance this process? 3. IF STUDENTS ARE TO BECOME BETTER WRITERS, THEY NEED TO RECOGNIZE THAT SOMETIMES THEIR FIRST IDEA IS NOT ALWAYS THEIR BEST IDEA.SADLY, THESE STUDENTS HAVE NOT BEEN TAUGHT THAT THEIR BEST IDEA MAYBE YET TO COME. THEIR RICHEST THINKING MAY BE FOUND IN THEIR SECOND, FIFTH, OR NINTH IDEA. (229) Kelly Gallagher Write Like This Copyright 2010 3 4. IN A NATIONAL SURVEY OF 560 OTHERWISE SUCCESSFUL SECONDARY TEACHERS OF WRITING AND 715 OF THEIR STUDENTS, SARAH W. FREEDMAN (THE ROLE OF RESPONSE IN ACQUISITION OF WRITTEN LANGUAGE, BERKELEY: CALIFORNIA UP) FOUND THAT MANY TEACHERS GRIEVED OVER THE USE OF PEER-RESPONSE GROUPS BECAUSE THEY HAD DIFFICULTY GETTING STUDENTS TO RESPOND EFFECTIVELY TO ONE ANOTHERS WRITING. THIS ARTICLE APPEARED ON PAGES 52-56 IN THE SEPTEMBER 1990 ISSUE OF ENGLISH JOURNAL. COPYRIGHT COUNCIL OF TEACHERS OF ENGLISH. REPRINTED WITH PERMISSION. 5. Holly French & Janet Ilko San Diego CUE Conference November 15, 2014 Beyond Editing: Using Googledocs for Student Revision Groups San Diego Area Writing Project 6. My Story: Holly French On the Digital Learning Continuum My Past Learner vs Presenter Consumer, NOT producer My Present Consumer: Educational sites Presenter: SDAWP Mentor: Digital Editing Advocate: Digital Learning Days 7. My Story: Janet Ilko On the Digital Learning Continuum My Past Self-prescribed Technophobe Technology vs. Teaching Consumer, NOT producer My Present Consumer: Social Media, Educational Sites Producer: Writing in my Hand (Blog) Writingforchange.net Mentor: Student Blogs, Digital Editing Advocate: Digital Learning Days 8. 20th vs. 21st Century Pedagogy No Child Left Behind Common Core 9. Digital Learning CONTINUUM Consumer --- Producer Advocate----- Mentor ---- 10. Mentor Text Inquiry APPROACH Scientist Historian Mathematician WriterReader 11. Welcome to Cajon Valley Middle Expect More, Achieve More! 12. Writing For Change What if your district has all the tools and resources available for educators? Tipping Point Digital Continuum Integrated Pedagogy Impact On Students Add Your Video! 13. Agency is the capacity of a person to act in the world. Allows individuals to adapt, persevere and succeed despite adversity. On-going opportunity to resources/ex periences in education. NWP Values Real World Purpose Authentic Audience Personal Investment 14. The writer believes there is some good in the original piece The writer believes the writing can be made better. The writer has some reason to make it better. The writer has some plan for figuring out how to make it better. Four Principles Toward Teaching the Craft of Revisions 15. The Revision Process Here is how most students feel about the revision process. 16. Students are asked to take the essay they wrote and improve upon it. They recopy the essay and edit with correcting of spelling and punctuation. 17. Peer revision in google-docs allows student to receive feedback from peers and then begin to revise. 18. My Journey Revision struggles Finding mentor text Working through 19. My Journey Use of Mentor Text One sentence from assigned text Daily practice with editing and revision 20. Fishbowl & Academic Commenting 21. Student Peer Editing 22. Welcome to Our Classroom 23. Mentor Sentences Using mentor sentences for revision is a springboard to the process. Daily Warm Up: SIMILE: A boom of thunder startled them and like leaves before a new hurricane, they tumbled upon each other and ran. excerpt from All Summer in a Day by Ray Bradbury Your Original Sentence: They sent scientists and geographers to find human bones, using tools from their 4x4 truck. Your Imitation Sentence: The clank of the tools startled them and like kangaroos jumping in the air, they looked down and found human bones and ran to the truck. 24. Mentor Text Practice for Today: Use the two mentor text sentences in your packet as your springboard to revising your writing. 25. Like my students you read text and created a summary of the article. Now you will go through the process my students experienced in peer editing. Open document Share with a peer Each person reads his/her text to the group Members add comments One Positive One Constructive Repeat with all members Your Turn to Comment 26. Sharing Googledocs 27. Peer Editing in Googledocs 28. REVISION 29. Dont forget to give your feedback!